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RayD: First review =) PARTY..Youll find out the details later..i couldnt just give out the whole plot on the first chatper, could I? Im glad you enjoyed it otherwise..
Subaru + Tsukasa Forever: Well, ok..I will=) Im glad you enjoyed my story..And Im sorry for the gramer and spelling..Im a lousy typist XD Durld: (Verb) A word in the anciant language of Typo. Means "Curled" in English Oh yeah and..YAY! FIRST review from someone I dont know, PARTY *gets out a BBQ and soda cooler*
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Chapter 2:
I woke up after a good nap. I didn't know what time it was, or how long I had been out, but I guessed it had been awhile since I was pretty tired..And my stomach was grumbling. The first thing I noticed was that Renamon was gone from her spot..The second thing I noticed was that she was sitting on my chest, legs crossed indian style, examining me calmly and carefully...My overshirt was crumpled up next to me, and she had fresh bandages on her. I guess she'd patched herself up...But I wasnt thinking about that just then.
"Hey! Your up" I said, smiling widely "I was worried...You must have had a pretty tough fight with that..Whatever it was. I can only assume it was a digimon"
"A Myotismon...A Virus, vampire digimon.Its attacks are Grisly Wing, Crimson Lightning and Nightmare"
"Right...I KNEW it was a vampire. I wonder why it didnt use any of those attacks on me..."
"Maybe it didnt think you were enough of a threat...Or maybe he wanted enough to be left to drain blood from" She smiled slightly as I gulped, before continuing "But that is in the past...This is the present."
"I couldnt agree more...I would be stupid not too" I laughed..Before realising she wasnt laughing with me...It suddenly clicked "Oh...I suppose your wondering why my hand was....."
She nodded slowly
"Uh...Sorry about that...I couldnt help myself"..Could she blink!?! "I uh..." I was interupted as she lifted her paw, placing it on my head and rubbing slightly.
"Hm..."
I laughed as she closed her eyes, and mocked a careful judging...It felt good., I couldnt deny it...but I tried not to let it show TOO much..Key word is TRIED...I failed miserably. I closed my eyes and enjoyed itvisably..To the point of sighing quietly. I barely stopped myself from protesting when the paw was removed, and opened my eyes to find her looking at me kinda funny...I realised how weird I must have looked and suddenly got very uncomfortable. She seemed to notice, thank goodness, and changed the subject instead of pressing it...
"So what is your name?"
I hit a snag...I REALLY would rather she not know my name..But lying is never a good way to srtart a fiendshp....Or more...SO i settled on something that wasnt a lie, but wasnt an answer, either...
"Uh..I dont like my name..."
"..Allright...Then what would you like to be called?"
"Uh..." I drew a blank...I looked around for something....I spotted a card on the floor..A yugioh card (I like monsters, what can I say?) ..Gradius...It was a weak card, but I liked to have it around because I had its equip card, a big cannon that ignored defense...But this isnt a story about my many lost duals, its about Renamon, so Ill get back on track..."Gradius..Call me Gradius..."
She smiled slightly "Allright, Gradius..."
"...Do you have a name?"
She seemed caught off guard "...Iv...Never been asked that before...I..Dont believe I have one"
"Really?...Well...Uh..hm" I thought...No jokes, allright?..And had a brilliant idea "Ill just call you Rena, then...Is that allright with you?" Ok, so it wasnt brilliant...But this is my story, ok?
"...I dont see why not..."
"Well good..Rena, I officially invite you to stay with me for as long as you like" Pleased with my quick thinking, I...I listened to my stomach let loose a growl that embarrassed me badly..."heh..Um...Rena, would you like something to eat?"
She looked thoughtful. I guess she allready knew enough about me that Id rather she not mention the growl... "I suppose I could use a bite to eat..."
"Well ok, then" I smiled widely "What would you like? Sorry, but Iv never entertained a six foot fox before..."
"Anything is fine with me.."
"Right...Uh..Not that I dont enjoy the attenton but..Youll need to get off for me to make anything.."
She smiled again...Man I loved that smile...And moved.I shifted to get up, and felt something dig into my back..I moved my hand back to the pain, and found it resting on a strange device...It looked..Familiar...But I couldnt be bothered with it right now...I shoved it in my pocket and got up. I stood up, and walked out of my room, Rena close on my heels. Luckily, no one was home yet...I didnt feel like explaining this to anyone yet. I was hit with an after-thought...
"Oh..Rena?"
"Yes?"
"..The bathroom is right there..If you feel like freshening up, feel free..."
"..Maybe thats a good idea...Thank you for asking"
I flashed a smile as winning as I knew how, and she slipped into the bathroom, closing and locking the door...And I let out the air I had been holding...Certain excitements had to be held back with her just being there...It wouldnt do to imagine her wet and soapy..BAD Human...I had just MET her and I was allready letting my animal side take over...I punched myself in the forehead for good measure, feeling the dizziness rush me back to reality...I heard the shower turn on, and, after shivering slightly, walked to the kitchen to make breakfast...I opened my refridgerator...I yanked out everything that looked good...Ham...Eggs..Cheese...Milk...Apple juice...Waffles...Hmm...Nope, thats all. I kicked the refrigerator shut, arms laden, and started up..
I got out two plates, two forks, and two glasses..I put them quickly on the table, then ran by the small pile of food I had left...I grabbed two waffles, turning on the stove as i went by, and plopped them both into the toaster..I opened the bread drawer...Bread! Toast would be good, too..So I put two peices of break in.The stove was nice and ot now, so I put down a frying pan...By the way, and laughing at the fact that Im cooking will be greeted with a hot frying pan to the head...Anyway...I dropped the ham in, grabbing a spatula, and let it cook. I flipped it over after a few minutes, and the waffles and toast sprang up, my hyper-active toaster, as always, firing the toast a good deal farther then it should have. It landed with a thud on the counter..I scooped both pieces onto a plate, then started two more..At the same time, the waffles sprang..Thankfully, they were to heavy to fly, so I retrieved them without incident, and stuck two more peices of bread in...Iv been known to eat entire loaves of bread by toasting the slices one by one...But I didnt have TIME for that. I ran to the fridge, yanked out a bottle of "I Cant believe its not butter"...I can totally believe its not butter..Its to tasty and managable to be butter...
Making breakfast is a two paragraph event...I sprayed the butter on the toast, and shoved both pieces on the plate. The ham was done, so I took it off, replacing it with four eggs, beat into one mess with a little milk. I let that go, and ran to get the four new toast(S?) that sprang up, buttering them, then putting four more in. With the speed and dexterity of a rock, I flipped the mess of an egg over, thanking the powers that be that i got it right for once, and dropped the ham onto it, then sprinkled (dumped...) The cheese on that, and let that go until it melted..Then I, sprinkled salt and pepper, and folded it in half, creating..An Omelette! no applause neccassary...I cut the omelette in half, then grabbed the last few peices of toast in mid-air, buttered them with a vengeance, and put an omelette, a waffle, and a fork each on the plates, rushing it to the table, as I heard the shower turn off, then dashed back to pile all the toast onto a third plate, and sat down..I looked up and saw an old, golden candle on the mantlepeice...And thought, as I think this alot, "What the hell?" I put the candle between the two plates, and lit it with a handy lighter. I then realised that I had left the beverages behind, and still ahd to clean up the packaging from the food..With lightning speed and profiency, I grabbed up the egg and ham packaging, and the "butter", and shoved them unceremoniously tino the refridgerator. Then I grabbed the milk, juice, and cups, bringing them with me, sat them down on the table, and sank into my chair, tired and sweaty as the door opened..SUCCESS! Rena walked into the dining room, looking refreshed and happy, with new bandages...
Before, Rena glowed..Now she shined...I then realised that I was in need of one, too...I got up, and ran past the surprised-looking Rena, giving a small pat as I went, and rushed into the bathroom. I showered faster then I ever have before. I thought I made a sonic boomI didnt pay much attention to detail...I dried off with a towel, and threw it over the one I suppose Rena had used, and nearly ran out without my clothes...I stuck everything on, and rushed for everything I was worth to the table, sitting down and breathing out heavily, sinking in, brushing aside a stray hair, and letting my legs stretch out.
"Thanks for waiting..." I managed...
"Of course...You made it..And I thought you would need help" She smiled at me again, and my heart nearly stopped...
"Oh yeah...Uh theres fruit in this basket here, if you want some..."
"Good...I didnt want to ask..You looked so tired"
"Dont worry about me..Im a trooper..." I tried to put on a cool face, but a massive yawn killed the whole attempt...We talked as we ate...And believe me, being able to call us a we is almost more then i can take...
"So..How did you get here, anyway? Didnt they put up a firewall?"
"..Im not sure..I heard that Myotismon talking about a hole that was made by something....I followed them through to stop them."
"Them?"
"Yes...Myotismon isn't that strong, really...but he had lots of friends...Mummymon, lots of Devimon..More Bakemon then I can count..I took them all out fairly easily, but by that time, I as pretty tired...And transferring to the real world drained me even more...I kept fighting, but he kept moving around, in and out of the mist...He waited until I had used up my energy to start attacking...Then all I could do was dodge..And after a while, I could only block, and then I couldnt do anything...I thought I was done for until you showed up..Though I wish you could have taken him out without me.."
I frowned slightly..She had to remind me..."I tried...Which reminds me! My sword did something funny while I was fighting him..it sorta..glowed"
I took it out, tracing the familiar designs I had put into it myself...When I noticed something ~Wait...I didnt make THIS one~ It was an odd crest of some sort...It looked like a sun...And it seemed to be glowing slightly..I traced it with my finger..It was warm to the touch, and when I finished tracing it, it glowed vbrightly for a moment..And I felt for a moment like nothing could stop me...I shivered as the feeling wound down...I slipped out of conciousness, falling right out of my chair...Darkness consumed me before I could hit the ground
..I had a nightmare...Rena..Poor Rena was chained up...In some dreary dungeon...There was no color, though......Water dripped from the ceiling, down onto her head, down her vulpine face, and off the tip of her nose, dipping to the floor...but there was no sound...I ran forward, and tried to grab the chains,ready to tear them up with my bare hands if need be...But my hand went right through them. I jumped back, startled, and put my hand slowly forward again, this time to her...Again, my hand slipped right through..I felt like a ghost. Then a door clattered open, and a shadowy figure made its way into the chamber. The hairs on the back of my neck stood up...I knew this wasnt good...The figure walked slowly forward. It lifted Renas head, as if looking at a trophy..I instantly didnt like this guy, so I attacked, forgetting my ghost-like state, and crashes right through him, into Rena..And through her, too. I rushed back through the wall, half wanting to be there and half wanting to run.... The thing had put one grisly claw over his head...I was furious..I yelled and cursed, and threatened, but I couldnt even hear myself..But then, the entire room began to waver in and out...Like a TV screen trying to correct itself... Little traces of sound peirced..Then it all snapped into place. the color, the sound, everything...Rena looked up in shock and the figure turned around..I reared back, wanting nothing more then to smash it, but it just stopped me...It clawed at me with the other, the claw seeming to come in slow motion. I closed my eyes.... Then it just..Stopped. Like the film broke...I heard a voice..Or maybe it was several voices.....
"Dont loose your courage..Youll need every ounce you can get!"
Then I woke up, in the arms of a very worried Rena. I grabbed her chest fur like a maniac, pulling her close and hugging her tightly. I shivered and whimpered....So much for keeping courage...I shook myself out of it... I took a deep breath and released my death grip. Rena looked at me, seeming concerned...I was overcome by a burst of emotion, and I hugged her close again. I closed my eyes an buried my face in her shoulder, breathing her scent deeply. She had a mild, spicy scent...In the midst of this outburst, I felt her slowly and hesitatantly put her own paws on my back and squeeze me. I appreciated it greatly...We just sat there for a while...And sometime during this, we fell asleep... ~~~~~~~~~~
....Sorry...had a sudden burst of romantics x_x
Anyway, hope you liked the second chapter..Gnight
RayD: First review =) PARTY..Youll find out the details later..i couldnt just give out the whole plot on the first chatper, could I? Im glad you enjoyed it otherwise..
Subaru + Tsukasa Forever: Well, ok..I will=) Im glad you enjoyed my story..And Im sorry for the gramer and spelling..Im a lousy typist XD Durld: (Verb) A word in the anciant language of Typo. Means "Curled" in English Oh yeah and..YAY! FIRST review from someone I dont know, PARTY *gets out a BBQ and soda cooler*
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Chapter 2:
I woke up after a good nap. I didn't know what time it was, or how long I had been out, but I guessed it had been awhile since I was pretty tired..And my stomach was grumbling. The first thing I noticed was that Renamon was gone from her spot..The second thing I noticed was that she was sitting on my chest, legs crossed indian style, examining me calmly and carefully...My overshirt was crumpled up next to me, and she had fresh bandages on her. I guess she'd patched herself up...But I wasnt thinking about that just then.
"Hey! Your up" I said, smiling widely "I was worried...You must have had a pretty tough fight with that..Whatever it was. I can only assume it was a digimon"
"A Myotismon...A Virus, vampire digimon.Its attacks are Grisly Wing, Crimson Lightning and Nightmare"
"Right...I KNEW it was a vampire. I wonder why it didnt use any of those attacks on me..."
"Maybe it didnt think you were enough of a threat...Or maybe he wanted enough to be left to drain blood from" She smiled slightly as I gulped, before continuing "But that is in the past...This is the present."
"I couldnt agree more...I would be stupid not too" I laughed..Before realising she wasnt laughing with me...It suddenly clicked "Oh...I suppose your wondering why my hand was....."
She nodded slowly
"Uh...Sorry about that...I couldnt help myself"..Could she blink!?! "I uh..." I was interupted as she lifted her paw, placing it on my head and rubbing slightly.
"Hm..."
I laughed as she closed her eyes, and mocked a careful judging...It felt good., I couldnt deny it...but I tried not to let it show TOO much..Key word is TRIED...I failed miserably. I closed my eyes and enjoyed itvisably..To the point of sighing quietly. I barely stopped myself from protesting when the paw was removed, and opened my eyes to find her looking at me kinda funny...I realised how weird I must have looked and suddenly got very uncomfortable. She seemed to notice, thank goodness, and changed the subject instead of pressing it...
"So what is your name?"
I hit a snag...I REALLY would rather she not know my name..But lying is never a good way to srtart a fiendshp....Or more...SO i settled on something that wasnt a lie, but wasnt an answer, either...
"Uh..I dont like my name..."
"..Allright...Then what would you like to be called?"
"Uh..." I drew a blank...I looked around for something....I spotted a card on the floor..A yugioh card (I like monsters, what can I say?) ..Gradius...It was a weak card, but I liked to have it around because I had its equip card, a big cannon that ignored defense...But this isnt a story about my many lost duals, its about Renamon, so Ill get back on track..."Gradius..Call me Gradius..."
She smiled slightly "Allright, Gradius..."
"...Do you have a name?"
She seemed caught off guard "...Iv...Never been asked that before...I..Dont believe I have one"
"Really?...Well...Uh..hm" I thought...No jokes, allright?..And had a brilliant idea "Ill just call you Rena, then...Is that allright with you?" Ok, so it wasnt brilliant...But this is my story, ok?
"...I dont see why not..."
"Well good..Rena, I officially invite you to stay with me for as long as you like" Pleased with my quick thinking, I...I listened to my stomach let loose a growl that embarrassed me badly..."heh..Um...Rena, would you like something to eat?"
She looked thoughtful. I guess she allready knew enough about me that Id rather she not mention the growl... "I suppose I could use a bite to eat..."
"Well ok, then" I smiled widely "What would you like? Sorry, but Iv never entertained a six foot fox before..."
"Anything is fine with me.."
"Right...Uh..Not that I dont enjoy the attenton but..Youll need to get off for me to make anything.."
She smiled again...Man I loved that smile...And moved.I shifted to get up, and felt something dig into my back..I moved my hand back to the pain, and found it resting on a strange device...It looked..Familiar...But I couldnt be bothered with it right now...I shoved it in my pocket and got up. I stood up, and walked out of my room, Rena close on my heels. Luckily, no one was home yet...I didnt feel like explaining this to anyone yet. I was hit with an after-thought...
"Oh..Rena?"
"Yes?"
"..The bathroom is right there..If you feel like freshening up, feel free..."
"..Maybe thats a good idea...Thank you for asking"
I flashed a smile as winning as I knew how, and she slipped into the bathroom, closing and locking the door...And I let out the air I had been holding...Certain excitements had to be held back with her just being there...It wouldnt do to imagine her wet and soapy..BAD Human...I had just MET her and I was allready letting my animal side take over...I punched myself in the forehead for good measure, feeling the dizziness rush me back to reality...I heard the shower turn on, and, after shivering slightly, walked to the kitchen to make breakfast...I opened my refridgerator...I yanked out everything that looked good...Ham...Eggs..Cheese...Milk...Apple juice...Waffles...Hmm...Nope, thats all. I kicked the refrigerator shut, arms laden, and started up..
I got out two plates, two forks, and two glasses..I put them quickly on the table, then ran by the small pile of food I had left...I grabbed two waffles, turning on the stove as i went by, and plopped them both into the toaster..I opened the bread drawer...Bread! Toast would be good, too..So I put two peices of break in.The stove was nice and ot now, so I put down a frying pan...By the way, and laughing at the fact that Im cooking will be greeted with a hot frying pan to the head...Anyway...I dropped the ham in, grabbing a spatula, and let it cook. I flipped it over after a few minutes, and the waffles and toast sprang up, my hyper-active toaster, as always, firing the toast a good deal farther then it should have. It landed with a thud on the counter..I scooped both pieces onto a plate, then started two more..At the same time, the waffles sprang..Thankfully, they were to heavy to fly, so I retrieved them without incident, and stuck two more peices of bread in...Iv been known to eat entire loaves of bread by toasting the slices one by one...But I didnt have TIME for that. I ran to the fridge, yanked out a bottle of "I Cant believe its not butter"...I can totally believe its not butter..Its to tasty and managable to be butter...
Making breakfast is a two paragraph event...I sprayed the butter on the toast, and shoved both pieces on the plate. The ham was done, so I took it off, replacing it with four eggs, beat into one mess with a little milk. I let that go, and ran to get the four new toast(S?) that sprang up, buttering them, then putting four more in. With the speed and dexterity of a rock, I flipped the mess of an egg over, thanking the powers that be that i got it right for once, and dropped the ham onto it, then sprinkled (dumped...) The cheese on that, and let that go until it melted..Then I, sprinkled salt and pepper, and folded it in half, creating..An Omelette! no applause neccassary...I cut the omelette in half, then grabbed the last few peices of toast in mid-air, buttered them with a vengeance, and put an omelette, a waffle, and a fork each on the plates, rushing it to the table, as I heard the shower turn off, then dashed back to pile all the toast onto a third plate, and sat down..I looked up and saw an old, golden candle on the mantlepeice...And thought, as I think this alot, "What the hell?" I put the candle between the two plates, and lit it with a handy lighter. I then realised that I had left the beverages behind, and still ahd to clean up the packaging from the food..With lightning speed and profiency, I grabbed up the egg and ham packaging, and the "butter", and shoved them unceremoniously tino the refridgerator. Then I grabbed the milk, juice, and cups, bringing them with me, sat them down on the table, and sank into my chair, tired and sweaty as the door opened..SUCCESS! Rena walked into the dining room, looking refreshed and happy, with new bandages...
Before, Rena glowed..Now she shined...I then realised that I was in need of one, too...I got up, and ran past the surprised-looking Rena, giving a small pat as I went, and rushed into the bathroom. I showered faster then I ever have before. I thought I made a sonic boomI didnt pay much attention to detail...I dried off with a towel, and threw it over the one I suppose Rena had used, and nearly ran out without my clothes...I stuck everything on, and rushed for everything I was worth to the table, sitting down and breathing out heavily, sinking in, brushing aside a stray hair, and letting my legs stretch out.
"Thanks for waiting..." I managed...
"Of course...You made it..And I thought you would need help" She smiled at me again, and my heart nearly stopped...
"Oh yeah...Uh theres fruit in this basket here, if you want some..."
"Good...I didnt want to ask..You looked so tired"
"Dont worry about me..Im a trooper..." I tried to put on a cool face, but a massive yawn killed the whole attempt...We talked as we ate...And believe me, being able to call us a we is almost more then i can take...
"So..How did you get here, anyway? Didnt they put up a firewall?"
"..Im not sure..I heard that Myotismon talking about a hole that was made by something....I followed them through to stop them."
"Them?"
"Yes...Myotismon isn't that strong, really...but he had lots of friends...Mummymon, lots of Devimon..More Bakemon then I can count..I took them all out fairly easily, but by that time, I as pretty tired...And transferring to the real world drained me even more...I kept fighting, but he kept moving around, in and out of the mist...He waited until I had used up my energy to start attacking...Then all I could do was dodge..And after a while, I could only block, and then I couldnt do anything...I thought I was done for until you showed up..Though I wish you could have taken him out without me.."
I frowned slightly..She had to remind me..."I tried...Which reminds me! My sword did something funny while I was fighting him..it sorta..glowed"
I took it out, tracing the familiar designs I had put into it myself...When I noticed something ~Wait...I didnt make THIS one~ It was an odd crest of some sort...It looked like a sun...And it seemed to be glowing slightly..I traced it with my finger..It was warm to the touch, and when I finished tracing it, it glowed vbrightly for a moment..And I felt for a moment like nothing could stop me...I shivered as the feeling wound down...I slipped out of conciousness, falling right out of my chair...Darkness consumed me before I could hit the ground
..I had a nightmare...Rena..Poor Rena was chained up...In some dreary dungeon...There was no color, though......Water dripped from the ceiling, down onto her head, down her vulpine face, and off the tip of her nose, dipping to the floor...but there was no sound...I ran forward, and tried to grab the chains,ready to tear them up with my bare hands if need be...But my hand went right through them. I jumped back, startled, and put my hand slowly forward again, this time to her...Again, my hand slipped right through..I felt like a ghost. Then a door clattered open, and a shadowy figure made its way into the chamber. The hairs on the back of my neck stood up...I knew this wasnt good...The figure walked slowly forward. It lifted Renas head, as if looking at a trophy..I instantly didnt like this guy, so I attacked, forgetting my ghost-like state, and crashes right through him, into Rena..And through her, too. I rushed back through the wall, half wanting to be there and half wanting to run.... The thing had put one grisly claw over his head...I was furious..I yelled and cursed, and threatened, but I couldnt even hear myself..But then, the entire room began to waver in and out...Like a TV screen trying to correct itself... Little traces of sound peirced..Then it all snapped into place. the color, the sound, everything...Rena looked up in shock and the figure turned around..I reared back, wanting nothing more then to smash it, but it just stopped me...It clawed at me with the other, the claw seeming to come in slow motion. I closed my eyes.... Then it just..Stopped. Like the film broke...I heard a voice..Or maybe it was several voices.....
"Dont loose your courage..Youll need every ounce you can get!"
Then I woke up, in the arms of a very worried Rena. I grabbed her chest fur like a maniac, pulling her close and hugging her tightly. I shivered and whimpered....So much for keeping courage...I shook myself out of it... I took a deep breath and released my death grip. Rena looked at me, seeming concerned...I was overcome by a burst of emotion, and I hugged her close again. I closed my eyes an buried my face in her shoulder, breathing her scent deeply. She had a mild, spicy scent...In the midst of this outburst, I felt her slowly and hesitatantly put her own paws on my back and squeeze me. I appreciated it greatly...We just sat there for a while...And sometime during this, we fell asleep... ~~~~~~~~~~
....Sorry...had a sudden burst of romantics x_x
Anyway, hope you liked the second chapter..Gnight