LOOK SMART
Chapter Eight (Part A)
AN: Hi, all! How's everyone doing? Good I hope. Anyway, I'm glad some people like this story but I would really appreciate it if I got some suggestions or criticisms about it. Right now I'm experimenting with how to write the rest of the story. This part of Chapter Eight is pretty short but I think the writing style is more... concrete? I don't know how to describe the difference really. But this time I actually read it over a couple of times and edited it. Anyway, I really need some responses whether they like how this part is written or not. And please don't be too brutal!! I really hope you enjoy it!!
The door shut behind them as Sakura looked into a familiar living room. Li casually walked in and threw his jacket on the sofa as he entered the kitchen.
"Do you want anything to drink?" He asked as he opened the refrigerator door.
"Just water will be fine," she replied. She finally began to move away from the door and walked towards the sofa. She heard Li rumage through his frige as she reexamined his feminine living room. The flowers placed in the center of the coffee table and the pictures scattered all along the walls. Sakura stopped and noticed a picture of four beautiful geishas with a small boy with dirt all over him. A smile spread across her face, her eyes fixated on this boy's adorable grin. She couldn't help but pick the picture up to admire it more closely.
"Aww," she cooed to herself. "Li?!" She called out.
"What's up?" His voice grew louder as he finally emerged from the kitchen with their drinks. He handed Sakura a glass of water as he noticed the small picture frame in her delicate hands.
"The people in this picture, are they your relatives?"
"I would hope so," Li gazed at the picture with a nostalgic expression. "They're my sisters." He finally said taking a sip from his soda.
"Hoe?!" Sakura's eyes grew wide. 'These four beautiful women are his sisters?' she asked herself. He's so vulgar and disrespectful but, his sisters looked graceful and gentle. How could they ever be related, she wondered. "They're you're sisters?!" Her voice uttered in disbelief.
"Hard to believe right?" He took another sip as he walked over to the sofa and plopped down.
"What about him? How is he related to you? Don't tell me he's your little brother!! He's so adorable!" Her face lit with amusement. Li chuckled as he ran his hand through his dark brown locks, which gave him that messy BUT sexy hair look.
"Have I changed that much from when I was a kid?"
"Hoe?!?!" Was all she could say. She glanced at the present day Li then to the one in the photo then back again. "You're so cute in here! What happened to you?"
"Nothing, just grew up I guess." Sakura placed the picture back to its original position. Then, her eyes slowly looked at each picture as she strided along the wall. There were pictures of when they were all young. As she continued all along the room, smiling at each snapshot of a memory, she realized a sudden pattern. As each one of them grew their smiles faded and was replaced with a solemn expression. Could it be that they grew out of taking pictures, or was there something more? The timeline of pictures abrupty ended with a picture of all three of them smiling in front of this very apartment.
Sakura drank from her glass as she returned her attention to Li. He sat on the coach, his light brown eyes fixated on her small and petite figure. She could feel them looking over every part of her body until his eyes met hers. The moment lasted a fraction of a second but seemed to last a lifetime. Sakura averted her eyes from his as she felt her cheeks burn and her heart race. She finished drinking the glass of water.
"So," he began getting off the sofa. He ambled towards her with a determined look on his face. "We should get out of these clothes, shouldn't we?" Sakura took a step back from him until she was pinned against an empty wall, their faces an inch apart.
"W...We should d... do what?" Sakura managed to say in her fluster state of mind.
"Get out of these clothes," he replied. She could feel his breath against her skin. The aroma was of something sweet and pleasant. She desperately tried to swallow the knot in her throat preventing her to say "stop" or "get away from me".
"E...Excuse me?" Her heart pounded wildly as if it were to explode from her chest.
"That's why we came here in the first place." His eyes stared deep into hers as they trailed down to her lips. "Remember what I said earlier?" His face slowly moved closer to hers. "Right now, I think you're exceedingly cute."
Sakura's eyes grew wide, remembering the promise he said minutes ago. She wanted to stop him but her body remained powerless against him. 'What is this I'm feeling?' she questioned herself. It was completely different from what she feels when she sees Eriol. This emotion, this sudden urge seems almost primitive.
She felt his lips on the side of her mouth. There was nothing sensual about it. He took a step back from her.
"You thought I wanted to have sex with you!" Li grinned with satisfaction.
"Eh?" Was all she muster out. Her brows furrowed as she stood there confused.
"When I said we should get out of these clothes you thought I meant we should get naked. Of all people, I didn't expect you to have a dirty mind. All I meant was we should change out of these clothes so we won't be suspicious when we're walking around the city--" He was suddenly cut off by a pain on his head. He groaned as he keeled over.
"Baka!" Sakura screamed with anger. Her sleaves had been rolled up, as proof she had punched him as hard as she could. "Who cared what you meant!"
Sakura conitued to beat poor Li.
AN: So how was it? Good? Bad? Any suggestions? R&R!!!
Chapter Eight (Part A)
AN: Hi, all! How's everyone doing? Good I hope. Anyway, I'm glad some people like this story but I would really appreciate it if I got some suggestions or criticisms about it. Right now I'm experimenting with how to write the rest of the story. This part of Chapter Eight is pretty short but I think the writing style is more... concrete? I don't know how to describe the difference really. But this time I actually read it over a couple of times and edited it. Anyway, I really need some responses whether they like how this part is written or not. And please don't be too brutal!! I really hope you enjoy it!!
The door shut behind them as Sakura looked into a familiar living room. Li casually walked in and threw his jacket on the sofa as he entered the kitchen.
"Do you want anything to drink?" He asked as he opened the refrigerator door.
"Just water will be fine," she replied. She finally began to move away from the door and walked towards the sofa. She heard Li rumage through his frige as she reexamined his feminine living room. The flowers placed in the center of the coffee table and the pictures scattered all along the walls. Sakura stopped and noticed a picture of four beautiful geishas with a small boy with dirt all over him. A smile spread across her face, her eyes fixated on this boy's adorable grin. She couldn't help but pick the picture up to admire it more closely.
"Aww," she cooed to herself. "Li?!" She called out.
"What's up?" His voice grew louder as he finally emerged from the kitchen with their drinks. He handed Sakura a glass of water as he noticed the small picture frame in her delicate hands.
"The people in this picture, are they your relatives?"
"I would hope so," Li gazed at the picture with a nostalgic expression. "They're my sisters." He finally said taking a sip from his soda.
"Hoe?!" Sakura's eyes grew wide. 'These four beautiful women are his sisters?' she asked herself. He's so vulgar and disrespectful but, his sisters looked graceful and gentle. How could they ever be related, she wondered. "They're you're sisters?!" Her voice uttered in disbelief.
"Hard to believe right?" He took another sip as he walked over to the sofa and plopped down.
"What about him? How is he related to you? Don't tell me he's your little brother!! He's so adorable!" Her face lit with amusement. Li chuckled as he ran his hand through his dark brown locks, which gave him that messy BUT sexy hair look.
"Have I changed that much from when I was a kid?"
"Hoe?!?!" Was all she could say. She glanced at the present day Li then to the one in the photo then back again. "You're so cute in here! What happened to you?"
"Nothing, just grew up I guess." Sakura placed the picture back to its original position. Then, her eyes slowly looked at each picture as she strided along the wall. There were pictures of when they were all young. As she continued all along the room, smiling at each snapshot of a memory, she realized a sudden pattern. As each one of them grew their smiles faded and was replaced with a solemn expression. Could it be that they grew out of taking pictures, or was there something more? The timeline of pictures abrupty ended with a picture of all three of them smiling in front of this very apartment.
Sakura drank from her glass as she returned her attention to Li. He sat on the coach, his light brown eyes fixated on her small and petite figure. She could feel them looking over every part of her body until his eyes met hers. The moment lasted a fraction of a second but seemed to last a lifetime. Sakura averted her eyes from his as she felt her cheeks burn and her heart race. She finished drinking the glass of water.
"So," he began getting off the sofa. He ambled towards her with a determined look on his face. "We should get out of these clothes, shouldn't we?" Sakura took a step back from him until she was pinned against an empty wall, their faces an inch apart.
"W...We should d... do what?" Sakura managed to say in her fluster state of mind.
"Get out of these clothes," he replied. She could feel his breath against her skin. The aroma was of something sweet and pleasant. She desperately tried to swallow the knot in her throat preventing her to say "stop" or "get away from me".
"E...Excuse me?" Her heart pounded wildly as if it were to explode from her chest.
"That's why we came here in the first place." His eyes stared deep into hers as they trailed down to her lips. "Remember what I said earlier?" His face slowly moved closer to hers. "Right now, I think you're exceedingly cute."
Sakura's eyes grew wide, remembering the promise he said minutes ago. She wanted to stop him but her body remained powerless against him. 'What is this I'm feeling?' she questioned herself. It was completely different from what she feels when she sees Eriol. This emotion, this sudden urge seems almost primitive.
She felt his lips on the side of her mouth. There was nothing sensual about it. He took a step back from her.
"You thought I wanted to have sex with you!" Li grinned with satisfaction.
"Eh?" Was all she muster out. Her brows furrowed as she stood there confused.
"When I said we should get out of these clothes you thought I meant we should get naked. Of all people, I didn't expect you to have a dirty mind. All I meant was we should change out of these clothes so we won't be suspicious when we're walking around the city--" He was suddenly cut off by a pain on his head. He groaned as he keeled over.
"Baka!" Sakura screamed with anger. Her sleaves had been rolled up, as proof she had punched him as hard as she could. "Who cared what you meant!"
Sakura conitued to beat poor Li.
AN: So how was it? Good? Bad? Any suggestions? R&R!!!