To those who have submited Reviews thanks, and let me answer a few Questions:
RedFerret16:
Thanks. I'll be working on it, but as for the spaces, I'll need to spend some thime on that. The converter automatically takes it out when converted from Palm Ebook, the format I write it in, to Text, the format I upload it in. For Drawing out the story, there is more coming soon, as soon as summer starts I can get to that, and I will draw out the first Chapter some.
Taigetsu:
I wanted to write a story where there is a sudden, surprise, determined attack on the abbey. This is not the end of the Book, just the end of the First Chapter. I wanted people to comeback, so I sort of left a cliffhanger, with Skipper bound, the Abbot dead, and They abbey Captured.
Don't worry, The hares at Salamandastron will help, they just didn't, because if you read The Long Patrol, The hares didn't want to march willy nilly about the country to fight wars.
The abbot not listening was becasue it was only a feeling that Waterflash had, no evidence to support him. Don't the vermin usually talk first? was his reasoning, and also (probably should of included this) Waterflash is emotionally scarred, and likes attention, so the abbot thought he just wanted attention, not that his abbey was under attack.
avlblu:
The abbey warrior customarily keeps the sword of Martin with him when there are vermin. Being in the gatehouse, he knew about the attack soon after it happened, so had the sword, and brought it with him.
For skipper, the reason that he used scum and tried to kill waterflash with a sling will be revealed in one of the next chapters (I have been working on this).
For this chapter, yes, it needs to be longer, with more for each part, and I will try to get to that.
Redwall was abandoned because they had a large vermin horde charging, with many of the abbey dwellers dead, the elders and dibbuns could not fight themeselves, the vermin had already blown the wall. What would stop them from blowing the building? As long as there is life there is hope, and it would be a bad story if the abbey was taken and there were no surviviors.
Salamandastron did not help, becasue the hares were without a badger lord at the time, and did not want to fight wars everywhere. However, the fall of redwall will change their minds.
If anyone wants to know why skipper did what he did before hand, and will die if they can't wait, please e-mail me at waterflasharrowotterredwall.net (yes, I know thats the name of one of my characters, but I use him for RP, and Redwall forum usernames, so I needed an e-mail for it)
Redferret 16:
Yes, I do now accept unsigned reviews. The last chapter is now up, but this is a first draft... I will be writing it over, but I wanted to finish it first so I knew what was going to happen.
I did use your reviews to write another story however, which will be much much longer (its takes place over a week for the first part, there are three parts, and the first day isn't even over but its 2/3 the size of the Otters Vengance.
E.B. Keane-Farrell:
Yes, it is awful... I blame UPN for showing me a chinese torture type thing when I was writing it.
At least you don't have to know how to kill with it. I am currently reading your story, but so far it sounds good.
RedFerret16:
Thanks. I'll be working on it, but as for the spaces, I'll need to spend some thime on that. The converter automatically takes it out when converted from Palm Ebook, the format I write it in, to Text, the format I upload it in. For Drawing out the story, there is more coming soon, as soon as summer starts I can get to that, and I will draw out the first Chapter some.
Taigetsu:
I wanted to write a story where there is a sudden, surprise, determined attack on the abbey. This is not the end of the Book, just the end of the First Chapter. I wanted people to comeback, so I sort of left a cliffhanger, with Skipper bound, the Abbot dead, and They abbey Captured.
Don't worry, The hares at Salamandastron will help, they just didn't, because if you read The Long Patrol, The hares didn't want to march willy nilly about the country to fight wars.
The abbot not listening was becasue it was only a feeling that Waterflash had, no evidence to support him. Don't the vermin usually talk first? was his reasoning, and also (probably should of included this) Waterflash is emotionally scarred, and likes attention, so the abbot thought he just wanted attention, not that his abbey was under attack.
avlblu:
The abbey warrior customarily keeps the sword of Martin with him when there are vermin. Being in the gatehouse, he knew about the attack soon after it happened, so had the sword, and brought it with him.
For skipper, the reason that he used scum and tried to kill waterflash with a sling will be revealed in one of the next chapters (I have been working on this).
For this chapter, yes, it needs to be longer, with more for each part, and I will try to get to that.
Redwall was abandoned because they had a large vermin horde charging, with many of the abbey dwellers dead, the elders and dibbuns could not fight themeselves, the vermin had already blown the wall. What would stop them from blowing the building? As long as there is life there is hope, and it would be a bad story if the abbey was taken and there were no surviviors.
Salamandastron did not help, becasue the hares were without a badger lord at the time, and did not want to fight wars everywhere. However, the fall of redwall will change their minds.
If anyone wants to know why skipper did what he did before hand, and will die if they can't wait, please e-mail me at waterflasharrowotterredwall.net (yes, I know thats the name of one of my characters, but I use him for RP, and Redwall forum usernames, so I needed an e-mail for it)
Redferret 16:
Yes, I do now accept unsigned reviews. The last chapter is now up, but this is a first draft... I will be writing it over, but I wanted to finish it first so I knew what was going to happen.
I did use your reviews to write another story however, which will be much much longer (its takes place over a week for the first part, there are three parts, and the first day isn't even over but its 2/3 the size of the Otters Vengance.
E.B. Keane-Farrell:
Yes, it is awful... I blame UPN for showing me a chinese torture type thing when I was writing it.
At least you don't have to know how to kill with it. I am currently reading your story, but so far it sounds good.