Chapter 19: Recap, part 2
Objective: To summarize- as best as possible considering the hosts- chapters 6-12.
Players:
Bojack727 (An Author)
RaftRider (Also an Author)
Zinic (Retired Author and beta-reader)
Projection of Success: Questionable!
Bojack: By now, it should be clear as to who I am, at least in relation to this story. I am accompanied by two trusted friends/colleagues.
Zinic: I am a friend of the author and while not beta-reading for this story, I am currently beta-reading for his other works.
RaftRider: I offered suggestions for the storyline and appeared in episode 8.
Bojack: This story, as some of you may recall, is my longest one and it is also my longest continual fan fic. The first chapter dates back to 2002, I am now posting this 21 months later. October 31 will be the 2nd anniversary.
Zinic: Wow, I can't believe that you've milked it for that long.
RaftRider: Tell me about it.
Bojack: (Sweat drop) Anyway, the story's atmosphere had change considerably since its conception and I am happy to admit this. Chapter five was probably the first episode to set the tone for what would be this thing's standard.
Zinic: It was also the first chapter to introduce an original character.
Bojack: Exactly. Would either of you like to add anything about chapter six before we start?
Zinic: Pure fluff!
RaftRider: And you obviously were making another allusion to Tio's fic.
Bojack: True, both true! Also, the scene with the Queen was the idea of RaftRider, and she deserves the credit for it, she asked for the queen to be in the story, so I did it- I thought it hinted a funny idea.
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Rei looked at the group. "Could you please state your names and former employers." Rei politely instructed the four of them.
The Male human stepped forward and introduced himself as "Biggs" and said that he was a former member of a group called "AVALANCH".
The Female introduced herself as "Jessie" and said she had also been a member of "AVALANCH".
The Dog Man introduced himself as "Garry" and said that he had been a former worker in a local Chrysm mine.
The Mole Man then introduced himself as "Mogu" and said that he had worked in the same mine as Garry.
Rei set down a file and looked at the group. "Well, you all seem qualified enough. There's just one problem." Rei announced as he turned to look at Biggs and Jessie. "I was told that Biggs would be accompanied by someone else, named Wedge." He stated calmly stated.
Jessie smiled sweetly and spoke. "Um, Wedge was sick." She replied.
Biggs then spoke up. "Yeah, so I thought that she would be good as a replacement." He added.
"Alright." Rei replied, making a small note on a piece of paper. "Well then, all that's left it to get you guys settled in and show you what you'll be doing."
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Zinic: Were you just too lazy to come up with new characters or was this some sort of artistic statement on your part?
Bojack: Yes.
Zinic: (sweat drop)!
Bojack: That is a secret.
RaftRider: Good form!
Bojack: Thank you.
(Bedroom Scene plays.)
Bojack: This was inspired by the scene at the inn in Tio's fic, but my version was a lot more sexually charged then hers.
Zinic: Shameless fan service.
Bojack: Hey, if liking fan service is wrong, than I don't want to be right.
RaftRider: You basically had a scene that restated several points on the 'Tio Cannon Law' booklet.
Bojack: Basically. This chapter was mainly to get the rest of the story moving along, as if to say "hey, from here on out, this is the real deal."
Zinic: That is questionable.
Bojack: The fan response was more subdued for this chapter, but I wasn't bothered- this chapter was just a way of moving along, so it didn't have as much emotional significance. I really can't think of much else to say.
RaftRider: On to chapter Seven.
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Momo walked down the halls of the Tower, the early morning sun cast bright a pink and orange glow through the windows, brilliantly illuminating the pale stone walls and floor. She was wearing a black satin robe and her hair was hanging down her back and beside her face. She yawned and rubbed the sleep out of her eyes.
She stepped into the large room that served as a pantry and kitchen in the Tower, and was surprised to see someone else there already.
Ash turned around and looked at Momo, slightly surprised to see her up so early. He was wearing a long house coat to fight the slight morning chill that pervaded the inner walls of the Tower. He quickly pulled his coat shut when he realized that it was hanging open, exposing his long thing torso and pale skin to the red-head in front of him. "Sorry." He said as he tightened the sash around his coat. "I see I'm not the only one up early." He went on. Setting down the glass he was holding.
Momo made sure to tighten her robe and blushed slightly. "Do you always get up so early?" She asked, trying to get over her embracement.
Ash smiled. "I like to start my day off as soon as possible." He replied. "I thought you might like to know that I was able to convert the some of the samples into powder form. I think that in that state, it can be even more effective. I've also converted some of it into a liquid form." He added.
"What do you plan to do with them now?" Asked Momo, brushing a few strands of copper-colored hair out of her eyes.
"I believe that the in these two new forms, they can be even more powerful, I just need test subjects to try them on." He went on, scratching chin as he finished his sentence.
Momo smiled as he finished his last statement. "What do you think those people that we hired were for?" She asked with a mischievous grin.
Ash smiled. "I like the way you think." He replied.
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Zinic: Bish!
Bojack: I'm not really where I got the idea for that scene; I do like the tension it establishes between them, though. Ash is a character that pretty much grew beyond the basic perimeters that I set for him. He was originally going to be just this scientist, but he ultimately becomes sort of the voice of the audience, for the most part- he is the only normal person in the story. I tried to make it so that he would sort of reflect my feelings about the rest of the story as well as the sentiment of the fans. I'm not sure if it worked though.
Zinic: But, the question is- is he a bishi?
Bojack: I suppose so, if you look at it that way.
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Later that morning.
Ginorelli looked up as the door to his office swung open. He watched as his flunky walked. "What is it?" He asked abruptly.
The room was dark and filled with old furniture and weapons, as well as several paintings and a coat of arms on one spot. There was an inscription at the bottom that read "The World For the Taking".
The man flinched and stepped back. "Don Ginorelli, I am sorry to disturb you, but I have some news that may be of interest to you." He replied.
"Speak up." He instructed him.
"Yes sir, we received a letter stating that someone is setting up operations in the area." He informed him.
"Run that by me again, what did you just say?" He shot back, leaning forward. "Someone is setting up oper-"
"I heard that, you chump!" He shouted. "I was just making sure!" He went on. "Are you sure?" He demanded.
"We can't be sure just yet." He replied, shifting on his feet uncomfortably.
Ginorelli stood up. "Send out our in the area, I wasn't pictures, visual confirmation!" He exclaimed.
"Yes sir, Don Ginorelli!" The man replied obediently as he left the room.
Ginorelli turned around and took out a cigar from his desk. "No one moves in on my turf and gets away with it." He said as he lit the cigar and stuck it in his mouth.
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RaftRider: I couldn't believe it when I saw this.
Bojack: The only logical next move in the story was to establish villains for it, so I decided to do something that I hadn't scene in a fic before- the mob! I just hope no one was offended by it.
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Stan put down his camera and moved along; he had to get photos that proved that this Tower place had a working lab, and that they were actually making something. In all honesty, he had no problem with being a spy. or a peeping tom if necessary. There were some benefits to spying on people.
"That rabbit lady was not a bad looker." He thought to himself with a smile. He'd got some nice pictures of her and that tiger guy.
Bojack: That scene probably speaks for itself, though I was bother somewhat by the idea of someone spying on Momo- it just seems so voyeuristic.
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Zinic: Creepy.
Bojack: So, now we have the chapter that sets the stage for most of the rest of the story- we now have a supporting cast, a complex storyline, and villains. I was working hard to move the story along and get to some point, as you will see- there was mixed success.
Zinic: Anything about the fan reply that come to mind as being important?
Bojack: Yes. This chapter marked the first appearance of the reviewer that really got to me.
Zinic: Sara-chan?
Bojack: Exactly. Look at this.
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You know, I don't really enjoy stories based on a cliché as big as the one you used in chapters one and two. Yes, I'm talking about the use of strange substances or drugs as the base to bring the characters together.
But then again, it is a comedy and that sets it apart from traditional fiction in how it should be judged. Mostly, I'll have to overlook the major OOCness in every character.
Now, let me comment on some things:
If this wasn't a comedy, I wouldn't be sure this fanfiction could work, but since it seems to be heading in other directions, the comedy factor may injure it when you read the story from chapter one to the last. Keep that in mind, you might want to just make small nods to action and retain the mayhem you have created intact.
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Bojack: I edited that just a little to focus on the spirit what she was trying to tell me. It wasn't rude, and she makes good points, but she failed to see that I wasn't trying to be very original to begin with- this isn't Asimov, it's just a funny little story that I made- not to be taken so seriously.
RaftRider: On to chapter 8!
Bojack: The market chapter, this should be of interest to you, Raft.
RaftRider: Definitely.
Bojack: The scene were pretty funny and it got a good reaction out of the fans. This first scene works well.
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Just then, a woman with dark hair and a red head band appeared, she was wearing a gold chain around her neck and a pair of matching earrings. She also appeared to have some kind of tan and she was clad in a blue tunic. "Well, what do we have here, 'Mr. Fancy Pants'?" She announced as she leaned on one hip.
Rei looked at the woman quizzically. "Who are you?" He asked. The woman looked him over. "Well, you can call me Fiona," She replied. "And I'll call you handsome." She added in a cute tone of voice.
A large sweat bead appeared on Rei head as he scratched it. "Wow, you cut right to the chase!" He replied nervously.
The woman looked at him. "I love a man with green eyes and stripes." She replied in a sultry tone.
Rei was getting really nervous now. "Um, I'm just looking for weapons." He tried to reply.
"You may be looking for weapons, but you found me!" She replied, leaning over the counter and looking up at him.
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Bojack: LMAO
Zinic: Fiona!
Bojack: My god, next scene!
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Rei walked backwards frantically until he bumped into someone else, he almost jumped when he did. "Ah!" He exclaimed and turned around to see a shorter woman with red hair. "Oh no, not another one!" He cried out.
The woman looked at him with a confused expression and then placed her hands on her hips. "I don't know who you think are, but you can't just go bumping into anyone you please, especially not Shannon Ul-Darva." She announced proudly as she spoke her name.
"Sorry." Rei replied, holding his tail and trying to get the fur to stop bristling.
"What, now you think you can just make things all better with 'Sorry'?" She replied in anger. It was then that her voice took on a sarcastic tone to it. "Just 'cause you're furry, doesn't give you the right to walk all over those of us who just have skin!" She shot back.
"What have I gotten myself into?!" Rei exclaimed. "I'm surrounded by maniacs!" He added.
"I haven't even gotten started yet!" She replied.
"Lady, you've got issues that I don't want to EVEN to be a part of!" Rei exclaimed.
The woman was taken back by this. "Okay then," She replied. "Would you be interested in buying something?" She asked, her tone suddenly becoming friendly.
Rei fell down from the weight a sweat bead on his head.
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RaftRider: You got my sarcasm right, but I don't look like that.
Bojack: It's my fault, I didn't think to ask for you send a description, so when I came to your scene, I just had to BS it. Still, it was pretty funny.
Zinic: This chapter was pretty short, but it was good, it also introduces a fan favorite-
Bojack: "Insert Disk 2", I thought it seemed appropriate for the time. The fans seemed pretty happy about this chapter in general.
Zinic: Next chapter!
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Rei started to respond, but suddenly stopped and looked around. Momo was confused, she didn't know what was going on. Rei turned to her. "Something is wrong here, I smell something very wrong." He replied nervously. "You wait here." He said and set down the bag and took out his knives and walked down through the woods.
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Bojack: The chapter begins with the realization that they are indeed being watched.
Zinic: I liked the action sequence a lot, but the closing line to the scene kind of put the atmosphere off.
Bojack: I see that you are referring to the line about "getting high and fooling around", correct?
Zinic: Yes.
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Bojack: It was an omage to the line from JAWS where Roy Schreider is with his wife and she says "do you want to get drunk and fool around." Rei's answer is the same as what Schreider said. A lot of people seemed to enjoy the fighting sequences and Tio liked the way Momo defended herself.
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Bojack: The two mobsters are watching them from a distance and this lead to a line that I always liked.
Zinic: "they need to be made dead."
Bojack: Exactly!
RaftRider: Anything you would like to say about the next chapter?
Bojack: Actually, yes. A little while after I finished nine- my review count reached 49. I wanted to do something to celebrate the milestone- but I felt I should wait till it hit fifty. The problem was that it didn't. So, I decided that the most professional way to handle it was to bug you for a review.
RaftRider: I remember that.
Bojack: Thanks to you, I was able to properly release the big 50th review party chapter. It wasn't the tenth chapter of the story, but rather a bonus episode. I wrote a lot of totally random scenes for it- like a sketch show.
Zinic: The first being the intro where you explained the point of the chapter to the audience.
Bojack: I felt that it needed something besides me, so I fabricated lines for Tio.
RaftRider: Continuing the tradition, eh?
Bojack: Pretty much.
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"Well, Tio-chan, I was so excited that I went out and kicked Vegeta's ass again just for fun and then I came back signed Ash for a scene from Hamlet." He exclaims.
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Bojack: The first scene was the alternative version of the cannon sequence- and the first reference to the Francis Ford Decopala masterpiece- "Apocalypse Now". It was a shameless parody of Robert Duval's Napalm speech.
Zinic: The next was the part where you interviewed Cid for the upcoming fic he was in.
Bojack: It was mostly filler till the main act.
RaftRider: The next scene was the Hamlet bit, right?
Bojack: Act 5, Scene 1. I played the priest, Ryu was Hamlet, Ash was Laertes, Nina was Ophelia, Teepo played Horatio, and Rei and Momo played the King and Queen, and the others filled in for various parts.
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Selected dialogue from the scene...
The Cemetery Forman (played by Gary) is sitting by a grave being dug by his assistant (played by Mogu) for Ophelia.
Gary looks around the dark grave yard and then at the two oil lamps he had lit earlier. He then leans in and speaks up. "Is she to be buried in Christian burial, when she willfully seeks her own salvation?" He asks.
Mogu looks up. "I tell thee she is, the King finds it Christian burial." He replies while still digging with his shovel.
Hamlet watches as Gary tosses a skull out of the grave. Ryu walks forward with Teepo at his side. Ryu watches as another skull lands at his feet. Ryu looks down at Gary and turns to Teepo. "I will speak to this fellow." He explains. "Whose grave's this, sir?" Ryu asks him.
Gary looks up. "Mine, sir." He replies.
Sweat beads appear on Ryu and Teepo's heads. "What man dost thou dig it for?" Ryu manages to asks.
"No man, sir." Gary replies.
"What woman, then?" Ryu asks, flinching.
"One that was a woman, sir; but, rest her soul, she's dead." Gary replies as he puts his shovel down.
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Bojack: We'll see one more part from this, and then I wrap this sequence up.
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The forbearers appear, carrying a coffin with Ophelia's corpse in it (dramatically played by Nina). A priest (played by me) walks before the coffin. King Claudius (played by Rei) and Queen Gertrude (played by Momo). They are both dressed in black. Ophelia's bother, Laertes (played by Ash) is there with them. There are also other various attendants of the King and Queen.
Ash yells suddenly. "O, woe, fall ten times on that cursed head, whose wicked deed thy most ingenious sense deprived thee of! Hold off the earth awhile," He exclaims. "Till I have caught her once more in mine arms one last time!" He begs the forbearers as he jumps into the grave, tears streaming from his eyes. "Now pile your dust upon the quick and dead, till you have made a mountain to reach the heavens!" He screams through tear- filled eyes.
Suddenly, everyone looks over as Ryu runs forward, Teepo behind him. He runs up to the group and looks down at Laertes. "What is he whose grief bears such an emphasis?" He exclaims. "Whose phrase of sorrow conjures the wandering stars, and makes them stand
Like wonder-wounded hearers? This is I, Hamlet the Dane!" He yells.
Ash looks up at him and jumps out of the grave and looks at Ryu with rage in his eyes. "The devil take thy soul!" He yells as he tackles Ryu and raps his hands around Ryu's throat.
Ryu cringes and speaks up as he grabs onto Ash's hands. "I prithee, take thy fingers from my throat; for, though I am not splenitive and rash. I have something in me dangerous,
Which let thy wiseness fear: hold off thy hand!" He exclaims.
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Bojack: I enjoyed writing that, very much. Too bad the chapter didn't garner very much fan reaction. The next chapter was done around Ash and his interactions with the others. I was also trying to make Ash seem like some kind of-
Zinic: Bishi!
Bojack: Yeah. This next scene in the beginning of chapter twelve:
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Momo rolled onto her back and laughed. ".I see. a snail crawling across the edge of a strait razor." She spoke in a very serious manner. ".Crawling across the edge. of a straight razor... and surviving." She finished and then laughed.
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Zinic: Explain that to the readers.
Bojack: I had recently watched Apocalypse Now and I felt that the only way that make this story better was to insert reference to the dark Viet Nam film into the fantasy atmosphere. Nothing actually very relevant about it. In the hopes of rapping this up, I sate that the chapter concluded with the intro of the Windian CIA.
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"Anyway, we are in the area investigating reports of unusual activities." Smith announced. "We have reason to believe that a large-scale criminal organization is at work here, with possible ties to drug distribution." He explained.
"They're recently moved down here. reasons that we do not yet know." Johnson added.
"So, we'd just like to know if you've seen anything unusual, anything at all." Smith asked.
"Well, no not that I've seen, nothing at all." Momo replied rapidly.
"Well, alright then, we'll see you later." Smith replied.
"We'll be in the area if you do see anything." Johnson added.
Momo watched as the two men walked away, she then closed the door and slid down onto the floor and held her head in her hands. "Oh my god, what's going to happen to me. I'm too young and cute to go to jail!" She exclaimed as she imagined a little chibi version of herself being dragged off in handcuffs and thrown in jail.
"No!" she exclaimed. "Things like this shouldn't happen to beautiful geniuses like me!"
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Bojack: I'd like to thank my guest for reviewing these scenes with me and thank the readers. There will be one more catch up chapter, and then I'll be ready with the new episode.
RaftRider: See you around.
Zinic: Later.
End of chapter Nineteen