From: Nichi-chan(hey_shinichi@yahoo.com)
Yehey! You're story is really interesting.. Very cool.. (praises!) I hate to say this but some of the words in this fic are not correctly spelled and some of the grammars are not correct.. Hope that you make them better, anyway you had a very good story running there.. keep up the good work..
Hi I appreciate the input. Ill get to them soon. But at the moment I'm vary unhappy with what iv dune so far. I believe that this story needs drastic change. So ill be working on that for a wile. Also several new ideas have a cured to me so I will be working on them as well. Look out for them in ff.net thanks
From: Nichi-chan(hey_shinichi@yahoo.com)
Just read your last chapter a while ago, it's good.. Your grammar and spellings has improved although there were some mistakes again.. it's fun reading this story.. U did a good job, hope you update the next of story, can't wait to hear it..
Hay thanks. Its Improved @,@ COOL! Well sorry about the privies chapter "She loves me" hears the better one.
She loves me.
Dorothy stopped when she spied Heero sitting next to her friend.
Relena laughed at the comical expression about her noticeably pregnant friend and motioned for her to sit as well.
"Um. am I interrupting anything?" Heero only glared at her. And Relena laughed a little." Come on Dorothy honestly has there ever been anything to interrupt that u couldn't be apart of?"
Dorothy herd Heero's grumbled yes as she turned down her player. "Well knowing him it probably has already waited some time already so a few more moments shouldn't hurt." She shot the pilot a look. "I just came by to see if u needed any help with tonight's preparations? But it seems you already have a ready volunteer right Heero?" She looked up to meet His confused eyes. "You wouldn't mind helping out a lovely lady in need now would u?" She nodded her head as she stood. " Thought so. Well have fun u two turtle doves, Chaw." With the loud music from a Shrek CD following at her heals, she left. Relena let out a small but visibly depressed sigh and Heero attention was instantly hers. "Sorry about that." She shook her head" every thing is already set up. You don't have to stay if you don't want to."
"What if I want to?" Came his mono-toned voice. But Relena only shook her head again. "Heero its ok I know u and well, I know you don't really like me all to much, you don't have to pretend." Relena stood and walked toward the door. "Things would be a lot easier if we were honest with each other. I'm in love with you and you aren't in love with me. That's that."
That certainly was that for as Relena walked out of the room, She felt she hade walked out of Heero's pity to. If only she new. Heero sat on the couch were Relena had left him, staring out into space until some time after the party had started. We know because that is precisely were and when AJ found the idiot.
"IM GANA KILLYOU, YOU BASTERD!!!" Heero herd the harsh words and felt the punch, he took them like one who looks out thru a foggy haze. "She loves me?" He asked in little more thin a whisper. AJ looked at his brother with a mixture of rage and confusion as he spoke. " She told u she loved u and left."
She loves me.
"Why didn't u go after her?"
She loves me.? " Heero?"
She loves me? "HEERO!!!" Heero jolted and looked at his brother for the first time, as AJ took him by the scruff of his shirt and lifted him off the couch.
"Do you have any idea of what you have dun soldier boy?" AJ was enraged; red-hot fury could be seen in his eyes. Heero had never seen his happy go lucky brother this mad before.
"Do you have any idea that you just thru something so precious away!? She loves you; you cold-hearted ass hole and u let her walk away! You have gat to be the most ignorant man alive! She loves you, not me, you! Damn it she loves you!
Then it hit him, AJ was in love with Relena! AJ loved Relena. Heero's eyes flashed, his fists balled but when he opened his mouth his words were drowned out by Relena's scream.
Yehey! You're story is really interesting.. Very cool.. (praises!) I hate to say this but some of the words in this fic are not correctly spelled and some of the grammars are not correct.. Hope that you make them better, anyway you had a very good story running there.. keep up the good work..
Hi I appreciate the input. Ill get to them soon. But at the moment I'm vary unhappy with what iv dune so far. I believe that this story needs drastic change. So ill be working on that for a wile. Also several new ideas have a cured to me so I will be working on them as well. Look out for them in ff.net thanks
From: Nichi-chan(hey_shinichi@yahoo.com)
Just read your last chapter a while ago, it's good.. Your grammar and spellings has improved although there were some mistakes again.. it's fun reading this story.. U did a good job, hope you update the next of story, can't wait to hear it..
Hay thanks. Its Improved @,@ COOL! Well sorry about the privies chapter "She loves me" hears the better one.
She loves me.
Dorothy stopped when she spied Heero sitting next to her friend.
Relena laughed at the comical expression about her noticeably pregnant friend and motioned for her to sit as well.
"Um. am I interrupting anything?" Heero only glared at her. And Relena laughed a little." Come on Dorothy honestly has there ever been anything to interrupt that u couldn't be apart of?"
Dorothy herd Heero's grumbled yes as she turned down her player. "Well knowing him it probably has already waited some time already so a few more moments shouldn't hurt." She shot the pilot a look. "I just came by to see if u needed any help with tonight's preparations? But it seems you already have a ready volunteer right Heero?" She looked up to meet His confused eyes. "You wouldn't mind helping out a lovely lady in need now would u?" She nodded her head as she stood. " Thought so. Well have fun u two turtle doves, Chaw." With the loud music from a Shrek CD following at her heals, she left. Relena let out a small but visibly depressed sigh and Heero attention was instantly hers. "Sorry about that." She shook her head" every thing is already set up. You don't have to stay if you don't want to."
"What if I want to?" Came his mono-toned voice. But Relena only shook her head again. "Heero its ok I know u and well, I know you don't really like me all to much, you don't have to pretend." Relena stood and walked toward the door. "Things would be a lot easier if we were honest with each other. I'm in love with you and you aren't in love with me. That's that."
That certainly was that for as Relena walked out of the room, She felt she hade walked out of Heero's pity to. If only she new. Heero sat on the couch were Relena had left him, staring out into space until some time after the party had started. We know because that is precisely were and when AJ found the idiot.
"IM GANA KILLYOU, YOU BASTERD!!!" Heero herd the harsh words and felt the punch, he took them like one who looks out thru a foggy haze. "She loves me?" He asked in little more thin a whisper. AJ looked at his brother with a mixture of rage and confusion as he spoke. " She told u she loved u and left."
She loves me.
"Why didn't u go after her?"
She loves me.? " Heero?"
She loves me? "HEERO!!!" Heero jolted and looked at his brother for the first time, as AJ took him by the scruff of his shirt and lifted him off the couch.
"Do you have any idea of what you have dun soldier boy?" AJ was enraged; red-hot fury could be seen in his eyes. Heero had never seen his happy go lucky brother this mad before.
"Do you have any idea that you just thru something so precious away!? She loves you; you cold-hearted ass hole and u let her walk away! You have gat to be the most ignorant man alive! She loves you, not me, you! Damn it she loves you!
Then it hit him, AJ was in love with Relena! AJ loved Relena. Heero's eyes flashed, his fists balled but when he opened his mouth his words were drowned out by Relena's scream.