Hey, everybody. This is my first FanFic, so cut me some slack. Actually, this is the first story I've ever written outside of school. I do, however, want some good critiques. I don't own Calvin and Hobbes. This is rated G.
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Calvin and Susie are walking to school on show-and-tell day when Calvin says, "Hey, Susie, guess what I brought for show and tell."
"No, Calvin, I don't want to know."
"Come on... it's really cool," he says, as he pulls a brown paper bag out of his backpack.
"Whatever, you'll probably show me anyway."
"I brought a ball of yarn..."
"So?"
"...made from my toejam collection!"
"Eeew! Get away from me with that thing!"
Calvin chases Susie the rest of the way to school with his 'yarn' ball.
Later that day, during recess, Calvin is playing with himself. Moe, the bully, approaches him.
"Hey, Twinky, whatcha got in that bag?"
"Oh... Moe... it's, umm... string candy."
"Candy? Well, I'll bet you want to share it, don't you?" He snatches the bag from Calvin's hand.
"Sure, Moe, you can have it. In fact, you can eat all of it..."
"Yeah... well... you better beat it before I decide to take your lunch money, too."
As he runs, Calvin mutters to himself. "Whatever you say, Moe."
"Ugh!" Moe says, after taking a bite, "This candy is sick! I'm gonna pound that kid! Now where'd he go!?!"
Of course, by that time, Calvin had run all the way to the other side of the playground. He was safe.
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Right, so like I said, cut me some slack, but give me some good advice.