I thought I'd start by saying a little something about getting my attention. I'm a little fussy about what fics I look into. First off I look at Genre, either for Action/Adventure of General. Romance and humour puts me off as there are so many couplings and dumb humour fics which I aint a fan of. DO NOT use those Genre terms if you only use humour or romance sparingly. I mean I have the occasional funny line or romantic scene and I've never once put Romance/Humour in my Genres.
Next thing I look at is the description. I'm only interested in Sega Sonic so as soon as I see the words Mobius or Mobian I switch off. Any other universe specific terms that aren't Sega Sonic put me off to. However if you are doing a different universe fic or indeed a crossover make it clear. I won't read it but then at least you're not misleading me.
Next it's chapters and words. You have say 5 chapters and only 2000 words, that's 400 words a chapter which is far too short. I can see the type of writer you are from that. I know that's kinda ironic considering my 3 Shadows fics only have 700-800 words a chapter though I do try and make daily updates. Also though I won't start looking at a fic that's 2000 words a chapter, 7 chapters through. Too much reading, I like to start new fics from their first chapter. The first thing I look at when I come to this site is my own bio page's favourites to see if any have been updated.
If your fics good and you want me to review it tell me. There are so many fics made/published every day, to check them all would take hours.
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The 3 Shadows, Episode 6 – Master hunter redemption
Chapter 6 – Evil unites
"He's in that orphanage", said Joz pointing to a building.
It was dusk out and the sky looked a warm orange. Gerald entered the building and began his search for his grandson Ivo. He checked down the list to find any sign of his grandson. He stopped at a name Ovi Kintobor.
Meanwhile outside Joz and Saph waited for Gerald. There was no need for all three to look for Ivo, one was enough.
"So that it? I barely did anything", said Saph.
"You did do something, it may not have been much but you made the effort", said Joz, "Plus it was nice to fight alongside each other rather than against each other"
"I have to admit this has been fun even though it felt like I was just being dragged along", said Saph.
Soon afterwards Gerald came back out of the building with a child by his side. Although as soon as the child saw Joz he became overcome with rage. Gerald had to hold the boy back.
"Calm down Ivo. If it wasn't for him I wouldn't have found you", said Gerald.
"I don't care. He killed mom and dad", said the boy Ivo angrily.
"I know, but the important thing is your safe and we're together again", said Gerald.
Meanwhile Miles was flying in the skies nearby the orphanage. He noticed Joz, Saph, Gerald and some kid discuss something and was really just happy to see Joz safe. He sighed with relief before looking to the skies to the right and saw something that confused him. Heading towards the Orphanage was a small GUN fleet.
"This isn't good", he said to himself.
Miles flew as fast as he could but it was no use. GUN had beaten him to the orphanage and grabbed Ivo away from Gerald. A lone robot solider quickly grabbed the kid so suddenly the two bats and Gerald were completely took by surprise. Joz and Gerald turned to the robot and started shouting.
"What the hell is going on here?" shouted Joz and Gerald at the same time.
Miles landed and ran to the group.
"A small GUN fleet are heading this way", said Miles.
"Leave my Grandson alone. This doesn't concern you monsters", said Gerald.
"On the contrary, now we have a bargaining tool Gerald. Work for us, under our rules and supervision and the child will not be hurt", said a familiar voice.
It was the GUN general who had appeared on a screen carried by another robot soldier.
"General leave them alone", said Joz, "I worked hard organising this"
"Ah Joz. I'm disappointed in you. I thought you never left a job unfinished but here I see a Robotnik family member you failed to assassinate", said the General.
"Hey, these two just wanted to do something right and you've messed it up", said Saph
"Enough of this. You know our terms Gerald", said the General.
The Robot carrying Ivo headed off towards Prison Island. Then the rest of the fleet landed nearby and started attacking the group.
"I'll go after the kidnapper robot. You two stay here and take care off the fleet", said Joz, "I've worked too hard on this to fail now"
Joz jetted off towards the robot carrying Ivo. Saph and Miles prepared to fight the GUN fleet.
"You ready to take these annoying pests on kid?" asked Saph.
"Don't worry about me. I can hold my own. Hey where did Gerald go?" asked Miles.
"Never mind him. We have more important matters to attend to", said Saph.
Meanwhile Gerald had left the field, filled to the top with rage. He headed back to his base fuming and cursing.
"Those fools! I'll make they pay, every single one of them. First they take Maria now they're taking Ivo. There was no need for that, it wasn't their concern, and it was purely a personal matter. I'll destroy them with Uranus and bring Ivo back to a loving Robotnik family if it kills me", said Gerald angrily.
He reached his base and quickly jumped into his latest machine, G-007 Uranus. He powered it up and prepared to leave the base.
"Master! It's not quite ready yet!" said a robot servant.
"I don't care. It's good enough to take on GUN HQ. I cannot allow them to take Ivo away from me", said Gerald, still fuming with Anger.
Gerald left in Uranus, heading off towards Prison Island.
