Update time. And I see I've got some more reviews too, so I should probably start answering, anyone who says this is funny: thank you.

And to Rew Hawk Ksani:

Who made up that rule? it's really annoying. But I'll take your advice and try to rewrite the story in non-script format. I've already rewritten chapters 1-3, they are mostly the same as before just not in script. By the way red Hawk, is that what happened to the old Survivor? Cause I really loved that story!

Spelling and grammas is hard. I do write the whole thing on microsoft word, the problem is it's not always helping, another thing is that the dictionary constantly changes from english to norwegian. I even have a dictionary (book) at the desk so that I can look up difficult words.

And stop telling me what's going to happen in Jak3! I might get it tomorow (knowing this will probably not turn up at the page untill then), and I don't want the ending spoiled.

And now: rewritten in non-script-format to prevent the story from being deleted, I give you chapter 20.

CHAPTER 20

KIND UNCLE JAK, HIS FRIENDLY ZOOMER AND BRUTTER THE TEDDYLURKER

The friends walked in to the Hip Hog Heaven later known as the Naughty Ottsel along with Krew, the world's fattest slave driver.

"Good work with those listening devices Jackie" Krew said, "I've got a new project going and I don't need a bunch of crimson guards sneaking around my business. It's bad enough having to cope with him" he added in a whisper, pointing towards Erol who was still sitting by the counter.

"I spent all night preparing those things HICK!" the commander cried, "More beer!"

"Do you want me to get rid of him for you?" Jak asked Krew.

"You do that and you're dead!" Civilian Guy said, he was busy filming Erol drinking, "If he keeps this up we will all be in Guinness world records!"

"Get that camera out of my face and give me some beer! HICK!" Erol complained.

"Isn't Guinness World Records a human book?" Daxter asked the random waiter.

"Sure thing, it's about time an elf managed to break a record" Civilian answered.

"I've got another job for you Jak" Krew, the world's fattest bottle of beer said, "An associate of mine, Butter, works with me in the forced labour trade"

"That was the ugliest word I've ever heard, don't you mean the slave trade?" Jak asked.

"I prefer freedom challenged" Krew, the world's fattest exclamation mark, said. "That was even uglier" Jak answered.

Krew, the world's fattest slave ignored Jak's compliments and kept talking "lurkers are the city's low class labour force" he said, "Brutter pays me handsomely to help him free the lurkers. It feels so good helping those in need. And I need his money!"

"You've got a bad imagination" Daxter said, "A lot of what you've said in this chapter is the same as in Jak2 Renegade"

"No it isn't" Krew with the world's worst imagination said, suddenly he noticed Tess wasn't working, "Hey! Back to work toots!" he said to her.

"But I'm in the shower!" Tess shouted from the bathroom.

"I need a beer! HICK!" Erol said.

"That's good, just keep drinking" Civilian Guy said, completely forgetting to give Erol the drink he wanted.

"You know what beach ball? I'm scared of lurkers" said Daxter.

The world's fattest lurker, Krew, looked at the world's most annoying ottsel, Daxter, with a puzzled expression, "I thought you were scared of rats?" he asked.

"That's number two on my list of most scary things. Lurkers are number one" Daxter answered.

"Where does metalheads stand on that list?" Well asked.

"Number five" was the answer.

"And number three and four?" Jak asked.

"Number four is Dark Jak, number three is Torn, and number six is you!" Daxter said, pointing his fuzzy finger at Jak.

"Cool, I'm mentioned twice!" Jak said.

"If you save those lurkerteddies I'll give you weapons" Krew, the world's fattest animal welfare agent said, handing Jak a weapon upgrade of some sort.

"Come on Daxter, lets go save the lurker…teddies" Jak said, accepting the upgrade with a foolish smile.

Jak, Daxter and Well…ehm…eh stole a zoomer and drove around in the city looking for lurkers.

"LOOK! There's one!" Jak shouted, pointing at a zoomer carrying a large cage with a lurker inside.

Jak shoot the zoomer to small pieces using his blaster so the cage broke and the lurker jumped out.

Jak hovered lower to the ground, "Come on lurkerteddy, and hop aboard on kind uncle Jak's friendly zoomer.

The lurkerteddy jumped aboard on kind uncle Jak's friendly zoomer, and friendly uncle Jak drove his friendly zoomer towards Brutter's fish-shop.

Brutter the lurker met them outside the shop.

"Thanks for saving lurkerteddies" he said and kissed Daxter.

"Let go of me!" Daxter said, jumping out of Brutter's hands, "Sorry buddy, it was not meant to be"

"Brutter pay you back one random day. You see" Brutter said.

"You're welcome" kind uncle Jak said.

"Hey kind uncle Jak! Now that we've got some time of and we've done some really cool stuff, let's go find some ladies so we can brag about it!" Well said.

"Sounds like a great idea! We can og visit the keiralike girl!" Daxter said, "She'll be so sorry she didn't let us enter her racing theme"
"Yeah, lets do that" kind uncle Jak said before turning towards the author, "Will you please stop that "kind uncle Jak" thing?"

"So, can we go?" Well asked,

"Sure thing flut-flut" mean aunt Jak said and jumped aboard his friendly zoomer, "EYH!" he said to me before taking of.

Zakura: Well's a moron, why did you let him in to the story?

Miss. Ecofreak: cause he's a moron, he's funny

Zakura: but he makes the story look like a joke!

Miss. Ecofreak: it is a joke you stupid rabbit! keep reviewing guys.