Thanks for all of the reviews and tips so far you guys, they're really helpful. but tell me, what do you guys really think of the story so far? and when I ask this, I mean do you like the theme of it and the way that things are progressing? is it funny enough? cause all of that right there is what I'm aiming for, :) have I hit the target or am I way off? be honest now :)
Disclaimer: One again, I do not own any of the characters. they belong to a show, although a couple of the guy characters I would like to get to know personally in real life if you catch my drift :coughs: ahhhyde! lol :D
Chapter # 4
" so are you sure that you don't wanna come Hyde?".
" yes, for the hundredth time Donna- I'm sure that I do not wanna come, ok?".
Following Eric out to the Vista Cruiser with her sleeping bag in hand, Donna calls over her shoulder to Hyde," ok, fine. Later Hyde, and remember- could you at least try to be nice to Jackie? She's going through a rough time now, that and if I have to hear that you were a jerk to her- I sware I'm gonna put my foot in your ass!".
Watching as the gang leaves in Eric's Vista Cruiser, Hyde walks back into the bedroom and lays back down beside Jackie," hu, how is it that someone so loud can look this peaceful?".
" hey, I heard that Steven J. Hyde. Watch it".
" oh, your up Jackie?".
Stretching out tiredly under the covers, Jackie lets out a sleepy yawn," ummmm, yeah unfortunately. I've been up actually".
Giving Jackie a small nod, Hyde reluctantly asks," well, did you at least sleep well?".
" as well as one could with you anyway, cover hog".
" Jackie, I am not a cover hog".
Wriggling herself into Hyde's arms for warmth, Jackie shivers against him," oh you are too Steven, don't try to deny it either. Places are cold that aren't suppose to be on me".
With a slight shake of his head, Hyde stares down at Jackie with a frown," Jackie, what the hell do you think your doing?....And really? Which places are those?".
" eww, Steven! Do you mind? And I'm trying to keep warm, thats what I'm doing".
" .....dammit! Fine, come here".
" your the best Steven".
" whatever".
" thanks Steven, really I mean it".--
" wow, I never realized how tiny you really were".
" ok, I am not tiny Steven".
" ummm, yeah- you really are".
" oh yeah? well your...your- your scruffy!".
" yeah, ok. Good come back Berkhart".
" ok, you really need to shut up Steven".
" why don't you try and make me".
" ooooh believe you-me, I'm gonna".
" yeah, right. More like you can try to".
" ooohohoo, I'm gonna. You just wait and see".
" oh, I'm waiting alright".
" well don't you worry, it's gonna be when you least expect it".
" really? is that so Jackie?".
" yeah, sooo...watch out".
" uh hu, ok. If you say so".
" oh, I say so Steven".
" ok".
" fine then".--
" fine".
" .....what time is it?".
Rubbing at his bare-chest, Hyde reaches over Jackie for his watch," it is eleven o'clock now".
Nuzzling her face against Hyde, Jackie lets out a long sigh and asks," hey Steven?".
" what now Jackie?".
" I was just gonna ask if you wanted to come in the jacuzzi with me?".
With a simple shrug of his shoulders, Hyde nods his head yes," whatever".
Sitting up in bed now, Jackie attempts to pull Hyde up with her," cool, ok come on. I'll go get my bikini on".
" we're not gonna go in naked?....Dammit!".
" eww, Steven!.....ok, ready?".
Staring Jackie up and down as she exits the bathroom, Hyde shakes his head in disapproval," no way, your not wearing that. It barely covers you at all".
Raising a confused eyebrow at Hyde, for the hell of it Jackie asks," and your point would be?".
" that is an inappropriate bathing suite Jackie".
" I see, so now your a parent?".
Folding his arms across his chest, Hyde tosses Jackie his Led Zepplin t-shirt," Jackie, now".
Reluctantly pulling the t-shirt over her head, Jackie questions dryly," this better for you Steven?".
" yes, very".--
Disclaimer: One again, I do not own any of the characters. they belong to a show, although a couple of the guy characters I would like to get to know personally in real life if you catch my drift :coughs: ahhhyde! lol :D
Chapter # 4
" so are you sure that you don't wanna come Hyde?".
" yes, for the hundredth time Donna- I'm sure that I do not wanna come, ok?".
Following Eric out to the Vista Cruiser with her sleeping bag in hand, Donna calls over her shoulder to Hyde," ok, fine. Later Hyde, and remember- could you at least try to be nice to Jackie? She's going through a rough time now, that and if I have to hear that you were a jerk to her- I sware I'm gonna put my foot in your ass!".
Watching as the gang leaves in Eric's Vista Cruiser, Hyde walks back into the bedroom and lays back down beside Jackie," hu, how is it that someone so loud can look this peaceful?".
" hey, I heard that Steven J. Hyde. Watch it".
" oh, your up Jackie?".
Stretching out tiredly under the covers, Jackie lets out a sleepy yawn," ummmm, yeah unfortunately. I've been up actually".
Giving Jackie a small nod, Hyde reluctantly asks," well, did you at least sleep well?".
" as well as one could with you anyway, cover hog".
" Jackie, I am not a cover hog".
Wriggling herself into Hyde's arms for warmth, Jackie shivers against him," oh you are too Steven, don't try to deny it either. Places are cold that aren't suppose to be on me".
With a slight shake of his head, Hyde stares down at Jackie with a frown," Jackie, what the hell do you think your doing?....And really? Which places are those?".
" eww, Steven! Do you mind? And I'm trying to keep warm, thats what I'm doing".
" .....dammit! Fine, come here".
" your the best Steven".
" whatever".
" thanks Steven, really I mean it".--
" wow, I never realized how tiny you really were".
" ok, I am not tiny Steven".
" ummm, yeah- you really are".
" oh yeah? well your...your- your scruffy!".
" yeah, ok. Good come back Berkhart".
" ok, you really need to shut up Steven".
" why don't you try and make me".
" ooooh believe you-me, I'm gonna".
" yeah, right. More like you can try to".
" ooohohoo, I'm gonna. You just wait and see".
" oh, I'm waiting alright".
" well don't you worry, it's gonna be when you least expect it".
" really? is that so Jackie?".
" yeah, sooo...watch out".
" uh hu, ok. If you say so".
" oh, I say so Steven".
" ok".
" fine then".--
" fine".
" .....what time is it?".
Rubbing at his bare-chest, Hyde reaches over Jackie for his watch," it is eleven o'clock now".
Nuzzling her face against Hyde, Jackie lets out a long sigh and asks," hey Steven?".
" what now Jackie?".
" I was just gonna ask if you wanted to come in the jacuzzi with me?".
With a simple shrug of his shoulders, Hyde nods his head yes," whatever".
Sitting up in bed now, Jackie attempts to pull Hyde up with her," cool, ok come on. I'll go get my bikini on".
" we're not gonna go in naked?....Dammit!".
" eww, Steven!.....ok, ready?".
Staring Jackie up and down as she exits the bathroom, Hyde shakes his head in disapproval," no way, your not wearing that. It barely covers you at all".
Raising a confused eyebrow at Hyde, for the hell of it Jackie asks," and your point would be?".
" that is an inappropriate bathing suite Jackie".
" I see, so now your a parent?".
Folding his arms across his chest, Hyde tosses Jackie his Led Zepplin t-shirt," Jackie, now".
Reluctantly pulling the t-shirt over her head, Jackie questions dryly," this better for you Steven?".
" yes, very".--