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Chapter 2
"Wow Alanna you've changed this summer," said Jonathan looking surprised.
"Really, how so?" asked Alanna in a sly voice.
"Um.well," began Jonathan. But he was interrupted by Gary and Raoul coming over. They too looked at Alanna strangely.
"What?" asked Alanna a bit irritated. Thayet was the next person to join their group.
"Alanna we have so much to catch up on, and.Wow did you have a make over or something," said Thayet. Alanna could feel her cheeks burning hot. She pretended to think that they were all crazy and that she was exactly the same, but she knew that she had changed. She wasn't the skinny little girl she used to be. She really had matured a lot. She grew and her chest area filled out. Her skin was always a pinkish kind of pale, but now it was creamy. She had also layered her red hair slightly, but she didn't think it made much of a difference.
"So Alanna have you heard from Thom?" asked Jonathan.
"Yes he has gotten settled in that boarding school of his," answered Alanna. She really did miss her twin, but he was the studious one and wanted the best school he could find.
The bus let the kids off at school. No one was excited to start school again. Jonathan, Gary, and Raoul went off to see their new lockers leaving Alanna and Thayet alone.
"Alanna this is so exciting. We are finally in high school. We just have to start out everything fresh. And what about Jonathan? He is even hotter this year," said Thayet. Alanna flinched when she heard Thayet mention Jonathan.
"Well I guess he is a little different," mumbled Alanna.
"A little! Well I was too shy last year, but I am going to ask him out while I still have the chance. All the girls in school will be just drooling over him," said Thayet.
"I guess I'm a bit old fashioned, but isn't the boy supposed to ask the girl out," said Alanna.
"You are old fashioned. I'll just flirt a little with him, and then make my move," said Thayet with confidence. Alanna hated how confident Thayet was. All the boys in her class last year were in love with Thayet.
"You know Alanna. You really are a lot prettier this year. You should try flirting with some guys," said Thayet.
"ME! No way. Thayet you ought to know me better by now," said Alanna.
"Suit yourself, but I did see that new student from Australia looking at you on the bus," hinted Thayet.
"As if," was all Alanna could say. She didn't want to admit that she was happy that a guy was actually noticing her. She got her class schedule, and found out that 5 of her classes were with Jonathan. She only had one with Thayet (much to her relief). She met up with Jonathan and went off to English.
"Please students, sit down. My name is Ms. Benning, and I want to get started," said the teacher. "You," she said pointing to Alanna. "Stop talking and pay attention." Alanna quickly sat up straight in her chair and was all ears.
Before she knew it was finally lunch. In science she made friends with a girl named May, and asked May to sit with her friends.
"This is Jonathan, Gary, Raoul, and Thayet," said Alanna introducing her friends to May. "Everyone this is May."
"Half way through the day and I have already spotted some hot girls," said Gary with a wide grin on his face.
"Really," said Jonathan also with a grin.
"She is in algebra with me," said Gary. "Her name is Cinthy. It is short for something. Oh it is a really unique name.what is it? Raoul you were there do you remember? It was Cy something."
"Oh ya. Cythera I think it is," answered Raoul. Alanna was barely paying attention. All she could see was Thayet sitting quite close to Jonathan, she kept repeating to herself that she didn't care. She instead decided to look around at all the new students. Then she noticed a boy sitting alone at the other end of the cafetieria. She hated to see people sitting alone, but this one looked like trouble. He had the whole bad boy thing going for him. Gary saw what she was looking at, and knew his friend really well.
"Don't worry Alanna. That one has some friends. I have one of my
classes with him. I think his name is George," said Gary. He turned back to join the other conversation. If Alanna weren't so busy looking around the cafeteria she could have noticed how much Jonathan was staring at her, but Thayet noticed. She was slightly depressed because she had liked Jonathan for the longest time, and Alanna had never given him a second thought. Thayet also knew that she had always been prettier than Alanna, but now she wasn't so sure. This Alanna wasn't the skinny tomboy
that she went to school with the previous year. Thayet was thinking of what she should do. It was obvious that Jonathan liked Alanna, but was she
ready to step out of the way. She had almost promised herself that she would try to set Alanna up with Jonathan, but then a girl far prettier than
herself walked up to Jonathan. She had beautiful chestnut hair and
seductive green eyes.
"Hi," she said in a syrupy voice. "I'm new here and there is a mistake in my schedule, but I don't know where the office is. Can one of
you escort me?" Jonathan and Gary instantly shot up out of their seat. They clearly both wanted to walk with this girl. Thayet wrinkled her nose in disgust. She instantly hated this girl. This was not her day. This year was supposed
to be great because she finally be with Jonathan and still hold her position has the prettiest girl in class, but then Alanna had changed so suddenly and now this. She looked at Alanna to see her reaction. She also
looked as equally disgusted. Then Thayet saw that Alanna was more
beautiful than the new girl. Partly because the way they dressed. The girl had low cut jeans and a tang top that was a million sizes too small
for her. Alanna also had jeans, but they were usual faded jeans and a
peasant top.
"Oh thank you I'm sure one person is enough," continued the girl.
"Well I think this one with the black hair sat up first." Gary was extremely annoyed. He had always lived in his cousin's shadow.
"By the way my name is Delia Eldorne," said the girl.
"I'm.um. Jonathan," he finally managed. She ringed his arm around his as she was giggling at Jonathan's shyness.
I suck at cliffhangers, but please keep reading. I'll try to continue my
story, but I have to study for my midterms!!!!!! So some of the future
chapters might be short. Please review and tell me how I can make this
story better.
Chapter 2
"Wow Alanna you've changed this summer," said Jonathan looking surprised.
"Really, how so?" asked Alanna in a sly voice.
"Um.well," began Jonathan. But he was interrupted by Gary and Raoul coming over. They too looked at Alanna strangely.
"What?" asked Alanna a bit irritated. Thayet was the next person to join their group.
"Alanna we have so much to catch up on, and.Wow did you have a make over or something," said Thayet. Alanna could feel her cheeks burning hot. She pretended to think that they were all crazy and that she was exactly the same, but she knew that she had changed. She wasn't the skinny little girl she used to be. She really had matured a lot. She grew and her chest area filled out. Her skin was always a pinkish kind of pale, but now it was creamy. She had also layered her red hair slightly, but she didn't think it made much of a difference.
"So Alanna have you heard from Thom?" asked Jonathan.
"Yes he has gotten settled in that boarding school of his," answered Alanna. She really did miss her twin, but he was the studious one and wanted the best school he could find.
The bus let the kids off at school. No one was excited to start school again. Jonathan, Gary, and Raoul went off to see their new lockers leaving Alanna and Thayet alone.
"Alanna this is so exciting. We are finally in high school. We just have to start out everything fresh. And what about Jonathan? He is even hotter this year," said Thayet. Alanna flinched when she heard Thayet mention Jonathan.
"Well I guess he is a little different," mumbled Alanna.
"A little! Well I was too shy last year, but I am going to ask him out while I still have the chance. All the girls in school will be just drooling over him," said Thayet.
"I guess I'm a bit old fashioned, but isn't the boy supposed to ask the girl out," said Alanna.
"You are old fashioned. I'll just flirt a little with him, and then make my move," said Thayet with confidence. Alanna hated how confident Thayet was. All the boys in her class last year were in love with Thayet.
"You know Alanna. You really are a lot prettier this year. You should try flirting with some guys," said Thayet.
"ME! No way. Thayet you ought to know me better by now," said Alanna.
"Suit yourself, but I did see that new student from Australia looking at you on the bus," hinted Thayet.
"As if," was all Alanna could say. She didn't want to admit that she was happy that a guy was actually noticing her. She got her class schedule, and found out that 5 of her classes were with Jonathan. She only had one with Thayet (much to her relief). She met up with Jonathan and went off to English.
"Please students, sit down. My name is Ms. Benning, and I want to get started," said the teacher. "You," she said pointing to Alanna. "Stop talking and pay attention." Alanna quickly sat up straight in her chair and was all ears.
Before she knew it was finally lunch. In science she made friends with a girl named May, and asked May to sit with her friends.
"This is Jonathan, Gary, Raoul, and Thayet," said Alanna introducing her friends to May. "Everyone this is May."
"Half way through the day and I have already spotted some hot girls," said Gary with a wide grin on his face.
"Really," said Jonathan also with a grin.
"She is in algebra with me," said Gary. "Her name is Cinthy. It is short for something. Oh it is a really unique name.what is it? Raoul you were there do you remember? It was Cy something."
"Oh ya. Cythera I think it is," answered Raoul. Alanna was barely paying attention. All she could see was Thayet sitting quite close to Jonathan, she kept repeating to herself that she didn't care. She instead decided to look around at all the new students. Then she noticed a boy sitting alone at the other end of the cafetieria. She hated to see people sitting alone, but this one looked like trouble. He had the whole bad boy thing going for him. Gary saw what she was looking at, and knew his friend really well.
"Don't worry Alanna. That one has some friends. I have one of my
classes with him. I think his name is George," said Gary. He turned back to join the other conversation. If Alanna weren't so busy looking around the cafeteria she could have noticed how much Jonathan was staring at her, but Thayet noticed. She was slightly depressed because she had liked Jonathan for the longest time, and Alanna had never given him a second thought. Thayet also knew that she had always been prettier than Alanna, but now she wasn't so sure. This Alanna wasn't the skinny tomboy
that she went to school with the previous year. Thayet was thinking of what she should do. It was obvious that Jonathan liked Alanna, but was she
ready to step out of the way. She had almost promised herself that she would try to set Alanna up with Jonathan, but then a girl far prettier than
herself walked up to Jonathan. She had beautiful chestnut hair and
seductive green eyes.
"Hi," she said in a syrupy voice. "I'm new here and there is a mistake in my schedule, but I don't know where the office is. Can one of
you escort me?" Jonathan and Gary instantly shot up out of their seat. They clearly both wanted to walk with this girl. Thayet wrinkled her nose in disgust. She instantly hated this girl. This was not her day. This year was supposed
to be great because she finally be with Jonathan and still hold her position has the prettiest girl in class, but then Alanna had changed so suddenly and now this. She looked at Alanna to see her reaction. She also
looked as equally disgusted. Then Thayet saw that Alanna was more
beautiful than the new girl. Partly because the way they dressed. The girl had low cut jeans and a tang top that was a million sizes too small
for her. Alanna also had jeans, but they were usual faded jeans and a
peasant top.
"Oh thank you I'm sure one person is enough," continued the girl.
"Well I think this one with the black hair sat up first." Gary was extremely annoyed. He had always lived in his cousin's shadow.
"By the way my name is Delia Eldorne," said the girl.
"I'm.um. Jonathan," he finally managed. She ringed his arm around his as she was giggling at Jonathan's shyness.
I suck at cliffhangers, but please keep reading. I'll try to continue my
story, but I have to study for my midterms!!!!!! So some of the future
chapters might be short. Please review and tell me how I can make this
story better.
