WARNING: THIS CHAPTER HAS CAUSED THE RATING TO GO UP
(I wrote this chapter back when I was in a depressed state of mind to the point in which, I let what; I call my darker half lose for a few moments. Some character deaths are about to accrue along with someone being shot and stabbed, relax this story has a long way to go but it will now be rated R from this point forward, even though it is just this chapter and two other chapters) comments at the bottom.
Chapter 21
Christmas with the Kaibas
Kisty sat in the living room with Seto, as Mokuba and Lisa walked in moments later, with some last minute presents. "Ok we have all the presents now all we need is the rest of the family," said Lisa. "HELLO! Anyone home?" said Atem in the entrance hall with Yugi, Tea, Joey, Marik, Isis and Odeon. Lisa walked to the living room doorway that faced the entrance hall, "We're in here," she said turning back into the room and setting next to Mokuba on the couch. Seto rolled his eyes as Yugi, and Tea stepped into the room, "MERRY CHRISTMAS KABIAS" they shouted. Joey was next as he smirked, "Merry Christmas, to all except Kaiba," he joked.
Kisty giggled, "Nice to see you three, now hurry up I want to open my presents," she snapped at them. Marik, Odeon, and Isis stepped in next, "Kisty! Look at you," said Isis, as she stepped into the room. Kisty stood up and gave Isis a hug, and then she moved to Odeon, completely skipping Marik. "What no hug for me?" Marik asked crossing his arms. Kisty smiled, "Last time I gave you a hug you almost killed me, also I thought you were still angry about you know, the accident thing and your daughter," she said crossing her arms.
"Kisty, I would never, stay mad at you forever" he said, "Besides, you're special to me," he finished opening his arms. The young female Kaiba smirked, "I know, I am," she said finally giving Marik a hug. Seto looked at them, puzzled, "Want to fill me in?" he asked, Kisty as she sat down next to her father. Kisty shook her head, "May be later," she said, then turning towards Atem as he was next to enter. "Hello Mokuba, my cute as a button Lisa, Kisty and Seto," said Atem. Again, Seto rolled his eyes, showing his usual annoyance looks at the Pharaoh as Kisty and Lisa hugged Atem.
"Ok, enough chit chat time for presents!" yelled Yugi and Joey at the same time. "Down, Joey, you're not first!" said Kisty looking at everyone, "Were doing something different this year, since my Dad has finally decided to come down and do this year he gets first present." Everyone looked over at Kaiba except Lisa and Mokuba who had finally gotten used to Seto being called "Dad" by Kisty. Kisty bent down, "Ok, then first up is Seto," said Lisa pulling a box out from under the tree, "From," she laughed, "my Dad," she said and handed Kisty the box to give to Seto.
Everyone found a spot to sit; the presents were handed out to everyone, and they all opened the boxes up at once. Seto and Kisty combined their presents so every gift that was from Seto was also from Kisty as well. Mokuba and Lisa did the same thing, Tea, Yugi and Atem did as well, while Joey gave everyone individual presents, since his wife and sister weren't there but up in New York. Serenity was with Tristan working at a hospital and Mai was doing a fashion show.
Joey was surprised that he did not receive any dog like presents from Kaiba then he saw that Kisty was the one that got him the gift of snow mittens. "Hey Kaiba, what the present from you?" he asked Seto as he opened up a gift certificate to another store this one was from Yugi. "Kisty got it for you this year, she refused to let me get you a leash to go with last year's collar," he smirked. "But you did pay for it or I should say them, to get here, and they should be here right about now!" said Kisty as the door to the mansion opened.
Foot steps where heard heading from the door to the living room, a young woman stood there in the doorway, Joey's eyes widened, "Serenity!" he said jumping up from the pile of trash from the once wrapped presents and almost stepping on Isis. "Joey!" she said as she embraced her brother, "Kisty, how did you get her all the way here from New York and without that pain in the butt, Tristan?" asked Joey, and then he got a punch in the arm from Serenity. "That's my husband you're talking about," snapped Serenity, "he had the flu so he sends his holiday wishes to all." Kisty laughed, "Serenity getting here was, actually was Dad's doing, my part of the gift should be here now," she said.
Joey looked at Kisty puzzled, "What do you mean one more part?" he asked. Kisty started to laugh, but Joey soon found out what she meant when another woman walked in the door. "MAI!" yelled Joey sort of tossing his sister aside. Everyone laughed as Serenity scoffed that her big brother just tossed her away. (A/N: sorry I just had to do that) Joey and Mai where kissing and hugging in the main hall of the mansion, everyone watched for a few moments, then it took Mokuba and Kisty to get Joey and Mai into the living room.
"Wow, Kisty thank you got two the most impotent people in my life here," he said putting his arms over Serenity and Mai's shoulders, "Oh there's another present I need to tell you about Joey but that can wait until we get home," said Mai. A funny grin went on Joey's face, "Oh yeah," he said. Serenity giggled, "He has not a clue about you know what," she smiled. Mai shushed her sister in law, "Don't tell him," she whispered as Joey started to thank again Kisty and Seto.
Seto and Kisty nodded, "Welcome," they both said at once. (Ok I know a little too un-Kaiba like but hey it's kind of funny) Mostly everyone was shocked the Kaiba was not shooting insults but then again, Kisty was in the room. Kisty sighed, "I have opened all my presents but I am missing one," she said. Seto chuckled, "Mokuba would you go and get Kisty last present, that's from me" he asked. Kisty looked at her father, "What did you get me?" she asked sounding like an unsurprised kid. Seto chuckled, "That's a surprise, you will just have to wait and see," he said.
Mokuba came back moments later with a box in hand, it was not very small but it was not large either. "This is from Lisa, Seto and me, I had to get it while you were out today," said Mokuba handing Kisty the box. Kisty looked at the box and started to remove the thin paper on it, she did not shake it but the box did move on it own suddenly. Kisty almost dropped the box but she held it tight as she used one hand of open the top part of it.
"Oh, my, gosh!" said Kisty as her blue eyes shot wide, "It's a, ah, puppy!" she said lifting the small black Labrador dog from the box. The little puppy barked a few times, it was black Labrador mix with greyhound. "Kaiba you got her a puppy?" said Joey, "I thought you hated dogs?" Kisty glared at Joey, "He uses you as a dog metaphorically, besides this puppy is female and oh so cute," added Kisty hugging the small puppy.
Yugi, Atem, Tea, Mai, Isis, Marik and Odeon which in awe as Kisty tickled the puppy with the largest smile on her face that they all had ever seen. "You like her?" asked Seto. Kisty nodded, "I don't know what to name her though," she said scratching the puppy's tummy, whose wagging tail was hitting her arm. Seto smirked, "You can name her what ever you want except something inappropriate," he said. Kisty smiled, "I would never, however knowing you, you picked a name already," she said. Seto nodded, "Wonder if you would like it or not?" he asked. Kisty sighed, "What did you pick?" she asked.
Seto smiled, "I was thinking about naming her after your mother," he said, "But then again I don't want this pup to be scared for life, with me yelling Alexandra around the mansion all the time," he said. Kisty thought hard for minute, "I know the perfect name for her," Kisty said holding up the pup. "Your name is Kisara," she said, just then the puppy barked and moved it paw to scratch Kisty's wrists that were holding her up.
Everyone smiled, "That's a great name Kisty," said Marik. Kisty looked at Marik, "Thanks, I figured, why not it was my mother's name in Egypt 5000 years ago, and since Dad doesn't want to name her after Mom. Why not does something different," she spoke. Everyone nodded, and then a giant rumble broke the moment, "Umm, who did that?" asked Kisty looking at everyone.
Joey shook his head, "don't look at me, I didn't do it," he said, then everyone looked at Seto who was as red as a tomato, "Oops," he said. Kisty glared at her father, "Dad!" she said and starting to laugh. Roland walked into the room, "Mr. Kaiba, honored guests, and Ms. Kaiba, Mr. Kaiba Mokuba, and Ms. Lisa lunch is ready," he announced.
Everyone got up and walked to towards the dinning room where they had lunch and played a few games. Joey and Mai were caught on what was happening during the few weeks Mai was in New York and Joey then found out Mai was pregnant. Joey fainted; however, he got back up and hugged his wife who had only been pregnant since the day she headed to New York. Tea and Yugi were caught making out in the dinning room from time to time, when they moved to one of the studies pretending to look for the bathroom, and Kisty played with her puppy, Kisara, while they all talked in the living room.
Kisty looked at her father, she had never seen him so relaxed not to mention friendly, since her mother died 10 years ago. After a long day of talking, sharing memories and playing a few rounds of duel monsters which Kisty pair up with her father and they both kicked Atem's and Yugi's butts. Lisa and Mai teamed up against Joey and Mokuba, but the two males won the match but lost that night's prize.
Mokuba and Lisa showed everyone out while Kisty played with her puppy as it soon latched itself on to Seto's face knocking him down to the ground as darkness soon fell upon the mansion. Kisty smiled, Marik, Isis and Odeon were the only remaining guests in the house since Lisa and Mokuba showed everyone else out.
Seto sat up, "I am headed to bed, Kisty you know that the puppy can sleep in your room, so I expect you to also clean up after her," he said. Kisty nodded, "I will, night Dad," she said as Seto walked up the stairs and into his room then falling on the bed. This had been the second best day of his life, the other great day in his life was when Alexandra and him got married, and had their first night together. Seto looked at a picture of Alexandra and him when they were younger. Alexandra was covering in mud and so was Mokuba and himself in the picture, he smiled at it knowing everything was going to be ok, or so he thought.
meanwhile down stairs
Isis, Marik, Odeon and Kisty were in the living room, talking about things when Marik had the look of deep sadness in his face. "Marik is something wrong?" asked Kisty as she petted her puppy on her lap. Marik sighed deeply, "Nefertiti would have loved today," he said sadly. Kisty slight worried smiled turned into a frown, "I know, it's been 11 years now," she said looking at the floor. Isis and Odeon looked at Kisty, "Umm, Kisty," said Odeon, "What happened between you and my son?" he asked. Kisty shoot her head up, "Jake? Umm, well we had a fight and umm," she said. The last thing Kisty wanted to do was tell Odeon that his son was using her to get Kaiba Corp but then Marik answered it.
"Jake was tying to take over Kaiba Corp," said Marik. Kisty snapped her head up at him now, "How would you know if he was trying to do something like that?" she asked. Marik smirked, "Kisty, I may be asleep sometimes but I am not deaf, he was talking to Orion this morning about it, something about a guy wanting the company and not him," he said. (I have to point out a huge foreshadow in a later chapter here, keep guy in your head in a very later chapter) Odeon and Isis looked at Kisty, "Did he really try to do that?" she asked. Kisty nodded, "Yes, he would have taken over if I didn't reject the last 15 shares that Seto was going to give me," she sighed "and that didn't go over to well with him."
"He used you, Kisty, that rotten to the cord Nephew of mine will pay," said Isis standing up. Odeon and Marik watched as Isis marched over to her cell phone in her jacket. Kisty shook her head, "Don't tell him, on the phone that you know, he will think that I told you and I don't want anything bad to happen to him," she said coming to Jake's defense.
Marik and Odeon looked at Kisty puzzled, "What I thought you wanted him to burn in HELL?" asked Marik. Kisty shook her head, "No, I want Jake to be happy but he doesn't get to use me in his plans. I in a way still love him, or that could be the fact that it an echo of feeling I once had for him," she spoke. Odeon looked at Marik, "I will talk to Jake and find out why he was trying to take over Kaiba Corp," he said putting a hand on Kisty's shoulder. The girl nodded, "Thank you Odeon, but I think I know why," she said.
Marik looked at Kisty, "You mean Nefertiti's accident, and Kara's death?" he asked. Kisty nodded, "You remember that my mother was the only one to walk out with the larges amount of minor injuries," she said. Marik, Odeon and Isis looked at Kisty as she sat there, "I am surprise you can remember that traumatizing incident, Kisty after all this time," said Isis. The girl nodded, "I remember it, even though I wished that I had ran from it faster I could back then," she said.
11 years ago (This is the accident that got Alexandra's back infected)
Kisty sat in a car seat inside a jeep in Egypt, Alexandra was at the wheel, while a young woman sat in front next to her. Next to Kisty was another little girl with dyed pink hair, and tan completion, matching the woman next to Alexandra. They were driving over the dry dirt towards an excavation site. "Mom, are we there yet?" asked the pink haired girl. Kisty laughed, "You asked that two minutes ago Kara," snapped the three year old brown haired girl. Alexandra and the woman next to her laughed, "Were almost there Kara, just be calm," said the woman next to Alexandra.
The car slowed down and came to a stop at the top of large area of stone, "Where here," said Kisty unbuckling herself. Alexandra laughed as Kara struggled to get free from her car seat. "MOMMY!" yelled Kara, "I CAN'T GET THIS THING OFF." Alexandra and Kisty laughed, "Nefertiti, your daughter need to get out of her seat," she said holding Kisty. The tall brown-skinned woman turned, "Kara Malik Ishtar you can get yourself out of that seat if Kisty Kaiba can get out of her own so could you," she snapped.
After about two minutes of struggling Kara freed herself from the car set with a little help from Kisty. The two woman and little girls walked over the limestone to the sight. Alexandra saw a man working in the limestone pulling out a skull, he looked up at Alexandra and Kisty, "Well Alex, Kisty, Kara, Nefertiti, how are you four ladies doing today?" asked the man as he began to slowly brush off the skull. "Where good just came to check on the progress of the sight Hopkins," Nefertiti said with a smile. Rebecca came running up, "Alexandra, Kara, Kisty Nefertiti, it nice to see you all again," she said out of breath.
Kisty and Kara laughed, "Hi Becky," they said. Rebecca talk with Alexandra for a while trying to convince the woman to take Kisty to see her father. Rebecca did not know at the time that Kisty was Seto's daughter however thought it would be good for the child to see her father; however, they saw Nefertiti acting strange. "Nefertiti is something wrong?" asked Alexandra. The tall Egyptian woman looked out between the desert and limestone, "Something isn't right, we need to leave NOW!" she said. Rebecca got and her grandfather saw it and took off towards their jeep.
Alexandra looked at her, "What is it?" she asked, before Nefertiti could answer they saw it, a big flash in the sky of a plane coming down. "RUN!" yelled Kisty and Kara as they all ran for the jeep. Rebecca and her grandfather ran to their own vehicle the last thing Kisty remember seeing was Kara and her self in the jeep when suddenly they were knocked from it, but a huge shock wave.
Kisty opened her eyes, she felt sore, her head hurt but worst was she could not move and it was hard to breath, she heard voices. "Miss Pegasus, I have bad news your daughter may not survive, she has a low pulse and seems to have a very nasty abandon injury if she doesn't awaken soon we will pull the plug on her," spoke the doctor. "Mommy!" yelled Kisty as loud as she could even though it came out like a faint whisper. Alexandra turned her head, she saw Kisty was awake, "Kisty!" she said throwing her arms around her daughter.
"OUCH MOM YOUR HURTING ME!" she yelled into her mother's ear getting her high voice back. Alexandra loosened her hold on the girl. "Kisty do you remember anything?" she asked. Kisty paused for a minute, "I only remember making it to the jeep then being knocked from it, with Kara. Wait where, is Kara, Mommy is she ok?" she asked worried for it was the first time she had been with out her best friend. Alexandra rolled her eyes and sighed, "thank goodness you're alright, Kisty you had me worried there for a while," she said not really taking in Kisty's questions about Kara who was in bad shape.
Kisty looked at her mother as best she could, "Mom, what happened to me, why am I here and how come you have only a bandage on your head?" she asked. Alexandra sighed, "We will discuss that later, right now I want you to rest, you had a very traumatic experience, out there, and I will update you on Kara just know she may not make it," she said. Kisty nodded, "ok Mommy," she said and drifted off to sleep however, it was an uneasy one with the fear of never seeing her best friend alive again.
present day
"I slept for a few days, when I came too again, I just came out of surgery, where I had to have a transplant down for my kidney for that injury," she sighed. Marik, Isis, and Odeon were silent as they all relived that horrible day. Kisty looked at them, "I won't forget what Kara did for me," said Kisty suddenly.
Marik looked at Kisty and smiled, "I know she was a good kid, it hard to see that's she gone, but part of her will always be alive, thanks to you Kisty," he said. "I know, I am so sorry Marik, I should have stayed with my mother," she said. Isis shook her head, "No, Kisty, you did what you told to do, and no one knew that plane was going to crash on the site, or that engine would strike the jeep as you and Kara were hiding in it," she said to the young Kaiba girl.
"Isis is right, it may have cased my daughter's life, but she was dying from that accident anyways, and she saved your life, Kisty," said Marik. Kisty nodded, "Kara was my best friend, I will never for get what she did for me," said Kisty placing her hand on the scar under her shirt near her pants. "That her kidney inside me," she said softly, "she gave it to me so that I could live, but why did she have to die," Kisty said starting to cry.
Isis, Odeon and Marik knew that Kisty was not just talking about Kara, but Alexandra as well. "It's not fair, my mother should be here too, along with Kara, and Nefertiti," cried Kisty. Kisty's puppy Kisara lifted her head, then placed her paws on Kisty's chest and started to lick away the tears. Isis and Marik hugged Kisty, "My wife save Alexandra, and my daughter saved you, they loved you both very much to give their lives to save you two never forget that," said Marik.
Kisty wiped away some tears and slowly petted Kisara back down to her lap, "But, my mother is still gone, I am the only one who truly survived that accident, besides the two Hopkins," she said.
That when it kicked with Odeon, "I know what Orion and Jake are up too!" he said. Kisty looked at Odeon with surprise, "You do?" she asked. Odeon nodded, "Jake and Orion always wanted a sister when Kara was born they got the next best thing, a female cousin. Kisty, they either wanted, you to replace her, or they…" he stopped. Kisty realized it too, "They want me dead like Nefertiti, and Kara," she said.
Kisara began to growl as a figure moved around the windows of the dinning room, which they sat. Kisty looked at the window, "I have a bad feeling they know that we know," she said. Isis and Marik nodded, "Don't worry we won't let those two hurt you," said Marik, "You hold part of my daughter in your body and that's the last thing I am going to let them do, is take her away or you, Kisty. I am not your real father but Isis, Odeon and I see you as family," he said. Odeon sighed knowing that it was foolish to stay Kaiba would never let them hear the end of it, "Marik we can't say here all night, we have to leave," he said. Isis and Marik looked at Kisty, "I will be fine," she said. "You don't live with Seto Kaiba for 10 years and not learn how to defend yourself, also I am not afraid of death," she smirked.
Isis, Marik and Odeon left, Kisty turned around after shutting the door, and she turned on the security system to go off if anyone broke glass to enter or kicked the doors. The cameras were activated and Kisty picked up her puppy, Kisara, "Come on your in my room tonight," she said as they walked up the stairs.
Outside little, did Kisty know that the security box holding the system's power supply had been cut and made to look like it was working? It only looked like it was working but that was a computer glitch, a well made one at that. Kisty opened the door to her room, she saw it was plain and clean, she put down Kisara who went to Kisty's bed and sniffed around as Kisty shut the door and changed into her night clothes.
As soon as Kisty was done changing a figure stepped up behind her and placed a blade to her neck, "Hello Kristen," said a man's voice. Kisty's eyes widened in the darkness, she knew that voice, only one man in the world had it. "Jake?" she asked, as the blade tightened around her neck, "You make one sound and I will kill you," he said in her ear. Kisty closed her eyes, "What do you want?" she snapped quickly. Jake smirked in the darkness of the room, "You of course, not to take you as my cousin, but to let her rest in peace!" he said spinning Kisty around to face him.
"Your cousin, choose to give her kidney to save my life, your Aunt chose too. I was unconscious at the time. I didn't have a say Jake, please understand that," she pleaded feeling the knife still at her neck but some else was in the room. "Jake just gets this over with!" said another man's voice. "This can't be rushed Orion, she is still pure, and I want her to enjoy her pain," he said.
Kisty looked over at her bed, she was about to sick her dog on them when she saw that Kisara was not moving. "Don't worry Kisty, your puppy isn't dead, I would never kill a cute doggy like that, besides I want something from you, something that you haven't give anyone else, something that keeps you pure" said Jake.
The girl gulped, "What is it that you want!" she said trying to keep a tough composer. Jake smirked, and leaned in close to Kisty and whispered something in her ear, Kisty's eyes opened wide. "NEVER! That's not for you," she snapped at him. Orion pulled the knife closer to Kisty's throat causing a small cut.
"Jake hurry up already just gets it over with," said Orion as he pushed Kisty on to her bed. Kisty could see both men in the dark now, and just when she was about to jump off and open a can of kick ass, she heard a click and something on her temple of her forehead.
"I wouldn't if I were you," said Orion. Kisty took a deep breath as she saw Jake move towards her, "This is only going to hurt once then you will never see me again. I am going to take what I told you I was going to take, you can never get it back like your mother, took my Aunt and cousin's life," he said.
Orion and Jake laughed, "Your mind Kisty," said Jake, "No one else's." Kisty closed her eyes she wished, this were all a bad dream one that she hoped to wake up from soon. Jake moved his hands around Kisty's waist she could feel him about to remove her panties that she had on under the nightshirt. Kisty shut her eyes, she did not want this, not from Jake her heart did not want him, and she thought that he wanted her heart. She remembers he was only acting like that to get in to her paint and Jake was about to succeed.
Orion laughed, "I am going to take care of Kaiba then his brother and Atem's daughter, you have fun little brother," he said leaving the room. Kisty kept her eyes shut, "Oh please don't do this Jake," she pleaded as she felt a knife take the place of the gun that Orion had taken with him. "You, don't have a choice Kisty, I am not about to let you get away from me now," he said as his hand moved up towards Kisty still small breasts.
Jake placed a teasing kiss on Kisty's lips, she kept her eyes shut, 'NO!' her mind yelled at her, 'Get away from me I don't want you' she thought as she felt his hands moving over her body again, this time he was going to remove the night shirt she was wearing.
Kisty's thought traveled to her father, she wondered what Orion had meant then it hit her, they were going to take away her only family, she had left making her alone. Kisty was feeling Jake moved over her, she still had her nightshirt on but the knife was still at her neck. Jake was different now, his pants were unzipped; Kisty opened her eyes as she felt Jake's heat on her skin. "NO, Jake" she started to cry.
(Yeah, I know a little too damsel in distress)
Jake only smirked, as he pushed the knife a little more on to Kisty's white skin causing another small cut. "This will only hurt once Kisty," he whispered in her ear. Kisty shook her head, "Please Jake!" she pleaded, "I don't want you to do this to me!" she started to cry. This caused Jake to laugh, "Not so tough without your father around, but hey my brother will take care of him soon enough then my fun will begin," he said.
Suddenly two gunshots where heard in Kaiba's room, Kisty could tell they came from the door of the room. "NO!" she screamed as Jake started to laugh aloud. "Well looks like your all alone now Kisty," he said smirking at her. Kisty closed her eyes, she knew what was next she was about to be raped and with her father gone, now she didn't know what to do except do the only thing a Kaiba family member could do FIGHT BACK!
Kisty wrinkled her face at Jake and made a fist with her hand; she knew that he was laughing too much to look at her hands and she felt the knife loosen. "What wrong, don't worry I will make the smirk disappear," he said as he moved closer to Kisty's lower entrance. Kisty knew it was now or never, "I said NO! I meant it!" she said angrily. Jake smirked, "What are you going to do?" he asked with a laugh, "I am the one with a knife, here remember," he said. Kisty felt something move by her thigh something with fur and it was not Jake's pubs.
"You may have the knife but I have the dog," she said seductively. Jake smirked, "I knew you would see it my way AHHHH!" he screamed as something bit him in the nuts. Kisty took a chance and punched Jake square in the jaw getting him off her quickly.
Jake stumbled away and over towards the wall on the other side of her room, with Kisara hanging on his lower region with all she had. Kisty let out a small laugh as she picked up Jake's knife that he had dropped on the floor, Kisty walked over to Jake, "I told you I had the dog!" she laughed pulling him by the collar. "Now you're going to get it!" she said angrily, looking at him. Jake's eyes were shut, Kisty looked down seeing her puppy let go of the older teenager.
Kisty could see in the light Jake was not going anywhere for a while at least not with his privates bleeding from a puppy bite. Kisty shook her head, "Ouch, that had to hurt but you deserved it," she snapped, with that, she gave Jake a good punch knocking him out cold. Kisara looked at her mistress and barked, "Good girl, remind me to wash your mouth before I let you kiss me again," she said.
Kisty then remembered the gunshots, from her father's room and ran quickly to help. "Come on Kisara he isn't going anywhere for a while," she said to the dog who jumped of Jake and followed Kisty down the hall to Seto's room with a knife in hand.
Just as Kisty got out of her room she saw a figure struggling to stand then start to fall down and he could see her however just as Kisty was about to run to it she felt something in her back and hearing two more gun shots.
Twilight Memories: Ah some one finally caught that with the "you" parts, I am sorry that they confused you, it the darn grammerprogram on my word processor, it changes it evertime, I will try to catch it from now on however still expect them, suggestion noted. Also about the making a new paragraph for everytime a person talks, yes I know about the english rule of which I am suppose to do that, sadly it would make the file bigger then it already is, sorry but I am going to continue putting them in the paragraphs, just think of it as script. I also have been trying to keep the paragraphs small however one like paragraphs drive me nut. Thanks for your reivew and suggestions, and I am glad you like this story so much, it took alot of work and time to create.
AUTHOR NOTE: ok folk chapter updates are about to slow down aquitebit here, my friend that I noted last chapter who wrote the poem has ask to edit this story for me, again. She had edited this story for me once before, when I was having it at another site which was then hacked and the story deleted. I have saved the story and I am placing it here if you haven't look in my profile for that story behind the deletion. Anyways, my friend and I are both in school and are very busy however I will now be updating the moment she gets me the chapters back, I am still doing edits with the chapters while she has them to make this story even better, which for some of you, is possible. Well got to go now, thanksyou, readers and reviewers.
