Disclaimer: I do not own YYH.
I printed the first chapter out and showed Raining Petals, my editor. The problem was, I had already done the ABC check and it said there were no errors, so I put the story up. Raining Petals laughed at me.
Here are my Corrections:
1.) "Breath Kayko Breath!" (pronounced "Breth Kayko Breth" it's suppose to be "Breathe Kayko Breathe!")
2.) "Now, Now Yusuke! You should have studied! How are you ever going to go to Collage if you don't even know the alphabet?" (Collage is a type of Art. It is suppose to be College.)
If there are any mistakes I did not see, or any in this chapter, Feel free to tell me! That's what you're suppose to do, but compliments are nice too.
And if any of these random addresses are yours, or phone numbers, feel free to jump with joy or complain!
On With The Next Chapter!
)YYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY(
(IN NY)
Kurama and Kuwabara were at the Airport waiting for a Taxi.
"So, what's your Address and Phone?" asked Kuwabara.
"Oh...let's see..." Kurama said pulling out a piece of paper, "105 Morningside dr. Westbury. My phone is 516 333 8551"
Neither of them noticed girls in the backround writing down the address and phone number.
"Really? Shizuru had me memorize mine in case I got lost. Mine is 112 Gordon Ave. Westbury. My phone is 516 338 0543." replied Kuwabara.
YYY
(In Ireland)
Yusuke looked around. He had just stepped outside the Airport and saw "Green. Lot's and Lot's of Green."
"Aww. Don't worry Yusuke! If you're bored in the Car, count the trees like you used to do when you were little!" said Atsuko.
"I already did. 7. 7 trees." (A/N- for those who have never been to Ireland, It has no trees. They were all cut down, If you see any while your there, they were planted. odds are, some one lives there.)
"See! The game is easier! No need for frustration. Count the cows then!"
They got a car and headed out for their Bed and Breakfast. Since they left a month early, they had to stay there a month. Their house isn't theirs yet.
"Here we are Yusuke!" said Atsuko, "We'll be staying here a month!"
(IN NY)
Kuwabara and Kurama each got a Taxi for their family.
"I'll see you at school Kurama." said Kuwabara.
" I guess so. Bye." Said Kurama.
"Bye."
The Taxi's drove off.
"Wait!!! Kurama!!! What's Your Email!!!!!" yelled a crazy fan girl.
"Darn we missed him!" said another.
"Why didn't we run before?" said the 3rd.
"Simple." said the 2nd, "That Blondie was glaring at us when we got just a little close to our fox. It was scary..."
"Oh.." said 3rd .
"Did you get his phone and address?" said 1st.
"He lives at 105 Morningside dr. Westbury. His phone is 516 333 8551..." said the 2nd disappointed.
"what's the matter?" asked the 3rd.
"One small detail." said the second, "IT'S ALL IN JAPANESE!!!"
" heh, heh...right. Hey wait!"
"What?"
"We can ask that 8th grader! She speaks Japanese, plus she watches the show!"
"Hey you're right!" said the first "She can't back down!"
(In Ireland)
"So this is the place." said Yusuke looking left and right, " Not a neighbor to be seen for miles, what're they isolationists?"
"Now, now. Don't be rude." said Atsuko. " There are kids there your age working there. Why don't you have a job like that? I spoke to one of them on the phone, he was very nice."
"Is he gonna be there now?"
"No. He has school."
"oh..."
"But here's something you can look for,"
"What?"
"It says on the map that fairies have been spotted in this area. Catch a Leprechaun or something."
"Ha, ha, ha. Right."
(IN NY)
"Umm... Ma'am. Are those girls chasing you?" asked the Taxi Driver to Shiori.
"Hmm... Suichi do you know them?" asked Shiori.
"No mother." replied Kurama.
)YYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY(
Well?
Who do you think Yusuke will be staying with?
He's Yusuke's age and very nice.
(here's a hint, he sounded about Yusuke's age.)
Who are the fan girls going to ask for help?
Will she help them?
What will the fan girls do to Kurama?
Will Yusuke find a Leprechaun? Will he even look for a Leprechaun?
Did I make any Grammar mistakes?
Try to answer some of these questions in your Review!
