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The sky was clear and it was a beautiful day. If you where walking through the forest you would see a brook, next to that brook you see a rock. There are trees that surround the area. The grass was green there where all different flowers on the ground. In a clearing, she sat on the rock crying. Tears coming out of her blue eyes with silver flecks in them. Her long silver hair cascading down her back. She wore a dress of pure white. /what did I do to deserve this/ "What did I do wrong, I thought he loved me."
*FLASH BACK*
She ran down the palace steps to the stables. She saddled up her horse quickly and rode into town. She reached her destination (a yellow palace). She tied up her horse and briskly ascended the stairs. She walked down the hall, past the ballroom, and into her lover's chambers. She froze as soon as she entered the room. Edmonyon (her lover) was tangled in the bed with another woman. The couple froze when they saw her. The red head with the green eyes quickly dressed and left the room. Edmonyon looked nervously at her and said, "It's not what you think. She meant nothing. I love you and no other." He tried to approach her and her hand connected with his jaw. "I never want to see you again," she screamed. She fled from the palace (tears in her eyes), got on her horse, and cantered out of town; to the forest. She rode into a clearing and removed her horses' garments. She slapped her horse on the rump and it fled. She removed her shoes and sat on a rock by the brook and started to weep.
*END FLASH BACK* The elf heard a soft crying ahead. He stepped forward to see if he could get a better view to see where it was coming from. He stepped closer and his breath caught in his throat. There sitting on a rock was a girl with long silver hair and pointed ears. He took a closer step. He walked quietly as to not alert the girl. He stepped closer and closer until he was directly behind her. He touched her shoulder. She jumped and was about to fall in but he wrapped his arms around her waist. She started to struggle but he Spoke, Do not be frightened lady. I will not hurt you." The young woman instantly relaxed. "I am going to let you go." He said. Once she was let go she spun around to see who had grabbed her. She was surprised to see a young elf about her age.
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Tell me what u think give me some ideas.
The sky was clear and it was a beautiful day. If you where walking through the forest you would see a brook, next to that brook you see a rock. There are trees that surround the area. The grass was green there where all different flowers on the ground. In a clearing, she sat on the rock crying. Tears coming out of her blue eyes with silver flecks in them. Her long silver hair cascading down her back. She wore a dress of pure white. /what did I do to deserve this/ "What did I do wrong, I thought he loved me."
*FLASH BACK*
She ran down the palace steps to the stables. She saddled up her horse quickly and rode into town. She reached her destination (a yellow palace). She tied up her horse and briskly ascended the stairs. She walked down the hall, past the ballroom, and into her lover's chambers. She froze as soon as she entered the room. Edmonyon (her lover) was tangled in the bed with another woman. The couple froze when they saw her. The red head with the green eyes quickly dressed and left the room. Edmonyon looked nervously at her and said, "It's not what you think. She meant nothing. I love you and no other." He tried to approach her and her hand connected with his jaw. "I never want to see you again," she screamed. She fled from the palace (tears in her eyes), got on her horse, and cantered out of town; to the forest. She rode into a clearing and removed her horses' garments. She slapped her horse on the rump and it fled. She removed her shoes and sat on a rock by the brook and started to weep.
*END FLASH BACK* The elf heard a soft crying ahead. He stepped forward to see if he could get a better view to see where it was coming from. He stepped closer and his breath caught in his throat. There sitting on a rock was a girl with long silver hair and pointed ears. He took a closer step. He walked quietly as to not alert the girl. He stepped closer and closer until he was directly behind her. He touched her shoulder. She jumped and was about to fall in but he wrapped his arms around her waist. She started to struggle but he Spoke, Do not be frightened lady. I will not hurt you." The young woman instantly relaxed. "I am going to let you go." He said. Once she was let go she spun around to see who had grabbed her. She was surprised to see a young elf about her age.
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Tell me what u think give me some ideas.