Rain: this isn't an update, I'm just doing one of my favorite hobbies, responding to flamers!
"your story doesnt make sense and your its damn boring and its too short
and the ending is weird and unrelavent and you are a terrible writer
and i enjoyed NOTHING about that story. please buck up and maybe i will
leave you a better review next time. -critiquekid"
Okay, FIRST of all, (here's my favorite pet peeve) What gives you the write to say I'm a bad writer, when you can't even get your grammar correct? I mean, you don't capitalize the beginnings of your sentences, don't use proper punctuation, and you can't even spell 'doesn't'. Further more, I KNOW that I'm a bad writer compared to a lot of people out there 'cause, hey, I'm only 13. Also, I don't really get the whole "its(it's) damn boring and its too short and the ending is weird and unrelavent" bit. If it's 'boring' and 'wierd' then WHY DID YOU READ IT?! I mean, come ON! Not to mention why does a story have to be relavent? I wrote it because I wanted to write it- not because I wanted to contribute to Ranma1/2 itself. And last, but not least, where do you get off calling yourself critiquekid? What GIVES you the right to critique other peoples work, when we can't even see your own? I've been writing for a little over a year now. I KNOW I'm not the best, not even close! But I don't write to be the best, I write because I like the actual EXPEIRIENCE of writing!
Do you like the actual experience of having every person you flame knowing just how stupid you sound when you 'give your opinion'?
(By the way, the definition of Critique is "A critical review or commentary, especially one dealing with works of art or literature." Which basically means the things you say are supposed to have some bases in the actual story instead of just screaming out a personel opinion in order to be heard)