Now now. The last time I wrote anything for this fic was a long time ago... so I'm thinking of reediting it all , You see, my English improved and well... since I feel that I need to do my best, I can't let this fic out like this. I'll re-write it and in a few weeks it'll be all better. Thanks to all of you who reviewed it, I'll try and add more action as some of you asked ;)
Oh and one more thing, I feel like I need to answer to a review:
Disgruntled Reader 2004-07-19
You have all of the character's portrayals entirely incorrect. Frankly, I think you should stick to writing about things you might have more knowledge about as opposed to that of whish you have only a minimal understanding of. Furthermore, I think you should stick to writing in your native tongue of Japanese or whatever it is. Your French is pretty good in the bits when Helena is participating in the dialog but otherwise your English is pretty well pathetic and rather elementary. Believe me when I say that I know what I'm talking about. I'm a professional and published author.
Okay now first, at the time, I didn't own the DoA3 or DoAX games, I rented it a couple of times and that's it, so excuse my different interpretation of the characters, will you? Second, my native tongue is French and I was 16 FOR CHRIST'S SAKE when I wrote this, Mr. professional and published author. Now do you think that as a 16 years old French girl you really would've done better? Thanks for the total bashing and blasting but I've seen fics far more sucky than this one.
Oh and one more thing, I feel like I need to answer to a review:
Disgruntled Reader 2004-07-19
You have all of the character's portrayals entirely incorrect. Frankly, I think you should stick to writing about things you might have more knowledge about as opposed to that of whish you have only a minimal understanding of. Furthermore, I think you should stick to writing in your native tongue of Japanese or whatever it is. Your French is pretty good in the bits when Helena is participating in the dialog but otherwise your English is pretty well pathetic and rather elementary. Believe me when I say that I know what I'm talking about. I'm a professional and published author.
Okay now first, at the time, I didn't own the DoA3 or DoAX games, I rented it a couple of times and that's it, so excuse my different interpretation of the characters, will you? Second, my native tongue is French and I was 16 FOR CHRIST'S SAKE when I wrote this, Mr. professional and published author. Now do you think that as a 16 years old French girl you really would've done better? Thanks for the total bashing and blasting but I've seen fics far more sucky than this one.