Well, thanks Rayfan for
the hint on double line spacing! I have something to say, IF YOU
DON'T REVIEW FOR IT'S GREATNESS OR BADNESS, I WON'T REVIEW FORYOU!!!!! IF YOU DON'T HAVE ANYTHING TO SAY, DON'T REVIEW!!!!!!!On with the story!
LOVE AT FIRST SIGHT
(final version)
It all stared in the
forest. Rayman was sleeping at his favorite tree. Last night, he
fought the robo-piartes and Razoff, who wanted to get his revenge. It
kept him all night long. By the time he got home, it was 3 a.m. in
the morning. He only got to sleep for 4 hours, which Globox woke him
up.
Then, he was hungry. He
looked at the sundial and saw it was 12 o' clock exactly. He deiced
to go to the big river and fish for trout. Then, he remembered
something…
FLASHBACK
Hey, Rayman!"
Rayman looked back and saw, "Globox! What are
you doing here? "I'm hungry! For
trout!" Globox saw the trout Rayman got, and ate every one of them. "GLOBOX!!!!!!!! "
END OF FLASHBACK
Rayman deiced NOT to
tell Globox about lunch. "No sir" he thought. Then he deiced to
take the shortcut to the river. The one that went threw the marsh. It
was risky, but Rayman was really HUNGRY.
5 minutes later, Rayman
was halfway there, but he was all muddy from falling in marsh. Lucky,
Rayman found a stream and washed himself off. Then, he took a nap
that lasted 15 minutes, because his stomach growled.It was a sight to see.
Rayman was running at top speed, not even bothering to see where he
is going. Now, a noise was heard from the bush. And out came Razoff,
with a scowl. "Ah, Ha!!! I finally found you!" And with that, he
started to fire like crazy.
3 minutes later, Razoff
was knocked out from Rayman fast punches. "I try to warn about that
low hanging branch."(and from the branch, too.) Rayman said to
unconscious hunter. Then, he was back on his way.
At 12:56, Rayman finally
got to the river. At 1:26, he was full with trout, berries, and pure
water. He deiced to head back, the normal way. Once again, he
was whizzing at high speed.Then, he saw somebody.
He didn't have time to avoid her. It was Ly, the fairy. "Ow!"
they both said when they hit. Rayman fell into a bush, while Ly fell
into a small stream that was nearby. "You O.K., Ly?" Rayman said
to the fairy. "Yeah." She replied. Once Rayman got up, he helped
Ly out of the stream.
At 2:01, Rayman asked Ly
a question, "What were you doing here?" "I was… um… looking
for Globox! Yeah, Globox! "Rayman rolled his eyes
and said, "Yeah… right! What is the real cause?" Ly head
dropped and she said, "I need to tell you something…" "What?"
"I don't belong here." Rayman started to laugh like crazy. "I
mean it! In three weeks I'm going to be a queen and marry prince
Klaus." Rayman said (Here it is!) "But I love you too."
Ly jumped and said "Really? You're not joking, right?" "No. I
don't want to go. No one (expect Razorbeard) wants you to go.'
And, with that, Ly got
near Rayman and hug him. Then, Rayman started to hug her too. "Don't
ever leave." "I'll try to delay as long as I can." And,
finally they kissed. Yes, their first kiss.Later, the whole world
(almost) knew Rayman and Ly were in love. Yep, R/L were here to stay.
But, some Rayman's old enemies hated it, a lot. Rayman thought this
could mean marriage someday, and so did Ly. Thus, my R/L stories had
to begin.
Well? Is my final
version bad or good? People, write reviews this time,
not hints, O.K. ? See you in the next story of Rayman and Ly!!!
