Thanks for the reviews guys, I plan on taking your advice. For now this is just replying to your comments...
Specifically....
"April Hurst" – thanks for your comments, I really appreciate them, and the compliments. I'm going to fix the whole story eventually(not right away I'm in the middle of marching band season) and I will DEFINITELY take your comments into consideration.
"somebody" – I would appreciate it if you wouldn't rip my opinion into pieces. Honestly, the Bible doesn't tell us how Cain felt after he did it, if he was upset or whatnot. I thought that it was very possible that Cain made a mistake, like we ALL do. Yes, including you, as much as that may surprise you. Many of us do worse every single day of our lives. I'm not sure if you are aware, but ignoring God is a much greater sin. Guess what? Happens all the time. I forgive Cain. I don't hold an enternal grudge against him. Really, considering you don't know the guy, maybe you shouldn't either. I try not to think that my siblings MIGHT kill me, and you know, if they did, I hope that I would be Christian enough to forgive them in the afterlife. Or obviously, I probably wouldn't be going to heaven. Please don't rip my opinion up again. I appreciate critiques on my writing, but not my opinion...
Everyone else...I'm sorry, I don't remember any other specific pen names. But thank you for your comments, and taking time to read my story. As for why did Cain kill Abel, it might have just been a spurge or jealousy...he probably was in a mad state of mind, and he couldn't control himself as well as usual. I see it as he made a mistake, we all do, and I forgive him. I pity him for the anguish he was probably feeling. He killed his brother. He was NOT a monster. He was HUMAN! He made a mistake. Well, anyway, thanks all for your posts, please keep an eye out, I plan to fix this...