Please Read and Review my story. I re-edited it and improved my grammar as well, seeing that I needed a lot of improvements for the benefit of you, my readers.
First Encounter
Somewhere deep in the park, the sun is shining brightly on a vast expanse of water. The sounds of cheers resonate from this area, with screams and claps that drown away the sounds of water. From above you can see nothing but 6 solitary figures in the water, 2 of which are about to reach the end of the pool. Neck by neck, the two figures draw nearer the end in a surprising twist as they battle for first place. Until at last, one figure reaches the end of the pool, soft hands touching the edge, ever so slightly.
"And first place goes to Toki Hasegawa! Congratulations!" a voice announces as the judges' hand a gold trophy to a girl in a sleek blue-green Speedo suit. Her hand reaches for her swimming cap and slightly pulling on it, waves of brown hair slowly tumbling down.
Next to her, a slightly taller and well-built boy stood, wiping the dampness from his hair as he accepted the silver trophy that was handed to him. This boy's name was Takamura, Suoh and he was a 5th grader who worked in the Student Council, as well as participated in various different sports such as swimming.
"Congratulations Ms. Hasegawa, that match was quite close. About a millisecond to be exact." Suoh said with a smile as he shook her hand. He turned to the brunette girl who was trying to dry her damp hair with a towel.
Toki put down her towel and took his hand to shake it. With her gold trophy still in her other hand, reflecting the light into her radiant smile, she gave a sweet smile and replied."Thank you very much Takamura-san, you did well too."
From a distance groups lay in wait for their friends and idols who had just finished the competition. 2 separate figures from the group that once sat in the bleachers watching, drew nearer. One was a handsome blonde boy who stood erect, striding with confidence as he approached the two swimmers that were in a deep conversation. The other was a cute raven-haired boy who was jumping in glee as he approached the two, talking endlessly to his companion.
"She was great wasn't she kaicho!", the eager raven-haired student said as he ecstatically jumped up and down. His voice loud enough to catch the attention of the passers-by, as they gaped at thetwo boys who strode nearer to the pool.
Whispers began as the groups turned to face thetwo in awe and admiration.
Isn't that the members of the student council?
That's the son of CLAMP School's founder.
The genius cook and the genius mind...
"Yes, she is Akira. I haven't seen her around campus though. Who is she?" the calm blonde next said as he walked, still watching the brunette swimmer. He smiled at the groups' of girls as he passed them by, nodding in greeting so as not to be rude.
"That is Hasegawa, Toki. She's in Takamura-sempai's grade and a new transfer student. I heard that she has a scholarship for her writing skills as well as her athletic talents. She's a new editor in the Clamp Elementary newspaper and she's one of the top swimmers in the swimming club." Akira said explaining frantically to the blonde all he knew.
"She's talented isn't she Nokoru-sempai? I also heard that she likes table tennis and volleyball. Plus, she is also fascinated with history and languages! Amazing, ne?" Akira continued.
Looking a bit astonished, he replied. "Yes it seems so. I'd like to congratulate her on the swimming meet. Suoh as well." Nokoru slowly approached Suoh. And patting him on his back, Nokoru greeted his good friend. "Suoh, congratulations on placing second."
Then turning his attention to Toki who smiled sweetly beside him, he greeted her as well.
"Congratulations Hasegawa-san on placing first. You did very well. I haven't seen anyone beat Suoh in anything. Congratulations on being the first!" He continued on, noticing that Suoh gave a sweatdrop on his last statement.
"Thank you...um..." Toki said curtsying to the stranger who had just congratulated her. Her face implied confusion as she stood there, trying to figure out who this stranger was.
"Imonoyama, Nokoru Imonoyama is my name. And please let me welcome you to Clamp School."
The look of confusion on her face suddenly turned to a smile as the familiar name was brought up. Rumors about the well-known genius Nokoru Imonoyama was known throughout the world. She had heard so much about him from his parents when they received the letter of admissions to Clamp School.
"The famous Imonoyama that I've heard so much about. It's a great honor to finally make your acquaintance. I never realized that meeting you in person would surpass what I've heard."He's more handsome than what my parents claimed him to be. He looks a lot like...
"Well, I didn't know that so much has been said about me. Such rumors tend to be over-exaggerated or false. But I would like to thank you for those compliments. I myself have recently heard so much about your talents as well."
Suoh and Akira who stood close by and smiled to themselves as they listened intently to the discussion thinking,
The president is so modest as always. Nothing is over-exaggerated when it comes to him.
"As president of Student Council" Nokoru began explaining, "it is my duty and my honor to escort such a pretty young lady around campus. Right Akira and Suoh?", suddenly turning his attention to histwo companions who stood quietly laughing at his proposal.
Uh...
Suoh and Akira faced each other and just smiled, hiding the confusion that lay behind their masked faces. The president never escorted a young lady around the campus. It was his policy to treat each lady with equality and thus never dared to show too much intimacy or attention to one of them."Sure." Both replied, hiding the uncertainty in their reply.
Toki, unaware of what they were thinking gave a smile to their reply and agreed to the campus tour. Then she asked to be excused, saying something about changing into her uniform before she freezed to death.As Toki headed off the direction of the changing room, the three members of the student council stood there and watched as she disappear around the corner. About five minutes after, Suoh and Akura turning their attention to Nokoru, asking for an explanation to the confusion that recently crossed their minds.
"Um, Kaicho..." Suoh said tapping Nokoru's shoulder, "When have we started giving tours to new students? Plus, what about your paperwork waiting for you back at the office?" he added, adding to the annoying feeling of his presidents' procrastination.
"Ah...what do you mean Suoh?" Nokoru said suddenly blushing, "We always give tours right? Haha Okay... got to go now. Toki must be waiting for me. It's impolite for men to keep women waiting. See you later." he said replying before rushing off in Toki's direction.
Toki's Note:
So what do you think? Is it OK? I'm testing to see if the story is to your liking. Please reply if you like it!
kaicho - japanese for president
san - used after a persons name, represents respect for someone one is acquainted with
sempai - a japanese term said after one's name for someone who is in a much older batch
