Pleae tell me what you think of htis story. It has nothing to do with One Tree Hill other then I borrowed a couple names. As soon as I turn it in I will post the segual to this story. This is for a writer's conference and I want to see what people think of it.
Thank you
"I've got the perfect thing for us to do tonight" Tory bounded through the door and into the living room as soon as Haley had the door open. "I got us invited to a party only for seniors" she continued not waiting for a reply from her friend.
"How did you do that?" Haley asked not really interested in the reply.
"Well, don't forget your best friend here is a genius. I heard Kyle talking about a party, so I asked him about it. Told me it was for only seniors, but would make an exception for me. And well I told him I came as a package deal. So he said you could come! Isn't this exciting? But we need to get ready The party starts in like an hour. And there is no way you are going dressed like that!" Tory pointed towards the blue shirt and jeans that Haley was wearing. Tory headed up the stairs and into Haley's bedroom. "We need to make you look, not so preppie." she replied as she headed into her closet looking through the clothes.
"I think I will just stay at home, I have some homework to do, and besides I don't think that my parents would want me going to a party with seniors." Haley sat herself down on the bed and waited for Tory's response. She knew her friend all too well and knew she didn't take no for an answer.
"Just don't tell them." she replied as she continued looking for an outfit that would work for Haley.
"My mom wouldn't like it if she found out I lied to her."
"It's not really lying, just withholding information. I mean I do it all the time with my parents. I don't see what the big deal is. OK so wear this." she replied handing Haley a short black skirt along with a blue tube top.
"Aren't these yours?" she asked with a questioning look.
"Yeah I left it over here a while ago, perfect for a party. So go change and then I'll do your make up." Tory gave Haley a little shove towards the bathroom. "Hurry or we'll be late."
Haley emerged from the bathroom changed into the clothes that Tory had given her. "Perfect, now all you need is some makeup and some thing needs to be done with that hair." Tory sat Haley down in the computer chair and started applying makeup.
"Not too much Tory, my parents don't want me wearing makeup." she looked into the mirror as Tory continued applying huge amounts of makeup onto her face. She didn't want to speak up, she knew it wouldn't do any good. Tory always had a away of getting what she wanted.
"Chill, you look better this way. Now let's go before we're late." Tory grabbed onto Haley's hand and pulled her towards the front door where her car was located. She couldn't wait for the party. It would be her first party in High School. She and Haley were in 10th grade so the whole High School scene was new to both of them.
" I can't believe how many people are here. Are you sure it's ok for us to be here?" Haley asked as they entered the overflowing living room of the house. Kids were everywhere, many of them were holding glasses that more then likely weren't holding Kool-aid.
"I told you, Kyle invited us himself. So chill out and have some fun." Tory replied grabbing a glass and filling it with beer.
"Your going to drink that?" Haley asked when she noticed what Tory had poured into her glass.
"No Haley I'm going to carry it around and stare at it. Of course I'm going to drink it. It's a party, have some fun ok." she replied walking off in search of a good time. Haley couldn't believe that Tory had just left her there in the living room. The only reason she had come was to hang out with Tory. She didn't want to be there and knew her parents would get mad if they knew she was there. But like always she let Tory tell her what to do. It had always been that way and it worked for them.
"I guess I'll just stand here." she replied talking to no one.
"Were you just talking to yourself?" she heard a voice from behind her. She turned around and noticed a tall blonde.
"Oh, yeah, um sorry about that." she replied her cheeks turning every shade of red.
"Don't worry about it, my names Lucas." he stuck his hand out and she shook it. She had seen him around school before.
"My name's Haley." she replied.
"Well Haley, could I get you something to drink?" he asked.
"Coke." she replied hoping he wasn't meaning beer.
"Sure I can't get you something a little stronger?"
"Oh, no thanks. I'm not drinking."
"Well then Coke it is. I'll be right back." he walked off towards the kitchen to get her drink.
"Here you go," he handed her a glass. "Don't worry it's only soda." he replied with a wink. She laughed at his joke. "So I haven't seen you before, are you new?" he asked. "Why don't we head outside to talk?" he pointed towards the front door where a porch was located. She followed him through the crowd and outside onto the porch.
"No, I've lived here my whole life, but I'm only tenth grade." she looked over to him with a small smile.
"Oh that would be why. So what brings you here then?" he asked with a smile.
"My friend, she got us invited. She's more into the whole party scene then I am." She looked over at Lucas, he seemed like a nice guy. Not the kind of person she expected to meet at a high school party.
"Seems like were in the same boat. A couple of my football buddies convinced me to go, told me something about not missing out. Not too sure what they meant by that." he let out a small laugh.
"Friends seem to have a way of getting what they want don't they." she replied laughing as well.
"I like your laugh, its sweet." she blushed at his comment. She had never had any luck with guys and really enjoyed talking to him.
"Hey Luke, we're going on a beer run, wanna come with?" a guy called from the front lawn.
"No thanks Dave, I think I'm going to stay here." he replied to his friend.
"Suite yourself." the guy replied walking to a car a leaving.
"You should have gone with your friends. I feel bad that you are staying." Haley felt bad that he stayed. She knew that he would have had more fun with his friends instead of talking with her.
"I didn't want to go, besides their drunk. I wouldn't get in a car with them sober, let alone drunk. So you know I play football, what about you. Do you play any sports?"
"I'm on the swim team, and I play a little softball. I just play for fun though, I'm not very good at it." she replied.
"Well that's the best reason." They were interrupted when Tory walked onto the porch.
"There you are," Tory walked over to where Haley and Lucas were sitting on the porch. "I've been looking for you. I wanted to make sure that you weren't all alone." she slurred. Haley could tell that Tory had several glasses of beer to drink.
"I'm fine, I was just talking to Lucas."
"Well why don't we go, don't want you to get into trouble for being home late." Tory replied walking off the porch and towards the car.
"Well it was nice meeting you Haley, I guess I will see you at school." and with a wave he disappeared into the house. Haley got up and walked in the direction towards the car where Tory had just gone. She noticed Tory messing with the car keys trying to get the key into the key whole on the car door.
"Tory you can't drive, you have been drinking. Let me drive." Haley walked over to Tory and took the keys from her.
"Yeah, yeah, yeah, fine drive goody to shoes." she slurred as she stumbled to get the passenger side door open. Haley sighed and opened the door for her and helped her with her seat belt. She could tell that Tory was just drunk and wouldn't remember any of this in the morning.
"You can stay at my house, I'll call your mom and tell her that you are spending the night." Haley told Tory as they backed out of the driveway and headed towards Haley's house. Haley pulled up to a stop light as the light turned red. She slowed to a stop and looked over at Tory, she had her eyes closed, more then likely she had passed out. She turned back and saw the light turn green. She looked and put her foot on the gas and pulled out into the intersection. She saw two bright headlights coming towards her on her left. She couldn't do anything before everything went black.
Tory looked around and saw someone trying to open her door. Haley was laying against the steering wheel. They were two fire fighters trying to get to her as well. She saw blood on the steering wheel next to Haley. Se didn't know what had happed.
"What hurts?" She turned and saw a paramedic next to her.
"My head," she replied in a whisper. She didn't know what had happened.
"Ok we are going to move you onto a stretcher." Two other paramedics helped her out of the car and onto the stretcher.
"What happened?" she asked as they moved her into the ambulance.
"Do you not remember?" One of the paramedics asked her as they hooked up a couple wires to her.
"I, um, I feel asleep and Haley was driving to her house. That's all I remember." she replied.
"Your friend was crossing the intersection when a car ran a red light and hit your car on the driver's side. The driver of the other car had been at a party and had been drinking." the paramedic explained.
"Is Haley ok?" Tory asked concern filling her voice. She saw Haley laying in the car next to her. She wasn't conscious when she had seen her.
"I'm very sorry, we were too late for your friend. They are now trying to get her out of the car." Tory couldn't believe what she heard. Haley wasn't ok, she wasn't just hurt. She had been killed and it was her fault. Tears started to roll down her cheek as she cried for the loss of her best friend.
