RPL Stands for Repeated Plot Line
This section includes a sample of Grossly Gaunt Ginny.
het weasle & da dragon by GDShipRsRox
Summery: im no god at sumeries so deal w/it. Gin gin & Hairy arent workin out so gin gin meets draci in the hall cold it bee luv? Review or il h8 u 4evr
Rated PG13(butt wil clime l8r)
1st I wanna say hi 2 my freind drakieluvr, luv da slithirin, dacoroxsmysox, tomsluvmee, feltunsgurl, & minedragon69. if u flame u suc & I h8 u 4ever OMG Tom Folten is sooooooo hottie that I rote this sorie cause hes hot! His all MINE!!!11 dicamer: discamers suc. So their. Flamers suc 2 so shutup. Gin gin and dracie r my cuple & if u have a prob w/that bich shutup & sont reed it!."
I luv tomm foltun!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
Evil authoress: hay Gin! Im gonna rit a storie with u in it!
Gin: why? Do u have 2? Im snogging with drakie rit now
Drakky:yeah can it wait?
Evil authoress: u get to snogg lots in my storie so get in there now
Gin woak up and looked into the mirror. "OMG i look so bad!" she cried. The mirror looked back at her & said "nonsense u r the beautifulist."(AN:I've changed ginny! She has 2 b super hot so My luv Drakie can fall in luv w/her on 1st smack!1) Ginny had 2 agree. She had grown up during th summer. She had the prefect curves 2 make any guy die 4 her. Her scarelet coppery crimpsom waves of hair flowed down her back like a river of rubbies. Her emerald green eyes had a bit of purple & yellow in them gin gin noticed as she glansed at herself in the mirror.she was every guys dream. She put on a green shirt that said bight me and the mirror said every guy will want 2. Ginny pulled on a baggy pair of black jeans and put on her make-up nice & gothic. She walked in2 the common & stubbed her toe Harry laughed & he had a girl in his lap so she shouted "ur done for!!!11 i break up with you!go away!" & she ran down the hall crying. And she ran in2 draco "whatch were ur going she shouted the realized hoo she ran in2.then she started 2 madly kiss draco(AN:that HOTTTTTIEEE!1111 if i met him that's what i wood do!1))she had been dieing 2 kiss him & snog him ever sense they met in potions class. Anyway thay where kissing & a owl ran in2 him &it had a letter "2 drac don't date gin gin AN I hat Gin's nam!!!!!!!!!!!
MyoopsGin gin's Drakie luvr pov
ginnies really good at this! draco thought and started 2 kiss harder. Pansy kissed him a lot 2 butt she was boring. then ron came around the bend saw her & shouted malfoy get away from my sister!(AN:Ron's a pushy jerk-off i hate him)& he tried 2 kill-curse him but gin gin grabbed her wand and cursed ron so he couldn't kill my HER drakie. Ron shouted at ginny"ill h8 4ever & ever!" & draco said "Shut up!" cuz ginny started 2 crie. Then they kissed & slipped 2 the astronomy tower 2 have aquiet place 2 snog they snogged all night draco had whip marks from his dady & the next morning dracie got a letter from his dad:
u dishonor us i will kill the mudblood luvr
so my HER hottie dracoo cursed his dad 2 love the weasleys 4ever. He caught the snitch to show up harrie. & gin refused harry to go to the ball and went with draco & Then had a snog fest with gin gin & the married and had lots of kids & lived happy ever after!! & Ron(that $$ hole was jellose & left in the dust 4ever! & hairy was real sad 2.
I'm a genious the best I hate u 4ever if u don't lik what I rot don't review. Review good bad whatever I don kar just review u wimps!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!111111111111
Back by request: Translation (I title the translation, "For No Reason Utterly Boring".)The Weasel and the Dragon written by: Someone Who Likes to Read Romances Involving Ginny Weasley and Draco Malfoy
Summary: I cannot write a good summary, so I want you to ignore the summary, but read my story anyways. Ginny Weasley and Harry Potter are not having a good romantic relationship, so Ginny Weasley meets Draco Malfoy in a random hallway. For an unknown reason meeting each other in the hall suggests a romantic relationship. Review my story or I will be so emotionally unstable, I will start to hate everyone who doesn't leave a review, including everyone that doesn't have a computer and could never leave a review.
Rated PG13 (rating will climb later in the story, so now I have an excuse for giving an incorrect rating.)
Before I start the story I would like to greet all of my friends. My friends are "A person infatuated with Draco Malfoy", "You love the Slytherin", "A person infatuated with Draco Malfoy", "A person infatuated with Tom Felton", "A person infatuated with Tom Felton but cannot spell his name correctly", and "A person infatuated with Draco Malfoy's name". Please take note that you are not one of my friends.
If you give me a remotely negative review I will believe that you aren't a good person, and I will hate you no matter how childish it makes me look. I religiously believe that Tom Felton is the most sexually attractive boy alive, even though I cannot spell his name correctly, and I wrote this "story" to add to his worshipping shrine. I would like to possess Tom Felton.
Disclaimer: I don't like to write disclaimers, no matter how legally important they are. I still do not want to read any input that could remotely called negative; therefore you must not review, even though I will hate you forever if you don't review.
The Ginny Weasley and Draco Malfoy romance is mine, and if that troubles you, do not read or review my story, even though I will hate you for it.
I still am infatuated with Tom Felton and I still cannot spell his name correctly, and I feel the need to tell you this right now.
The evil adolescent female author says, "May I have your attention please Ginny Weasley? I am writing a story in which you take part!"
Ginny replies, "Why must I be a part of your story? I am busy snogging Draco Malfoy at this moment."
Draco Malfoy adds, "Yes, can your story wait?"
The evil adolescent female author replies, "You will be snogging on many occasions in my story. Please be a part of my story now.
Ginny Weasley woke up one morning and looked into the mirror. "Oh no! I appear hideous!" she wailed. The mirror looked back at her and said, "Nonsense! I believe you are irrationally beautiful." (Author's Note: I have changed Ginny Weasley's appearance! She must be very attractive or else Draco Malfoy, the character I am infatuated with, will not fall in love with her when they run into each other in the hallway, for we all know that love is based only on appearance.) By a twist of fate, Ginny was forced to agree. She had grown up during the summer. Her body had swelled in certain areas that we all know men worship, and for no real reason they would die for. She had red hair that reminds me that I am a teraphile. Ginny's green, purple, and yellow eyes also remind me of my rock fetish. All of this Ginny saw when she looked in the mirror. She was suddenly a sex god.
Ginny clothed herself in a green shirt with "bite me", which gave cause for the mirror to respond, "All men will desire you and love you because you have a sexually attractive body." Then Ginny pulled on a baggy pair of black jeans, and smeared heavy eye make-up in a muggle gothic style.
Ginny walked into the Gryffindor common room and stubbed her toe. Harry Potter laughed at her. Ginny then noticed that another girl was sitting on his lap, so Ginny Weasley shouted, "I hate you! I no longer want to be romantically involved with you! Go away!" So she started to run away, crying. Somehow she was running down the hall, and she ran into Draco Malfoy.
Draco Malfoy and Ginny Weasley said at the same time, "Please watch where you are going." Then Ginny realized who she had run into. Struck by his sexually desirable body she knew she loved him and therefore started to kiss him. (Author's Note: I am infatuated with Draco Malfoy. If I were to run into my archenemy in the hall I would start to make out with him.) Ginny Weasley had desired to kiss and snog Draco Malfoy ever since they met in potions class. Anyways, they were kissing and a few minutes later an owl ran into Draco Malfoy. The owl had a letter, which read:
"To: Draco Malfoy
Please do not date Ginny Weasley. (Author Note: I dislike Ginny Weasley's name and feel the need to tell you this now.)"
I am confused between Ginny Weasley and myself, but now I am switching the story into Draco Malfoy's point of view
Ginny Weasley is good at kissing, Draco Malfoy thought and continued to kiss Ginny Wealsey back. In the past, Pansy kissed him also, however she was boring for no reason. As he thought this, Ronald Weasley came around a corner in the hallway and saw what his sister and his arch enemy were doing. He shouted, "Malfoy go away from my sister!" (Author's Note: I dislike Ronald Weasley for no reason, and feel the need to tell you now.) Ronald Weasley tried to curse Draco Malfoy, but Ginny Weasley pulled out her wand and cursed Ronald Weasley so he couldn't hurt my lust object, I mean, Ginny Weasley's Draco Malfoy. Ronald Wealsey shouted at Ginny Wealsey, "I will hate you forever!"
Draco Malfoy replied, "Shut up!" because Ginny Weasley had started to cry for no reason. Then they kissed again and went to the infamous Astronomy Tower, even though students would be up there studying the stars, so they would have a quiet place to have sex, which they did all night, and the author isn't quite sure what sex is but heard that people in love do it. While they had sex, scars from whip lashings that Draco's suddenly evil father had given Draco appeared on Draco's back.
The next morning they woke up and found that Draco Malfoy had gotten a letter from his father. The letter read:
"You have dishonored the Malfoy family, so I must kill your mudblood lover."
So my lust object, I mean, Ginny Weasley's Draco Malfoy cursed his father so he would love the Weasley family forever, and for no reason it worked, and such a curse existed.
Draco Malfoy caught the snitch to make Harry Potter look bad.
Ginny Weasley refused to go to a non-existent ball with Harry Potter and went with Draco Malfoy.
Over the years Ginny Weasley and Draco Malfoy held sex festivals, and they married. They had many children and lived happily ever after.
However, Ronald Weasley (Author's Note: I still hate Ronald Weasley for no reason, and still feel the need to tell you this now.) was jealous and left unhappy forever. Harry Potter had the same fate.
Author's Note: I believe I am a genius even though I cannot spell "genius" correctly. I believe that I am the best writer ever, and if you do not share my beliefs I will irrationally hate you. If you do not like my story, do not review my story, even though I will hate you forever. I accept all reviews because I only write to be reviewed! (Translator's Note: That was really repetitive and annoying, and I will irrationally hate you forever if you do not share my opinion!)
MARY SUE MORPHING: The Grossly Gaunt Ginny RPLIf you can read and understand what was written in the sample above, then I envy you. Even self-respecting Ginny can be turned into a horrible Mary Sue. It's a growing fashion, to change Ginny into a disgusting sex-god monster that leaps onto Draco in a lust filled rave. Draco leaps onto Ginny like a lust filled monster. People just don't run into their worst enemy in the hall and start to make out! This RPL is the hardest to fix, and in most cases, you should just abandon the story.
GINNY'S OUT OF CHARACTER-NESSMost often, Ginny's displayed as a sexy kiss ass punk ready to take on the world. Though we saw in the fifth book that Ginny has some spunk to her, we can see that she would never sink so low as too "go out" with Draco. Let's analyze Ginny now.
Ginny is self-conscious, very self-conscious. She idolizes her elder brothers, and since fifth year her stiff "Prefect Percy" brother isn't there and in disgrace. She no longer feels the need to follow his footsteps, when The Twins are so much cooler. It now is okay to rebel, so she is following the crowd in the fifth book. So, she doesn't have true spunk, she is rebelling to be accepted and noticed by her so-cool older brother's and their awesome friends.
Now, let's think over the growing up process. Do the vast majority of scrawny; freckled girls get turned into sex goddesses over night? No. It would be nice if we could, but we don't. It's what we all wish for, but unrealistic. Is it likely that Ginny would become one? No. So tame your make-up slathered, halter-top wearing, sailor-cussing brat down. Don't describe her appearance very much or at all. Leave out the details about her hair, make-up (which she probably wouldn't wear in the first place), eyes (Ginny's eyes are brown, not green), and clothes (Ginny would be wearing robes in school) out.
One thing I hate but continuously see is, Ginny cussing worse than a sailor. The Weasleys are proud that they are good people and try to act as if they are in a higher class than they are. That means that they do not cuss. Ron doesn't cuss. Ginny certainly doesn't.
Another point I'd like to make, but I didn't show in the sample, is that Ginny probably wouldn't keep a diary. She's had bad problems in the past with one, so her experience with Tom Riddle probably has weaned Ginny of ever wanting to keep a diary. So, no "I looked at Draco, and he saw me. He's so hot!" diary entries.
DRACO'S OUT OF CHARACTER-NESSDraco, once again, is a Gryffindor or a Hufflepuff in these stories. I'm tired of explaining this. He is not super-handsome. He is not going to denounce his father, who he loves and warships. This should be obvious after book five, and all the other books: "Wait tell I tell my father!" "Wait till my father hears about this!"
Draco certainly isn't a sex god of the Slytherin house. He isn't very handsome, not matter how good Tom Felton looks. Rather, he's pale and on the plump side. He doesn't jump around dating circles because that would be a disgrace to his father's name. To date, he hasn't changed his girlfriend since 2nd year.
PLOTIt's what we all dream of: a hot guy bumping into you and falling in love with you on the spot. But is it realistic? Well, no. But what do 99 of Ginny/Draco parings have in them? People walking into each other in the hallways; then making out on the spot. If this really worked, hookers would be millionaires, because they could just bump into someone, and before you know it they're snogging where they fell, and guess what mister- that would be $70 a smooch, $80 a lick… You get the point?
It may have been out of pity, but Ginny and Neville still seem to like each other. Ginny seems to be trying to get Neville jealous or something to that nature in the fifth book, and Neville did his best to protect her in the end of the fifth book, but let's not get into a shipper's argument. Don't let the Romance element of the story to push all plot out the window. After reading this I hope that you will try to have some plot besides: They kissed! They kissed again! Draco is now taking off his cloths!
THE FRIENDSHere, the friends are either disregarded totally, or are demented. It should be obvious that Ginny no longer is crushing over Harry; it showed in the forth book when she dated Neville. The point is, that the story always seems to focus so much on Draco and Ginny's exciting love life that it pushes everyone else out of the picture. There are other people important to Ginny and Draco in Hogwarts, they wouldn't disregard them totally.
POOR PANSYI know that everyone is jealous because Pansy is the respected girlfriend of Draco. So, she must be an evil, slutty, clingy brat. And, what is Ginny when you add her? -An evil, slutty, clingy brat. Let Pansy have some respect; she does not lie all over Draco making inappropriate advances on him. Do not turn her into what she is not. Pansy isn't exactly nice, but she would never put herself to such a low class to be a slut. You can fix it by finding a way to discredit her in Draco's and his father's eyes. Her family falls bankrupt, someone in her family betrays Voldemort; these are only a few possibilities. Use your imagination!
ADDED SAD PASTS"Sad Pasts" are prevalent through all bad Mary Sues. Suddenly Ginny is abused by her brothers, and Draco's loving father rapes him nightly. Really, we know that they have relatively happy home lives, if not dull or noisy. Don't add a sad past, people fall in love all the time without sad pasts. You don't need them.
SPELLING SHORT CUTS"Net speek" is incredibly annoying. It's okay to use in a chat room, but not in a story, because the rest of the world has a lot of trouble understanding it. So, just write words out.
NUTTY NICKNAMESGin-Gin. I hate that. Gin is alcohol, not a person's name! Leave the name at Ginny; it doesn't need to be simplified any more. And "Drackie"? Typing out Draco takes less space! The nicknames aren't cute or funny; they are just corny and stupid.
FORMATTING AND SPACINGAs you can see, the spacing of the sample is terrible. There is no spaces where there needs to be and too many when they're there. You've made a smart choice, saving your story as a web page. When you upload it on to , the spaces that you have a doubled, so you can single space. If your spacing got messed up, just redo it and use the Replace Chapter feature. That feature is very useful, and you cannot abuse it!
A new problem that has come to surface with the new uploading system is that all asterisk symbols are deleted. There is no way to keep them in the text. Also, " " turn into random other characters as well. There is a wonderful new feature in your Document Manager. It is a wonderful place to do some last minute editing and brushing up. It is called Quick Edit. Use it! You cannot abuse it!
NO DISCLAIMERIn the least, a disclaimer is polite. You're respecting the fact that you don't own the copyrights to Harry Potter. Plus, it makes your fan fiction legal. I've been seeing a growing trend of people "forgetting" their disclaimers. People, it even says in the Guidelines of that you need to have a disclaimer! It could be removed if it doesn't have a disclaimer!
AUTHOR NOTESAuthor notes are annoying. I would rather read a story than an author note. Ask anyone; we'd rather read the story than see you saying "Hi!" to all your friends.
"TALKING" TO THE CHARACTERSIt just ruins the reality of the story. It is not cute or funny; just delete it! If the only highlight of your story is the little script of you talking to the characters, then your story isn't worth reading.
WATCHING OTHERS GET CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISMLet's say that your best friend posted a story, and that story just got a two page long review full of constructive criticism. What probably first goes through your head is "How dare that stranger ATTACK me friend? Don't they realize that my friend is such a wonderful person?" So, you storm of to slander the criticism and flame the critic to your best abilities. Please stop. You are sabotaging your friend's potential! The steps to reacting responsibly when your friend gets criticized are very much the same as when you get criticized. Here's what to do:
Take a break to calm down. Go do something else you enjoy for a while that has nothing to do with your friend or the story. Relax. Realize that this stranger doesn't know your wonderful friend. Realize that this stranger is trying to help your friend. Read the review carefully to see if there is any useful information that you could use. Help your friend use the information in the review to improve his or her story.I have been in this position, and I understand what it feels like. I too slandered the critic. Then, I came to the other side, and after spending hours writing advice in reviews and seeing the writer's friends slander it, I realized how much I had been damaging my friend's potential as a writer. I would like it if no one else made the same mistake. Believe me, you will regret it, and your friend will regret it too. When you send all of your hope in the mail to a publisher and get that cold, hard rejection slip, you realize for a first time many of these mistakes. I would like to make it a little easier on all of you.