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So anyways, ###Starting where we left off### Everyone climbs out of the well. They are kinda surprised to see a house with that style architecture. "So this is what America looks like?!! And the houses are different, too! Heck, everything's different!!!" says Inuyasha "Are there any beautiful women in your village?" "Is this your house in front of us?" "This is America, right?!!" "In that order", says Sartori, "Yes, my neighbor, yes, and yes. Now that I know how to manipulate the "magic", I think you would like to be able to understand my parents. I can somehow speak Japanese, but you don't know English! Hold still a second!" So saying, she takes off her crystal and holds it out in front of her. She closes her eyes and starts to concentrate. I need Kagome, Sango, Shippo, Miroku, and Inuyasha to be able to speak, read, and understand English like a American college graduate with an English major!! She opens her eyes, and sees the gang, glowing white. After about a minute, the glow fades, and they look normal. "What was that?" "I made it so that you can speak English like a American." "Then why am I speaking Japanese?!!!!" "The "magic spell" operates when you want or need to speak English. Since I am not speaking English, you have no desire to understand me, and you won't speak English. But now, I want you to listen to me, and you need to want to understand what I'm saying, okay?!" So saying she says some phrases in English. She waits a bit, then says to them... "Okay, now let me call my mom. She probably has been missing me, so I don't want her to freak out when I come in. And I need to know if she is home. "I," Kagome says, "can understand you!" "Me too!" "I can also!" "So, are you going to call or what?" "Okay, I am!" She takes her crystal and holds it in her hand. She concentrates, and in a moment it turns into a cell phone. So she dials home. Her mother picks up. "Hi mom! It's me, Sartori! I can explain why I've been gone! But first, can I come in? I have some friends I met with me, and they are kinda unusual. I can explain who they are too." "Okay, but... where are you calling from, anyways?" "Um, the woods...bye!" So she brings everyone to the front of the house. She brings them in through the front door, but has them take off their shoes. Some things will never change.thinks Shippo. "Hi mom! How were you?" "I'm good, but where in the world were you? You were missing for a whole day!!!" "I know, just let me explain. It is kinda hard to explain, and it will take a while, so just sit and listen-" "So explain it already!!!" says Sartori's sister, Sara. "Okay, okay. I left house yesterday to look for plants, like I told you. I climbed a tree. When I was descending it, I jumped off of the top, because it was not tall and I love to jump from high places. I closed my eyes and after I hit the ground, I opened them again. When I opened them, I was in a strange place. I thought the woods looked different because it was dark. So I wandered around, looking for more plants. The longer I wandered, the more lost I got. Eventually this group found me. They were in the Sengoku period in Japan. That was 500 years ago-" "WTF, Sartori!!! Kuso! " "Yeah, I know. Okay, so Kagome, who is the one wearing traditional Japanese schoolgirl clothing, is from the present. She brought all of us to the present the next day. We went a mall in her time, in Japan. When we got back, I found a way to get to America really quickly. So we came here a couple minutes ago." "That makes no sense!" "Um, Sartori, ...were you stoned?" "Explain yourself in more detail, please!" "Well, first. I found out while I was in the Sengoku period that I could do this. And this." Sartori jumps in the air and changes. Then she flies a little higher, and transforms her crystal into a sword. "How-" Sara runs over to Sartori and pulls on her wings. After a few tugs, she starts to pull on her hair. Then on her dress. "Yeah!! All real! Fly me around the room, Tori!!!" Everyone gets a sweatdrop and falls over. "Um, okay. Just hold on a sec..." She untransforms the crystal, and puts it back on her necklace. Then she picks up her sister and flies her around the room for a while. After a minute she puts her down. "Now, where was I... Oh, yeah! I forgot! This is Inuyasha. This is Sango. This is Kagome. This is Shippo. This is Miroku. And this is Kirarra. Inuyasha is a half dog demon-" Sara runs over to him. "He has such cute ears!" Tugs on his ears. "Would you stop it already!" "Okay!" "Ahem" They stop yelling at each other."So, as I was saying, Inuyasha is a half dog demon. Shippo is a full fox demon, or a kitsune, or a shapechanger. Pick which one you like the best. Sango is a Demon Exterminator. Miroku is a Buddhist monk. He's also a lech (and a pervert), so be warned. Kirarra is a demonic cat. Kagome is a Japanese girl who can travel through time to the Sengoku period through the well in her family's shrine. She is also the reincarnation of a powerful priestess who lived in that time, and died 50 years before. And don't ask why or what, please." "But" "And no buts either!" "Okay..." "I traveled here by using this crystal. I can make wells like the one in Kagome's shrine appear and disappear. Don't ask me much more. Can I bring Ally over?" "What?" "I mean, can I call Ally and see if she can come over too. Then can we go walk around in a mall?" "Uh...? Okay!! Here's some money!" "Thanks mom!!" Sartori calls her friend, Ally. "Hey Jake. Can I talk to Ally?" "Sure. Hold on a second." Thud thud thud. Ally!! Sartori's on the phone!! "Roadkill Café. You kill it we grill it. May I take your order?" "Hey Ally! I have some people I want you to meet. You'll like them. Plus, I want you to come over so we can plan what to do for this week." "Sure! Should I bring something special?" "Na, I don't think they'll care. But I have to show you something cool, okay?" "Fine! I'll meet you outside my house!" "See you then!" "Click" "Okay everyone! Let's meet my friend Ally! So let's go back to the well!" Everyone goes outside to the well. They leave their stuff back at the house, except for Tetsusaiga, the Hiraikotsu (Boomerang Bone), and Miroku's staff. Miroku asks Sartori: "Since your friend is a girl, is she beautiful?" "You'll see..." That sounds ominous to me... So Sartori uses the crystal again to open a well location, this time behind a dirt pile in Ally's yard. Everyone goes down the well. When they climb out, they are in Ally's yard, in a neighborhood with odd pieces of metal lying out and bulldozers parked on the street. "Hey Sartori! Who're your new friends?" "This is Inuyasha. And Shippo, Sango, Miroku, Kagome, and Kirarra-" "Aww, she's so cute!! Can I pet her?" Pet, pet, scratch, scratch. "Aww, I just love her! She's so soft!!" "You'll love this. Kirarra is a demonic cat. Shippo is a kitsune, of a full blooded fox demon. Inuyasha is a half dog demon. Sango is a demon exterminator. Miroku is a lecherous Buddhist monk, so ignore him. And Kagome is a Japanese schoolgirl. Everyone but Kagome is from the Sengoku period in Japan. Everyone is from Japan." "Cool. That's the same time as the setting in the 'Legend of the Five Rings" novels I like!" "I can travel back and forth with them. Would you like to stay with us for a while, and go back to the Sengoku time with us?" "Hold on a sec, don't we have any say?" "Inuyasha, you're the only one who doesn't want her to come!" "But, she would be helpful to you guys. She has a knife collection. She's very good with weapons-" "And fire. I love fire." "What she said." "Whatever. Just don't get in my way when I'm getting Shikon shards." "Fine. How many days will I be there?" "Um, I think I'll come home around a week from now. But just bring your essentials. We have to travel while we're there." "Okay. Come on in while I go tell my parents what I'm doing. It'll take me a moment to get my stuff." Everyone comes in. They sit on her couch while she talks to her parents. She comes in. "Yeah, everything's okay. Just wait a bit while I get my stuff." She grabs some stuff from her closed, and shoves it into her backpack. She goes over to her dresser, and takes some stuff out of it. Then she goes over to the couch and has everyone get up. She takes the cushions off. "Yup. They're all still there. Which one do you think I should take?" Everyone gets a sweatdrop. Oo; "I think I'll take this one. It's beautiful, and it's razor sharp. I like it the best. You can throw it well, too." Everyone falls over. "I'm ready! Where are we going now?" "Let's go over to my house. We can show you some cool stuff!" Sartori takes everyone back to the well she opened. Everyone jumps in, and comes out the other end. She seals the entrance near Ally's house. Then she has Ally put her stuff inside with everyone else's stuff. Finally, they go out into the woods near her house. She shows them the tree she was climbing and where she fell when she was transported back to Sengoku Japan. Miroku notices something. How odd. There's a plant there... where she fell... Sango demonstrates how to use her Hiraikotsu, and Inuyasha shows Ally his Tetsusaiga... at Kagome's insistence. They all go to sleep later, at night. When they wake up. Sartori's mom and dad have hot bagels for them. What's a bagel?!!! Everyone tries the bagels, and everybody has seconds. Shippo even had thirds! After eating the gang and Ally (from now on, the gang) go out to the well with all their stuff. Everybody jumps down, and comes out the other end. Sartori leaves the end near her house open, because she told her parents to cover it when she didn't call them. Then they check in with Kagome's mom. Finally, they go down the well in Kagome's shrine. They come out the other side and go to the village.
I know this is bad-everyone glares at her Sorry! But it is my first fanfic. Give me hints and reviews. I would really appreciate it! Thank you!.
So anyways, ###Starting where we left off### Everyone climbs out of the well. They are kinda surprised to see a house with that style architecture. "So this is what America looks like?!! And the houses are different, too! Heck, everything's different!!!" says Inuyasha "Are there any beautiful women in your village?" "Is this your house in front of us?" "This is America, right?!!" "In that order", says Sartori, "Yes, my neighbor, yes, and yes. Now that I know how to manipulate the "magic", I think you would like to be able to understand my parents. I can somehow speak Japanese, but you don't know English! Hold still a second!" So saying, she takes off her crystal and holds it out in front of her. She closes her eyes and starts to concentrate. I need Kagome, Sango, Shippo, Miroku, and Inuyasha to be able to speak, read, and understand English like a American college graduate with an English major!! She opens her eyes, and sees the gang, glowing white. After about a minute, the glow fades, and they look normal. "What was that?" "I made it so that you can speak English like a American." "Then why am I speaking Japanese?!!!!" "The "magic spell" operates when you want or need to speak English. Since I am not speaking English, you have no desire to understand me, and you won't speak English. But now, I want you to listen to me, and you need to want to understand what I'm saying, okay?!" So saying she says some phrases in English. She waits a bit, then says to them... "Okay, now let me call my mom. She probably has been missing me, so I don't want her to freak out when I come in. And I need to know if she is home. "I," Kagome says, "can understand you!" "Me too!" "I can also!" "So, are you going to call or what?" "Okay, I am!" She takes her crystal and holds it in her hand. She concentrates, and in a moment it turns into a cell phone. So she dials home. Her mother picks up. "Hi mom! It's me, Sartori! I can explain why I've been gone! But first, can I come in? I have some friends I met with me, and they are kinda unusual. I can explain who they are too." "Okay, but... where are you calling from, anyways?" "Um, the woods...bye!" So she brings everyone to the front of the house. She brings them in through the front door, but has them take off their shoes. Some things will never change.thinks Shippo. "Hi mom! How were you?" "I'm good, but where in the world were you? You were missing for a whole day!!!" "I know, just let me explain. It is kinda hard to explain, and it will take a while, so just sit and listen-" "So explain it already!!!" says Sartori's sister, Sara. "Okay, okay. I left house yesterday to look for plants, like I told you. I climbed a tree. When I was descending it, I jumped off of the top, because it was not tall and I love to jump from high places. I closed my eyes and after I hit the ground, I opened them again. When I opened them, I was in a strange place. I thought the woods looked different because it was dark. So I wandered around, looking for more plants. The longer I wandered, the more lost I got. Eventually this group found me. They were in the Sengoku period in Japan. That was 500 years ago-" "WTF, Sartori!!! Kuso! " "Yeah, I know. Okay, so Kagome, who is the one wearing traditional Japanese schoolgirl clothing, is from the present. She brought all of us to the present the next day. We went a mall in her time, in Japan. When we got back, I found a way to get to America really quickly. So we came here a couple minutes ago." "That makes no sense!" "Um, Sartori, ...were you stoned?" "Explain yourself in more detail, please!" "Well, first. I found out while I was in the Sengoku period that I could do this. And this." Sartori jumps in the air and changes. Then she flies a little higher, and transforms her crystal into a sword. "How-" Sara runs over to Sartori and pulls on her wings. After a few tugs, she starts to pull on her hair. Then on her dress. "Yeah!! All real! Fly me around the room, Tori!!!" Everyone gets a sweatdrop and falls over. "Um, okay. Just hold on a sec..." She untransforms the crystal, and puts it back on her necklace. Then she picks up her sister and flies her around the room for a while. After a minute she puts her down. "Now, where was I... Oh, yeah! I forgot! This is Inuyasha. This is Sango. This is Kagome. This is Shippo. This is Miroku. And this is Kirarra. Inuyasha is a half dog demon-" Sara runs over to him. "He has such cute ears!" Tugs on his ears. "Would you stop it already!" "Okay!" "Ahem" They stop yelling at each other."So, as I was saying, Inuyasha is a half dog demon. Shippo is a full fox demon, or a kitsune, or a shapechanger. Pick which one you like the best. Sango is a Demon Exterminator. Miroku is a Buddhist monk. He's also a lech (and a pervert), so be warned. Kirarra is a demonic cat. Kagome is a Japanese girl who can travel through time to the Sengoku period through the well in her family's shrine. She is also the reincarnation of a powerful priestess who lived in that time, and died 50 years before. And don't ask why or what, please." "But" "And no buts either!" "Okay..." "I traveled here by using this crystal. I can make wells like the one in Kagome's shrine appear and disappear. Don't ask me much more. Can I bring Ally over?" "What?" "I mean, can I call Ally and see if she can come over too. Then can we go walk around in a mall?" "Uh...? Okay!! Here's some money!" "Thanks mom!!" Sartori calls her friend, Ally. "Hey Jake. Can I talk to Ally?" "Sure. Hold on a second." Thud thud thud. Ally!! Sartori's on the phone!! "Roadkill Café. You kill it we grill it. May I take your order?" "Hey Ally! I have some people I want you to meet. You'll like them. Plus, I want you to come over so we can plan what to do for this week." "Sure! Should I bring something special?" "Na, I don't think they'll care. But I have to show you something cool, okay?" "Fine! I'll meet you outside my house!" "See you then!" "Click" "Okay everyone! Let's meet my friend Ally! So let's go back to the well!" Everyone goes outside to the well. They leave their stuff back at the house, except for Tetsusaiga, the Hiraikotsu (Boomerang Bone), and Miroku's staff. Miroku asks Sartori: "Since your friend is a girl, is she beautiful?" "You'll see..." That sounds ominous to me... So Sartori uses the crystal again to open a well location, this time behind a dirt pile in Ally's yard. Everyone goes down the well. When they climb out, they are in Ally's yard, in a neighborhood with odd pieces of metal lying out and bulldozers parked on the street. "Hey Sartori! Who're your new friends?" "This is Inuyasha. And Shippo, Sango, Miroku, Kagome, and Kirarra-" "Aww, she's so cute!! Can I pet her?" Pet, pet, scratch, scratch. "Aww, I just love her! She's so soft!!" "You'll love this. Kirarra is a demonic cat. Shippo is a kitsune, of a full blooded fox demon. Inuyasha is a half dog demon. Sango is a demon exterminator. Miroku is a lecherous Buddhist monk, so ignore him. And Kagome is a Japanese schoolgirl. Everyone but Kagome is from the Sengoku period in Japan. Everyone is from Japan." "Cool. That's the same time as the setting in the 'Legend of the Five Rings" novels I like!" "I can travel back and forth with them. Would you like to stay with us for a while, and go back to the Sengoku time with us?" "Hold on a sec, don't we have any say?" "Inuyasha, you're the only one who doesn't want her to come!" "But, she would be helpful to you guys. She has a knife collection. She's very good with weapons-" "And fire. I love fire." "What she said." "Whatever. Just don't get in my way when I'm getting Shikon shards." "Fine. How many days will I be there?" "Um, I think I'll come home around a week from now. But just bring your essentials. We have to travel while we're there." "Okay. Come on in while I go tell my parents what I'm doing. It'll take me a moment to get my stuff." Everyone comes in. They sit on her couch while she talks to her parents. She comes in. "Yeah, everything's okay. Just wait a bit while I get my stuff." She grabs some stuff from her closed, and shoves it into her backpack. She goes over to her dresser, and takes some stuff out of it. Then she goes over to the couch and has everyone get up. She takes the cushions off. "Yup. They're all still there. Which one do you think I should take?" Everyone gets a sweatdrop. Oo; "I think I'll take this one. It's beautiful, and it's razor sharp. I like it the best. You can throw it well, too." Everyone falls over. "I'm ready! Where are we going now?" "Let's go over to my house. We can show you some cool stuff!" Sartori takes everyone back to the well she opened. Everyone jumps in, and comes out the other end. She seals the entrance near Ally's house. Then she has Ally put her stuff inside with everyone else's stuff. Finally, they go out into the woods near her house. She shows them the tree she was climbing and where she fell when she was transported back to Sengoku Japan. Miroku notices something. How odd. There's a plant there... where she fell... Sango demonstrates how to use her Hiraikotsu, and Inuyasha shows Ally his Tetsusaiga... at Kagome's insistence. They all go to sleep later, at night. When they wake up. Sartori's mom and dad have hot bagels for them. What's a bagel?!!! Everyone tries the bagels, and everybody has seconds. Shippo even had thirds! After eating the gang and Ally (from now on, the gang) go out to the well with all their stuff. Everybody jumps down, and comes out the other end. Sartori leaves the end near her house open, because she told her parents to cover it when she didn't call them. Then they check in with Kagome's mom. Finally, they go down the well in Kagome's shrine. They come out the other side and go to the village.
I know this is bad-everyone glares at her Sorry! But it is my first fanfic. Give me hints and reviews. I would really appreciate it! Thank you!.