Reviews:

Always Together

Cadi Jules

Y'know, when two OCs in two different stories have the same last name, it's usually a signal that the stories are related. This? Not so much. It's more like you really loved the last name DuBaer (whose is it? Yours? Best friend's?) and wanted to reuse it in a marginally less crappy fic than the last.

wince I echo the cries of previous reviewers: Get thee to a beta, and fast.

Me: I read the last name DuBaer in a book I read and did really like it. currently working on the beta issue.

Crossbow

Another super-powered witch? With names borrowed from "The Princess Diaries"? Is this a joke?

OK, assuming you are not a troll, here is my feedback: Your English is extremely poor, to the point where it's hard to even tell what you're trying to say. I suggest that you read more. A lot more. And real books, not fan fiction. And if you want to write more, please, please, please use spell-check and get a beta-reader.

Me: No it's not a joke. When I wrote this I had just finished watching the Princess Diaries movie. No I am not a troll. I am an American who can speak and type perfectly well English. I do read alot. I go through three 200 page books a week. I've read Romeo and Juliet and am currently reading Macbeth. I read the fifth Harry Potter book in a week. I do read fanfiction but not alot. I do use a a spell checker and am currently working on getting a beta. Thank you very Much! If you don't like the fanfic don't read it! I'm not forcing anyone to read it!

Isis's Magick

LandOverWater

twitches Please, God, let it be a troll... Please oh please let it be a troll...

I just can't take this. No, Sir.

SPORKITTYSPORKSPORK

Excuse me while I go gouge out my eyeballs.

Me: Thanks!

LemurPirate

WHAT.

Tell me this is a joke.

Please.

Tell me someone couldn't actually write something this God-awful.

Also, tell me why someone from Egypt has a French last name. Among other things.

Faith in humanity... slipping away...

Me: I never realised the last name was French. like I said before I read the name in a book and i likes it.

Esperanza Fuega

You need a beta-reader. Badly. Really. I'm not trying to hurt your feelings, and this isn't a flame, it's a constructive review. But the italics/underlined/bold thing needs to curl up and die in a hole somewhere. I can help you make this an interesting read, I think. Please email me at esperanzafuega at gmail dot com and I'll help you with your story.

Yours in Fic,
Esperanza Fuega

Me: Thank you for the constructive review and thank you for considering my feelings and for the offer.

rachel

Simply abysmal. Why is this fic all in italic, bolded and underlined? Why didn't you check your spelling, capitolization and punctuation? Why are you inflicting this dreadful Mary-Sue on Harry Potter and his fandom?

Sigh Why is all the rum gone?

Me: I had it italic, bolded and underlined on my PC I never reaslised it would turn out that way on

I did check my capitalization and punctuation. I or my PC must have missed some. Whats a Mary-Sue? I don't know why all the rum is gone but i could possibly use some right now.

DiZZylitIouS

uhh...kinda hard to read with the text...

Me: just took care of the text.

crossbow

This is almost impossible to read. Why do you have the entire text in bold, in italics, and underlined?

Me: read previos reviews for answers.

Luna-Tunafish

This is kinda intresting and pretty good, but it is really hard to read. Whats with the bold, italic, underline? Could you please not do that. After I have been reading stories all day it kinda hurts the eyes.

Me: thank you. read previos reviews for explanation as to why it was bold, italiced and underlined. sorry for making it hurt your eyes.

Sincerely,

Melissa