Tohru - 2
Yuki - 2
Ayame - 2
Momiji - 1
Haru -1
Since it's a tie, I'll be doing Tohru first. I was going to do Ayame because he was easier, but I need access to a certain Fruits Basket episode, which I don't, so next in line, Tohru's fiction. Also, I forgot Hiro's review. This is his review.
tigersheep 03-16-04
Why did Yuki lose like that? Aren't you the weaker one? Give me a break Kyo, I know you of all people can't defeat Yuki. Do you really think he would let you anyway? Oh, and good story!
The same day Kyo went and checked his reviews, Tohru is in her room looking for an idea. She goes to her desk and sees the hat. She picks it up and remembers that she wanted to know who the person was that helped her. AN: If you only watched the anime, then you might not understand this.
"(I know! I'll write the story of what happened that day! Then, if the person reads it, he'll send me a review that he's the one! Perfect!)" Tohru rushes to Shigure first, to get his permission. Then after he says yes, she rushes to his room and turns on the computer. Immediately she starts typing and after thirty minutes or so, she finishes. After a little of submitting the story, she turns it off and hopes that her first love reads her story.
Eyes on discover the newly written story and click on.
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The Lost Girl with the Hat by kawaiionigiri
Once upon a time, a very young girl was getting picked on by a couple of mean boys. They kept on picking on her to the point where she ran away as far as she could. She hid in a small alley, hiding from those mean boys and crying at the same time.
The nest morning, she gets up to go home, only to find that she's lost. Suddenly, a mysterious boy with a hat covering the top of his face appears right in front of her. She stares at him for a second, then he runs.
She doesn't know what else to do but to chase after him. He kept running and she kept on chasing. When she tripped, she thought that she had lost him, but when she looked up, he was right there waiting for her.
She chased him until he stopped right in front of a house, her house. Before he left, he put his hat on her head, and disappeared from her life forever. To this little girl, the boy was her first love.
The End
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The day after, Tohru logs back into , in Shigure's room after asking him, and checks her reviews. To her liking, she received eleven reviews and began reading them.
neko-over-nezumi 03-18-04
That's a good story. Where did you get it from?
Princenezumi 03-18-04
Miss Honda, what a sweet story. Let me guess that little girl was you. Um, I was wondering if you still have that hat that boy gave you. (Yuki's thoughts, not part of the review: It was really Miss Honda, because that boy was me.)
girlluver 03-18-04
Oh my, what a cute little story you got there, Tohru. I was in tears knowing that you never got to see that little boy again. I bet Yuki and Kyo would be heart broken if you met up with that boy.
rabbitboy16 03-18-04
Aww, I love your story Tohru!!! I wish that boy was me. Remember that time when I met you and you didn't know who I was and I kissed you? That was fun!
nekoforever 03-17-04
Wow Tohru, what a wonderful and sweet story. I wish Kyo would do something like that for me!!
nezumiforever 03-17-04
Well done Tohru.
fabulousbigbrother 03-17-04
Oh TOHRU!! What a fabulous story, almost as fabulous as I am!!! Hahahaha! I wouldn't be surprised if that little boy was Yuki!!
tigersheep 03-17-04
Why did the little girl run away like that? Couldn't she stick up for herself? Why is it that little kids have to be so weak?! But, who am I to judge? You gave it thought and it worked out. Good job Tohru.
yankee-doodle 03-17-04
Tohru, didn't you tell us that story when we slept over? Wait, let me guess, you wrote this story in hopes that he would read it and reply, so you two can live happily ever after.
debt-in-sins 03-17-04
I remember that story well. It was very sweet. I hope you find him soon Tohru. We'll be waiting to meet him.
chibi-onigiri 03-17-04
Wow Tohru! That's all I've got to say. WOW!! Even if it's short, it's a very nice story. So you never seen this boy ever again? That's sad. Don't worry, it's a small world and you'll see him again.
Tohru smiles real big after reading all her good reviews, but didn't find the answer she wanted. After reading them closely again, she discovered something about Yuki and Ayame's reviews. Ayame's saying that he wouldn't be surprised if it was Yuki, and Yuki asking her if she still had the hat. After replying to her reviews, so made a note to herself to ask Yuki about the hat next time.
Everyone checks their e-mail that same day and finds replies from Kyo's story.
To Princenezumi
I WILL defeat you! Remember that. Even if the story's not true, it will be soon!
To kawaii-onigiri
I thought you were on my side? You're saying that if we trade places, this is exactly what will happen?
To girlluver
At least I'm not a perverted baka like you! I'd rather be beaten by Yuki then be like you!
To rabbitboy16
I'd hate to say it but thank you, you brat.
To nekoforever
Kagura! Shut up! I thought you wanted me to love you! Well, you're not helping!
To nezumiforever
At least my first love wasn't a guy, Haru!
To fabulousbigbroter
Don't get too comfortable with the fact that Yuki's your brother. It's not like he likes you anyways.
To tigersheep
Why do you ask questions if you're going to compliment it, you brat?!
To chibi-onigiri
Sasuke! What kind of little brother are you anyway?! I thought you were on my side the entire time?!
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AB-Angel: So what did you guys think? If you have any questions on the last comment Kyo sent, read my other fanfic Family Discovery. Please! This story's more successful than that one at the moment and I've worked harder on that one! Oh, and here are the replies for those who e-mails I couldn't get a hold of.
To Akira-Asakura-47
Yes, yes, I know I did that. But like I said, this story's just for fun. Aren't you one of the people who read my Family Discovery? You should know I don't make Haru obsess over Yuki. And I see that you're neglecting that story, it's been updated long ago with chapter 5. I need support to finish it faster. I'm nearly finished with chapter 6. Please continue reading it.
To lolito
Yes, Haru's nezumiforever. But it's all for fun. I'm not being serious with him really. I'm making him act more like him now.
To Myriadragon
I'm not sure if I replied to you already, but what the hey! Yup, that's what this story's really for, being goofy!
Thanks again all of you! Remember, you vote, you decide the next person. Since school ended my access to a computer has been cut very short so you have a lot of time to vote. The vote from last time WILL not be counted. AB-Angel out!