A/N: And so here is the original, my very first, unedited baby fanfic. quite a far cry from the finished version isn't it? Aren't you glad I use spell and grammar check? And sometimes I even get someone to beta stuff! Anyway, I've come to the conclusion that my mind is a weird place. (As if I didn't know that already)

My First Fanfic... (Awww)

Why did these missions always seem to turn out like this? thought Major Carter to herself as she surveyed the rush of water now separating the gate from the DHD. It looked like she would have a bit harder for her to follow the Colonel's order to "dial us home" She felt the rest of the team come up behind here as Colonel O'Neill, supporting part of Daniel's weight swore as he took in the scene. Teal'c remained impassive, his staff weapon at the ready, looking back the way they had come keeping watch for the creatures that had casued the earlier than expected rush for the gate. For now the creatures seemed to be holding back, perhaps frightened by the earlier noise of the automatics and the fiery blasts of teal'c's weapon.

"Now what sir?" asked Sam.

"Think you can make it across Carter? Where the hell did that come from anyway?" Asked O'Neill as he surveyed the rushing river that hadn't been there when they had gated to this planet a few days ago. When they had arrived there had only been a light trickle in an old stream bed. Now a wide river rushed it the previously dry stream bed, the current looked strong. The water lapped up right to the base of the DHD.

Sam grunted, and dropped her pack, opening it to rummage for some rope. Standing up she nodded to O'Neill, "Yes sir, I can make it" she stated as she straightened up dropping the rope and shucking her vest, jacket and boots. "The suddenly warming temperatures must have caused snow melt in those mountains" she said jerking her head in that direction, "Looks like that stream was fed by the snowmelt"

Suddenly, Teal'c spoke up "O'Neill, I believe the creatures that attacked us are nearby, hidden in the trees. I do not know how long before they will strike again"

The rest of the team looked up and Sam thought she caught a glimpse of shiny black fur, a glinting eye over there, a rustle of leaves. She shuddered slightly. A two days ago the first of the creatures had attacked them while studying some ruins of Daniel's, fortuantely Tealc's staff blast had struck the thing, she still remembered the creature's cry of rage and pain as it disappeared into the forest surronding the ruins, answering cries from what could only be more of the same creature. Colonol O'Neill had immediately ordered everyone to pack up and move out.

They made good time until they were just a few miles from the gate when one of the creatures grew bold and attempted to attack, leaping out at Daniel before anyone knew what was happening. Teal'c had managed to blast the thing, soon joined by O'Neill, than Carter's automatics, but not before Daniel had managed to badly sprain his ankle attempting to evade the creatures leap. Fortunately for the team, the death of the creature that attacked them seemed to scare the other creatures off a bit, and they dropped back, but the team knew the creatures still pursued, from a safe distance. They could hear the things, moving around, crying out to thier companions.

O'Neill thought if the creatures were trying to wear them down they were doing a pretty good job of it, as he looked around to survey his team, all of them sported scrapes and bruises from their flight thru the forest. Each of them was tired, Daniel slumped against a rock, his injured leg sretched out ahead of him, it had been torture to keep moving on his swollen ankle. Carter sported a nice scratch along her cheek from a low branch that had caught her, and now that she'd taken off her jacket he could see more scrapes and bruises on her arms and neck. He knew he was similarly decorated, and he wasn't sure if his left wrist was broken or just badly sprained. Even Teal'c looked a little battered, no longer having a convienient symbiote to heal him.

O'Neill walked over to his second, who had now just removed her boots in preparation for her attempt to swim to the DHD. "Ready for a swim Major?" he quipped, as he picked up the rope and proceeded to tie it around her waist than looked for the best place to tie the other end to, settling on the rock behind Daniel.

"We'll watch your six Carter, good luck" he said. He would have preferred to do it himself, he hated sending members of his team off to do something, but with his injury fording a raging river just wasn't an option. Daniel going was out of the question, and they needed teal'c and his staff weapon to help keep the creatures at bay while Carter tried to make it to the DHD. Besides, she'd be able to dial them out fater than he could, and speed was of the essence. Sam flashed him a brief smile and started towards the water.

O'Neill gathered up the slack in the rope as she stepped into the water with a gasp. "cold Carter?"

"no Sir" she replied, flashing him another brief smile, "the water's great!"

"Liar" He replied.

"Uh Jack?" O'Neill looked over at Daniel, slumped against the rock, his handgun out, and pointed towards the tree line. O'Neill followed the direction Daniel's weapon was pointing and caught a glimpse of black fur, and sharp teeth.

"Teal'c, what say you we make a little noise, see if we can keep them from advancing?" O'Neill asks.

"Indeed O'Neill" Teal'c said as he brought up his staff weapon.