I will present this anonymously given review without further comment, save to state that perhaps you will find it as amusing as I did: you are a fool you have written a crap peice of shit that no one will read you don't make the other do evil things no one will read it then [sic- just in general]
My thanks to those of you whose reviews have proven the third clause incorrect.
HBKShowstopaa: Has anyone every told you your communication style is intrinsically abrasive? Yes, I could have (and arguably should have) made the Majin 18 issue last a great deal longer. Were I attempting to make it last an extremely lengthy period of time, I could have made the emotional and dramatic experience cover something to the effect of five chapters.
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This time when they looked out on the next level, identical to the first, their opponents seemed to teleport in, blocking their path. They were both sufficiently surprised at this battle, for they faced two opponents- perfect copies of themselves. For a long moment neither party spoke.
"Clones, I'm impressed." Goku nodded. "I don't know Babidi's spell for that."
"Are they a problem?"
"They shouldn't be. Clones can't ever capture the inner strength of a person. Do you want to kill them by same type, or cross battle?"
"Cross, just to make things more difficult."
"Fine by me."
They faced off again, Goku against the cloned 18 and 18 against the cloned saiyan. Their opponents dropped into fighting stances identical to their own. As their eyes crackled a second, Goku realized that the clones eyes did not. Smiling, he attacked.
Clone 18was hammered across the room, and came flying back at him. Sliding to the ground, he evaded the first blow. Before she could recover from her attack, he quickly slid around and tripped her up. Jumping to his feet and knocking her across the chamber in one move, Goku followed up by slamming her from behind.
While the clone tried to get a few blows in, Goku found that it was nowhere near as strong as 18 was. Grabbing her wrists on one punch, Goku pulled her toward him the same time his knee came up. The clone's head was slammed back painfully, but Goku continued to hold her wrists. Using all her strength, Clone 18 burst from his grip and fell back. Leaping up, the clone looked weakened already. Powering up, Goku fired a blast that Clone 18 attempted to dodge. It barely nicked her, but then the blast circled around and slammed into her full force. Nothing remained.
At the same time, 18 struck the Clone Goku directly, sending him flying. The clone got to his feet, and then was instantly assailed again. For a second he blocked what was thrown his way, but soon a blow slipped through and then dozens more rained down on him. Jumping backward, the clone fired multiple blasts toward 18, but she deflected them off to the side.
Seeing that it was seriously outclassed, the clone instead fired a Kienzan. 18's hand flew out, and ki suddenly thickened in the air. The disk grinded to a halt and then was sent flying back at the Goku clone, which narrowly avoided it. Firing her machine-gun-style attack again, 18 shredded his shirt and sent him crashing into the wall. Yelling, the Goku clone charged. 18 blocked, and was pushed back a few inches but was otherwise unharmed.
Both jumped back and attacked again. Clone Goku hit 18 across the face directly, but the android didn't even move. The clone gasped and 18 smiled, then attacked. Smashing the Clone Goku painfully, 18 knife-handed him across the room and into the wall, where the crack of bones could be heard.
Goku and 18 glanced at each other, and both of their eyes crackled for a second. The very next moment they ran up to the next level of the dome. Things were pretty dark, the only light came from a few lamps around the room, creating a eerie flickering. Standing in the center of the room was a small dark form.
"I am Doubler, the Prince of Darkness!" the figure spoke in a low, evil voice. "Welcome to my domain. I fear that you shall go no higher than this. Which of you wishes to die first?"
18 stepped forward, and Doubler laughed, an evil laugh.
"You? Well, feel my power!"
As Doubler attacked, 18 leaped over him and landed behind him, a back kick sending him down. He seemed to flow like a liquid and was soon attacking again. Avoiding his blows, barely visible in the dim light, 18 kicked through his guard, sending him flying backward, crashing into the wall. She fired a ki blast, and Doubler fired something strange, a sort of anti-ki that ate hers up and left nothing. Firing more, 18 overcame the nothingness he was throwing her way and sent him flying back.
"Well," he coughed, energy beginning to crackle around him, "you have done well. But I still have tricks up my sleeve. If I touch you, I will drain all of your energy and abilities into myself! There is nothing you can do!"
Launching himself at 18, Doubler saw at the last second that he wasn't going to hit. Ducking low and to the right, 18 let him crash on uselessly. Getting to his feet, he growled, and faced off in the shadows again.
"Good, but can you fight what you cannot see?"
The room was suddenly plunged into darkness as something eclipsed all of the lamps. 18 soon felt what seemed to be claws grabbing a hold of her arm, and the evil laugh sounded throughout the room. Soon, however, the prince discovered that he wasn't getting much energy from his victim.
"Why isn't this working?" he cursed. 18 smiled, though it was invisible in the darkness.
"Do you really think I'd leave myself open to an attack like that? I've considered the possibility of draining long ago and blocked against it."
Before he could distach himself from her arm, 18 hurled him into the wall. Getting up, he laughed again, but his laughter seemed weaker and without substance. His confidence seemed drained.
"Still, you cannot defeat what you cannot see!"
Doubler attacked, only to find a blow already headed his way. Stumbling back, he lowered his ki to almost nothing and hid from 18. She switched to infrared vision and tracked him down, then leaped forward and dealt him a finishing blow. The Prince of Darkness flew across the room and crashed into the wall. The torches were relit and burned to a full blaze, and the body exploded in flames once hit by the light.
They were about to head up to the next level, when Suppopovitch appeared, coming down the stairs to meet them. As he leaped to attack them, both glided out of the way, then dealt him blows from opposite sides. Kicking him, 18 sent him flying, and Goku appeared on the other side, launching a ki blast that sent him back again. Suppopovitch realized with a cold dread that he was completely outclassed, and then 18's hand stopped him short. For an instant he hung in space, then a ki blast shot through him, leaving nothing behind.
Mostly ignoring the slight distraction, they headed up to the next level. Sitting in the center of the floor was a creature unlike any either of them had seen before. Dabura looked up and grinned evilly at them, then got to his feet and looked them both over.
"I am Dabura," he announced, with a deep, powerful voice. "I am the greatest warrior in the entire HFIL. You will cower before me. Turn back, or be destroyed!"
"We've heard this before." 18 yawned. "The last three levels said basically the same thing."
"Do not think to mock me!" Dabura roared, "I will kill you!"
"Not today." Goku stepped forward. "Your fight will be with me."
"My fight will be with both of you, just one at a time instead of both at once. I suppose it just prolongs the fun for me."
"Maybe," Goku nodded. "But are we going to talk, or are we going to fight?"
Dabura instantly jumped for his throat, but Goku rolled backward, avoiding the blow and putting him in perfect position to uppercut his opponent. Falling back, Dabura flew in midair toward him, and Goku just narrowly avoided the attack. They clashed together, Goku successfully avoiding almost everything thrown his way. Dabura fell back, breathing heavily, then powered up.
Energy flowed all around him, bursting out in flames. Attacking, Dabura slammed Goku backward, struck him into the air, elbowed him down, blasted him up, then pummeled him back down to the ground. As the destroyed particles of floor settled again, Goku stood up and smirked. Dabura gaped in astonishment, but a second later the saiyan gave him other things to worried about.
Slammed around the room painfully for a while, Dabura eventually whirled in a circle, knocking Goku off and giving himself a chance to get free. Leaping to a wall, he grabbed a large spear. He tried to hit Goku with it, but the saiyan avoided his every blow, then kicked him in the head. Using the spear like a pole vault, Dabura came back his way, but Goku caught the spear and pulled, using Dabura's own momentum to run him into his fist.
As Dabura fell backward, Goku headbutted him across the room. Dabura was breathing heavily, but then hurled his spear with his full might. It struck Goku on the side of his face, sending his head spinning back. Slowly, Goku turned, revealing his cheek to be completely undamaged. The King of the HFIL gaped in pain as Goku hammered him down so hard he broke through every level to the very bottom.
They quickly turned and went up the next level, where Babidi was waiting for them. The sorcerer jumped and looked surprised when he saw them, but quickly regained his calm. Goku glanced around the room quickly, noticing the large pillar of light, which was beginning to show a solid white circle in the center of it. Also coming to his attention were the energy collectors soaking the world's power and the slowly moving gauge beneath the green pillar of light.
"Well, well, well, do come in," Babidi chuckled. "I see you've beaten the warriors I had in your way. I fear, however, that your path stops here. Because, you see, I cannot allow you to interfere with my plans, and I have special connections on high. Thanks for coming though, you'll be just what I need to get enough energy."
Raising his hands, Babidi chanted, and then purple magic flowed from him and struck both 18 and Goku.
"Fools!" Babidi chortled. "Now I shall take your energy and use it to release the final Evil!"
It was a while later that he noticed that he was getting no energy, the purple waves deflected from both of them harmlessly. Babidi screamed in anger and canceled the spell. Goku allowed his own spell to dissipate as well.
"No! That should have worked! It had to work! Why does this happen to me? Why? Why?"
Just then, Dabura limped from the stairs behind them, barely still living. Drawing in a breath, he launched a blast from his mouth at the backs of the two standing there. This was no ordinary blast, it was one of unusual power, and as soon as it connected with them, they both turned to stone. Coming up to stand beside Babidi, Dabura bowed low, a slight smirk on his face.
"Perfect," Babidi snickered. "They're completely helpless! Victory is mine!"
Again he cast the spell, and this time when it hit Goku the gauge began filling up rapidly.
"This is wonderful," Babidi gloated. "He's like an infinite supply of energy! I'll have more than enough!"
The gauge began filling with startling speed, moving closer to the edge. As it got further along, the green pillar began forming more and more into a green glowing orb that hung in the air. Just as his energy reached the end and Babidi let out a cry of victory, the stone of Goku shattered. Standing there was a normal Goku, who was seething with rage. Firing multiple blasts from his hand, barely flicking his fingers, Goku systematically destroyed all of Babidi's power collectors.
The sorcerer let out a scream of anguish. "So close! 99.5%! Why?"
Dabura fired another blast down at Goku, but this time it had no effect, as Goku had already become immune to the attack.
"Did you think that would work again?" Goku asked, his voice tightly controlled.
"My records say you wouldn't hurt a fly, right?" Babidi asked nervously. Goku scowled.
"You should never have touched 18."
Before they could respond, Goku fired a Solar Flare, blinding both of them. Leaping into the air, Goku began spinning, his legs biting downward like a drill. Dabura hung in space, still unable to see, and Goku span right through him, letting the body fall to the ground. With him dead, the stone 18 began returning to its normal color.
Frantically running, Babidi touched the ball and began chanting a spell. 18 shook herself out and nodded to Goku, but before they could reach the sorcerer, he vanished. Both began searching the planet for where Babidi had gone to, hoping they weren't too late. Fate, it seemed, had an ironic sense of humor.