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Chapter 9: Kami ha Tsuneni Warera to Tomoni
"DONII!"
Yomiko bolted back the way she came, the book clutched in one hand and several sheets of paper in the other. Upon arriving back at the main room the woman stopped and stood in horror.
Blood was everywhere. Yomiko nearly fainted from the sheer smell of it. It was splattered on the walls, the floor, even bits on the ceiling. Bullet holes riddled the entire room, but just as plentiful were shreds of paper that lay silently over the bodies.
"Oh...oh..." Yomiko was unable to think coherently, seeing the destruction wreaked in this room. She hesitantly stepped inside, trying to think through the nauseating smell. Right. Find Donii.
As if on cue, someone coughed, and Yomiko spun towards the sound. "Donii?"
"Yomiko?"
Yomiko towards the voice, picking her way through dead bodies with care. In a nearby corner Donii sat, propped up by the walls. Bloodied paper littered the floor around him, and in one hand he held his glasses. Yomiko rushed to his side and collapsed on her knees.
"Donii?" He turned his head at the sound of Yomiko's voice. "Donii, it's me..."
"Oh." Donii blinked blindly. "Sorry - it's gone kind of dark..." He tried to say something else, but a coughing fit seized him and he covered his mouth; Yomiko stared in mute horror when blood showed through his fingers.
"Donii...the book...it..." Yomiko couldn't think of anything to say.
"Lost my powers," Donii said. He leaned to the side and Yomiko let him rest on her shoulder against her. On her white blouse bright red bloodstains appeared - Donii's dark suit hid his wounds. "Not sure how..." He smiled as he curled against Yomiko's body. "Doesn't hurt so much now, now that you're here."
"Everything's going to be fine!" Yomiko said, but her words sounded unconvincing to herself. She wrapped her arms around him, not caring that she was getting covered in blood. "You'll...you can live without paper!" Donii laughed a little at the remark.
"It's nice of you to say that," he answered, "but I'm hurt very badly, The Paper."
"No...no no no no no..." Yomiko murmured, rocking back and forth. She wanted to say something to fill in the silence, but nothing came to mind.
"It's not your fault," Donii said sleepily. He pushed his glasses into her hand. "Paper is a jealous friend...I think I was going to lose it anyway..."
"What do you mean?" Yomiko asked, frantic. She turned to look down at Donii's sleeping face and shook him slightly. "Donii, you can't die! What do you mean?"
"You're awfully warm," Donii commented, snuggling against her. He was silent for a while, and Yomiko was about to force him into wakefulness again when he started talking again. "Oh...I stopped caring about books."
"What?" Yomiko yelped. "Why did you do that?!"
"Because...I fell in love with you..."
Ripped straight from the Read or Die soundtrack, the translation is, "Paper is always with us."
I had a bit of a headache while editting this chapter, and when I reread it nothing seemed to make sense, except for the fact that I was trying to kill Donii in a cruel and tragic way. As my linguistics professor said, "Is it me or the drugs talking?"
To CuriousDreamWeaver: Uh...Yes...Donii's...okay...
To Star Otaku: [SPOILER] Yes, the fourth volume shows how Donii dies. Even though I couldn't read the bits of text around it, I still shed tears.
However, the way Donii dies in the manga is different from how he dies here; the story, like I had said, was already written and finished before I got the manga. If I had tried to incorporate the 'real' way Donny had died, then I would've just screwed up the plot even more than I already have.[/SPOILER]
...Hey, it's an AU, I can do anything! revives Donny and glomps all over him
Constructive criticism most appreciated. Actually, scratch that; a bottle of ibuprofin would really help at the moment.
May 19, 2004/June 3, 2004
Chapter 9: Kami ha Tsuneni Warera to Tomoni
"DONII!"
Yomiko bolted back the way she came, the book clutched in one hand and several sheets of paper in the other. Upon arriving back at the main room the woman stopped and stood in horror.
Blood was everywhere. Yomiko nearly fainted from the sheer smell of it. It was splattered on the walls, the floor, even bits on the ceiling. Bullet holes riddled the entire room, but just as plentiful were shreds of paper that lay silently over the bodies.
"Oh...oh..." Yomiko was unable to think coherently, seeing the destruction wreaked in this room. She hesitantly stepped inside, trying to think through the nauseating smell. Right. Find Donii.
As if on cue, someone coughed, and Yomiko spun towards the sound. "Donii?"
"Yomiko?"
Yomiko towards the voice, picking her way through dead bodies with care. In a nearby corner Donii sat, propped up by the walls. Bloodied paper littered the floor around him, and in one hand he held his glasses. Yomiko rushed to his side and collapsed on her knees.
"Donii?" He turned his head at the sound of Yomiko's voice. "Donii, it's me..."
"Oh." Donii blinked blindly. "Sorry - it's gone kind of dark..." He tried to say something else, but a coughing fit seized him and he covered his mouth; Yomiko stared in mute horror when blood showed through his fingers.
"Donii...the book...it..." Yomiko couldn't think of anything to say.
"Lost my powers," Donii said. He leaned to the side and Yomiko let him rest on her shoulder against her. On her white blouse bright red bloodstains appeared - Donii's dark suit hid his wounds. "Not sure how..." He smiled as he curled against Yomiko's body. "Doesn't hurt so much now, now that you're here."
"Everything's going to be fine!" Yomiko said, but her words sounded unconvincing to herself. She wrapped her arms around him, not caring that she was getting covered in blood. "You'll...you can live without paper!" Donii laughed a little at the remark.
"It's nice of you to say that," he answered, "but I'm hurt very badly, The Paper."
"No...no no no no no..." Yomiko murmured, rocking back and forth. She wanted to say something to fill in the silence, but nothing came to mind.
"It's not your fault," Donii said sleepily. He pushed his glasses into her hand. "Paper is a jealous friend...I think I was going to lose it anyway..."
"What do you mean?" Yomiko asked, frantic. She turned to look down at Donii's sleeping face and shook him slightly. "Donii, you can't die! What do you mean?"
"You're awfully warm," Donii commented, snuggling against her. He was silent for a while, and Yomiko was about to force him into wakefulness again when he started talking again. "Oh...I stopped caring about books."
"What?" Yomiko yelped. "Why did you do that?!"
"Because...I fell in love with you..."
Ripped straight from the Read or Die soundtrack, the translation is, "Paper is always with us."
I had a bit of a headache while editting this chapter, and when I reread it nothing seemed to make sense, except for the fact that I was trying to kill Donii in a cruel and tragic way. As my linguistics professor said, "Is it me or the drugs talking?"
To CuriousDreamWeaver: Uh...Yes...Donii's...okay...
To Star Otaku: [SPOILER] Yes, the fourth volume shows how Donii dies. Even though I couldn't read the bits of text around it, I still shed tears.
However, the way Donii dies in the manga is different from how he dies here; the story, like I had said, was already written and finished before I got the manga. If I had tried to incorporate the 'real' way Donny had died, then I would've just screwed up the plot even more than I already have.[/SPOILER]
...Hey, it's an AU, I can do anything! revives Donny and glomps all over him
Constructive criticism most appreciated. Actually, scratch that; a bottle of ibuprofin would really help at the moment.
May 19, 2004/June 3, 2004