Kel woke early the next morning. She had forgotten to close her shutters,
and the warm sunlight shone in her eyes in the early hours. She lifted her
head. Jump was lying, sprawled across her feet, the sparrows settled on the
folds of her blanket. She sighed. "I guess there's no getting up yet." She
muttered. Jump growled in his sleep.
An hour later, Kel kicked off the animals. "I'm sorry, I have to get up!" She said to Jump, who whimpered. Kel sighed and picked him up. "You can stay here, don't worry!" She kissed him and placed him in the warm spot where she had lay.
She quickly dressed and went downstairs. She was glad that she didn't have to wear a pages uniform any more. She still remembered how uncomfortable it was in the late spring; the heavy tunic hanging on her shoulders, the breeches sticking both to her and her chair in lessons. She was glad she wore a linen tunic now. It was also more feminine, yellow and bright, and though she didn't like wearing dresses, she still liked people to know she was a girl.
She quietly closed the door behind her, and walked down the hall to the mess hall. When she got there, she saw something she did not expect. The door to the mess hall was open, and she could see Neal sitting with someone. Kel stopped in her tracks. He was sitting with a man, a few years older than Kel herself, with black curly hair, and brilliant blue eyes. She had no idea he had come to the palace. She found herself unable to move.
Dom looked up and saw her standing there. She thought of how silly she must look to him, but she still couldn't move. He smiled at her, said something to Neal, who was facing the other way, and got up.
Kel blushed and looked down. Stone, she thought. She was stone.
She could move now, but now she didn't want to. Dom walked up to her, and Kel smiled at him. She didn't think it was possible, but she still got butterflies in her stomach.
Dom didn't say anything. He turned red and looked at the floor. "Hi" He muttered after a moment.
Kel's mouth fell open. He was nervous too! She thought she was being so silly, thinking her friends wouldn't want to see her, and so far, both the people she had seen had felt the same way. She wanted to talk to him, to catch up, but she didn't want to stand at the door to the mess hall where she knew Neal would soon turn and see her.
"Do you want to go to the stables?" She asked, her voice sounding unnaturally high.
Dom nodded. They walked in silence towards the stables. Kel was almost scared of talking to him, just because she hadn't seen him in so long. She wondered if he was feeling the same way.
It was such a beautiful day that the stables were buzzing. So many knights had come back to the palace in the past few days, that when it was so beautiful, they all wanted to go for a ride.
Kel sent a sudden hatred for all of them. "Shall we go up to the loft?" She said. As soon as she did, she realized that was a bad idea. It was almost too secluded, to away from anything.
But Dom nodded. "Sure." He said, blushing as much as Kel was.
Kel realized how silly she was being. They were only going to talk, to catch up! There was nothing wrong with that. She was stone, she showed nothing.
Kel sighed. It had been such a long time since she had been to the Yamani Islands. She needed to be stone so much when she was at Tagnot, but she still felt it did nothing. She was always sure that people could see through it now.
They climbed up to the loft and sat by the window, where it was more open. "So, Dom, where were you for the war? Did you come home at all?"
He nodded. "I was stationed at Steadfast, and I was on leave a little while after I last saw you, for eight months. I spent a lot of time at parties with my family, because no one else was here. I've told you of them before. The ones where she tries to set me up with different court ladies."
Kel smiled. She knew what he was talking about; she had, on the rare occasion, had to deal with prying relatives talking of her marriage.
"Well, for the first time, it worked."
Kel was not prepared for that. "C-con-g-gratulations." She stuttered and smiled, but inside, she was crying. He couldn't be in love!
"Well, after eight months, I went back to Steadfast, and got injured a year in." He unbuttoned the top of his shirt and pulled it to the side so that Kel could see a white scar on his shoulder. "An arrow."
Kel saw that it had been a serious wound at some point; it was raised and very white, and quite large. "How is that so big?"
He smiled. "Let me finish. I came home for almost two months while my wound healed. After that I went back to Steadfast and promptly got a sword in my shoulder."
Kel almost laughed. "Oh, you poor thing." She said. She was happy that he was okay, but there was one thought still fresh in her head: Dom, in love. With someone else.
"Well, I got stabbed in almost exactly the same place that I got the arrow, and it took almost six months to heal. I'm not sure exactly what it was, but the healer said something about it being magicked, that's why it took so long. Anyway, by this time, it was almost three years in. And Mia- that is the girl I met- and I, well, when I was back the first time, we- we got engaged."
Kel's mouth fell open. She wasn't just crying inside now- she knew the tears were going to come any second. She stood up before it could happen. "You know what, I have to- I have to go- umm, I'll talk to you later." She turned and climbed down the ladder.
She ran back to her room, jogging, to keep herself from crying. She made it to her room before the tears came. It was so unlike her! This was the second time she had cried in two days, she hadn't cried in years before that. She always just put on her Yamani mask, and that was it. She had to go back to the Yamani Islands soon to get it back.
She lay down on her bed and just cried. After a while, there was a knock on the door. She wiped her eyes as well as she could and opened it a crack.
Dom was standing there. "Kel, I was looking all over for you! What's wrong?" He looked worried.
Kel shook her head. "I'm fine, don't worry about me." She tried to close the door, but Dom stuck his foot in before she could, and squeezed his way in.
He smiled weakly. "Sorry, but I know that's not true."
Kel chuckled softly and wiped her eyes. She sat down on the bed. "I guess you're right."
Dom sat down beside her and looked at the floor. "I guess it has something to do with me saying that I was engaged."
Kel looked up at him. "Was?"
Dom nodded. "I was, but when I came back the second time, I got to spend more time with Mia- and I realized I didn't want to marry her. She seemed to relax when she was with me, and I didn't like her when she relaxed. I thought she still seemed conceited and rude, and we ended up not having that much in common."
Kel nodded. She didn't say anything about it, but this time, she was laughing inside.
"I realized I wanted to be with someone who was fun and active, and someone who shared my love of things like jousting and sword fighting and just general not girl stuff." He laughed. "You know what I mean?"
Kel grinned. "I understand exactly."
Dom looked down. He was still nervous, Kel could tell. "Was I way too obvious?" He asked quietly, blushing.
Kel blushed herself. "We'll see, Dom. We'll see." She kissed him quickly on the check and bounced up. She had no idea why she hadn't just kissed him and gotten over with it! "Now, I'm quite hungry, I'm going to have some breakfast."
Before Dom could answer, Kel had bounced out of the room. She slowed as she turned into the next hallway. She had changed so much! When she was having a romance with Cleon so many years before, everything happened so quickly, and in such a flurry of passion. But with Dom, it seemed so much more relaxed.
She grabbed a quick breakfast and went to the practice courts. She thought she had come back to Corus to relax. It turns out, she had less to worry about at war.
She took out her cross bow and practiced shooting. Her first shot was a bulls-eye. As was her second, though her third was a little off centre. She shot her entire quiver. They were all within the centre two circles of the target.
"You're getting worse!" Someone said, making Kel jump.
She turned around. Raoul was leaning on the fence watching her. "My lord, you scared me!" She said. "I should have known you would make your entrance like that. You are a bad man, you know."
Raoul roared. "You still remember that? Mithros, that was what, ten years ago?"
Kel smiled and walked over to him. "Twelve, from when I first said it." It was shocking how much Lord Raoul had changed in six years. True, he still had black eyes that sparked with electricity, and he was still tall and muscular, but there were lines on his face that hadn't been there before, and there were many silver hairs mixed in with the black. He had aged gracefully, and still did not look his years.
He opened his arms. "I'll give you a hug, if you promise to stop calling me 'my lord.'" He said, cocking his head to the side.
Kel smiled. "Of course, my lord." But before he could react and stop her, she had hugged him.
He groaned as she grabbed him in a bear hug. Kel laughed. "How is dear Buri?" She asked.
His smile vanished. "We lost her." He said. Kel put a hand to her mouth and gasped. "It's true he said, lifting his head slightly. "Alanna and I, we were at a banquet yesterday, and I put her down somewhere, and now I can't find her!"
Kel growled. "You will pay for that."
Raoul laughed. "I know, I know. And it's probably horribly inconsiderate of me, because it is equally likely that we are to find a friend dead as alive."
Kel solemnly nodded. They paused for a moment, as if to have a private acknowledgement of the dead. "Well," Raoul said smiling, "why don't we have a tilt, just to make ourselves feel better?"
Kel laughed in disbelief. "With all due respect, my lord, now that I don't have to obey your orders, I won't." She waved and turned up the hill back towards the castle.
Raoul shook his head, jogging to catch up with her. "Have you talked to Dom yet?" He asked in all seriousness.
Kel looked at the ground, trying to conceal a smile. "I guessed as much." Raoul said, smiling. "He thought about you a lot, you know."
Kel looked up. "Really?"
Raoul nodded. "I thought you should know. After he came back from his second injury, it was obvious something was wrong, but it took me a while to find out what it was. I finally wormed it out of him. He told me- now listen carefully to this-" he said, pointing at her sternly. Kel nodded obediently. "he told me that the girl he was to marry was not what he wanted. He wanted a Lady Knight. And Kel-" he added, "he decided this almost three years ago now, if not more."
Kel smiled, still blushing. "What ever happened to the rule of the Own not being able to marry?"
Raoul shrugged. "Rules can be bent. Besides, I made them. Dom is practically a knight, he's as good a fighter as some of them, and just as smart as any. He knows what is best for himself."
Kel smiled. "I really should be going. I heard that others were coming in today, and I haven't even seen Merric yet."
Raoul laughed. "Fine," he said, as Kel walked more quickly away from him, "but you can't run forever! He'll catch up with you sometime, you know!"
Kel turned and walked backwards up to the door. "Not if I keep to steps ahead!"
"Two steps ahead of who?"
Kel almost screamed. Raoul, still on the grass, a bit away, was doubled over, laughing. Kel went bright red. Dom was, or, had been, standing directly behind her. Of course, when she jumped, she had hit him in the nose. "Gods, don't do that!" She said, laughing. "Are you all right?"
He nodded, making faces. "I'll live. Somehow." He added.
"Oh, you will." Kel said. She leaned into his ear. "I know," she whispered, "all of your deepest, darkest secrets."
She pulled back, and as Dom went beet red, she winked and turned to run up the stairs.
Maybe things would be all right.
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I actually really like this chapter. It shows a lot of Kel's emotional weakness, even if it's just her weakness in relationships, if nothing else.
Wow, I am so proud of you guys. I asked for what, five reviews a day? It's been three days, and I have 25 already. You guys rock! Keep this up, and by the time it catches up with my other stories, (chapter wise) it will have, let me see...after sixteen chapters, I should be at about 200 reviews. Sweet, even if I doubt I'll get that many.
Wake-Robin: true, true. Corus is good. Yay no war.
Rowana Silvakisma: What were you expecting, I wonder? I'm glad you think it's original.
Rubber Duck: ah semantics. It doesn't matter that much to my story, so I'm not going to bother changing it.
Legofiance: Thanks... well, here's Dom for you! I'm glad you like my writing. I really hated it on this chapter, it was really sloppy, but I was really happy with the content, so, what are you going to do. It's a double edged sword.
Hydrangea: Thanks! I'm hearing a lot about potential, and I'm liking it!
Lizai: Not completely dialogue free, of course. You would like this chapter, the part with Raoul is entirely dialogue. Nothing else, a lot like my regular writing, which I was trying to get away from. If you like dialogue, you might like my other story, Good Things Come to Those Who Wait. Sorry about the shameless advertising (it's true, I have no shame what so ever), but it's true. It's a Kel/Do story, and it's mostly dialogue. I'm assuming you haven't read it, because your name doesn't look familiar, meaning you probably haven't reviewed (as far as I know).
AJ 4EVA: sure you're welcome.
Rootless Californian: I'm glad you think it's so good... I've had a few complaints that Kel is a bit too emotional, but come on, she's still a girl, and she's still a person! Just tell yourself it's PMS if you don't like it.
ShnazzySpazzy: great name! Thanks, I try to make it realistic....do you notice the lack of immortals? Actually, that's just because I haven't actually read the books in about two years, and I put in characters and places completely by memory from reading the books twice two years ago.
Anon: I'm assuming that means anonymous? I don't know what OOC emans, I don't know what OCs are, I don't know what mawkish means (vaguely), I don't know what stoical means (also vaguely). But other than that, I'm glad you like it. I think?
Karr: Nope. It's actually my fifth, though I have two, I believe, that I haven't put on the computer (one I lost the book it was in...wah!). Two Harry Potter fics, HP and the Second War (finished) and HP and the Rebuilding of the Magical World. I have two other TP fics, Good Things Come to Those Who Wait (though I possibly will change the name to Kraken, but I doubt it...I might have a new story called that...I just love it!), and After the Deed, which I haven't updated in a really long time (oops...it's in my book, so I'm not being creative, just copying, which I haven't been in the mood for in a really long time). WOOT WOOT FOR SHAMELESS ADVERTISING!
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-unolimbo
An hour later, Kel kicked off the animals. "I'm sorry, I have to get up!" She said to Jump, who whimpered. Kel sighed and picked him up. "You can stay here, don't worry!" She kissed him and placed him in the warm spot where she had lay.
She quickly dressed and went downstairs. She was glad that she didn't have to wear a pages uniform any more. She still remembered how uncomfortable it was in the late spring; the heavy tunic hanging on her shoulders, the breeches sticking both to her and her chair in lessons. She was glad she wore a linen tunic now. It was also more feminine, yellow and bright, and though she didn't like wearing dresses, she still liked people to know she was a girl.
She quietly closed the door behind her, and walked down the hall to the mess hall. When she got there, she saw something she did not expect. The door to the mess hall was open, and she could see Neal sitting with someone. Kel stopped in her tracks. He was sitting with a man, a few years older than Kel herself, with black curly hair, and brilliant blue eyes. She had no idea he had come to the palace. She found herself unable to move.
Dom looked up and saw her standing there. She thought of how silly she must look to him, but she still couldn't move. He smiled at her, said something to Neal, who was facing the other way, and got up.
Kel blushed and looked down. Stone, she thought. She was stone.
She could move now, but now she didn't want to. Dom walked up to her, and Kel smiled at him. She didn't think it was possible, but she still got butterflies in her stomach.
Dom didn't say anything. He turned red and looked at the floor. "Hi" He muttered after a moment.
Kel's mouth fell open. He was nervous too! She thought she was being so silly, thinking her friends wouldn't want to see her, and so far, both the people she had seen had felt the same way. She wanted to talk to him, to catch up, but she didn't want to stand at the door to the mess hall where she knew Neal would soon turn and see her.
"Do you want to go to the stables?" She asked, her voice sounding unnaturally high.
Dom nodded. They walked in silence towards the stables. Kel was almost scared of talking to him, just because she hadn't seen him in so long. She wondered if he was feeling the same way.
It was such a beautiful day that the stables were buzzing. So many knights had come back to the palace in the past few days, that when it was so beautiful, they all wanted to go for a ride.
Kel sent a sudden hatred for all of them. "Shall we go up to the loft?" She said. As soon as she did, she realized that was a bad idea. It was almost too secluded, to away from anything.
But Dom nodded. "Sure." He said, blushing as much as Kel was.
Kel realized how silly she was being. They were only going to talk, to catch up! There was nothing wrong with that. She was stone, she showed nothing.
Kel sighed. It had been such a long time since she had been to the Yamani Islands. She needed to be stone so much when she was at Tagnot, but she still felt it did nothing. She was always sure that people could see through it now.
They climbed up to the loft and sat by the window, where it was more open. "So, Dom, where were you for the war? Did you come home at all?"
He nodded. "I was stationed at Steadfast, and I was on leave a little while after I last saw you, for eight months. I spent a lot of time at parties with my family, because no one else was here. I've told you of them before. The ones where she tries to set me up with different court ladies."
Kel smiled. She knew what he was talking about; she had, on the rare occasion, had to deal with prying relatives talking of her marriage.
"Well, for the first time, it worked."
Kel was not prepared for that. "C-con-g-gratulations." She stuttered and smiled, but inside, she was crying. He couldn't be in love!
"Well, after eight months, I went back to Steadfast, and got injured a year in." He unbuttoned the top of his shirt and pulled it to the side so that Kel could see a white scar on his shoulder. "An arrow."
Kel saw that it had been a serious wound at some point; it was raised and very white, and quite large. "How is that so big?"
He smiled. "Let me finish. I came home for almost two months while my wound healed. After that I went back to Steadfast and promptly got a sword in my shoulder."
Kel almost laughed. "Oh, you poor thing." She said. She was happy that he was okay, but there was one thought still fresh in her head: Dom, in love. With someone else.
"Well, I got stabbed in almost exactly the same place that I got the arrow, and it took almost six months to heal. I'm not sure exactly what it was, but the healer said something about it being magicked, that's why it took so long. Anyway, by this time, it was almost three years in. And Mia- that is the girl I met- and I, well, when I was back the first time, we- we got engaged."
Kel's mouth fell open. She wasn't just crying inside now- she knew the tears were going to come any second. She stood up before it could happen. "You know what, I have to- I have to go- umm, I'll talk to you later." She turned and climbed down the ladder.
She ran back to her room, jogging, to keep herself from crying. She made it to her room before the tears came. It was so unlike her! This was the second time she had cried in two days, she hadn't cried in years before that. She always just put on her Yamani mask, and that was it. She had to go back to the Yamani Islands soon to get it back.
She lay down on her bed and just cried. After a while, there was a knock on the door. She wiped her eyes as well as she could and opened it a crack.
Dom was standing there. "Kel, I was looking all over for you! What's wrong?" He looked worried.
Kel shook her head. "I'm fine, don't worry about me." She tried to close the door, but Dom stuck his foot in before she could, and squeezed his way in.
He smiled weakly. "Sorry, but I know that's not true."
Kel chuckled softly and wiped her eyes. She sat down on the bed. "I guess you're right."
Dom sat down beside her and looked at the floor. "I guess it has something to do with me saying that I was engaged."
Kel looked up at him. "Was?"
Dom nodded. "I was, but when I came back the second time, I got to spend more time with Mia- and I realized I didn't want to marry her. She seemed to relax when she was with me, and I didn't like her when she relaxed. I thought she still seemed conceited and rude, and we ended up not having that much in common."
Kel nodded. She didn't say anything about it, but this time, she was laughing inside.
"I realized I wanted to be with someone who was fun and active, and someone who shared my love of things like jousting and sword fighting and just general not girl stuff." He laughed. "You know what I mean?"
Kel grinned. "I understand exactly."
Dom looked down. He was still nervous, Kel could tell. "Was I way too obvious?" He asked quietly, blushing.
Kel blushed herself. "We'll see, Dom. We'll see." She kissed him quickly on the check and bounced up. She had no idea why she hadn't just kissed him and gotten over with it! "Now, I'm quite hungry, I'm going to have some breakfast."
Before Dom could answer, Kel had bounced out of the room. She slowed as she turned into the next hallway. She had changed so much! When she was having a romance with Cleon so many years before, everything happened so quickly, and in such a flurry of passion. But with Dom, it seemed so much more relaxed.
She grabbed a quick breakfast and went to the practice courts. She thought she had come back to Corus to relax. It turns out, she had less to worry about at war.
She took out her cross bow and practiced shooting. Her first shot was a bulls-eye. As was her second, though her third was a little off centre. She shot her entire quiver. They were all within the centre two circles of the target.
"You're getting worse!" Someone said, making Kel jump.
She turned around. Raoul was leaning on the fence watching her. "My lord, you scared me!" She said. "I should have known you would make your entrance like that. You are a bad man, you know."
Raoul roared. "You still remember that? Mithros, that was what, ten years ago?"
Kel smiled and walked over to him. "Twelve, from when I first said it." It was shocking how much Lord Raoul had changed in six years. True, he still had black eyes that sparked with electricity, and he was still tall and muscular, but there were lines on his face that hadn't been there before, and there were many silver hairs mixed in with the black. He had aged gracefully, and still did not look his years.
He opened his arms. "I'll give you a hug, if you promise to stop calling me 'my lord.'" He said, cocking his head to the side.
Kel smiled. "Of course, my lord." But before he could react and stop her, she had hugged him.
He groaned as she grabbed him in a bear hug. Kel laughed. "How is dear Buri?" She asked.
His smile vanished. "We lost her." He said. Kel put a hand to her mouth and gasped. "It's true he said, lifting his head slightly. "Alanna and I, we were at a banquet yesterday, and I put her down somewhere, and now I can't find her!"
Kel growled. "You will pay for that."
Raoul laughed. "I know, I know. And it's probably horribly inconsiderate of me, because it is equally likely that we are to find a friend dead as alive."
Kel solemnly nodded. They paused for a moment, as if to have a private acknowledgement of the dead. "Well," Raoul said smiling, "why don't we have a tilt, just to make ourselves feel better?"
Kel laughed in disbelief. "With all due respect, my lord, now that I don't have to obey your orders, I won't." She waved and turned up the hill back towards the castle.
Raoul shook his head, jogging to catch up with her. "Have you talked to Dom yet?" He asked in all seriousness.
Kel looked at the ground, trying to conceal a smile. "I guessed as much." Raoul said, smiling. "He thought about you a lot, you know."
Kel looked up. "Really?"
Raoul nodded. "I thought you should know. After he came back from his second injury, it was obvious something was wrong, but it took me a while to find out what it was. I finally wormed it out of him. He told me- now listen carefully to this-" he said, pointing at her sternly. Kel nodded obediently. "he told me that the girl he was to marry was not what he wanted. He wanted a Lady Knight. And Kel-" he added, "he decided this almost three years ago now, if not more."
Kel smiled, still blushing. "What ever happened to the rule of the Own not being able to marry?"
Raoul shrugged. "Rules can be bent. Besides, I made them. Dom is practically a knight, he's as good a fighter as some of them, and just as smart as any. He knows what is best for himself."
Kel smiled. "I really should be going. I heard that others were coming in today, and I haven't even seen Merric yet."
Raoul laughed. "Fine," he said, as Kel walked more quickly away from him, "but you can't run forever! He'll catch up with you sometime, you know!"
Kel turned and walked backwards up to the door. "Not if I keep to steps ahead!"
"Two steps ahead of who?"
Kel almost screamed. Raoul, still on the grass, a bit away, was doubled over, laughing. Kel went bright red. Dom was, or, had been, standing directly behind her. Of course, when she jumped, she had hit him in the nose. "Gods, don't do that!" She said, laughing. "Are you all right?"
He nodded, making faces. "I'll live. Somehow." He added.
"Oh, you will." Kel said. She leaned into his ear. "I know," she whispered, "all of your deepest, darkest secrets."
She pulled back, and as Dom went beet red, she winked and turned to run up the stairs.
Maybe things would be all right.
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I actually really like this chapter. It shows a lot of Kel's emotional weakness, even if it's just her weakness in relationships, if nothing else.
Wow, I am so proud of you guys. I asked for what, five reviews a day? It's been three days, and I have 25 already. You guys rock! Keep this up, and by the time it catches up with my other stories, (chapter wise) it will have, let me see...after sixteen chapters, I should be at about 200 reviews. Sweet, even if I doubt I'll get that many.
Wake-Robin: true, true. Corus is good. Yay no war.
Rowana Silvakisma: What were you expecting, I wonder? I'm glad you think it's original.
Rubber Duck: ah semantics. It doesn't matter that much to my story, so I'm not going to bother changing it.
Legofiance: Thanks... well, here's Dom for you! I'm glad you like my writing. I really hated it on this chapter, it was really sloppy, but I was really happy with the content, so, what are you going to do. It's a double edged sword.
Hydrangea: Thanks! I'm hearing a lot about potential, and I'm liking it!
Lizai: Not completely dialogue free, of course. You would like this chapter, the part with Raoul is entirely dialogue. Nothing else, a lot like my regular writing, which I was trying to get away from. If you like dialogue, you might like my other story, Good Things Come to Those Who Wait. Sorry about the shameless advertising (it's true, I have no shame what so ever), but it's true. It's a Kel/Do story, and it's mostly dialogue. I'm assuming you haven't read it, because your name doesn't look familiar, meaning you probably haven't reviewed (as far as I know).
AJ 4EVA: sure you're welcome.
Rootless Californian: I'm glad you think it's so good... I've had a few complaints that Kel is a bit too emotional, but come on, she's still a girl, and she's still a person! Just tell yourself it's PMS if you don't like it.
ShnazzySpazzy: great name! Thanks, I try to make it realistic....do you notice the lack of immortals? Actually, that's just because I haven't actually read the books in about two years, and I put in characters and places completely by memory from reading the books twice two years ago.
Anon: I'm assuming that means anonymous? I don't know what OOC emans, I don't know what OCs are, I don't know what mawkish means (vaguely), I don't know what stoical means (also vaguely). But other than that, I'm glad you like it. I think?
Karr: Nope. It's actually my fifth, though I have two, I believe, that I haven't put on the computer (one I lost the book it was in...wah!). Two Harry Potter fics, HP and the Second War (finished) and HP and the Rebuilding of the Magical World. I have two other TP fics, Good Things Come to Those Who Wait (though I possibly will change the name to Kraken, but I doubt it...I might have a new story called that...I just love it!), and After the Deed, which I haven't updated in a really long time (oops...it's in my book, so I'm not being creative, just copying, which I haven't been in the mood for in a really long time). WOOT WOOT FOR SHAMELESS ADVERTISING!
Miliko01: I can never actually remember what mary sue is, so I don't care that much. Sure I'll read it, but I have a really short attention span, and the font on this site is hard on the eyes, for some reason... so bear with me...it may take a while. Me fail English? That's unpossible! See, I'm not one with the grammer goings on. Woah, I'm going to give up while I'm ahead- err, behind- err, in the middle.
Pinky: Cheesy is good...what exactly is a bold story? I'm glad you thought my story was not drunk. That makes me happy. Hee hee...sober.
Kelly Masbolle: OMG, yes, you were only the first story that I reviewed! I loved that story, I checked back soooooo often, but it was never updated, and I was so so so so sad! Wah, is it still there? Please say it is! Well, anywhoo, I'm glad you like it. Wait wait wait... I know you're the person I'm looking for, but I can't find the story in your thing....wah! help me! Wah! I'm sure it was you! WAHHHHH!
Lady Wolfspeaker: Well, like I said before, she is a girl, and she is a person! You try not crying when you don't see your best friend for six years! Most people I know cry that much after 9 months...
Ossini: I have absolutely no idea what you are talking about. Please help. I'm so lost. Movies? Banging cutlery? The hell? I know this is in response to something I said, but what?
PsychoLioness13: Absolutely...anything for one of my most loyal reviewers...there are quite a few of you now, it makes me happy!
Lady of Masbolle: thanks, I'm glad it does...that's always good.
Ophelia-waterhouse: s'ok, I do the same thing all the time. Just with out the too-witing.
Thanks to everyone, you've all collectively made my day! Sorry I went overboard on the responses...I was having fun!
-unolimbo