Hey guys,
Wow. I have incredible reviewers. They were so awesum about their reviews Im going to update now.
Everyone who reviewed today (5-7-2004) I just want to tell you that you made my day. I was really
depressed so I came home and updated and I got SUCH INCREDIBLE responses already. I really
appreciate everyones review! (Btw- to all those I made the cliffie deal with: I have seen that people like it
without cliffies and as long as you guys keep reviewing Ill try to keep cliffies to a minimum ok?)
Shout- outs:
flashyfirebird22 Thanx! You are my first reviewer on this chapter and I really appreciate your dedication. To
clarify: I originally wrote this in the third person and then realized it would sound better in Doms POV. I tried
to fix everything but that one slipped. Thanks for catching me! Hope you like this chapter!
Wake-Robin ok! Your wish is my command! Not only am I updating but Im also making this longer! Yay!
alpha-beta() wow. Do you know how much you rock????????? You completely made my day. I cant thank
you enough. So many compliments!!!!!!! Awww shucks. I really really appreciated seeing this review! If you
ever decide to take up my review space again I will be SOOOOOOOOO HAPPY!!!!!!! You have done your
good deed for today. (or is that your 15 good deeds? Hmmmm) well, thanx so much! Ive printed it out and
Im gonna show everyone at my school how much sum1 likes my story! Ok... calm down Dinah..... thanx
again! E- mail me and Ill give you a list of adjectives I have compiled in my head about your review. Missa5
thanx for the review! Im updating now so I dont forget! Glad u like the story!
Tris the Weather Witch NOOOOOO DONT FRY ME!!!!!!! I dont think Id be tender on the inside and crispy on
the outside....
Lady Page thanks for the review! Everyone thinks its original! Im so glad. I dislike stories that have the
same features as other peoples blech. Hehe ok heres the next chapter!
Alianne Cooper Thanx! I think the cliffie less part worked well too! Ill try that as much as possible from now
on ok?
Wildfire Thanx for the advice. Ill try to S-L-O-W the story a bit more. (hehe S-L-O-W) thanks for the review!
Have fun reading the update.
Dark Queen Rhyet U want more fluff? Ill give you more fluff! (starts taking pillows apart and throwing the
contents at you). Lol Im calm now. Im writing more writing more writing more.
Bren Darkmoon Im writing more now! Thanx for the review. Carly hmmm ok. I can slow down a bit.
Someone else has been asking me to do the same so I think I can.... Thanx for your LONG review. It was
much appreciated. Keep on reviewing!
SYaOrAnRoXmIsOx wow, do you kno how hard it was to type your name in? hehe I will try to make my
chapters longer at your request! Thanx for the review!
Doms Lover wow, everyone has been saying this is
an original plot. It makes me feel warm and fluffy inside. I really tried to incorporate kels long passed crush
on Neal in my story. I hope it worked out. Thanks for the review. I am updating so I dont die.
rachel132 Thank you SO much! Its reviewers like you that keep writers like me writing. Have fun reading this
chappie!
Recap of last chapter:
Dom was standing in the entrance of the headquarters with his mouth wide open and his eyes staring disbelievingly at Kel. All of a sudden he broke into a run, disregarding any thing in his path for the second time that day. Kel was again surprised as she was pulled into a huge bear hug with Dom who seemed to want to make sure she was alive by squeezing the life out of her. "Get a room you two" snickered Neal and the whole assembly laughed.
It was as if the whole atmosphere had been lifted off the group as they began to pick up camp for the long ride back to Tortall. Yuki sat on Neal's horse and they disgusted the entire search party by making out the entire ride home. Kel and Dom avoided each other noticeably, worrying the soldiers slightly. Dom was much more jovial but was seemingly contemplating ways to engage Kel in conversation. Every attempt, however ended quickly and both parties moved apart blushing self-consciously. Neither had ever been so miserable around their friends. As they trotted along in silence Kel let her sparrows out to search the path before them. When they did not return for some time, Kel got worried and went ahead to search for them. Dom tried to follow her but Peachblossom was worried about his friends and went too fast for Dom to keep up.
Kel reached a clearing and looked around for the sparrows. Suddenly she noticed a huge shadow covering the entire clearing. Slowly she looked up to see an enormous Spidren leering over her with tiny cuts all over its face. Grimly she realized it was her brave sparrows who had pecked at the immortal in order to keep it from attacking her troupe. A wave of rage surged through her and she shouted "Charge!" to Peachblossom. The huge Gelding charged straight at the spidren's stomach and Kel lowered her glaive so it would stick into the spidren's heart. She didn't see the long purple fang coming towards her back, so engrossed was she in avenging her sparrow's deaths.
Kel's glaive cut true through the spidren and it stared at her for a few seconds before collapsing. As it was falling, the purple fang jabbed straight into Kel's neck, rendering her unconscious and then the Spidren's large heavy body sighed its last sigh and fell on Kel, crushing her under it's immense weight and into darkness.
Peachblossom had fled at the last moment from under the immortal and just managed to pull his rump out from under the huge body before he was squashed. He looked back for Kel and was horrified to realize she was nowhere in sight. He looked through his memory and realized it was his stupid rearing that threw her off and onto the venom filled fang. He took off at a running gallop back to the main group.
Dom's POV:
When I saw Peachblossom rushing back to the Own without Kel on his back my heart plummeted. We had just found her and now it was possible she was gone for good. I rushed to the clearing and saw the most horrible sight: A huge spidren, the largest I've ever seen dead inside a pool of orange blood. It had tiny cuts on its head and its fang was stuck in something. I cut off the Spidren's head to see what the fang was embedded in and gasped. There, lying in a huge pool of orange blood and with a long purple fang sticking out of her back, was Kel. Everything went very hazy and I struggled to breathe. Scenes of Kel and I together rushed through my head, making me fall to my knees with the pain. I tried my best to calm down and suddenly a picture of Kel, completely calm and tranquil penetrated my panic. She was looking straight at me and I remembered when she used to calm me down, using Yamani techniques to lessen my rage at my idiot cousin Meathead. Breathing slowly and envisioning myself as a calm pool of water relaxed me enough to pick Kel up, pull out the fang and lift her carefully onto my horse. When she was securely fastened to my steed, I mounted him and we rode gently to the Tortall headquarters. Soon, my search party, all worried about the gorgeous woman lying, lifeless across my horse's back, surrounded me. Neal, in particular, was slowly turning bright red with rage and evidently plotting ways to kill me for hurting her. I tried my best to console him but to no avail, he wouldn't listen to me when I told him it wasn't me. 3rd Person POV
As Dom and Kel sped towards the Tortall border, Kel began to get steadily worse. She became so fevered that the Dom's horse would rear every time he tried to secure her to it. Soon, Peachblossom was carrying both Kel and Dom while Dom's steed trotted behind the procession. Once again, Dom became moody and refused to talk to anyone. He lapsed back into his coma like state, only coming out when he saw or thought of Kel.
Finally, the party reached Corus and rushed Kel to the Hospital Wing. Neal and Dom sat beside the bed, Neal adding healing spells and Dom wiping Kel's fevered forehead. When night came, Neal tried to extract Dom from the Hospital wing but he grabbed one of the beds and hung on for dear life. Eventually, Neal let up and allowed Dom to sleep in the cot next to Kel. He added a few more healing spells and left the hospital ward for the night. Dom watched over Kel all night, his heart leaping every time she moved. He watched her chest rise and fall with each breath and contented himself that at least she was alive (A/N not chest like boobs. You know what I mean.). Morning dawned only to find a slightly haggard Dom sitting on the edge of Kel's bed and staring at her. Neal came in and sighed loudly, breaking Dom out of his reverie. Neal looked at his older cousin and then tackled him to the ground, protesting all the way. When Dom was helpless, Neal cast a sleeping spell and put Dom in the adjacent bed. Eventually Neal was able to work on Kel without his cousin's distraction. He left Dom sleeping for a full day and then lifted the sleeping spell, only to be attacked by an irate but sleepy cousin minutes later. By this time, Kel had been visited by just about everyone who knew her. It was amazing that she had so many friends who cared about her. They took turns in shifts to watch over Kel and tell the healers every time she became conscious. Dom stayed faithfully by Kel's side, developing an immunity to Neal's sleep spell and forcing himself to stay up all night next to Kel. Eventually he began taking over other people's shifts and soon had five more hour shifts than everyone else. He became more ragged day by day, refusing to eat and sleep and bringing a chair over to Kel's bed to watch her all the time. It was very clear that Dom was wasting away from love of Kel. A few weeks later, kel slowly opened her eyes, temporarily blinded by the swirl of bright colors that assaulted them, searing at her comatose brain. Right before she closed her eyes from the torture, she saw huge round blue eyes swim into her vision. "Dom?" she croaked through the dryness in her mouth. "Yes love, sleep. I'll stay here." Kel smiled contently and snuggled back into the covers, promptly falling asleep. As soon as Dom saw she was sleeping, he knocked on the adjacent door, telling Lalassa to ask Sir Neal and Sir Alanna to come as soon as possible. The two rushed in and quickly added another healing spell to the hundreds that traversed Kel's body every minute. Dom soothed Kel's forehead where, a few days earlier, a raging fever, caused by the venom threatened the very existence of the one he (secretly) adored. A smile touched Kel's lips as she slept and Dom was pleased, not only was Kel sleeping and away from danger but, judging from the smile her lips were curved into, she was having a good dream. He wished he could be there with her. Dream Sequence Kel was practicing her glaive on the top of a gorgeous rolling hill. The soil was soft and she was comfortable in the light cotton shirt and loose breeches that hung off her muscular frame. She began to work up a sweat, her hands losing a little grip on the polished surface of her glaive. Suddenly, there was no glaive; it had slipped down the grass hill and onto the lap of the most handsome man she had ever seen. "Dom!" she shouted joyously, running towards him as he stood and stretched. She hugged him tightly and he whispered "Hello beautiful."
"Beautiful? Dom, you are sounding like Meathead." Kel laughed.
Dom reddened and laughed. "I guess it must run in the family."
"How long were you watching me?" Kel asked.
"For a few minutes. You looked so peaceful I didn't want to disturb you." Dom said, looking straight into her eyes. Kel was looking straight back and saw a spark there, growing as he pierced her hazel eyes with his blue ones. Suddenly she was acutely aware of how close their lips were. At the same time, they both leaned in and blew each other's minds in one chaste kiss. Kel couldn't think straight as her hands went to the back of Dom's head and deepened the kiss. She pulled away and heard a soft "I love you" from Dom's lips.
"I love you too" She whispered and slowly woke up.
Kel reached a clearing and looked around for the sparrows. Suddenly she noticed a huge shadow covering the entire clearing. Slowly she looked up to see an enormous Spidren leering over her with tiny cuts all over its face. Grimly she realized it was her brave sparrows who had pecked at the immortal in order to keep it from attacking her troupe. A wave of rage surged through her and she shouted "Charge!" to Peachblossom. The huge Gelding charged straight at the spidren's stomach and Kel lowered her glaive so it would stick into the spidren's heart. She didn't see the long purple fang coming towards her back, so engrossed was she in avenging her sparrow's deaths.
Kel's glaive cut true through the spidren and it stared at her for a few seconds before collapsing. As it was falling, the purple fang jabbed straight into Kel's neck, rendering her unconscious and then the Spidren's large heavy body sighed its last sigh and fell on Kel, crushing her under it's immense weight and into darkness.
Peachblossom had fled at the last moment from under the immortal and just managed to pull his rump out from under the huge body before he was squashed. He looked back for Kel and was horrified to realize she was nowhere in sight. He looked through his memory and realized it was his stupid rearing that threw her off and onto the venom filled fang. He took off at a running gallop back to the main group.
Dom's POV:
When I saw Peachblossom rushing back to the Own without Kel on his back my heart plummeted. We had just found her and now it was possible she was gone for good. I rushed to the clearing and saw the most horrible sight: A huge spidren, the largest I've ever seen dead inside a pool of orange blood. It had tiny cuts on its head and its fang was stuck in something. I cut off the Spidren's head to see what the fang was embedded in and gasped. There, lying in a huge pool of orange blood and with a long purple fang sticking out of her back, was Kel. Everything went very hazy and I struggled to breathe. Scenes of Kel and I together rushed through my head, making me fall to my knees with the pain. I tried my best to calm down and suddenly a picture of Kel, completely calm and tranquil penetrated my panic. She was looking straight at me and I remembered when she used to calm me down, using Yamani techniques to lessen my rage at my idiot cousin Meathead. Breathing slowly and envisioning myself as a calm pool of water relaxed me enough to pick Kel up, pull out the fang and lift her carefully onto my horse. When she was securely fastened to my steed, I mounted him and we rode gently to the Tortall headquarters. Soon, my search party, all worried about the gorgeous woman lying, lifeless across my horse's back, surrounded me. Neal, in particular, was slowly turning bright red with rage and evidently plotting ways to kill me for hurting her. I tried my best to console him but to no avail, he wouldn't listen to me when I told him it wasn't me. 3rd Person POV
As Dom and Kel sped towards the Tortall border, Kel began to get steadily worse. She became so fevered that the Dom's horse would rear every time he tried to secure her to it. Soon, Peachblossom was carrying both Kel and Dom while Dom's steed trotted behind the procession. Once again, Dom became moody and refused to talk to anyone. He lapsed back into his coma like state, only coming out when he saw or thought of Kel.
Finally, the party reached Corus and rushed Kel to the Hospital Wing. Neal and Dom sat beside the bed, Neal adding healing spells and Dom wiping Kel's fevered forehead. When night came, Neal tried to extract Dom from the Hospital wing but he grabbed one of the beds and hung on for dear life. Eventually, Neal let up and allowed Dom to sleep in the cot next to Kel. He added a few more healing spells and left the hospital ward for the night. Dom watched over Kel all night, his heart leaping every time she moved. He watched her chest rise and fall with each breath and contented himself that at least she was alive (A/N not chest like boobs. You know what I mean.). Morning dawned only to find a slightly haggard Dom sitting on the edge of Kel's bed and staring at her. Neal came in and sighed loudly, breaking Dom out of his reverie. Neal looked at his older cousin and then tackled him to the ground, protesting all the way. When Dom was helpless, Neal cast a sleeping spell and put Dom in the adjacent bed. Eventually Neal was able to work on Kel without his cousin's distraction. He left Dom sleeping for a full day and then lifted the sleeping spell, only to be attacked by an irate but sleepy cousin minutes later. By this time, Kel had been visited by just about everyone who knew her. It was amazing that she had so many friends who cared about her. They took turns in shifts to watch over Kel and tell the healers every time she became conscious. Dom stayed faithfully by Kel's side, developing an immunity to Neal's sleep spell and forcing himself to stay up all night next to Kel. Eventually he began taking over other people's shifts and soon had five more hour shifts than everyone else. He became more ragged day by day, refusing to eat and sleep and bringing a chair over to Kel's bed to watch her all the time. It was very clear that Dom was wasting away from love of Kel. A few weeks later, kel slowly opened her eyes, temporarily blinded by the swirl of bright colors that assaulted them, searing at her comatose brain. Right before she closed her eyes from the torture, she saw huge round blue eyes swim into her vision. "Dom?" she croaked through the dryness in her mouth. "Yes love, sleep. I'll stay here." Kel smiled contently and snuggled back into the covers, promptly falling asleep. As soon as Dom saw she was sleeping, he knocked on the adjacent door, telling Lalassa to ask Sir Neal and Sir Alanna to come as soon as possible. The two rushed in and quickly added another healing spell to the hundreds that traversed Kel's body every minute. Dom soothed Kel's forehead where, a few days earlier, a raging fever, caused by the venom threatened the very existence of the one he (secretly) adored. A smile touched Kel's lips as she slept and Dom was pleased, not only was Kel sleeping and away from danger but, judging from the smile her lips were curved into, she was having a good dream. He wished he could be there with her. Dream Sequence Kel was practicing her glaive on the top of a gorgeous rolling hill. The soil was soft and she was comfortable in the light cotton shirt and loose breeches that hung off her muscular frame. She began to work up a sweat, her hands losing a little grip on the polished surface of her glaive. Suddenly, there was no glaive; it had slipped down the grass hill and onto the lap of the most handsome man she had ever seen. "Dom!" she shouted joyously, running towards him as he stood and stretched. She hugged him tightly and he whispered "Hello beautiful."
"Beautiful? Dom, you are sounding like Meathead." Kel laughed.
Dom reddened and laughed. "I guess it must run in the family."
"How long were you watching me?" Kel asked.
"For a few minutes. You looked so peaceful I didn't want to disturb you." Dom said, looking straight into her eyes. Kel was looking straight back and saw a spark there, growing as he pierced her hazel eyes with his blue ones. Suddenly she was acutely aware of how close their lips were. At the same time, they both leaned in and blew each other's minds in one chaste kiss. Kel couldn't think straight as her hands went to the back of Dom's head and deepened the kiss. She pulled away and heard a soft "I love you" from Dom's lips.
"I love you too" She whispered and slowly woke up.
