By Hikaru Hayashi
I am PISSED! It looks like I've got stuff to discuss before we get this chapter started. This is for anonymous reviewer/flamer "Cameron" (You are leaving me no choice, I am now forced to give away spoilers cause of your review...)
For one, Sophia DOES have weaknesses. They are just not very relevant to the first half of the story. They will be introduced later. Sophia's shallowness WAS intentional!! Annie's evil bad guy personality progresses through the story, as she learns from her mistake and comes back even stronger and eviler (and less scatter-brained, I might add). I will, however, fix the things you told me to, so throughout this week, I will be doing a series of edits with Chapters 8, 9, 11, 12, 14, 15, and 16; as well as trying to post a new chapter every day.
Second of all, I originally designed "Kokoro no Seto" as a personal "manga" of sorts (l love to draw). In my hurry to post it as a fic, I did not realize the flaws and shallowness of the plot; which is the reason I'm adding more detail to the aforementioned chapters. I never came up with reasons for details mentioned. Sophia CAN hold her breath for almost an hour. She has magic powers so she can cheat and not have to hold her breath at all. And she's my character so I can do whatever I darn please.
Seto can't swim. I never introduced this into the story because I have at least 5 different plots for "Kokoro no Seto" and this is just one of them. In one plot, he has a childhood accident that leaves him afraid of the water. In this plot, I never figured it out. He can't swim and that's that (and if you didn't notice, neither can Moki).
Third and final, this fic is AU (Alternate Universe). Any and everything Yugi did to help Seto NEVER HAPPENED!!! Seto and Yugi don't even know or care each other exist! Seto can be a little shy if I want him to 'cause it's MY FIC!! I want you to understand that! Seto is not as big of a jerk in this fic, even though I do need to introduce his character change a little more clearly. Seto does NOT fall in love with Sophia because she saved his life!! That will be explained in the edited Chapter 11. I want to get that point out as clearly as possible! He's not going to fall in love with her that easily!! The break up DOES affect their relationship, which I will explain in the edited Chapters 14 and 15.
And I will take out the icons.
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Now, with THAT crap out of the way (and this took a whole page on my computer, thank you very much) let's continue!
Disclaimer note: I do not own Yu-Gi-Oh, but I do own Sophia Ann Carmichael; she's my character and whatever I have her do is because I darn feel like it, thank you very much!!
And another thank you to my anonymous Flamer "Cameron". I did not see the holes in the plot and I will do the best I can to fill in the holes and make you happy, 'cause that's what I do. Just remember the small things before you go flaming me again! (And, just as Annie eventually learns from her mistake, I've learned from mine: NO MORE FLAMES ALLOWED!!!!!!!!!!!!!)
May I remind you: even though she seems like it, Sophia is not perfect, and this chapter proves it! Now let's continue!!
Chapter 17: Argument with Father
Sophia walked through her front door after Seto had dropped her off, just to see her dad, sitting on the couch looking a little upset. "Hey Daddy!" she chirped. "What's up?"
"What the devil took you so long to get home?" her father asked sternly. "Your mother and I were worried about you!"
"Oh, I'm sorry, Daddy," Sophia said. "It's just that—"
"And... !" he said, cutting her off. "I hope I don't see much of that boy hanging around here!"
"Wha...oh! You mean Seto!" Sophia giggled. "Yeah, he was just giving me a ride home! Do you have a problem with that?"
"My problem is that I don't want you getting too attached to him!" Rick shouted at his daughter, causing her to flinch.
Also, at this, Sophia's mother came running out of the kitchen.
Sophia was dumbstruck. "Well, what do you mean, Daddy?" she asked, confused.
"Don't play dumb!" he shouted again. "You know DARN well what I mean! I saw you kissing him! I'm not blind, you know!!"
"Oh...THAT'S what this is about?" Sophia asked, almost amused as she started to walk up to her father. "Daddy, you have nothing to worry about! It was just a good-night kiss. It didn't really mean anything."
Mr. Carmichael folded his arms and looked cross. "Hmph! Sure looked like it meant something to me...!"
Sophia stopped dead in her tracks. "Daddy, what are you saying?"
"I'm saying that I can't let some boy take advantage of you!"
"But he wasn't! Seto was really sweet!"
"Yeah, that's what they all want you to think! Trust me, I've been there! I pulled the same nasty pranks on girls when I was in high school!"
"But, Seto isn't like that!!"
"I DON'T CARE!!" Mr. Carmichael was screaming by now. "I don't want you hanging out with that boy...whatever his name is!"
"His name is Seto Kaiba!" Sophia shouted. She was now crying. [A/N: Her head must hurt from crying a lot that day...]
"I don't care! You're not to even speak to him."
"But we have a lot of the same classes!"
"Then just ignore him..."
"YOU DON'T UNDERSTAND!! YOU NEVER WILL!!!!" Sophia screamed. She ran up the stairs and into her room, slamming the door behind her.
Rick stomped to the stairs and called up, "And you're GROUNDED too!!!"
Mr. Carmichael walked over to a chair and plopped down.
"I don't know, Rick," said his wife. "I think you were too hard on her."
"Jenna, you know as well as I do the nasty stuff teenage boys do to girls Sophi's age," he said. "I just don't want to see anything happen to her."
"I don't know," Mrs. Carmichael sighed. "He seemed like a nice boy!"
"Pfssh! Yeah, they all do..." Mr. Carmichael muttered under his breath as he picked up the remote and turned on the TV.
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End Chapter Seventeen
That's it! The stuff I was gonna put in this chapter I didn't because of my stupid notes to my flamer!! My fingers are tired for now, and I'm still frustrated...and I think my frustration shows in this chapter! As you see, Cameron, if you're reading this, "perfect" girls don't and I mean DO NOT argue with their parents, therefore, Sophia is not perfect! NOW REVIEW, DANGIT!!! Ja ne! ::said with annoyance, yes, I am pissed::
I am PISSED! It looks like I've got stuff to discuss before we get this chapter started. This is for anonymous reviewer/flamer "Cameron" (You are leaving me no choice, I am now forced to give away spoilers cause of your review...)
For one, Sophia DOES have weaknesses. They are just not very relevant to the first half of the story. They will be introduced later. Sophia's shallowness WAS intentional!! Annie's evil bad guy personality progresses through the story, as she learns from her mistake and comes back even stronger and eviler (and less scatter-brained, I might add). I will, however, fix the things you told me to, so throughout this week, I will be doing a series of edits with Chapters 8, 9, 11, 12, 14, 15, and 16; as well as trying to post a new chapter every day.
Second of all, I originally designed "Kokoro no Seto" as a personal "manga" of sorts (l love to draw). In my hurry to post it as a fic, I did not realize the flaws and shallowness of the plot; which is the reason I'm adding more detail to the aforementioned chapters. I never came up with reasons for details mentioned. Sophia CAN hold her breath for almost an hour. She has magic powers so she can cheat and not have to hold her breath at all. And she's my character so I can do whatever I darn please.
Seto can't swim. I never introduced this into the story because I have at least 5 different plots for "Kokoro no Seto" and this is just one of them. In one plot, he has a childhood accident that leaves him afraid of the water. In this plot, I never figured it out. He can't swim and that's that (and if you didn't notice, neither can Moki).
Third and final, this fic is AU (Alternate Universe). Any and everything Yugi did to help Seto NEVER HAPPENED!!! Seto and Yugi don't even know or care each other exist! Seto can be a little shy if I want him to 'cause it's MY FIC!! I want you to understand that! Seto is not as big of a jerk in this fic, even though I do need to introduce his character change a little more clearly. Seto does NOT fall in love with Sophia because she saved his life!! That will be explained in the edited Chapter 11. I want to get that point out as clearly as possible! He's not going to fall in love with her that easily!! The break up DOES affect their relationship, which I will explain in the edited Chapters 14 and 15.
And I will take out the icons.
>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
Now, with THAT crap out of the way (and this took a whole page on my computer, thank you very much) let's continue!
Disclaimer note: I do not own Yu-Gi-Oh, but I do own Sophia Ann Carmichael; she's my character and whatever I have her do is because I darn feel like it, thank you very much!!
And another thank you to my anonymous Flamer "Cameron". I did not see the holes in the plot and I will do the best I can to fill in the holes and make you happy, 'cause that's what I do. Just remember the small things before you go flaming me again! (And, just as Annie eventually learns from her mistake, I've learned from mine: NO MORE FLAMES ALLOWED!!!!!!!!!!!!!)
May I remind you: even though she seems like it, Sophia is not perfect, and this chapter proves it! Now let's continue!!
Chapter 17: Argument with Father
Sophia walked through her front door after Seto had dropped her off, just to see her dad, sitting on the couch looking a little upset. "Hey Daddy!" she chirped. "What's up?"
"What the devil took you so long to get home?" her father asked sternly. "Your mother and I were worried about you!"
"Oh, I'm sorry, Daddy," Sophia said. "It's just that—"
"And... !" he said, cutting her off. "I hope I don't see much of that boy hanging around here!"
"Wha...oh! You mean Seto!" Sophia giggled. "Yeah, he was just giving me a ride home! Do you have a problem with that?"
"My problem is that I don't want you getting too attached to him!" Rick shouted at his daughter, causing her to flinch.
Also, at this, Sophia's mother came running out of the kitchen.
Sophia was dumbstruck. "Well, what do you mean, Daddy?" she asked, confused.
"Don't play dumb!" he shouted again. "You know DARN well what I mean! I saw you kissing him! I'm not blind, you know!!"
"Oh...THAT'S what this is about?" Sophia asked, almost amused as she started to walk up to her father. "Daddy, you have nothing to worry about! It was just a good-night kiss. It didn't really mean anything."
Mr. Carmichael folded his arms and looked cross. "Hmph! Sure looked like it meant something to me...!"
Sophia stopped dead in her tracks. "Daddy, what are you saying?"
"I'm saying that I can't let some boy take advantage of you!"
"But he wasn't! Seto was really sweet!"
"Yeah, that's what they all want you to think! Trust me, I've been there! I pulled the same nasty pranks on girls when I was in high school!"
"But, Seto isn't like that!!"
"I DON'T CARE!!" Mr. Carmichael was screaming by now. "I don't want you hanging out with that boy...whatever his name is!"
"His name is Seto Kaiba!" Sophia shouted. She was now crying. [A/N: Her head must hurt from crying a lot that day...]
"I don't care! You're not to even speak to him."
"But we have a lot of the same classes!"
"Then just ignore him..."
"YOU DON'T UNDERSTAND!! YOU NEVER WILL!!!!" Sophia screamed. She ran up the stairs and into her room, slamming the door behind her.
Rick stomped to the stairs and called up, "And you're GROUNDED too!!!"
Mr. Carmichael walked over to a chair and plopped down.
"I don't know, Rick," said his wife. "I think you were too hard on her."
"Jenna, you know as well as I do the nasty stuff teenage boys do to girls Sophi's age," he said. "I just don't want to see anything happen to her."
"I don't know," Mrs. Carmichael sighed. "He seemed like a nice boy!"
"Pfssh! Yeah, they all do..." Mr. Carmichael muttered under his breath as he picked up the remote and turned on the TV.
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End Chapter Seventeen
That's it! The stuff I was gonna put in this chapter I didn't because of my stupid notes to my flamer!! My fingers are tired for now, and I'm still frustrated...and I think my frustration shows in this chapter! As you see, Cameron, if you're reading this, "perfect" girls don't and I mean DO NOT argue with their parents, therefore, Sophia is not perfect! NOW REVIEW, DANGIT!!! Ja ne! ::said with annoyance, yes, I am pissed::
