Holla! I'm soooo happy that I got three reviews for my story on the first 24 hours it was posted. Here are the people:
Bacaboy-33 - It's ok that you deleted the story. Just give other people more time to see your material next time k? Oh yeah, I'll put Kish in the story just for you!(it's 4 u and my friend, Stephanie, really, but hey!)
Nibzo - Once again, I am honored someone who inspired me was the first person who reviewed my story. GIFTS GALORE FOR U FOR CHRISTMAS!
- And -
Roserosa - your review was short and sweet. Thank you for taking your time to read my story.
And thanks to anyone who reviewed
after these people. Sorry I can't mention you guys, but I get the
document ready first at home. Then I post it using the computer at
the library. I can't post chapters at home 'cause
a.) My PC is
soooo slow that I have to log in every time I make a review or
chapter - and -
b.) I only have 20 hours of Internet a month at
home.
As you know from the first chapter, Zakuro is pushed to the basement by accident; you also know Ichigo goes to Ryou's room with him. Sooooo, I'll focus the chapter on Zakuro this time. Sorry, but Lettuce and Zakuro are my fave girl characters in TMM.If you like the story but want Ichigo&Ryou, just skip this and wait for the 3rd chapter, which I'll go to work on after this. Here's the second chapter.
Chapter 2 - Model and Moron
"Oh, what if she says no?" thought Keiichiro. He was in the basement, pacing back and forth. "After all ", he continued, "She's a famous model. I'm just a young scientist's right-hand man and owner of Café Mew Mew". Then he said, " I'll ask her tonight. Yeah, that's right I am!" with a big man's voice. "Ask who what?" said a voice from behind.
Keiichiro turned around. "Oh, uh, hi, Zakuro!" he said nervously, " What are you doing here?" Zakuro quickly answered, "Just when I was going to the bathroom, Lettuce slipped and pushed me here by accident. I'm fine though ", she said, " Heh, good thing the stairs are only 6 steps high,"
Keiichiro wasn't really paying attention. He was too busy looking at her body. "Wow!", he thought, "Aw, come on, moron. Don't just stare, ask her!". "So, uh", she said shyly, "Just out of curiosity, what are going to ask this girl?". At this time, Zakuro and Keiichiro were both blushing slightly.
The café owner finally got his guts. "Um". Keiichiro knells on one knee and takes the model's hand as if he's proposing to her. "Zakuro, will you be my girlfriend?", he asks. Then he kisses her hand.
She couldn't believe what she just heard! True, she had a crush on him, but this was too sudden. She wanted to flirt with him a lot before a relationship. Seeing his mature face, she said, "Yes, I will!". Right after that, Zakuro started crying.
Keiichiro stood up and said, " Zakuro, what's wrong?" –sniff- " It's just that I was alone until I Ichigo and the others. Now you're my boyfriend -sniff- the most honest, handsome -sniff- man I ever met.
After hearing this, Keiichiro hugged her and wiped her tears away. Zakuro looked up. There was a little murmur coming from her boyfriend's mouth. She heard exactly what he said.
"With every tear that rolls down your face today, a care is taken away". This, to her, was true. Her fame and responsibility as a mew mew was slowly being forgotten for only that moment. All she wanted right now was Keiichiro. Zakuro's tears were gone and now they were in a lip lock with her still in his arms.
I had more to this, but, to me, it sucks. Sorry I'm not adding Ichigo&Ryou, but I'm sleepy and want to go to bed. READ AND REVIEW!
