First off, I'd like to thank Sonic19902 for a very constructively critical review. Honestly, I was kinda hoping I'd get something like this...I've never been one to be too sure about my work, and have always welcomed the honest opinions of others, no matter how harsh they might be. Also, I seem to have misinterpreted the line about "placeholder" chapters...thanks for clarifying that one as well. The only problem is getting that first chapter in again...this Fic iteslf has undergone a number of revisions, and said chapter no longer flows with the second...so, therefore, I'm pushing all the chapter numbers back by 1. This will at least solve the problem. And just a final note...that last chapter is probably the shortest in the whole story, and not many others come close to it.
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Chapter 3
"I'm...I'm...I'm...Tails..." I stammered quietly. I had somehow become one of my favorite VG characters, and the ultimate object of my fandom. I wandered blindly back to my room, entered, closed the door, and just stood there silently, staring at my reflection in the mirror. I didn't quite believe what I was seeing; it all felt like some bizarre dream, like I was supposed to wake up at any moment. Eventually my gaze shifted to the floor, noticing that my wardrobe had undergone a change as well. I donned my shoes and gloves, and then sat down on the bed, holding my head in my hands. I slowly became aware of the complications of the situation I was in.
"I can't be seen like this. I'd be the cause of instant panic, plus I wouldn't want my mother to suffer a heart-attack or something. Plus, there's the issue of school."
I pondered for a moment, then it hit me. The snow! I glanced outside again, peering up the street at the light, which illuminated the still-falling snow continued to accumulate.
"That's gotta be almost 2 feet now. I have one chance at pulling this off, and it all depends on this snow. Wait...why am I talking to myself?"
I bonked myself on the head and turned on the radio, lucky enough to tune in just as the list of closures was being read off. The list was a long one, practically every school in all the surrounding cities was closed. Finally, I heard mine announced, at the very end of the list. I sighed a deep sigh of relief, knowing that things had just got a whole lot easier. My sister would go straight back to sleep, and my mother would assume that I did too as long as I kept my door closed. I was safe, at least for now.
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Advice taken, dialogue spacing applied. True, it's more like monologue, but whatever. Also, I promise it gets much better quickly. And yes, I did forget to mention that it is indeed a self-insert...but honestly, it doesn't seem like it later on...but I'll let the readers be the judge of that. R&R people, and thanks as always!