Alright, here's my "Thank the Reviewer" page!!! Woohoo!!!! Ok..here we go...
daydreamer8301: Thank you so much! I'm so glad that you enjoyed the first chapter and I really hope you enjoy the second chapter too..and the third ad fourth and, well, you get the idea. : )
Jedi-Girl8900: first off...love the name. I'm a huge Star Wars geek. I'm one of those sickos who goes to the theater on the first day the movies out dressed up as a Jedi. And I dressed as a Jedi for Halloween. But anyway, it's great that you think my writing is good. Hopefully it will keep being good and you'll keep reading and reviewing!
Lyf:: great start? Why thank you! And I really want this story to go far. It always annoys me when writers stop their fics after the first chapter. I mean, what's the point in putting in all the work uploading if you're not planning to follow through with another chapter? sigh but yeah, I definitely plan to continue writing this, so I hope you continue reading!
beautystar: awesome? My story? Really? blushes Wow, thank you so much! I'm going to turn into one of those annoying conceited people now because I now know that my story is awesome. Nah, just playing around. I really appreciate that huge compliment! Keep reading and hopefully I'll be getting more compliments from you!
Legolaslover: I love him too. Don't we all? It seems that a lot of people think my story had a great start! I'm so thrilled that you think so. I really didn't think that so many people would even read my story, much less review it. Thank you very much for your kind words, I really appreciate them, and I won't make you wait too long for the next chapter. Don't worry. And thank you for explaining to me what a Mary-Sue is. I was wrong. My story is in fact a Mary-Sue, and I'm glad that doesn't bother you because I want you to keep reading!
X2 Aeon Darkness IX: I'm so happy that you think it's really good!!! And don't worry...I will absolutely do my best to keep it up. I wouldn't want you to get disappointed or anything. : )
ugly you: Um.....I actually wasn't implying that I was ugly, because even though I did say that Aralin is based on me, I never wrote that she was ugly. All Elves are beautiful and she's no exception. She's just not the most beautiful. In fact, I'd say as far as Elves go, her looks are average. But anyway, thanks for explaining what a Mary-Sue is. As I told Legolaslover, I am now aware that my story is a Mary-Sue, but don't worry. I'm gonna try to make it unique and different than the others. I hope you keep reading to see how my story develops.
Irael: Well, since you gave me such a long review, I'm going to write you a very long thank you, addressing some of the constructive criticism you gave me. Your definition of a Mary-Sue was extremely thorough and I really appreciate that. I am proud to say that now I know exactly what a Mary-Sue is. And my story happens to be one. It took me a little while to accept it because all this time I've been thinking that Mary-Sues are bad things, that they're perfect characters who aren't realistic and who are really annoying. But they're not so bad after all. And yeah, I am writing this as a way to live out my fantasies, but not just the "I want Legolas" fantasy. I love the entire LOTR universe and this is my attempt to become a part of it, not just to be with Legolas. So with that being said, you can rest assured that I will not, under any circumstances, intentionally change the way a character acts. Which means there will be no angry, jealous Legolas, nor wimpy, pathetic lovesick ones, no one dimensional bad-guy Boromirs, or anything like that.
I know that saying "You were warned" is not proper grammar. I used this particular phrase because of a cartoon character named Foamy who is a favorite of mine. He says that in an episode and I was hearing his voice in my head when I wrote it.
"They were over confident in their size, strength and numbers. And that would be their downfall." Yeah, I know I could have made it into one complete sentence, but I kinda liked the way it sounded in my head when I wrote it, so I threw grammar-caution to the wind and made it two short sentences.
You know, I really never realized that "orc" isn't supposed to be capitalized. I just figured that since "Elf" and "Dwarf" was that I should capitalize it too. Go figure, thanks for pointing that out.
And as far as the orc's way of speaking goes, I took it from the movies. Ever notice they all have those kind of accents? And I know that this is supposed to be fanfictions about the books, but I can't help but include a lot of stuff from the movie too, since it's fresher in my mind. Don't get me wrong; I have read the books, several times, but I'm a very visual person and the movies just stuck more in my head than the books.
If you're concluding a sentence being spoken, the action of her replying would start out with a capital S. Thank you! You have no idea how long I've been wondering about that. Sometimes I capitalize it, but mostly I don't because it seems to me that authors, at least in the books I've read, don't usually capitalize after a character has spoken. But thanks so much for clearing that up. : )
No offense, but the whole "I'm a warrior she-Elf who doesn't want to marry" is totally unoriginal. Even the Elf maiden that is a Tomboy has been overused. I know, I know. Trust me I know. But I really wanted to write a fanfiction, and I couldn't bring myself to write about a very feminine Elf because I relate more to an Eowyn type character than an Arwen type. I dunno, that's just me. I'm sorry if you think it's boring, but I just can't write about your average Elf maiden. It's just not me.
" 'He should be happy no matter what I choose to do!"' Does it really make her seem immature? I didn't think it did. My opinion is that, yes, if she were to dabble in any of the aforementioned 'careers' that her father should be happy, because if that's what she really wants and it makes her happy, it can't be too bad. Well, ok, I can see how her being a prostitute or an assasin could get a bit iffy, but that's not what she wants to do, so that really shouldn't even be used as an example.
Loneliness? Okay, thanks! I'm usually good at spelling, don't know how I missed that one...
Well, like I said, I'm a very visual person and I like my readers to be able to clearly picture everything I write, including the clothes. I know I don't have to, and I shouldn't, but what can I say? Guilty pleasure. And I love the clothes in LOTR so much I can't help but think of my own outfits and describe them to everyone so they can picture what my characters look like. I was a fashion design major in high school, I'm into clothes. I can't help it.
And you're right. "Tied" really doesn't make as much sense as your suggestions. I'll keep that in mind.
"Try "beneath the branches of a large oak." It is more clear that she isn't in the tree" That's a great suggestion, but the thing is...she was in the tree. I probably should have made it clear that she jumped up onto a branch and didn't sit beneath the tree. Sorry about that!
And she could tell it was a human voice because Elves are supposed to have very musical, melodic voices, making a human's voice sound gruff in comparison so I figured it would be quite easy for an Elf to tell a human voice.
And I'm sorry that "she-Elf" bothers you but I was trying to think of different ways to refer to her instead of just repeating "she" and "Aralin" because that sounds redundant. I suppose I can just use "Elf" instead but then if she's in the same room with another Elf, how will I be able to refer to her without using "she" or "Aralin"? Any suggestions you may have would be much appreciated.
Yeah, I know Elves are not supposed to tire, but I figured I could change that one fact for my story. It makes it more interesting, at least in my opinion. Now that you bring it up, I'll think on it some more.
"She hadn't meant to go so far. And she hadn't meant to stay away so long." Jeez, you're right. I should have combined them.
Thank you for the compliment! I'm so happy that you think my writing is good, I really am. My writing shows talent! That means I'm good at something! That made my day. And yeah, there are so many 10th walker stories, but I really wanted to make one of my own. It's my dream to join the Fellowhsip so I really have to do a 10th walker, if only for me to live out a fantasy. I'm really sorry if this disappoints you in any way. But don't worry! The next fic I write will NOT be a 10th walker! The next one I write will definitely be original! If you decide you don't want to continue reading this story, then that's fine, even though I would hate to lose such a thorough reviewer, but I promise that the next thing I post will be better, and I hope you read that one. And that little scene you wrote had me cracking up. Yeah, I've read way too many of those, which is another reason why I feel I have to write a 10th walker. I need to know that there is at least one Mary-Sue out there in fanfictionland that isn't just the normal "Girl all over Legolas and ignoring the rest of the Fellowship while she ruins events and characters and completely twists the plot of LOTR" I do not, repeat DO NOT want to write one of those and I want to know that at least my story isn't like that. I know there are probably others that are not the normal Mary-Sue, but I haven't stumbled across any.
And like I said, my next story will be, to use your word "exceptional". And I did find your review extremely helpful and thanks for the well-wishes! I appreciate it and I too, hope I never suffer writers block. Thanks so much for taking the time out to write me that review! And I really hope you keep reading my story, though I'll totally understand if you don't.
To everyone who read but didn't review: Don't think I've forgotten about you!! Thank you so much for reading my story, even if you didn't review I still appreciate and love you all! I would love you more if you reviewed though. Just a simple "I like it" or "It sucks" is fine with me. I just want to hear from you!
