Demoness with a Human Heart
Does my story really suck that much? No one has read it yet and I'm beginning to question my writing abilities. I need to know what I'm doing wrong. Can someone tell me? Be kind about it, because I have emailed other authors who very rudely reviewed and I have a nasty temper when I need to. If you don't have a comment and don't like it, fine, but don't put me down because I don't suit your needs as a writer.
Thank you. Enjoy the story.
oOWe Meet AgainOo
I woke up when my alarm clock went off. I hate that thing. Why does school have to start so early? I sat up in my bed and tried to wake myself up. I wasn't exactly a morning person.
I got dressed after taking a short shower. I needed to be ready early so I could meet Enfinie and Kiko before school. My mother was upstairs reading a newspaper when I came up the steps.
"Ohayou gozimazu, okaasan."
"Konnichi wa. How did you sleep, dear?"
"Okay," I grunted. Lately, I had not been feeling right. I had been seeing flashes of people and things that obviously don't exist here in the Human World. I need to try and figure out what is going on. Shuichi Minamino, a boy at my school, has been acting odd as of late and I think he may be connected with my dreams. I've heard his friends calling him Kurama, who seems to be linked to me in some way. I'll ask.
I walked the short few blocks to the school, where I met up with my friends Kiko and Enfinie. They've been having the same weird dreams that I've been having. I think we had some sort of past life and we're just now getting evidence of it.
Shuichi was standing just inside the door, waiting for someone. When I walked inside, he called me over. I turned, trying to figure out if it was actually me he wanted. I pointed to myself questioningly. He nodded so I walked over to him.
"I have to ask you something," he said.
"Okay, shoot," I replied. He leaned over and whispered in my ear, "What are you?" That made me feel weird.
"What do you mean," I asked. He sighed, "I guess you don't know. I'm not exactly what you'd call human. I've been sensing something odd from you and your friends. It makes me wonder... are you someone I used to know?"
That made me think. What the heck, I'll give it a try, "Kurama?"
He looked at me, surprised, "How do you know my name?"
"I've been having weird dreams and someone named Kurama is in them. I keep thinking that you were related to me in some way. I also wonder if Kiko and Enfinie are connected to you in some way."
"Well, now that you mention it, I think that may mean something. I don't know. I'll have to check it out. In the meantime, don't tell anyone about this until I do know, okay?"
I nodded. I knew better than anyone what it was like to hold secrets.
I left for class, leaving Shuichi to go about his business. It was going to be a long day.
My day went by normally, despite my previous assumption. I went home and greeted my mom, like I always do. She seemed quite busy and I knew why: she was going on a business trip soon and had to finish some things before she could go.
I was going to be in charge of the house and help my dad out with some things. We were remodeling the house, so we needed to take care of the paint. I finished my homework and started stripping paint off of the banisters in the living room. The wood underneath was beautiful. It makes me think. Why would someone paint over oak? It was just so stupid.
Bed time came early that night. My work had gone fast and I managed to get most of the paint off in a few hours. I went to my room and fell asleep as soon as my head hit the pillow.
I woke up in the middle of the night to a bang on my window. I slept in the basement, so my window was on ground level. I sat up in bed to see who was trying to get my attention. I was staring into the brown eyes of my friend Kiko and the blue eyes of Enfinie. I opened it, letting them in. They crawled over my bed and sat on the end, looking like they'd had a nightmare.
"Jauna, I don't get it," said Enfinie. I looked at her questioningly, "What don't you get?"
"I just had this weird memory flash. It was like we were running away from something. I don't know... maybe it was a prison or something."
I thought to myself, 'Hm... what could this be?' I looked at my friends, "Well, maybe we're seeing something of a past life. I mean, lots of people do that."
"Well, then it's one big coincidence that all three of us are having these past life things, right?" Enfinie's question sparked in my mind.
"Maybe we can find out what's going on. Shuichi has been acting odd for a while now and maybe this has some kind of connection to him," said Kiko.
That's where our quest to find out who we were started.
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That sucked! I can't believe I wrote that. Well, review and tell me what you think about it. Bye, minna!
