Dreams of Innocence

Note from the Authoress

::big, heavy sigh:: Before I even start this note, I just want to say that if this note sounds harsh, rude and mean, I'm really sorry. Things haven't been very nice to me lately, and I won't annoy you all by listing them all. I'm listening to Colin, Ryan and Wayne singing 'Timber', and hopefully that and the other Whose Line Is It Anyway? Tracks, along with the anime songs and misc tracks on this MP3 CD will cheer me up; now on with the note.

            Okay, first off, I'm going to list the Goddess Cards and Priestess Card here, to avoid any more confusion. I know Ma'at hasn't appeared yet, but I found it best to show her anyway.

Hathor: Conqueror of Man

Attack: 6000

Defense: 0

Effect 1: Sacrifice two Warrior monsters to summon Hathor.

Effect 2: If Winged Sun God Dragon Ra is sharing the field with Hathor, sacrifice two monsters to destroy all cards on the field (except for themselves), including Magic and Trap.

Isis: Mother of Magic

Attack: X000

Defense: X000

Effect 1: The number of Magic and Trap Cards both on the field and in the hands of both duelists are multiplied by one thousand to bring the attack and defense of Isis.

Effect 2: If Sky Heaven Dragon Osiris is sharing the field with Isis, adding Osiris' attack and defense to her own increases her attack and defense.

Ma'at: Judge of Heart

Attack: 0

Defense: 6000

Effect 1: The only card Attribute allowed on the field is Light.

Effect 2: Special Summon any Light Spellcaster, Warrior or Fairy in your hand and/or in your deck face up in attack on your side of the field.

Effect 3: If Giant God Soldier Obelisk is sharing the field with Ma'at, invoke the attack power of the monster Speical Summoned to attack your opponent's life points directly.

Priestess of the Immortals

Attack: 500

Defense: 4000

Once 'Yami' is on the field, sacrifice this card in face-up position, as well as two thousand Life-Points and two monsters to summon the

            Now, as you noticed with the last card, the description was not completed. That's how it's supposed to be. It will be revealed later in the story. And, as you've also noticed, I changed some things on Hathor and Isis. Needed to. Don't ask why.

            Continuing with this note, I would like to take this time to go over a review that I had received. I'm going to answer it, piece by piece.

            I think you have some of your facts wrong here.Hathor is Horus's wife, Mut was Amun-Ra's wife, Set's wife is Nepthys and Ishtar is a Mesopatamian(darn, can't spell) goddess.
Go ahead, prove me wrong.
No, I'm serious, not being sarcastic.I only have ONE book to refer to, for Thoth's sake.^.^()

^_^ At least you have one book! Now, onto the mythology: I am aware that Hathor is Horus' wife. But gods can and did have more than one husband/wife. Hathor is: the Daughter of Ra and Nut; Wife of Ra and Horus. Yes, she was both the daughter and wife of Ra. You think that's screw up? Zeus, form Greek, could own the Jerry Springer Show for another millennia or two.

And with the Ishtar mistake, I was using something I had learned online, but had gotten it mixed up. I know Nepthys is Set's wife. I wasn't going to use her at first because she wasn't evil enough, but it looks like I'm going to have to, unless I find another badass Egypt goddess.

Oh, quick note: Obelisk isn't a god or anything. He's actually a term for structures, like for pyramids, if I remember correctly…::sweatdrop:: Ma'at's husband is actually Thoth, who will be appearing towards the end of this story, as well as about twelve other gods and goddesses. But I wasn't supposed to tell you that. ::another sweatdrop::


Otherwise, a good story, plot and pacing is done nicely, but the spelling is a bit shady; please refer to a spellchecker before you post. And look over the entire thing to see if you can catch mistakes the spellchecker may have missed.
Also, try to get some more feeling into the characters. Some of this follows the average human thought process, but some of this stuff just isn't, real enough.
 A beta-reader is recommended. After looking the entire thing over, it's kind of necessary. Some of this stuff is really hard to read.

            I had a beta-reader, but h screwed me over. He just stopped beta-reading my fics. I e-mailed him a couple of times, but no answer. So, I'm not bothering with another one 'cause they don't seem very reliable. I'll try to do the spell check. The thing is, it's a pain-ass cause it takes forever and I'm just really lazy. My mind is always racing with things to do and I got into the habit of completely ignoring it.

            And about the stuff not being real enough: I'm an amateur writer. This is the first big-plot, multi-chapter fic I'm writing and love writing. (And that people enjoy, I might add.) I'll try to add more stuff to make I realistic, but like I said, I'm no Anne Rice or Phillip Pullman.

Overall, a pretty good story, but I've seen better written stories that bash Tea/Anzu, and I'm quite the Anzu supporter.

This is what ticks me off! If you had read the very first note on the very first chapter, it tells you that this is a PRO-TEA/ANZU FIC. Anzu had problems in this story, yes, but I needed to do that so that it would help out with the plot! I'm not trying to bash her! If you were expecting a story that had 'everything go perfect for her' since it was Pro-Anzu, you better find another author. That is a definitive turn-off to me. 'Prefect Anzu' just really doesn't work for me. So, she had problems with her parent's getting a divorce and her father being abusive. Hell, that happens in the real world. But things get better for Anzu.

And if anyone else calls this an Anzu-bashing fic, I WILL send Jigen Bakudan to you and watch the pretty fireworks from the safety of my bedroom. XP

::listening to 'Shuffle' and hopefully calming down::

…

It's not working…damnit.

About the shrine I'm working on: it's taking a bit longer than I expected cause of the fact I can't use the sacred machine (aka the scanner). I need to scan in some things that I want to use on the site. That, and I need someone who is really good at making little button/links for people to use to link to the site. ::super-deformed and doing the crying face:: Help me.

::tries the 'Ultimate Hoedown' to cheer her up::

Oh, and just to let you all know: here are the couplings (if I forgot to tell you):

~Anzu/Malik (Now let's all say 'duh' at the count of three! ^___^)

~Sy/Himeyuri (If you haven't all ready figured.)

~Isis/Shadi (…stop giving me those strange looks.)

~Cynthia/Crawford (Bet you didn't see that one coming! HAHA! ::quiet::)

And that's it, so far. And no, I'm not revealing all of the 13 avatars. ^^

Now, if you'll excuse me, I'm going to try and cheer myself by going to one of the Temples of Holy Spending (aka Border's).

~*Lady Saturn aka Sanji*~