The Day Dreams Died
Disclaimers: I do not own Dbz cause then if I did then the world would not be safe…
Author's Note: Wow. Been awhile. So before you all kill me, I'll continue. ^^
Last Time On Triple D~
"I felt him beaten. How can he… How can he think Frezia cares?!"
Get well. Alive. Stay alive.
"Oh no." Krillen muttered in horror, "They got Vegeta too."
"He… He can't be my son." Goku grumbled, "Gohan died… years ago."
"Are you a ghost?" Raikom gulped.
"Hai."
Gohan looked up at his father, and smiled weakly.
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~Chapter 10~
Just One Sayian
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"…You know who I am in spite of the magic that disguises me?" He concluded. "The magic doesn't fool you?"
"The magic won't fool you either, if you didn't let it."
Ben frowned. "What do you mean by that?"
"Much and little. Deception is mostly a game we play with ourselves."
The Black Unicorn~ Terry Brooks
Captain Ginyu was dead.
The three remaining of the Ginyu force looked up their fallen leader in quiet dissolution. With no leader they were witless and outnumbered. All six eyes turned wrathfully upon Gohan.
'Kill him!" Jeice commanded with newfound leadership.
The team lunged forward and past Krillen. Before Gohan realized they were coming and before Krillen could stop them, both Raikom and Berter fell dead out of the skies. Frozen- dead cold with fear, Jeice watched as Vegeta rose from whence his comrades fell.
"It's over." Vegeta snapped.
Jeice's heart began hammering hard against his chest. He could feel the echoing heartbeat reverberate through his body, pulsating a throbbing pain through his limbs and mind. Captain was gone. They had lost. And it was all that damn sayian brat's fault.
"Damn. Damn! Damn!!!" Jeice hissed under his breath as he stumbled backwards from his foe.
"Vegeta." The one Jeice recognized as Goku called, "Leave him be."
Although Goku seemed to be demanding authority over the Sayian Prince; it seemed it far from worked. Vegeta's power level was rising. Jeice didn't need his scouter rapidly spitting growing numbers on it's green screen to tell him that. He could feel the waves pushing against his body. Sort of a bubbly- tingly sensation.
Jeice's heart hammered harder.
"Vegeta."
Goku's patients sounded tested. Jeice could smell the blood of his fallen brethren inking sickly through the air. His eyes shot from Vegeta's dark countenance to the sayian down below. The boy looked away shamefully.
"I hate you, sayians."
"Vegeta!"
Vegeta retreated back, giving the Ginyu passage. Skeptical, Jeice kept his guard up. He cast one last spiteful look at Gohan before taking to the skies.
He didn't look back. Nor did he have to.
Goku relaxed- leaning back on his heels while he rested in the air. He couldn't suppress the smile that slipped across his face.
It was over. Thank gawd.
Turning slightly, Goku descended upon the outcropping rock that Gohan stood on. The boy did not recoil this time as he had before, but instead gave Goku an encouraging look. The boy had his mother's face, his father's hair… It was definitely Gohan. But the boy did not remember being 'Gohan'. Goku, although he greatly regretted it, knew that he had to take baby steps this time. The answer wasn't coming quickly. Not for Gohan, anyway.
Okay… It's quiet. Say something…"You healed real fast, Gohan." Goku smiled softly, "I'm rather surprised."
Gohan shrugged, but Goku noticed the boy blushed slightly at the compliment. It was just a faint pink to the boy's cheeks, but Goku saw it. Of course he saw it. He was Gohan's father after all…
Then do father's normally attack their sons?Guilt surged back into Goku's memory of what he had done to his son, causing the earthling to frown. How badly 'had' he hurt Gohan? How had he been even able to strike something so resembling to his own son?
Because there was a need. You're a hero. That's what hero's do.
Damn. I hate being right…
He gripped the boy's shoulder kindly,
"I'm sorry. I- I didn't mean to hurt you. What I meant… I didn't realize it was… you…" Goku trailed off rather pointlessly, hoping the boy understood.
Gohan just kept his eyes firmly on that of his past father. Almost eerie. Like the boy could see something the elder could not.
"Nobody's perfect."
Goku didn't exactly predict that answer. He blinked- and then laughed. Releasing his hold on Gohan's shoulder, Goku rubbed the end of his nose, somewhat cockily,
"I try to apologize for nearly killing you, and you make it seem like it was nothing." Goku chuckled in amusement.
"It was nothing." Gohan whispered softly, "You were just trying to defend Krillen. I understand."
Goku sheepishly rubbed the back of his neck,
"Geez. You sound just like me…"
In the sudden realization of what he said, Goku faltered.
Could you be any more obvious, Goku?
Bulma's mocking voice rang through his head as he felt a subconscious slap collide with the back of his skull. It was his own hand… It was his own mistake too.
The Sayian glanced down at his younger counter part seeing no change of emotion on the child's face. Both relief and disappointment struck Goku at once. Gohan did not have any clue- and perhaps never would. Sure if Goku tried hard enough and long enough maybe Gohan would remember. Unlikely but possible. Children aren't completely brain-dead at young ages, right? But staring down at the little sayian before him, Goku knew, Gohan would never accept him as a father. Gohan had grown up without him. And it crushed Goku on the inside… Secretly he desired for Gohan to still be dead. But he knew- he was wrong. Again.
"Thank you, Gohan." spoke Goku, as he bowed his head respectively.
Dizzy… Tired…
Misjudging his movements, Goku found himself tipping too far forward. Toppling earthward, Goku made no attempt to stop his decent. Perhaps out of bewilderment. Mostly out of exhaustion.
But hands groped his shoulders and erected him firmly. Goku's eyes met Gohan's briefly- just before another body rammed. And Gohan went flying back into the hard earth.
Gohan fell backwards coughing as he clutched his wounded side. Ready to attack, Goku whirled about to face Gohan's assaulter- but hesitated at seeing Vegeta in front of him.
Vegeta rubbed his fist casually, avoiding Goku's eye. Glaring spitefully down on the demi sayian, he spat,
"You aren't needed here anymore, Gohan. Go home."
Gohan blinked in response. Before Vegeta could land another kick, Krillen intruded. With the little Namek-jin, Dende, close at hand, Krillen rebuffed Vegeta's cruel remarks.
"Hey, Vegeta! What's the big idea?" Krillen shouted, touching Gohan's shoulder kindly, "Gohan was helping Goku!"
Vegeta scowled impatiently at the bald monk's response. He obviously felt the explanation was not needed. But that was how he often was- still living is his glorified extinct kingdom.
"If you all haven't forgotten, Gohan is one of them." Vegeta snapped, "Saving one life does not mean he's good. It would be a disadvantage to him if Captain Ginyu got all the credit for our capture. The boy's swindling you!"
"Humph. Funny to hear that coming out of your mouth, Vegeta…" Krillen smirked, rolling his eyes.
Vegeta paused, in noticeable indecision. Goku took the opportunity as his own,
"You're wrong, Vegeta. Gohan's on our side now. Aren't you, Gohan?" Goku demanded offhandedly from his former son.
Gohan opened his mouth to reply when Vegeta struck for him,
"Sure. He's a rebel now. He's a rebel against Frezia." He smirked, and then whispered just so Gohan could hear, "Just like us- like me."
Gohan swallowed hard.
The others' eyes were bearing into him, digging holes into his flesh. Trying to find some answer to their questions. The boy's mouth went suddenly dry. He could think of no way to respond. He didn't wish to lie- even if he had done so countless times before… It was different this time. They could all tell.
"I… He's… He's my father…"
Goku fell back, devastated. That's his answer? That Frezia… Tyrant of the universe- is his father? But what about me? But of course, he did not remember Goku. Then again, who did?
Gohan did not notice the despondency spread across Goku's face. And apparently, no one else did either.
"Look, Vegeta." Krillen snapped, breaking the silence again, "Gohan saved your life too! Why would he go through all this trouble to save us-"
"What do you mean?" Vegeta interrupted, "The brat didn't save me."
"He did too! Didn't you, Gohan?" Gohan didn't give a reply right away, but Krillen continued undaunted, "When I went to stop Jeice from hurting you further, I knocked into him. But he still released the blast aimed on you. It would have finished you too, Vegeta- had not Gohan intervened."
"Yes." Dende nodded quietly, 'I did see a blast collide with the other one-"
"Who asked you, plant?" Vegeta barked, hushing the child on the spot,
"I did not need any saving- or healing…" Vegeta continued, giving Dende a forewarning glare, "Gohan did not save my life, nor am I sure he saved Kakarot's."
"Now listen Veg-"
"Back off, Kakarot." Vegeta snarled, "I know you, above everyone else, holds great trust in your brat but I watched him train. I watched him murder. I watched him lie and backstab. And, believe me, he's one of the best.
"I'm not trying to compliment the brat, but I'm warning you. He'll change sides in an instant. That's what he was trained to do! What I was trained… You don't under-"
"You- You knew?" Goku muttered softly.
There was a definite snarl in his voice. A tone of hurt and anger crushed into one. Sounded rather dangerous.
Gohan looked puzzled, eyes flashing back and forth between the two sayians. Krillen even seemed to pick up on what Goku was saying. His eyes were alit in the same flame. Gohan felt just as lost as the dumb Namek-jin at his side. Who were these earthlings anyway?
"You knew who Gohan was, and you didn't tell me?" Goku growled, raising his voice precariously.
"I was- what?" interrupted a curious Gohan.
The rage vanished in a flash. All eyes fell back vacantly upon Gohan. As if he just stumbled in on a 'grown-up' conversation that little ears weren't supposed to hear.
Goku was going slightly red.
Krillen, purple.
He didn't get an answer for several seconds. And Gohan didn't like the answer he got.
"That you're a sayian, baka."
Gohan felt the glass walls collapsing on all sides of him. He couldn't breathe. It was hard even to live with those words ringing in his ears. But he knew- he knew that Vegeta was telling the truth! It wasn't just the signs and hints or even the similarities. It was just the fact that he was.
My gawd! I even speak their language fluently!
There was a slight whistling in Gohan's ears. And as his anxiety rose, he realized it was his heart beat.
Collapsing like a flaccid doll, Gohan struck the earth. Tears were pouring from his eyes and he had no desire to stop them,
"Noooo! Sayians are monsters!"
He didn't care that two of them stood before him. He just didn't want to be one of them. Sayians killed his family-
The sayians were your family.
Gohan's breath got caught up in his throat. What did that mean then? Was his family still alive?
He felt indecisive and slow, but he made his decision. Gohan could not stay with them anymore.
Gohan took flight without another thought. The energy wrapped about his senses shielding the calls for his return. He had to get away. He had to find Frezia. He had to find answers.
Krillen prepared to follow but as he watched, the boy soon accelerated to a speed that Krillen knew he would be unable to trail. Sighing in lamentation, Krillen was forced to watch the boy get away again.
"Damn. I'm sorry, Goku."
"You should have at least tried to follow him."
Krillen whirled about to see a disgruntled Vegeta at his side. Goku, shell-shocked, stood rigid in the place where Gohan took off. His hand still slightly out in front- where he attempted to bring his son back to him.
"I missed." Goku admitted softly, before crumpling to his knees.
Goku didn't radiate any want to be helped, so Krillen did not rush to the rescue. Instead, the bald monk turned his attention back to Vegeta,
"Follow that? I'm only human!"
"Sadly." Vegeta retorted, "Cause now, because of your dimwittedness and Kakarot's-"
He paused,
"Failure to react, we won't be seeing Gohan again."
"What do you mean?"
Apparently, Goku was back to attention. His eyes were fearlessly upon Vegeta's. The sayian prince didn't like it- averting his gaze,
"Remember. You- Kakarot, let that oafish Ginyu member go. I'd bet money that Frezia isn't in best terms with Gohan right now. No matter what reputation he had before, Gohan will not come out of it alive."
"We have to warn him!" Krillen sputtered, levitating into the air, "Come on!"
"Baka." Vegeta snapped, jerking the human back earthward, "Don't you think Gohan already realized that? He knows to go back to Frezia means death. Why do you think he's doing it?"
Krillen was at a loss for that. He cocked his head uncertainly until a muddled voice replied,
"Because Gohan… is still loyal to Frezia."
"Good boy, yes." Vegeta nodded to Goku, "Gohan knows he's going to die. Which makes him a greater warrior then most."
Goku looked distraught. He looked between the four awkwardly sized people before him, for some kind of answer. Found none.
"What do we do?"
"Well, King Kai told us not to get involved with Frezia. So… Let's not." Krillen muttered, "Besides, that might not even be 'our' Gohan. We aren't totally sure, right?"
Goku smiled softly. Krillen was lying. Goku knew that. Krillen knew that Goku knew it too. It was an odd sort of comfort the two shared. But both knew, the golden bird was there but had now flown away. There was no way- none. Gohan was gone.
"Let's go back to that damn earth woman. She's still got the dragon radar…"
We are monsters…
Gohan raced the sun across the green tinted skies of Namek. His heart throbbing. Dark eyes bleeding with tears. A voice resounded in his thoughts and he paused suddenly in mid-flight. His ears rang with the abrupt release of the pressure that had been there seconds before.
Gohan turned his head so that his chin just nearly touched the dirty armor. His eyes covered with doubt and concern. He thought of the rebel man. Wondered if he should turn back…
Silence swept over the tiny planet only briefly. Wind played with the dark tresses of Gohan's hair. The sun beat upon his back. All hints. All clues.
What had that man been seeking?
Gohan awaited an answer on the wind but none came. The wind just stopped. Scowling, the sayian boy frowned and moved a lock out of his face. It tickled his nose…
Gohan sneezed.
To Be Continued…
Please R + R!
Yeah. Wondering if you all got that ending part. ^_^ Let me know if you did. Don't wanna spoil it if you didn't.
Would give you a clip on next time but… Unfortunately I don't write chapters ahead of what is already up. I wish I did. I wish I had that much free time… *scowl* But I don't. So I won't.
This was actually an outlined chapter. Can you believe it? I actually took the time to outline the chapter and then write it. Which is probably why had such an incredibly hard time getting things strait. I don't quite know if outlines are for me yet. I'll let my readers determine that. I certainly was easier to remember things. It was just hard to be creative… Maybe I'm just in a creative block then.
It's Spring Break. So that means… Hopefully more updates! ^_^ I'd keep an eye on WB,LW and DTS or even this story. They tend to be my favorites of late.
Yeah. So another chapter means another collection of review responses. I've decided to do it for all of my stories now, since I don't update enough. ^_^ Hope all you readers are still alive out there.
REVIEWS~*~*~*~*~
Syn Shenron- ((Question time. Although, first of all, I'd like to say the story concept is rather nice as done and appears original, even from Frozenflower's story where he wasn't 'bad' either, since Gohan in this isn't as broken and wasn not treated as lousily.))
Please don't compare my story to other stories. It makes me feel like I stole something. -_- I'm sure Frozenflower's story was good though. I have read some of stories before, I think… ^^; So to just make this thing strait, I never even read a Radtiz kidnapping Gohan story before. At least not in ages. So when this story came along it wasn't inspired by any story around the same story line. So if it doesn't sound similar to another story out there, chances are I've never read that story before.
((Too bad this hit writer's block...))
Actually it never hit writer's block believe it or not. I know I haven't updates since August… But I just have so many stories to keep up with some stories get buried. And I am currently in Junior year of High School. And, as I have found out, Junior year is the worst to try to have any free time…
((Now comes the question time, however. 1.) Why did Vegeta wait so many years after Nappa's defeat to go to Earth himself?))
Good question. But as I said before, a lot of these stories were started a long time ago. Most of the background info I got for these stories were from friends who saw the series before Android saga. I, at this point of time, had not seen before that and had to ask people for spellings of names and plot summaries of episodes. So if it's choppy, that may be the reason. Another reason is that this is an A/U. Another universe. I twisted things about to fit my liking. Okay enough of the excuses and now for the explanation: Communication error. Vegeta got tangled up in Gohan's arrival on the space station, he never got any messages from Nappa. Nappa was taken care of rather quickly on earth, and Vegeta never knew what happened to Nappa. So eventually, Vegeta decided to find out where Nappa went to. That's the best reason I can give.
((2.) I assume Goku and company didn't go to Namek right after Nappa and losing Piccolo. But if Vegeta hasn't learned about it in this divergent story until Gohan informed him, how did they find out? Or did Vegeta mention it on Earth and just forgot until Gohan reminded him? If it wasn't him, was it one of Goten's visions that led to the discovery of the original Dragonballs?))
That's a big number two! O.o;; Actually I'm kind of confused by your question. Ummm… I'll still try to answer it, though. Best I can guess is that you wanted to know how Vegeta didn't know about the dragon balls and Goku and Company did. As I told you earlier, I am gray on the subject area before the middle of DBZ. I had assumed Piccolo had found from Nappa that he was from Namek. So then I guess the rest of them just realized that there were dragon balls there too. As for Vegeta, yeah I guess he forgot. He came down to find Nappa not to find the dragon balls. And remembering the legend off of Gohan he decided to go to Namek. I don't think he ever realized there were any dragon balls on earth. But as I said, I did not know anything about Db or the beginning half of DBZ when I first started writing this story. But it's really too late to fix most of it. So I'm just going to go with it and hope it develops.
((3.) From the anime, we know it took Nappa a year to get from his and Vegeta's location to Earth... Why'd it take so long to find the Dragonballs anyway with the Dragon Radar? Or was Nappa on a closer planet in this version of events?))
Probably on a closer planet. But the original reason, if I can remember, was just that they weren't in such a rush to retrieve the dragon balls. And Goku told Krillen, if you read the flashback, to stop collecting the dragon balls and save them for the fight against the new alien. He didn't want to waste their wish. Yeah! I finally had a good answer to that question!
((Finally, 4.) How the heck could they beat Nappa unprepared? I imagine after what happened with him they would do serious training in case another showed up and were ready somewhat for Vegeta, and have been training after that too in case they meet more really tough opponents, thus explaining their ability to take on the Ginyu Force (along with Guru unleashing hidden power ability, possibly), so everything else has enough possibility it doesn't merit asking. But how in the world did they handle Nappa? ))
That, knowing you, I figured would come up somewhere. As I said in the flashback, Goku warned them that something was coming. Yes, they did serious training. And most of it was probably left unknown. How did they beat Nappa? :shrug: Mystery of Goku. Goku was with them, so they stood a fair chance. Just take my word for it that they did.
((The names of the Ginyu Force, by the way, are spelled 'Jeice',
'Burter', 'Recoome', and... Actually, I think its 'Gilldo', but I can't
remember for sure. Not that it matters since he's history and I doubt you'll be
correcting typos anytime soon.
I hope this resumes soon.))
You'll have to take that argument up with the readers. They are the ones that told me how to spell the Ginyu force member's names. I had no idea before I wrote this, and several people reviewed with what their new spellings are. And you're right. I'm not about to turn around a fix something that trivial now. But thanks for the thought.
ICTOAN- ((Go faster. I want to finish this this year. I am reading all your other storys and I stared those all most a year ago.))
Heh. Can't rush genius, ne? I'm sorry. I'll try to update faster. ^^;
Dawnatella- ((WOW this is a good fic.I can't belive how good you write.))
Aw. Thank you. Don't mean to be modest but I know tons of writers better then me. :blushes: But I don't mind the compliments.
Genkai-Rei-Chan- ((Aww.. GET BETTER GOHAN!))
lol. He says alright. ^_^
((I love this story so much.. couldn't just stop readin' it, ne? So I'm back and ready to review!))
A lot of people like this story the best out of all of mine. I don't quite know why. ^_^ But I'm not complaining. You stole my 'ne'! lol. ^^
((-Gohan-Fan (Bet ya gave up on me didn't you? MWAHAHA! I just became a Yugioh and Gundam Wing fanatic for a year or so.. STILL AM!)))
Gave up? Nah. I knew you'd come back. I remember your author name quite well for some reason. ^_^ Ah yes. Yugioh rocks. So does Duo-chan. Nothing wrong with that. ^^
Pearlz- ((Yay! Gohan saved his Otousan! Serves the stupid Ginyu right for trying to take over Goku-san's body! Please update ASAP!))
Don't you love it? I wish some had done that in the series but no one was around. :frown: Ah well. ^_^ I always wonder what would happen if he missed…
((...I use too much !'s! Oh yeah! Gomen for not reading this Chapter straight away!))
s'okay. Sorry for not updating soon enough.
SSJ-Mirai-Trunks- ((hmm only like 4 months between updates...not to bad. Good flow for the story and very intriguing. Continue...but do it quicker.))
^^; Is that like a hidden insult? Thanks for the compliments though. I know I don't write enough. Imagine. I used to update every day. Back in middle school. Those were the days.
Ryoko-onee- ((NO! You can't stop there! I can't believe I didn't see this fic!))
^^; Won't say anything…
((Oh, now I gotta IM Astro and than her. lol.Good fic.))
Ha. Did you embarrass her? ^^;
Nooka- ((Now I did read this 3 chapters ago a few months ago and,like the idiot I am, forgot to review. So um here u r. I really like this story, v/ much in fact. And it would be appriciated if u would please please update it. Pleasepleaseplease update.))
Here you are. An update! ^_^
Alana Quinn- ((*falls over anime style* you updated!))
-_- Don't act 'that' surprised.
((Shocked but very happy. Very cool update but just wondering about the ending. Did Captain Ginyu actually change bodies with Goku because it seemed like he did but then at the end you spoke like Goku was still in his body.))
No, he didn't switch bodies. Gohan fired a ki blast and knocked Goku out of the line of fire. So Goku's fine. Gohan's fine. And Captian… well he's dead. So he aint fine… ^^;
((That's my only querie. Other than that it was a very cool
chapter.
Can't wait for more.))
Alrighty then. I'll await your review for this chapter. ^_^
MiraiGee-Chan- ((FINALLY!))
lol. :claps:
kirbmasterx- ((Gohan:I would never let dad die.))
Err. Didn't think you would Gohan. But he wasn't in threat of dying… ^^;
((Vegeta:Kill Kakarotto now brat.
Gohan blasts Vegeta across the universe.
Goku:Why does he still want to kill me?))
:blinks: Well, I'm not sure how to answer that.
((Goten:Yeah, why does Veggie-head want to kill daddy?
Brolli:Kakarotto *maniacal, beckoning voice*
Brolli goes Super Saiya-jin while going after Goku.
Gohan then turns SSJ, with his hair silver instead of golden.
LSSJGohan:What are you going to do?
SSJBrolli:I'm gonna sulk in a corner and whine and complain about why KMX made
you the Legendary Super Saiya-jin in his universe instead of me
Brolli leaves.))
Alrighty then. That was random… o.O;
((Goku:El buen trabajo en escribir muchos buenos fanfictions y
continúa escribiendo trabajos espléndidos de la literatura.
Everyone: O_O
Sonic:Goku just spoke Spanish, and spoke a proper sentence.))
You know what's really scary? Is that I understood that. Go me and my one year of Spanish! 'Good work on writing lots of good fanfictions and continue writing splendid works of literature…'
((Shadow:Translation:Good job on writing many good fanfictions and continue writing splendid works of literature.))
-_- :face-fault: Oh look. The translation.
((Link:How did he learn Spanish?
Goku:Chi-Chi forced me to study as well.
Everyone laughs.
The End (I'm lazy right now, got a small headache, am ticked off at someone,
and need to do other things, bye)))
Why do you write stories in your reviews? Just a question… O.O;;
shadowphoenix2- ((That was awesome. Now you've gotten me drawn into this story again! You better update soon *Scowl* ^^ GO ASTROZAZEL! Lol As always, OOshii, you wrote everything flawlessly. I was eating up every word! I loved Krillin 'the ghost' :) I really hope you'll update this soon- it's the best stab at this idea that I've ever- and ever will, I'm sure- seen. Thanks for writing it! Keep going, OOshii!))
Now we all have to thank you for this chapter, dun we? ^^ You keep updating Kokuhaku so I'm inspired, alright? :P Same to Astrozazel if she would ever update…
Jadesaber- ((Not bad. I liked that chapter. One question though, at the end, when Gohan helps get his father out of the way of Captain Ginyu's switch attack, had Dende healed him yet? Or did he manage to climb the rock on his own even though he was injured? It wasn't really clear. Anyway, post more soon!))
Actually I meant for it to be unclear. ^^; Sorry. Gohan climbed up of his own will. He healed himself, in a sense. But then again, he wasn't as injured as he played out to be.
Jessi Lynn- ((*sighs* I hate cliffies. More please? This is one of my favorite stories...))
Don't we all. Hope you enjoy this update.
Astrozazel- ((*blushes* Gee, don't I feel special! I didn't really do anything except skim over it, and it sounds great to me!))
You help more then you know. ^^ Sorry for not sending you the beta job this chapter. I didn't want to disturb your spring break, just for me. ^_^ So you get a break. Alright?
((You did all the hard work (six hours straight, you are *hard core*), I just had the pleasure of reading it over before anybody else! ('cept your sister) It is an honor, and I certainly shouldn't get any special recognition. Since I've sent in my edits I'll just comment on the stuff I really liked.))
I promise I will send you the next chapter. But like I said. I didn't want to disturb ya. ^^;
((There were lots of powerful lines in this chapter. I especially liked the inner conflict of Goku concerning Gohan, and the last part "His ebony bangs stuck to his sweaty forehead almost shielding his eyes. His beautiful eyes. His mother's eyes. Gohan looked up at his father, and smiled weakly." Aw! That is so sweet! *sniff sniff*))
I loved that part too. ^_^
((I love Gohan-Goku angsty stuff! Iunno why but it's always really moving.))
I think it's just because there wasn't enough of it in the series, ne? But I love it too. ^_^
((On Vegeta, well, what can I say? You write Vegeta very well! I didn't get the sense that he was pivotal in the chapter though, so there's not much to say.))
Ew. Large vocab word. :pounds head: Ew. Ew. Ew. ^_^ But thanks. I tend to get Vegeta's character the best for some reason, and I have no idea why.
(((Goku, not willing to forfeit a fight to help a friend? *jaw drops*)))
OOC! :pumps a fist: Yeah, I know. ^_^ I don't know why I did that… but I did. :shrugs: Oh well.
((And GO KRILLEN! Normally I am neutral toward Krillen, he's generally just *there*. But I love this line! "Not just that." Krillen smirked, "I'm a vengeful one." ^^ Definitely one of the movers-and-shakers of the part. Power to the human!))
For some reason I have always held a special place in my stories for the bald monk. I guess it's because he's one of the few humans… I always liked the little dude. I had no idea that he was Goku's best friend though. I thought he was Gohan's age for the longest time. ^^;
((Okay, think I rambled enough. O.o Good luck with your writing!))
That's alright! I like rambling! Rambling good! ^_^ Good luck with your own. I'll keep my eyes open for your one shot.
And thanks to DBZ Chick1, Dreamseer Veetee, SSJ5Tigger, Lady Sakura-chan, TheShadowPanther, Mirai Catarina, I DO NOT OWN DBZ, black sayain, and Wintersong for reviewing also. Sorry for not getting to you all. ^_^ But I give you my thanks anyway.
Alright, my feet have officially fallen asleep. It's time to post this baby up. ^_^