Okay, so I gave this a lot of thought and decided to just completely
rewrite chapter 3. Don't hurt me, don't throw rocks at me, just read and
reply. READ THIS IN PLACE OF CHAPTER #3 PLEASE
Chapter 3 Kitsune
Is that a problem, that was what the monk had asked, it wasn't a difficult question, yes or no. So why couldn't Makoto answer it. She was proud to be a Kitsune, damn proud, but the others, what would they think. Obviously they tolerated demons, there were two in their group, and one was even of her kind. But, they thought she was human, would it scare them, or would they even care? But the monk, why did she care what the monk thought? She was confused, did she like this monk better than his friends, and if so, why?
"Excuse me?" The monk spoke again, waking Makoto from her stupor, "I asked you a question."
Makoto sighed, "I don't know how to say this so here it goes, I'm a Nogitsune." Makoto cringed, waiting for the monk to bash her.
"A what?" asked Kagome.
"A renegade fox demon!" growled Inuyasha.
"GET BACK, SHE MIGHT BE DANGEROUS!" Cried Shippo, "My dad warned me about Nogitsune, he said they caused trouble and hurt people."
"Indeed, groups of them have been known to destroy entire villages." said Miroku.
Makoto just slumped back, trying to leave before things turned violent but Inuyasha jumped forward and grabbed her by her shirt. She looked up at him, fear in her big green eyes, was he going to kill her, right here and now. She had no chance against him now, she was still weak from her wounds.
"So, what was your plan, to take advantage of our hospitality then murder us in our sleep?" ask Inuyasha.
"No, please, I would never, I...." Makoto stopped in mid sentence, she felt her tail reappear, which was very uncomfortable seeing as her pants restricted it. Her human ears faded away, replaced by a pair of fox ears on top of her head. Her hair turned deep red, her eyes an extremely bright green.
"My disguise is only good from half-moon to full." She said sheepishly.
Inuyasha glared at her, a couple tears fell from the fox demons eyes, he started to feel a bit of pity. But then again, Nogitsune are tricksters, she probably just wanted him to let her go. If he let her go, and she was indeed dangerous, then she could possibly hurt or kill Kagome, and how could he live with himself then? He looked back at everyone else, they seemed to be waiting for him to act. He looked back at Makoto, she looked so scared though. He finally threw her to the ground, she landed roughly on her rump. Makoto curled into a ball on the ground.
"Get outta here!" growled Inuyasha.
Makoto looked up at him "Please, let me stay, I wont cause trouble I just...." She trailed off.
"Just what?" asked Miroku, he seemed irritated. This made Makoto feel almost sick, he was mad at her, the monk whom she had liked so much a few moments earlier seemed to hate her.
"I just want friends, to not be lonely, I want a family again, please..." Makoto started to cry, she had felt so welcome when they were taking care of herm she had thought that maybe this would be the end of her loneliness, but no, the were going to run her off just like everyone else, just like her old clan.
The group just stared, finally Kagome stepped forward, she put a hand on Makoto's shoulder. "Well then, I guess you've found a very tolerant family."
"What?" cried Inuyasha in disbelief.
"But Kagome, she might be dangerous, rouges can never be trusted." Said Miroku.
"I don't know about you, but I think we could all be called rouges ourselves Miroku." Said Kagome, a bit of anger in her tone.
She turned toward Makoto, "I can trust you right?" Makoto nodded, "So it's settled, welcome to the group."
Kagome pulled Makoto over towards were she was sitting, the two talked disregarding the others. Makoto felt a strange sort of acceptance from the group that night, maybe, just maybe, she was finally home.
End Chapter 3
Well re-write to the max, give me a response so I can continue.
RTD-Jupiter
Chapter 3 Kitsune
Is that a problem, that was what the monk had asked, it wasn't a difficult question, yes or no. So why couldn't Makoto answer it. She was proud to be a Kitsune, damn proud, but the others, what would they think. Obviously they tolerated demons, there were two in their group, and one was even of her kind. But, they thought she was human, would it scare them, or would they even care? But the monk, why did she care what the monk thought? She was confused, did she like this monk better than his friends, and if so, why?
"Excuse me?" The monk spoke again, waking Makoto from her stupor, "I asked you a question."
Makoto sighed, "I don't know how to say this so here it goes, I'm a Nogitsune." Makoto cringed, waiting for the monk to bash her.
"A what?" asked Kagome.
"A renegade fox demon!" growled Inuyasha.
"GET BACK, SHE MIGHT BE DANGEROUS!" Cried Shippo, "My dad warned me about Nogitsune, he said they caused trouble and hurt people."
"Indeed, groups of them have been known to destroy entire villages." said Miroku.
Makoto just slumped back, trying to leave before things turned violent but Inuyasha jumped forward and grabbed her by her shirt. She looked up at him, fear in her big green eyes, was he going to kill her, right here and now. She had no chance against him now, she was still weak from her wounds.
"So, what was your plan, to take advantage of our hospitality then murder us in our sleep?" ask Inuyasha.
"No, please, I would never, I...." Makoto stopped in mid sentence, she felt her tail reappear, which was very uncomfortable seeing as her pants restricted it. Her human ears faded away, replaced by a pair of fox ears on top of her head. Her hair turned deep red, her eyes an extremely bright green.
"My disguise is only good from half-moon to full." She said sheepishly.
Inuyasha glared at her, a couple tears fell from the fox demons eyes, he started to feel a bit of pity. But then again, Nogitsune are tricksters, she probably just wanted him to let her go. If he let her go, and she was indeed dangerous, then she could possibly hurt or kill Kagome, and how could he live with himself then? He looked back at everyone else, they seemed to be waiting for him to act. He looked back at Makoto, she looked so scared though. He finally threw her to the ground, she landed roughly on her rump. Makoto curled into a ball on the ground.
"Get outta here!" growled Inuyasha.
Makoto looked up at him "Please, let me stay, I wont cause trouble I just...." She trailed off.
"Just what?" asked Miroku, he seemed irritated. This made Makoto feel almost sick, he was mad at her, the monk whom she had liked so much a few moments earlier seemed to hate her.
"I just want friends, to not be lonely, I want a family again, please..." Makoto started to cry, she had felt so welcome when they were taking care of herm she had thought that maybe this would be the end of her loneliness, but no, the were going to run her off just like everyone else, just like her old clan.
The group just stared, finally Kagome stepped forward, she put a hand on Makoto's shoulder. "Well then, I guess you've found a very tolerant family."
"What?" cried Inuyasha in disbelief.
"But Kagome, she might be dangerous, rouges can never be trusted." Said Miroku.
"I don't know about you, but I think we could all be called rouges ourselves Miroku." Said Kagome, a bit of anger in her tone.
She turned toward Makoto, "I can trust you right?" Makoto nodded, "So it's settled, welcome to the group."
Kagome pulled Makoto over towards were she was sitting, the two talked disregarding the others. Makoto felt a strange sort of acceptance from the group that night, maybe, just maybe, she was finally home.
End Chapter 3
Well re-write to the max, give me a response so I can continue.
RTD-Jupiter