This is my first poem I've tried. So please give me your opinion.
I looked forward into the sun I tried to live and have some fun,
I've tried to live all along
But I've found no place that I belong,
I have you're word
As well as mine
A place for me
I've yet to find,
I promised you I'd never kill
But I lied and I had my fill
Innocent blood is on my hands
But this pain I can't withstand,
I cry now
In solemn tears
I need your help
To face my fears,
My name is Vash
I'm the Stampede
They say I kill
That's not my creed,
My brother Knives
Will always Sin
But he has a good side
Deep within,
My friend Wolfwood
He is a priest
He's a good man
To say the least,
My motivation Rem
She taught me well
She died on SEEDS
When it fell,
What do I do
When I'm on the brink
To kill someone
When I can't think,
I destroyed the city
Of July
I killed their people
I can't deny,
It is Rem
That I must thank
Because our tickets to the future
Are always blank,
And on that day
I confronted Knives
The one that ended
All their lives,
The ship of SEEDS
There're all dead
The whole blame
Is on his head,
Our guns cocked
And bullets flew
And our bodies
They went through
Our flesh was ripped
And blood was spilt
Still because that day
I still feel guilt,
Knives was wounded
Far too bad
But he's still alive
For that I'm glad,
Knives is still here
Perhaps to stay
It seems that luck
Has turned my way,
He's start to live
A better life
With no violence
Death or strife,
My life is perfect
It will suffice
I've found my Eden
My Paradise,
Knives has a new life
Which he's been given
I am sure that
He'll be forgiven,
You shouldn't kill
My word you should heed
My name is Vash
I'm the Stampede . . .
My first poem finished. I'm proud.