Note, i changed my paragraphing.. so i think its less bothersome for you. And the way i phrase stuff has changed too. cuz i started playing this Hagaren game and i realised that bacchan is like granny so i changed quite a bit of stuff. hope its better! Review please!
I also changed the storyline quite a bit, so if you don't like it please tell me! And its not so saddenning and all. Yeapx!
'Ahh.. so white.. is this heaven?' Ed thought as the pure white sunlight seeped through his half-opened eyelids.
'Nii-san! You're alive! Oh Nii-san!' Al cried out joyously, bending over the edge of the bed, while holding onto the thin metal rail.
'Al? I'm ALIVE?!' It was Ed's turn to cry out. 'Oh my gosh! Al, Al, Gomen! Is Winry here too? Oh and Pinako bacchan? Gomen! Gomen! The Taisa, Hawkeye, Havoc, Farman, Breda, Fury...' Ed trailed off. Stretching his hands out, Ed made a valiant effort to push himself up, only to end up...
'AAAAHHHHH!! MY BAAACK!'
'Nii-san!'-sweatdrop- 'I forgot to tell you that you had two slip discs, due to the fall.. So now you cant move.. Not for a few more months at least..' Al hurriedly mentioned to his brother.
'Oh, the fall.' Ed remarked thoughtfully, 'Tell me more about it.. What happened after I hit the floor?'
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'Well Nii-san, when I first saw you, I thought you were already dead.. you're eyes... they were so dull.. but I still wanted to hold you in my arms for one last time, so I ran.. ' Al said in a what could be described as tearful for a suit of armour.
'But still I could not make it, and you hit the floor..' -sob sob- 'Then you bounced up from the recoil,' more sobs 'And thankfully, I managed to catch you..' -sniffle-
'Nii-san, you were so limp! I cried for the medics and all, then.. then..' Al paused for a hiccup, which made Ed giggle.
'Ah, Nii-san!' Al said almost angrily that Ed took the matter so lightly. 'You've been bedridden for almost 2 months already!'
'TWO MONTHS!!' Ed screamed, trying yet again to hoist himself up, but falling back down again with a loud thump.
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'Haganeno, you're fine already?' Ed heard the concerned voice of the colonel echoing down the empty passageway.
'NO! IM NOT!!!' Ed screamed back 'AHHH! SO MUCH TIME!!! TWO WHOLE MONTHS!!!' -sound of hair being viciously pulled out of head- 'AHHH!'
'Nii-san, relax, please! Nii-sann!!' Al's panicky voice sounded out.
Edward's door then burst into flames and a different type of scream was heard. Riza made a noise that sounded in between a laugh and a snort.
'Haganeno, I didn't know your voice could go THAT high.' Roy's smug voice sounded out.
'SHUTUP!!'
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'MILK?!' Ed screamed out yet again. 'WHAT KIND OF A GIFT IS THAT?!?!?!'
'Edward-kun, its good for your bones, and you ARE a little to the.. -mumble mumble- side, you know..' Hawkeye explained, while setting the paper carton next to his bed head, while firmly taking the water jug away and emptying it out at the balcony.
'Noooo...' Ed whined. 'Why am I always the poor soul who has to suffer these kinds of torture?'
'Because they think it is for your good, Nii-san. and truly, you are a bit to the short side..' Al said softly
'Alllllll.. how can you do this to me?' Ed said pitifully 'AND WHO ARE YOU CALLING ULTRA-SUPER MINI MICROSCOPIC?!'
'Fullmetal, don't overdo it.' a steady voice entered Ed's ears while a strong hand clapped onto his shoulder.
'Taisa.. you don't understand..' Ed said, face lowered.
'Oh well, then we'll be going!' Roy finished off, sounding pretty eager to leave. Turning sharply on his heel, he then left as a small note slipped from his sleeve.
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'A date.. at 9.30 at the Plaza?' Ed read out. 'Don't tell me its already night?!' Ed wailed. 'Man, life is so damn tough. especially after you tried to kill yourself and fell comatose for two months! Mehh..' Ed grumbled, while he looked at the wall clock that hung not too far from his bed for once.
should i continue or just end the story there? mehhhhx. bad morning today. taah and finally the exams are over. YEAAAAH!