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In her mind

She saw a much younger version of herself and Hiei laughing and playing.

The scene changed and it was now Yoko and her laughing and playing. The scene changed one last time and she saw her younger self being bullied by Yoko.

"Why are you always so mean to me Yoko?!" A young Rain cried to her twin.

Yoko had pushed her against a tree. She slumped down. Her arm had been broken on impact.

"Because I hate you!" Yoko yelled venomously. "It's all YOUR fault that they're DEAD!!!"

"B-But I didn't do anything!" Rain screamed. Tears were running down her cheeks. "Please, Yoko, I'm your sister, your twin sister! You HAVE to believe me! Please!"

It seemed as though her twin hadn't even heard her.

"I hate you!" He said.

Rain choked back a sob. She struggled to stand. Suddenly the trees behind Yoko parted and Hiei stepped out. Her stared at her emotionlessly. Rain didn't notice at first.

"Oh Hiei, thank the gods!" Rain limped toward him, holding her arm. He stared at her with no emotion on her face and just stood there. Rain still didn't notice.

"Hiei, tell my brother that it's not my fault."

"Why would I do that?" He asked with no emotion in his voice.

That's when Rain noticed how he stood there like a lifeless doll.

She stopped right in front of him. He was staring at her, but it looked more like he was staring through her.

"Hiei?" She cautiously reached out to touch his arm. "What's wrong with you?"

As soon as she touched him his face crinkled in disgust. He pushed her harshly and she fell back on her butt. Her cry of pain fell on deaf ears. Hiei glared at her with hatred.

Fresh tears stung her eyes.

"H-he-hiei, h-how could y-y-you?"

He laughed evilly. Yoko stepped up and stood by his side, joining in. "because I hate you and so does your twin! You're nothing but trouble. You've never done anything but cause trouble. That's why we hate you! That's why you're worthless! That's why we never came for you!"

Back to reality

A lone tear ran down Rain's cheek. Her focus came back. Though the whole ordeal seemed to be several minutes long, it only lasted a few seconds in reality. Rain glared with pure hatred and disgust at Yusuke.

Yusuke didn't even have time to glance at Rain before she was on him. Her grip on his neck was deadly. He wheezed and gasped for breath but none would come to him. Her claws dug into his flesh. He gagged on the fresh blood that was rising from his throat.

Rain narrowed her eyes. She spoke with pure venom. "I really WAS going to be nice about killing you and your friend. But NOOOOO, you just HAD to go and RUIN that, didn't you! NO ONE insults me like that. EVER!" Her grip on him tightened even more.

Yusuke's vision doubled. He was dying, he could tell. He choked and gagged again. He felt the warm blood ooze and run down his neck.

Rain continued softly. "So you know what I'm going to do?"

Yusuke's eyes rolled in the back of his head. He could no longer see anything, but he still faintly heard her.

"I'm not going to kill you." She chucked evilly. "Oh, no, you're NOT going to die. At least not yet. I think I'm going to enjoy torturing you, right here, right now. And let's not forget your stupid, filthy friend over there."

Rain relaxed her grip on his neck. She chanted a healing spell. He was immediately unscathed. She dropped him and watched him crumple on the floor

Her line of vision switched over to Kuwabara. She flicked her hand toward him chanting the spell again, and he too was left unscathed.

Rain reached into her hair and pulled out two seeds. She tenderly placed them on the ground and commanded them to grow.

They grew as big as ten feet. They were vines like plants with a flowery middle. Numerous vines sprung out from the flowers. Rain looked at them with pride.

She gave them both a silent command. The plants slithered up to Yusuke and Kuwabara, wrapping their vines on the unconscious bodies, and then they each grabbed onto the dock polls that were next to each other. They wrapped themselves and their two captives up tightly. Yusuke and Kuwabara would not be able to move. The vines where wrapped around their arms, legs, and necks. The rest of them was exposed to Rain's unwavering gaze.

Rain grinned ruthlessly. She reached into her hair and pulled out a rose whip, identical to her twin brother's but it was black. "Now the real fun begins."

And then she started to slash them all over their bodies and they would scream in pain. And that satisfied Rain a lot. She loved to hear her victims scream in pain, she didn't know why but she did.

And she slashed at them for about the next 20minits and then she felt pain in her chest and she looked and saw a katana in her, she pulled it out and blood went everywhere, But she didn't care, she survived many cuts and gashes in her life, and then she looked up and saw hiei and kurama in their fighting stance.

"Don't hurt them, Rain!" Kurama said looking threw her eyes into her soul with hate.

"Why not, they are the ones who put you up to this, arnt they?! You all are out to kill me arnt you?" She said very pissed off at them.

"You know what Rain? I don't know how I could have loved you, now that I look at you, you are stupid in your demon nature, and you have no respect for your prey, none at all, look at them!" Hiei said looking at kuwabara and yusuke.

"Your so right hiei i think I should have a little more respect for them that's why im letting them leave" and then she started chanting some spell and the plants that were holding yusuke and kuwabra disappeared with them, and as Rain was changing her body was shifting and she was heal of the wound hiei gave her.

"There I feel better" she said and looked at her new form.

"What the? Where are they?" Kurama and hiei said amazed

"You don't need to know right now"

"Brother you didn't know about this? Wow wherever you got your information were weak I think I should pay them a visit."

"What are you sis-"kurama almost finished saying but Rain cut in

"DON'T YOU EVER CALL ME THAT! I AM NOT YOUR SISTER!" She said with no expression on her face.

"Then why do you call me brother? Sister Rain?"

"Because I want to kill you as my brother not just a stupid human, but by the way why do you hide yourself in this human body?"

"It's none of your bisness, and I also see that your information is weak too." Kurama said.

"Oh contrar yoko I know already but I wanted to hear it from you, but hiei you surprise me the most why do you hang around humans and demons who fight with spirit detectives?"

"Because if I don't they will tell... because im forced to!" Hiei said trying not to mention yukina's name in this because he was afraid she would hurt her.

"Because of what...YUKINA? Dose she know of you?" She looked at his shocked face and laughed at him "why thank you but here let me call my sweets back and she canted something again and instead of just kuwabra and yusuke it was those too and yukina and kuwabra's sister, shizui and boton and keiko were all there too.

"How did you-"hiei said but was cut off by Rain

"None of your business! I know all about you and them and what has happened to you all in your past present and I even know your futures. But what I want to know is why and how could you?" Rain asked them with hatered in her voice

"how........she.......but no one told her." hiei said with confusion in his eyes.

"she knew from the start but just recently found out it was you."

"how?"

"a little birdie told her." she said in a very laid back way.

" you, you told her but how did you know?"

"I lived with the ice maidens for 3years and i knew your mother and sister and when i was training even met your father, but he's dead now, I killed him and got good money for that too, he was a disgrace of a fire demon so i gladly killed him off, he was the last one besides you now, who i need to kill." she headed towards a tree stump and sat down on it and waited for a reply.

"why?" kurama said

"why wouldn't I? i was paid good and offered a home and some magic and spirit training in return, and since i had no home or family i took it."

"and so you killed him as the best kill in your career?"

"nope, not the best but my first and thats when i didnt know anything about my powers and abilitys."

"HE WAS WHAT? YOUR FIRST? BUT HOW? HE IS STRONGER THAN I WAS BACK THEN. WASN'T HE?" hiei said amazed and in his eye you could see he was holding back a tear.

she felt sorry for him but wouldn't let him know about that. she killed his father with pride of the fact that he was related to hiei, the only she ever cared about in her life.

"yea he was, but im an only species and im wanted all over the demon world for money."

"is that why you are so deffensive? and hate everything and everyone?" kurama asked with a different tone in his voice.

"yea it is." and her black dragon came forth and stood in front of her to protect her.

"akasha move!" she said to her dragon but she didn't move.

"move!" and the dragon only flew towards hiei and knocked him into a blood thirsty tree and the tree grabed him and held on to him.

hiei struggled but still couldnt get out, kurama used rose whip and it didnt hurt the tree at all.

in that moment she told her death trees to let all the others go and they all fell to the ground and they all woke up in an isnstance.

"there they are unharmed."

"unharmed, look at kuwabara and yusuke they are bleeding to death, and you call that unharmed!?"

"yea, they are still alive so they arnt harmed, in my oppinion." she said looking at yusuke and kuwabara.

"thats your oppinion not ours! you harmed them and we cant have that." kurama said.

"well kill me or live with it, either way im happy." and Rain but on the biggest smile she could give(and it wasn't big).

"i cant kill you, you know that." hiei said

"I CAN!" yusuke said pointing his index finger at her, it started to glow but akasha stood in front of Rain to protect her.

"no dont!" kurama said

yusuke shot at the black dragon but she only started to bleed form a little cut in her side.

"akasha you are a stupid dragon but i love you more than life itself so im ganna let you kill him nice and slow, im not cooking tonight so get your fill of blood or you will go hungry tonight." Rain said walking off into the dark forest.

hiei followed her into the forest but he didnt find her so he looked for her in the dark but not ten minits after he found some of her clothes he heard screams and smelt blood and a lot of it.

he ran to the sent kurama and the gang following them. when they got there what they saw was horrifing.

"what the..." yusuke trailed off "LOOK!"