PS I realize that in some cases you may review to a story and never read it again. Which is the reason I have mantioned the actual reviews and questions I have recieved, rather then the reviewers themselves. Who knows, maybe you had the same question!
Some people have made a fewGood Points, that I myself would like to point out...
Good point number one
I like the start. It is realistic, but at the moment it is just a jungle of thoughts and not much order. There is also no plot, like I said, it is just thoughts. It is enjoyable but it goes nowhere after the 2nd chapter it just gets repetitive. It needs more of a story. I am not saying this to be mean, but just to add some constructive criticism.
Response
I understand that it is constructive. It does help, it does. Yet, her thoughts are very important to the story later on. They are crucial if you will. Trust me we will be going somewhere soon. I just thought that you may want the backround info first, since otherwise I tend to confuse people. I've even confused myself! About the plot. I mentioned before and am mentioning again, life has no plot. This story has no plot. See the connection? Anywho as you may have guessed the plot will eventually be about love. Hence the title, Tragic Love. Tragic bieng her life, love bieng, obliviously, love.
Good point number two
Ok first of all I love the way your going with this story. Second of all for those ppl who say that they think its to distracting, wake up and smell the flowers! Title Tragic Love. Tragic being the whole first part of the story and Love being the second part so just let bluferret finish writing her chapters!
Response
Why thank you m'dear my sentiments exactly!
Questions from you
A reviewer asked
Where's Petunia?
I answered
Lily lived with her, untill of course petunia gave custody to her aunt. In which case she is currently nonexistent...Just kidding, she's probably on her honey moon, sucking the face off of Vernon...Nasty images here...
A reviewer asked
Lily can send 67 people to jail? What happened? Are the tragedy's describing her?
I answered
Some of the tragedy's are describing her, others describe her family. Lily can send 67 people to jail. Her family. Those who have commited crimes, if you will.
A reviewer asked
Is this going to be one of those Lily tries to kill herself, James stops her and falls in love with her and tries to get her over her problems kind of stories?
I answered
Lily has previously attempted suicide, but she is currently over that phase. Also known as, no it is not. Besides, I find it seriously deranged how one can fall in love with someone when they find them bleeding all over. You can feel pity, you can be disgusted, but love? I don't think so.
A reviewer asked
Are you okay? I'm not meaning it badly but you must be some kind of 'insider' to write like this.
I answered
Maybe I am. Maybe i'm not. What would it matter?
Multiple reviewers asked
Is Lily bieng abused?
I answered
Verbally not physically.
A reviewer asked
When does she go to Hogwarts to get away from it all?
I answered
In chapter five she's in the car on her way to the platform. In chapter six she's actually at Hogwarts. Why she reflects on the horrors of her life when she is in her sanctuary is beyond me... Perhaps the emotional scars will stay with her forever. Perhaps they are to deep to be forgotton. Then again, perhaps not.
Questions from me
A reviewer wrote
Take away from the impact of what your saying.
I ask
Specify please!
A reviewer wrote
I want my money. Oh and nice chappie. I'd have worked on its flow, do ya know whatI mean? Small bills, Thanx!
I ask
Does that mean you liked it or you didn't?
A reviewer wrote
There's too many spelling mistakes.
I ask
There are? Runs in circles like a mad loon Oh my god! Why wasn't I told sooner? AAAAAAGGGGGHHHHHH!!!
Reviews and reviewers I have to mention since I love them so much!
Review
Wow. I really have to say wow. Your story is so deep, so emotional. Wow. Continue writing. Please. People have to know what it's like, how people out there feel. This story is one of the best I have read on this site. Please keep writing!
Response I don't know about it bieng one of the best, but I must say your review sure brightened my day! Thanks much!
Review
Wow. I'm supprised more people don't review to this, because it is one of- no, it is the best angst story I have ever read, including those written and published by professional authors. I can really understand, about having two personalities, one for one place, one for another, but not knowing how to get rid of one, to seperate who I really am from who I pretend to be. This story touches and understands people in a way that I rarely read, anywhere. The writing is excellent, the thought put behind each metaphore and explanation is so heartbreakingly correct that I can't get the breath back that was stolen from me when I started this story. It's so truthful that it hurts to consider. You have a gift, and I admire you greatly for that. Never give up expressing yourself through writing. You could go so far in life on this alone.
Response Sniffles That's so sweet of you! Yet, once again I don't know about the best thing. Your review probably uplifted me the most out of all those i've recieved so far. Thank you. You honestly brightened my entire week.
Reviewers i'd like to mention
Sugar Muffin
TigerPrincess13
Lillei
haepotter
James-RoxMySox
TigerRose
Pixi-kitty
twistedtwin
Thank you to all my reviewers, I absolutely love every single review I have recieved!