Please review, I need feedback on my first serious fic.
Tails painted a thin layer of red on Omega's new weaponry. He had reassembled two BG-15 grenade launchers to fit on Omega's arms, and a flamethrower was mounted on each wrist. Finally, Tails had taken the targeting scope from an SVD Dragunov sniper rifle and supplied it to Omega's new weaponry. Whistling, he walked down the hall to Sonic's bedroom. He was about to knock when he heard voices.
"We'll get to Central Town in two hours if we take the freeway," said Shadow.
"Error. Fastest route is back roads. Must initiate hunt for Eggman as quickly as possible," said Omega in his robotic monotone.
"We won't be noticed on the back roads," said Sonic. "We should go that way. We're not going to take chances about avenging Knuckles."
Avenging Knuckles? Tails sucked in his breath and continued to listen.
"Do you think Tails should know?" asked Shadow, causing Tails to jolt.
"No," said Sonic. "He's still young. Let him be innocent. We'll tell him what happened to Knuckles someday… he can't know."
Tails gasped. Something had happened… not just something. Knuckles had to be dead. It was clear. That was why he hadn't come home.
Tails ran to the garage, sinking as he went. As he reached the motorcycle, he fell to his knees and pitched onto the floor, racked by silent sobs. Knuckles would never see his motorcycle. Knuckles was dead. Dead. Dead. It had to be some horrible joke… a horrible, cruel, demented joke… but it couldn't be. Well, if they wouldn't tell him in the open, they wouldn't let him go with them. Tails was going by himself.
Tails pulled a Beretta from his workbench. Knuckles had given it to him. He placed it in a side compartment on the motorcycle and filled up the gas tank. With a grim look on his face, Tails zoomed into the night.
Sonic stepped into the kitchen, rubbing his eyes. It was Tails turn to cook breakfast, and he had promised Belgian waffles. Therefore, Sonic was a little let down when he saw the kitchen was deserted. A note was on the counter.
Sonic,
Why didn't you tell me? I'm going. You'll call me a man once I'm done with Eggman.
Tails
"Oh no," whispered Sonic. He ran to where Shadow and Omega were staying.
"Switch Omega on, Shadow," said Sonic. "We're going."
"Huh wha-" asked Shadow. "Sonic, it's 7 in the morning!"
"Tails left in the middle of the night. He's going after Eggman."
"WHAT?" shouted Shadow.
"And I can't find Omega's weapons," said Sonic. "Come on, let's get in the car."
They ran to the car garage. Sonic's car was there. They leaped into it. Sonic searched for the keys, which he had left in the ignition. They weren't there.
"He's trying to keep us from following," said Sonic. "Well, if he thinks he's faster than Sonic and Shadow he's got another thing coming!"
They dashed out of the garage, Omega following. Sonic and Shadow were a blur as they moved.
Tails zoomed down the country road, pulling one hand from the handlebar to load his Beretta. It was a good thing, too, as he saw a group of Eggman's robots ahead.
"Please identify yourself," said one. "This road is blocked off." It was about to pull up its gun arm when it found two bullets in it. It collapsed.
Tails brought up the front wheel of the motorcycle, shielding himself from their attacks. He jumped off of it, firing at two robots as the motorcycle crushed two more. The motorcycle was undamaged, having a rock-hard exterior. Tails leaped on it after disposing of the other robots and continued.
Central Town was busy at night. Cars zoomed along the streets, and neon lights glowed in the many nightclubs and casinos. The largest building in town was the Aerodock, a huge parking lot for aircraft. It was dominated by a huge ship, from which Eggman emerged with six robot bodyguards.
"The Master Emerald shall be connected to my defense generator," said Eggman. "When I make my assault on Earth, no one will be able to harm my creation!" He cackled as he stepped off the Aerodock into the city.
"I don't know why I'm doing this," grumbled Shadow. "Tails is the hacker, not me." He was hacking the database of Chateau le Magnifique, the city's most prestigious hotel. After a few minutes, he smiled. "Just as I thought. Dr. Ivo Robotnik has a reservation in the penthouse suite." He smiled again. "Let's go!" They dashed away from the computer terminal, entering the hotel in twenty seconds.
"Excuse me," said Shadow, giving the clerk at the marble desk a sly smile, "but I'm meeting Dr. Robotnik in the penthouse suite. I understand he has a reservation." He waited patiently with Sonic and Omega by his side while the woman checked her computer.
"Yes, he does," she said, snapping her gum. "Give this card to the butler there, and he'll let you in." Shadow accepted the small blue plastic card, and the trio entered an elevator.
As they reached the floor of the penthouse suite, Shadow handed the card to the butler. They were permitted in.
It was a huge suite, with a massive bed, a kitchen, and a glorious view of the city. There was only one thing out of place.
Sonic, without warning, used his Homing Attack to bounce off a wall and reach the ceiling, from which he pulled down Tails.
"What were you thinking?" he shouted in the terrified fox's face. "You ran away. You could have died!"
"You're not my parent!" shouted Tails defiantly. "You're not even as good as a friend! What kind of friend keeps secrets from his friends?"
"It was for your own safety!" said Sonic violently, shaking the fox. "Eggman kills people. If he can kill Knuckles, he can kill you!"
"I'm not a kid anymore!" shouted Tails. "I'm-"
"Well, if it isn't Sonic the Hedgehog!" said Eggman from the doorway, surrounded by robots. "And little Miles Prower? And look- it's my invention Omega and the Ultimate Lifeform!" The evildoer laughed, and then grew serious. "Kill them."
Omega opened fire against the robots. They walked through the explosion as if it didn't exist. But their weapons had little effect on Omega either. He drew their fire while Shadow and Sonic pulled out their weapons and began to fire.
Two robots came for Tails. He flew over them and saw their weak point. The joints of their metal quills were weak. He fired at them, exposing their wiring. The two robots collapsed on the floor, twitching as Tails ripped out sparking circuits.
The next pair of robots charged directly at Sonic and Shadow. Shadow sidestepped the robot, embedding it into the wall while he fired at its weak point as Tails had done. Sonic ran up the wall he was cornered against, landing behind the robot and ripping out its wiring as well.
Omega had grabbed one robots head and crushed it with his hands. The last robot launched a cable across the room, hoping to strike one of the four heroes with the steel cord. Sonic grabbed it as it passed him and tripped the robot with the cable, leaving Tails to rip out its wiring.
Eggman stared open-mouthed at the chaos. With a cry, he ran, the four heroes following him.
Eggman picked up the butler, in his way, and held him as a shield, forcing the heroes to stop firing. With a snicker, Eggman ran into the elevator. Sonic, Shadow and Tails made for the spiral staircase down. They dropped off the railing, falling until Tails flew them to safety. Omega, however, made it into the elevator with Eggman.
The doctor grabbed the ceiling of the elevator using suction gloves and lifted himself over a devastating punch from Omega. He dropped a small grenade onto the floor of the elevator. It exploded, sending Omega falling to the bottom of the elevator shaft…
Suspenseful, eh? Review!