Thanks for the reviews Anonymus 88 and Phantomsangel102!
Anonymus 88 - Don't worry, I'm trying to think of something else, but this is my first, so yeah...
Phantomsangel102 - Captivating, eh? Thanks! I'm trying hard, but like I said, I can write better than this, and it's only my first..
Also, I had written more on the story for the first chapter, but it got deleted when I transfered the file. I'll finish that chapter here. Maybe it'll get more interesting..?
His mouth opened and he let out a single note before we heard it. A gunshot above our heads. Farther, through the floor, of course, but it took me from my trance, and I stood up. He looked as surprised as I did, but I took this moment to turn around and kick off my slippers, running from the organ, and jumping over obstacles in my veiw. I opened a bag I found in the corner, my clothes! I could hear the angel choir singing!
I grabbed the bag. There was no time to change, for I heard the man behind scrambling after me. I ran, holding the bottom of my dress, and heading for the lake. I could swim...maybe...
And so I stopped at thr lake. But "Angel" was right there. I leaped for the boat, but he grabbed my ankle and I fell into the freezing water. My dress weighed me down, and shivers spread over my skin. My hair clung to my head, and I looked frightened back as "Angel" got gracefully into the boat. I swam fast, but that stopped all too soon, as my dress caught something underwater.
I pulled hard to get free, but the dress wouldn't give!
"I am your angel of music. Come to me, angel of music."
"Shut up!" I screamed, my voice echoing. I stuck my head underwater, but the water itself was so filthy that I couldn't see. I felt around for where my dress caught, and soon found it. It was on the hook of an old, broken statue.
I heard the muffled call of "Angel".
"I am your angel of music. Come to me, angel of music."
I closed my eyes, as they began to sting from the guck floating mid-drift. My hand got cut on the sharp point where my dress was, and my lungs, burning, felt as though they would soon explode. I exploded above the water, having fixed my dress right. Angel was close, and speeding in his boat.
I stroked quickly and fast, speeding in the water, as fast as I could, at least. My sopping dress held me back quite a bit, but I reached the edge of the Lake, and clambered out and away. At the stairs I saw the Angel was way behind. I climbed the stairs that I found, stepping only near the edges closer to the banister, so as not to fall into any traps. I nearly screamed when a part of the railing broke, but I soon enough reached the landing. Burting through the door I found, I stepped into...
Well, tell me what you think! Thank'ees!
Aubrey Daniels
