The long ride.
The drive to Oklahoma was really long. I read most of the time. "You'll
get sick, if you read in a moving car" Rain warned me, but I kept on
reading anyway. Sure enough, I started to feel nauseous. I put the book
down. So now I had nothing to do for the rest of the ride. Jake slept
most of the time. And Rain and I talked about stuff; I asked all the
questions I had on my mind.
"So what are we going to do now? Are you going to get a job or what?" I
asked
"Um, I dunno. I guess so. Let's just worry about settling in for now, k?"
she said smiling. I nodded, but kept the questions coming.
"Do you have any idea what the new house looks like? What kinda of
neighborhood it's in and stuff?"
"Hmmm, no not really, the real estate agent that sold it to us didn't say
much about it. She didn't really know either. She just made some
connections with people in Tulsa and they found us a new home."
"Great." I said bored, I wonder what kind of neighborhood it's in. I hope
it's a nice one. Although our old house wasn't in a perfect neighborhood
either. It was close to the city, the action. My eyes drifted away to the
window. I watched all the houses we passed and after a while it was all
blank. My thoughts drift away once more and I slowly fell asleep.
When I woke up, we had stopped. I think it was a gas station or a
restaurant or something. Neither Rain nor Jake was in the car. I looked
around sleepily for a while. I noticed Rain and Jake approach the car.
They both hopped in.
"Ready for something to eat?" Rain asked me.
I wasn't sure my stomach was still uneasy; I didn't know whether it was
because of the reading or all this excitement. I turned to Jake; he was
happily sitting in the back seat, playing with his toy truck. I turned
back to Rain,
"Sure" I said, "but I have to go to the bathroom first."
We walked over to the gas station that was right near the restaurant. I
went into the ladies room. It smelled heavily of a lady's perfume. I was
already nauseous and the smell only made it worse. There was a huge line
to the bathrooms but I couldn't hold it in. The second someone got out, I
pushed through the crowd, excusing myself. I ran into the stall and shut
the door. I threw up for about a minute or two. Then stopped to catch my
breath. I was breathing heavily and slowly. I felt sick again and threw
up once more. When I was done, I could hear someone calling my name. I
could faintly hear it from all the conversations that were going on between
other people. I recognized the voice. It was Rain's. She knocked on the
door of the stall I was in.
"Open the door, Summer!" she yelled.
I opened the door. She looked at me in a disgusted way. "Oh, my god! Are
you ok?"
"I'm fine, just a little nauseous."
"Come on, lets get you all cleaned up and new clothes to change into." She
slowly lifted me up from the floor and flushed the toilet behind me. I
felt sick again as I moved. I stopped, turned back and ran back to the
toilet, and I threw up again. Rain waited by my side the whole time and
held my long black, silky hair back. When I was done, she helped me walk
over to the sink and helped me wash my face. The cold water felt cool on
my burning face. I felt hot. I dried my face with a bunch of paper towels
and we walked back to the car. "Where's Jake?" I managed to ask.
"In the car waiting" Rain said back. When we got to the car, Rain let go
of me and I almost fell, I felt really weak. She opened the car door and
let Jake out. We walked over to the restaurant. I didn't feel much like
eating anything, and I knew I wouldn't be able to hold anything down
anyway.
I just ordered a glass of water. I took one sip of it before I rested my
head on the cool surface of the table. I felt a soft hand on my forehead.
"Wow, you're burning up. How'd you get so sick?"
"I dunno" I said back and put my head back on the table.
"Jake, eat faster, we have to leave soon." Rain said. I kept on feeling
worse and worse. I didn't know what it was that made me sick. Jake and
Rain got done with their food and we left.
"How much longer is the drive?" I asked Rain, as we got back on the road.
"Hmmm, another 4 hours or so." I groaned. "Why?"
"Too long." I replied.
Ok, that's all for this chapter. I know it wasn't very long, but I have a
party to go to so I had to write this real quick. So anyway, I got some
reviews!
Jen: lol, I didn't want you to read it because I thought it was bad, but
thanx. Keep on reading and reviewing.
Lillia E: Thanx for the suggestions. Yea, I don't like Rain a lot either,
I'm making her kinda similar to my sister and my sister's always mean and
cold to me. I'm not putting Summer in my position or anything, I'm not
really reflecting my life on her, but the people around her are pretty
similar to the people in my life. I do (will) include some of my own
experiences in the story though. About the curtis' and the similarities,
yea, I pretty much wanted them to have similarities, so Summer and Pony
could have something to talk about, something to bring them closer and
stuff. About the spelling and stuff, I'm not a great speller and I wasn't
really born in the U.S., I grew up here but English is really my second
language. (French is first.) So, my grammar isn't that good either. I will
try to make it more readable though. About Jake, I know it was misleading.
I wanted him to sorta turn out like my brother, whose 3, but later I
wanted to make him start kindergarten soon, so I thought 5 would be ok, I
do have an idea of him throwing a tantrum when they move though, I don't
think he'll like the neighborhood much. Also about the poor neighborhood,
I thought about it a lot. Well, here's my explanation for it, Rain wants
to go to collage! And she wants to send Summer to collage too, so she has
to keep most of the savings and since she goes to school she won't have
much free time for a job. She will have one, but not a good one, also I
meant to say that they're not rich rich, but they were able to make the
ends meet and a little extra money for some luxury. But now with no one
supporting them and Rain still in collage, they had to put up with living
in a lousy neighborhood. But I dunno this might not make sense much so I
might change it to them moving into a socy neighborhood but Summer will
hang out with Pony in school and that's how they'll become friends. I
dunno, I guess I mislead people by saying that they were really rich, but
they're not. They just got along real well, but now, with Rain having such
a lousy job, they won't be able to have all these luxury but they will
still make the ends meet. (Also remember Rain's collage tuition isn't
really paid up yet.) Also I was maybe thinking about blaming this on the
real estate person, for selling them a house in a lousy neighborhood. I'll
have to think about this, but I will do my best to clear all this up in the
next chapter. And finally about Kevin, yea, I was thinking about having
him visit during winter break, and by then Pony and Summer could have
something going on, not official but getting there and maybe Kevin will
screw things up. I don't really know. This story was first written, but
then I found that hard to type and some mix-ups so I decided to just go
with the flow. Just write whatever that came into my mind, so I am.
Anyways, I tried to fix stuff in this chap. and make things more clear.
Thanx so much for reviewing and letting me know about my flaws. It's
important to learn from your mistakes so I will try to be clearer about
stuff in the next chap. Keep on reviewing.
sodapop'll-be-mine: Yea, I was thinking about having them move next to the
curtis' but I am kinda having second thoughts, cuz in chap. 1 or 2 (I don't
remember) I made the mistake of saying that Summer and her family were
rich. They really aren't that rich. They just get along fine, like paying
bills and stuff. At least they did when their parents were still alive. I
was thinking about having Summer get a job, because Rain is in school and
she doesn't have a very good job, and they do have to save for her
(Summer's) collage. But notice that Summer is only 14, I'm not really sure
anybody would give her a job, (especially at the Dx, but thanx for the
suggestion) although it might be a small town. I dunno yet, but I will
think about it more. Keep on reviewing.
Breej: Thanx for the suggestions. I will think about her getting a crush
on tow-bit instead of Pony. I was just thinking Pony because they are
basically the same age and they have a lot in common- skipping a grade,
parents and stuff like that. But I will think about it, maybe she could
have a crush on two-bit but later in the story Pony will maybe start liking
her more than a friend. Unfortunately Dally and Johnny are dead in my
story, so sorry! I hated to see Dally die too, but it happened in the real
book and I was having ideas about Pony telling Summer about the whole mess
with the socs and stuff but I really can't do that unless Johnny and Dallas
are dead, I am so sorry! I'm a Dallas lover but it's just they way I
planned things to go I guess. About the paragraph thing, I do have spaces
in my original writing that I type up in my computer but I don't know how
it turns out like that when I post it up, know what I mean? Maybe I should
try double spaces? If you know a way to do it, plz tell me! I am new to
using this and I really can't figure it out! It looks all fine in my word
document but when I post it, it has no new paragraphs! I'm so confused!!!!
Anyway, thanx for the suggestions, I really appreciate it and I will change
it about Pony and Summer. I'm not a Pony lover or anything, I just thought
cuz of their age and similarities and stuff, and they would make a good
couple. But I could have them be friends at first and have summer have a
crush on someone else, how does that sound? Also about Summer getting a
job, I don't know if I will have her get a job yet. One of the reasons,
because she is only 14 so I don't know if anybody would give her a job in
real life. Another reason, it's summer in the story now, but school will
start soon and most of the important events will happen during the school
year, so I was really planning on skimming through the rest of the summer
really quick, but if you guys really want it I could mention somewhere that
maybe, (after she met the gang) soda got her a job at the dx? Anyways I'll
think about it, keep the suggestions coming!
Ponyboysgirl1: I was going for summer having a crush on Pony too but some
people suggested it would be better if it was another person from the gang.
I really don't know what to do now! I was going for pony because he is
the youngest in the gang; therefore his age is closer to Summer's age, and
the rest of the gang is kinda too old for her. Also, they have a lot in
common, like both of their parents have died and the reason I had Summer's
parents die the way they did is partly so the curtis' and Summer would have
some things in common. But that's just what I think, I do need more
suggestions!! I think I might just do a little survey thing to see what
people want. Keep on reviewing.
PLZ, PLZ, PLZ, REVIEW! And I will update soon. Thank you again for those
who reviewed, plz keep the suggestions coming, they really help me decide
on what to do next. Who do you guys think Summer and Rain should go out
with (choices of people from the gang) and/or have a crush on?
The drive to Oklahoma was really long. I read most of the time. "You'll
get sick, if you read in a moving car" Rain warned me, but I kept on
reading anyway. Sure enough, I started to feel nauseous. I put the book
down. So now I had nothing to do for the rest of the ride. Jake slept
most of the time. And Rain and I talked about stuff; I asked all the
questions I had on my mind.
"So what are we going to do now? Are you going to get a job or what?" I
asked
"Um, I dunno. I guess so. Let's just worry about settling in for now, k?"
she said smiling. I nodded, but kept the questions coming.
"Do you have any idea what the new house looks like? What kinda of
neighborhood it's in and stuff?"
"Hmmm, no not really, the real estate agent that sold it to us didn't say
much about it. She didn't really know either. She just made some
connections with people in Tulsa and they found us a new home."
"Great." I said bored, I wonder what kind of neighborhood it's in. I hope
it's a nice one. Although our old house wasn't in a perfect neighborhood
either. It was close to the city, the action. My eyes drifted away to the
window. I watched all the houses we passed and after a while it was all
blank. My thoughts drift away once more and I slowly fell asleep.
When I woke up, we had stopped. I think it was a gas station or a
restaurant or something. Neither Rain nor Jake was in the car. I looked
around sleepily for a while. I noticed Rain and Jake approach the car.
They both hopped in.
"Ready for something to eat?" Rain asked me.
I wasn't sure my stomach was still uneasy; I didn't know whether it was
because of the reading or all this excitement. I turned to Jake; he was
happily sitting in the back seat, playing with his toy truck. I turned
back to Rain,
"Sure" I said, "but I have to go to the bathroom first."
We walked over to the gas station that was right near the restaurant. I
went into the ladies room. It smelled heavily of a lady's perfume. I was
already nauseous and the smell only made it worse. There was a huge line
to the bathrooms but I couldn't hold it in. The second someone got out, I
pushed through the crowd, excusing myself. I ran into the stall and shut
the door. I threw up for about a minute or two. Then stopped to catch my
breath. I was breathing heavily and slowly. I felt sick again and threw
up once more. When I was done, I could hear someone calling my name. I
could faintly hear it from all the conversations that were going on between
other people. I recognized the voice. It was Rain's. She knocked on the
door of the stall I was in.
"Open the door, Summer!" she yelled.
I opened the door. She looked at me in a disgusted way. "Oh, my god! Are
you ok?"
"I'm fine, just a little nauseous."
"Come on, lets get you all cleaned up and new clothes to change into." She
slowly lifted me up from the floor and flushed the toilet behind me. I
felt sick again as I moved. I stopped, turned back and ran back to the
toilet, and I threw up again. Rain waited by my side the whole time and
held my long black, silky hair back. When I was done, she helped me walk
over to the sink and helped me wash my face. The cold water felt cool on
my burning face. I felt hot. I dried my face with a bunch of paper towels
and we walked back to the car. "Where's Jake?" I managed to ask.
"In the car waiting" Rain said back. When we got to the car, Rain let go
of me and I almost fell, I felt really weak. She opened the car door and
let Jake out. We walked over to the restaurant. I didn't feel much like
eating anything, and I knew I wouldn't be able to hold anything down
anyway.
I just ordered a glass of water. I took one sip of it before I rested my
head on the cool surface of the table. I felt a soft hand on my forehead.
"Wow, you're burning up. How'd you get so sick?"
"I dunno" I said back and put my head back on the table.
"Jake, eat faster, we have to leave soon." Rain said. I kept on feeling
worse and worse. I didn't know what it was that made me sick. Jake and
Rain got done with their food and we left.
"How much longer is the drive?" I asked Rain, as we got back on the road.
"Hmmm, another 4 hours or so." I groaned. "Why?"
"Too long." I replied.
Ok, that's all for this chapter. I know it wasn't very long, but I have a
party to go to so I had to write this real quick. So anyway, I got some
reviews!
Jen: lol, I didn't want you to read it because I thought it was bad, but
thanx. Keep on reading and reviewing.
Lillia E: Thanx for the suggestions. Yea, I don't like Rain a lot either,
I'm making her kinda similar to my sister and my sister's always mean and
cold to me. I'm not putting Summer in my position or anything, I'm not
really reflecting my life on her, but the people around her are pretty
similar to the people in my life. I do (will) include some of my own
experiences in the story though. About the curtis' and the similarities,
yea, I pretty much wanted them to have similarities, so Summer and Pony
could have something to talk about, something to bring them closer and
stuff. About the spelling and stuff, I'm not a great speller and I wasn't
really born in the U.S., I grew up here but English is really my second
language. (French is first.) So, my grammar isn't that good either. I will
try to make it more readable though. About Jake, I know it was misleading.
I wanted him to sorta turn out like my brother, whose 3, but later I
wanted to make him start kindergarten soon, so I thought 5 would be ok, I
do have an idea of him throwing a tantrum when they move though, I don't
think he'll like the neighborhood much. Also about the poor neighborhood,
I thought about it a lot. Well, here's my explanation for it, Rain wants
to go to collage! And she wants to send Summer to collage too, so she has
to keep most of the savings and since she goes to school she won't have
much free time for a job. She will have one, but not a good one, also I
meant to say that they're not rich rich, but they were able to make the
ends meet and a little extra money for some luxury. But now with no one
supporting them and Rain still in collage, they had to put up with living
in a lousy neighborhood. But I dunno this might not make sense much so I
might change it to them moving into a socy neighborhood but Summer will
hang out with Pony in school and that's how they'll become friends. I
dunno, I guess I mislead people by saying that they were really rich, but
they're not. They just got along real well, but now, with Rain having such
a lousy job, they won't be able to have all these luxury but they will
still make the ends meet. (Also remember Rain's collage tuition isn't
really paid up yet.) Also I was maybe thinking about blaming this on the
real estate person, for selling them a house in a lousy neighborhood. I'll
have to think about this, but I will do my best to clear all this up in the
next chapter. And finally about Kevin, yea, I was thinking about having
him visit during winter break, and by then Pony and Summer could have
something going on, not official but getting there and maybe Kevin will
screw things up. I don't really know. This story was first written, but
then I found that hard to type and some mix-ups so I decided to just go
with the flow. Just write whatever that came into my mind, so I am.
Anyways, I tried to fix stuff in this chap. and make things more clear.
Thanx so much for reviewing and letting me know about my flaws. It's
important to learn from your mistakes so I will try to be clearer about
stuff in the next chap. Keep on reviewing.
sodapop'll-be-mine: Yea, I was thinking about having them move next to the
curtis' but I am kinda having second thoughts, cuz in chap. 1 or 2 (I don't
remember) I made the mistake of saying that Summer and her family were
rich. They really aren't that rich. They just get along fine, like paying
bills and stuff. At least they did when their parents were still alive. I
was thinking about having Summer get a job, because Rain is in school and
she doesn't have a very good job, and they do have to save for her
(Summer's) collage. But notice that Summer is only 14, I'm not really sure
anybody would give her a job, (especially at the Dx, but thanx for the
suggestion) although it might be a small town. I dunno yet, but I will
think about it more. Keep on reviewing.
Breej: Thanx for the suggestions. I will think about her getting a crush
on tow-bit instead of Pony. I was just thinking Pony because they are
basically the same age and they have a lot in common- skipping a grade,
parents and stuff like that. But I will think about it, maybe she could
have a crush on two-bit but later in the story Pony will maybe start liking
her more than a friend. Unfortunately Dally and Johnny are dead in my
story, so sorry! I hated to see Dally die too, but it happened in the real
book and I was having ideas about Pony telling Summer about the whole mess
with the socs and stuff but I really can't do that unless Johnny and Dallas
are dead, I am so sorry! I'm a Dallas lover but it's just they way I
planned things to go I guess. About the paragraph thing, I do have spaces
in my original writing that I type up in my computer but I don't know how
it turns out like that when I post it up, know what I mean? Maybe I should
try double spaces? If you know a way to do it, plz tell me! I am new to
using this and I really can't figure it out! It looks all fine in my word
document but when I post it, it has no new paragraphs! I'm so confused!!!!
Anyway, thanx for the suggestions, I really appreciate it and I will change
it about Pony and Summer. I'm not a Pony lover or anything, I just thought
cuz of their age and similarities and stuff, and they would make a good
couple. But I could have them be friends at first and have summer have a
crush on someone else, how does that sound? Also about Summer getting a
job, I don't know if I will have her get a job yet. One of the reasons,
because she is only 14 so I don't know if anybody would give her a job in
real life. Another reason, it's summer in the story now, but school will
start soon and most of the important events will happen during the school
year, so I was really planning on skimming through the rest of the summer
really quick, but if you guys really want it I could mention somewhere that
maybe, (after she met the gang) soda got her a job at the dx? Anyways I'll
think about it, keep the suggestions coming!
Ponyboysgirl1: I was going for summer having a crush on Pony too but some
people suggested it would be better if it was another person from the gang.
I really don't know what to do now! I was going for pony because he is
the youngest in the gang; therefore his age is closer to Summer's age, and
the rest of the gang is kinda too old for her. Also, they have a lot in
common, like both of their parents have died and the reason I had Summer's
parents die the way they did is partly so the curtis' and Summer would have
some things in common. But that's just what I think, I do need more
suggestions!! I think I might just do a little survey thing to see what
people want. Keep on reviewing.
PLZ, PLZ, PLZ, REVIEW! And I will update soon. Thank you again for those
who reviewed, plz keep the suggestions coming, they really help me decide
on what to do next. Who do you guys think Summer and Rain should go out
with (choices of people from the gang) and/or have a crush on?