A/N: i always wanted to be a poet... and i love poetry. so i thought i'd try my hand at it. i have no clue what to think of it, so i need your opinions. PLEASE REVIEW! but no flames... rather, constructive criticism, GOT IT?!?!?! ok... now READ...
[Betrayal]
He was one of loyalty.
Yes,
he was,
but not to one of truthfulness and love.
No, he was loyal to betrayal.
He was loyal to those of his father, his fellow deatheaters, and of his master, Lord Voldemort.
But one loyal to betrayal could be betraying, for he is loyal to betrayal.
He betrayed them. He led a double life,
A mole, for he betrayed the dark, and he betrayed the light.
What his intentions were, no one knew. All we know, is that he betrayed both.
Maybe for the better
Maybe for the worst…
But there was one thing he couldn't betray.
His heart.
Oh, how he feared his heart. For as he betrayed, so as his heart betrayed him.
He fell in love.
And what he hated the most was
She loved him back.
As he betrayed, so did she… for she loved her betrayal
And they lived a lie
He betrayed himself.
And then, he did not…
One dark night, he lay nursing his broken heart.
Her betrayal coursing deep within him,
His blood.
He finally couldn't stand it any longer.
His betrayal
Her's.
His love
His blood
One sharp pain to bring it all down to blood.
His blood
His betrayal was no more, and he fell still.
But what he did not know was as he lay there, blackness enveloping him
A silver tear of betrayal
Betrayed him
A/N: i nervously await your reviews... and constructive criticism
so far, people just say i'm redundent with the word betrayal... and its confusing. please let me know what you think. i wrote this about a year ago and when i came across it again i decided to post it up. i'm thinking about rewriting it after i get a couple of reviews... SO TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK!
[wrings hands and waits...]
ps. i don't have a specific character this was written about. i was thinking draco at the time i wrote it, but i guess it could be snape... as for the girl, that's unknown as well. which ever couple tickles your fancy, that's who it is... (mind you, it is a BOY and a GIRL...)
[.lady incognita.] aka, patronus