Ok people, this is my first time trying this so go easy on me! I'm new to
the Anime world so I'll do my best to please the people! Any constructive
criticism you can give me would be much appreciated. I know that not all
of my situations are always factually correct, but I must bend several
personalities for the sake of comedy. Now for those of you that can't
stand a little romance, comedy, action, super naturalism and science
fiction all rolled into one.get off of this page right now. If you don't
like my story from the beginning, then please don't just give up on me.
Give me ideas about what you think should happen in the story and I'll try
to work them in.if they're useful and sensible!! Oh and send me reviews!
I feel soooo hyper right now!!!!!!!!! Oh, I'm also too lazy to put
quotation marks around the parts where the characters talk, so all of their
lines are labeled!! All I can tell you about my story for now is that if
you thought you knew drama, well then you don't know just how wrong you
really are!
Chapter 1,
Nightly Encounter!
There was nothing but a dark forest.it was about 1:00 AM and a young girl sat on a log in front of a tiny fire. The fire- light danced about the girls face as the flames licked at the air. Beside the girls feet lay a dog. The animal's eyes were closed in sleep, yet its ears and nose were forever twitching, keeping a check on even the slightest movement in the immediate area. The girl, though wrapped in a black cloak and hunched over, was tall and slender. Her blonde hair, which she usually kept loosely tied back, rustled with the wind. Her layered bangs feathered about her face almost like a frame on a picture. Deep blue were her eyes, like fathomless pools of dark ocean water. Her skin was slightly tan, and something was clutched tight in her hand, though it was hardly visible beneath her cloak. Clad in a long green and beige tunic and bare feet she sat enjoying the cool night air. All of a sudden from somewhere north of where she sat, she heard voices! The dog leapt to its feet, its hair standing on end, and it bared its teeth, but still didn't make a sound.
Far off woman's voice: I knew we shouldn't have come this way! You always get us lost! It's sooo late, and we have absolutely no idea where we are.
Far off man's voice: Oh quit your whining, it's not our fault we're lost. We should've never asked for directions from that old geezer! You really gotta watch out for those old people!
Far off child's voice: I'm really tired, how much further do we have to go tonight?
Far off man's voice #2: Just a bit further, I can see a clearing up ahead, that I can!
At this point the girl had taken out the item from beneath her cloak. It was a huge whip! Just as the people began to near her she heard other voice's coming from the other direction.
Far off girl's voice: Wow it's dark out hear, hey I think I see a light up ahead! Several voices respond: No! Wait, we have no idea what's up there, wait for us!
All of a sudden several things happened at once. Two groups of people came from two opposite directions and were recklessly crashing towards the girl in the clearing. Just as the two groups reached the clearing the girl cracked her whip in the air, snapping off two branches. Each branch landed on the head of one person from each of the two groups. At the sound of the whip the dog barked once and snarled, several girls screamed, and everyone else behind the two people that had gotten knocked out halted in their tracks and looked dumbly on at the scene.
Worried woman's voice: Oh no! Kenshin are you all right?!?!
Kenshin lay on the ground moaning (with the classical swirly anime eyes, heehee!)
Group of people #2: Well, I guess she got what she deserved. Yep, oh hey does anyone feel warm? Duh there's a fire right there! Oh, cool lets go sit down.
At this point the rest of the one group walked toward the fire, leaving the unconscious Botan where she lay. It seemed that everyone had just now noticed the girl for the first time, and even more so the large dog at her side. At first they stood completely still, not sure whether to threaten or greet her. Finally one girl spoke up.
Keiko: Hi! I'm Keiko, nice to meet you. I'm sorry that my friends have been so rude as to intrude upon you without offering some sort of explanation, especially when you already seem to have company. The girl smiled as she looped the whip over her shoulder.
Girl: No, no, you're fine, actually I have no idea who any of you people are. But first I think you should all come sit down and wait until those two wake up, she pointed to Kenshin and Botan.
Everyone helped carry the two over and propped them up against the log by the fire. The dog then immediately lay down and falls asleep. The girl looked around at everyone and spoke.
Girl: You all look quite tired, if you want, you are welcome to spend the night at my house. We can get acquainted in the morning.
The young boy, Yahiko, had started to nod off and was almost asleep. So as the two branch victims came around and were told what was going on they got up to leave. Kaoru went to wake Yahiko because she didn't want to carry him, she said Kenshin still needed to recover (which is not true, Kenshin was fine, after all he did get hit on the head, heehee), and Sano refused to carry him.
Girl: No, stop, she pointed at Kaoru, let me carry him! He is young and needs sleep, so let me get him and everyone follow my lead.
She walked over and gently scooped up Yahiko, as if he were some precious object that would shatter if held the wrong way, and after extinguishing the fire, marched off into the black abyss of the woods.
Ok everyone I guess by now you all know that this is a crossover between Yu- yu and Kenshin, and believe you me, it turns out quite interesting. Now I'm not as strict as some writers on this website, and personally I don't care if you hate my story, I'm just writing it because I like to. So I've got the next chapters ready and some pretty cool stuff is about to go down. (Lets just say that this unknown girl has quite an interesting house with a few twists and turns, her pets aren't always the safest ones either.) So, just give me a few reviews on whether or not you like my fic and I will happily put up the next three chapters as soon as possible! I might just put them up anyway though because I'm sooooooooooooooooooooooo excited about my story!!!!!!!
Chapter 1,
Nightly Encounter!
There was nothing but a dark forest.it was about 1:00 AM and a young girl sat on a log in front of a tiny fire. The fire- light danced about the girls face as the flames licked at the air. Beside the girls feet lay a dog. The animal's eyes were closed in sleep, yet its ears and nose were forever twitching, keeping a check on even the slightest movement in the immediate area. The girl, though wrapped in a black cloak and hunched over, was tall and slender. Her blonde hair, which she usually kept loosely tied back, rustled with the wind. Her layered bangs feathered about her face almost like a frame on a picture. Deep blue were her eyes, like fathomless pools of dark ocean water. Her skin was slightly tan, and something was clutched tight in her hand, though it was hardly visible beneath her cloak. Clad in a long green and beige tunic and bare feet she sat enjoying the cool night air. All of a sudden from somewhere north of where she sat, she heard voices! The dog leapt to its feet, its hair standing on end, and it bared its teeth, but still didn't make a sound.
Far off woman's voice: I knew we shouldn't have come this way! You always get us lost! It's sooo late, and we have absolutely no idea where we are.
Far off man's voice: Oh quit your whining, it's not our fault we're lost. We should've never asked for directions from that old geezer! You really gotta watch out for those old people!
Far off child's voice: I'm really tired, how much further do we have to go tonight?
Far off man's voice #2: Just a bit further, I can see a clearing up ahead, that I can!
At this point the girl had taken out the item from beneath her cloak. It was a huge whip! Just as the people began to near her she heard other voice's coming from the other direction.
Far off girl's voice: Wow it's dark out hear, hey I think I see a light up ahead! Several voices respond: No! Wait, we have no idea what's up there, wait for us!
All of a sudden several things happened at once. Two groups of people came from two opposite directions and were recklessly crashing towards the girl in the clearing. Just as the two groups reached the clearing the girl cracked her whip in the air, snapping off two branches. Each branch landed on the head of one person from each of the two groups. At the sound of the whip the dog barked once and snarled, several girls screamed, and everyone else behind the two people that had gotten knocked out halted in their tracks and looked dumbly on at the scene.
Worried woman's voice: Oh no! Kenshin are you all right?!?!
Kenshin lay on the ground moaning (with the classical swirly anime eyes, heehee!)
Group of people #2: Well, I guess she got what she deserved. Yep, oh hey does anyone feel warm? Duh there's a fire right there! Oh, cool lets go sit down.
At this point the rest of the one group walked toward the fire, leaving the unconscious Botan where she lay. It seemed that everyone had just now noticed the girl for the first time, and even more so the large dog at her side. At first they stood completely still, not sure whether to threaten or greet her. Finally one girl spoke up.
Keiko: Hi! I'm Keiko, nice to meet you. I'm sorry that my friends have been so rude as to intrude upon you without offering some sort of explanation, especially when you already seem to have company. The girl smiled as she looped the whip over her shoulder.
Girl: No, no, you're fine, actually I have no idea who any of you people are. But first I think you should all come sit down and wait until those two wake up, she pointed to Kenshin and Botan.
Everyone helped carry the two over and propped them up against the log by the fire. The dog then immediately lay down and falls asleep. The girl looked around at everyone and spoke.
Girl: You all look quite tired, if you want, you are welcome to spend the night at my house. We can get acquainted in the morning.
The young boy, Yahiko, had started to nod off and was almost asleep. So as the two branch victims came around and were told what was going on they got up to leave. Kaoru went to wake Yahiko because she didn't want to carry him, she said Kenshin still needed to recover (which is not true, Kenshin was fine, after all he did get hit on the head, heehee), and Sano refused to carry him.
Girl: No, stop, she pointed at Kaoru, let me carry him! He is young and needs sleep, so let me get him and everyone follow my lead.
She walked over and gently scooped up Yahiko, as if he were some precious object that would shatter if held the wrong way, and after extinguishing the fire, marched off into the black abyss of the woods.
Ok everyone I guess by now you all know that this is a crossover between Yu- yu and Kenshin, and believe you me, it turns out quite interesting. Now I'm not as strict as some writers on this website, and personally I don't care if you hate my story, I'm just writing it because I like to. So I've got the next chapters ready and some pretty cool stuff is about to go down. (Lets just say that this unknown girl has quite an interesting house with a few twists and turns, her pets aren't always the safest ones either.) So, just give me a few reviews on whether or not you like my fic and I will happily put up the next three chapters as soon as possible! I might just put them up anyway though because I'm sooooooooooooooooooooooo excited about my story!!!!!!!