The Beauty of Death
Commentary

A commentary! I actually have a commentary! That means I can talk about my story! Yay! someone hits her on the head Owie… okay, okay, I'll calm down. sniffs Meanies....

I apologize if I fried anyone's brains out with the heavy writing that was in the last scene of part four and all of part five. The reason was because I was trying to arouse suspense in you guys, and when I want to portray a certain emotion, I tend to get kind of deep and wordy. It's probably a bit rusty as well, since I usually don't write suspenseful stuff. At least, not in this fashion. I don't know. I'm a confused individual! feigns crying, sniffs I just hope it worked.

Originally, I had no intentions of putting that plot twist at the end. It was just going to be a fanfic about Static capturing a crazy wolf-boy but then my mind began pestering me with weird, twisted ideas and well… you've seen the results. At least it gives me something more to write, like a sequel! And what do I mean by that? Well…

I know you people are going to hunt me down and kill me once I tell you that this story is completed, but it is. Otherwise, why would I have a commentary smack dab in the middle? As I said before though, there is a sequel, of sorts. It actually starts before, goes through, then continues after this story. It explains a lot of things. And sadly, it is a whole lot longer than this story was. So much for writing short stories… grumbles to self, then sighs Well, guess that's just the way things go…

Part five seemed a little rushed towards the end… Or is that just me? I need people to tell me. I'll probably just leave it for a month or so, come back and reread the story and fix any mistakes. That always works. But still, a writer needs people to critique his or her work. (I think that's been stressed plenty by English teachers neh? realizes something Great, now I'm starting to sound like one of them…) Though I know you guys love to read just to read. Maybe even just to find out what crazy concussions people come up with, hehe! (I must have a fetish for the word crazy… I'm using it way too much…)

Hmm.. what else? I know there's something else I wanted to say… Oh yeah! The meaning behind the title of this story! Originally I was going to call it Beautiful But Deadly, referring to Arturo. The title still refers to Arturo but um… I don't know, I guess I liked The Beauty of Death better. Plus it could double for some deeper meaning. What's that meaning? I think I'll end up explaining that in the next story actually, so I won't say anything more on that. thinks for a moment I'll probably end up having trouble explaining it even in the next story! Geez… Well, let's just hope I explain it one way or another, otherwise the title loses its uh… quality, meaning, whatever you want to call it.

Here's a scene I cut out because I thought it messed up the flow of the story. It takes place after Static leaves the hospital. There is a spoiler, but I don't think it'll hurt anyone to know. You find out in the next story after all, and it's not really that important to the story. Maybe it is. I can't decide, so you decide for me! grins

Richie knew he couldn't catch up to Static on foot and he'd left his costume back at his house. He would get into it, fly around and look for the hero by eye alone. The only problem: it would take a long time to find him. Even as the blond ran, a wild idea came to mind. Instead of searching for Static, he was going to see if he could find the old man Virgil had told him about. Maybe that man knew the 'he' Static had talked about and by finding that 'he' he was sure to find Static. It was by far the most farfetched thing he'd ever come up with! How he ever thought it would actually work was beyond him. He brushed it aside, better to think wild than to have nothing at all. Though even that was a crazy thought.

The moment he was in his room he flipped the computer on, anxiously drumming his fingers on the desk as he waited. Luckily it was a fast computer. He straightened eagerly once it booted up and typed the name Joaquin into the people search for the Dakota area, getting seven results. He was about to print off the list when a familiar name caught his eye. Ramírez. He whistled. "Coincidence? I think not."

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Better to think wild than to have nothing at all, that's my philosophy in life! Do you like it? I sure do! That's how I get all my crazy ideas! (Oi, there's that word again…) Hehe. Anyway, that's about it for my commentary. Ja ne! Er, I mean, good bye! waves