Hey, I wrote a rough draft before I wrote this one, I had my dear friend Lala read this before I put it online, she told me her honest opinion and it was constructive, so I made some changes. Actually, a lot of changes….my accidental Mary-sue needs to be put in her place…..Thanks Lala! I thank you for the criticism! Luv ya lots! Now enjoy! Read and review! Please!
Here's the FYI on Anastasia: She's an American volleyball player with a sad past. Even though it doesn't show, she has a sad life. Her mother died on the day of Ana's ballet competition so she never danced again. Her mother was a ballerina and it brings back painful memories. The reason Hamaya knows so much about Ana is because forced Akari into telling him everything she knew about her new, close friend. Yes, I said Ana was in basketball, but she stopped because of her father, who had pushed her to be the best, and that was her downfall. She found comfort in volleyball, takes some of the stress and heart-ache out of her life. So she sounds like a Mary-sue but she's not. She's only a minor character. Just like Akari. I'm focusing more on Chiharu and Kyo. I might throw a curve ball at you and have Ana date someone on the team. It's not a main character so don't get all mad. Anyways, that won't before a while. Read and Review!
After a long, hard day of basketball, Kyo, Chiharu and Yura walk out of the gym. They were chatting amongst themselves when they approached Hamaya looking as love struck as he did when he saw 'Chiharu's sister Kyoko' or Kyo in disguise He waved and smiled "Hey guys! Did you hear?" Kyo, Chiharu and Yura looked at each other, confused and then back at Hamaya. "Hear what Hamaya?" Hamaya smiled and gave a gooey, heart struck look "There is a new transfer student. Her name is Anastasia Marie Amikolos. She's from America. I heard she was on a top travel team for basketball but gave it up for volleyball. Oh! I also heard that she did ballet but stopped because her mother died. I heard her mother was a ballerina too! She's just my type! She's the perfect woman. The love of my life." Hamaya's eyes got big as he blabbed on about her. "Does she even know you exist?" Chiharu said sarcastically. Hamaya's whole face went from love struck to heart broken. "No," he said gloomily "But," he paused "KYO! Do you think you can talk to her for me? I mean, you're a chick magnet! Please? She's at volleyball practice right now! Plu-leeeeze?" Hamaya gave her the soppiest, puppy dog eyes you've ever seen. "Have you been stalking her or something?" she sighed "Yeah, I guess I will" Hamaya's whole face lit up "Oh thank you! Thank you!" They walked over to the Volleyball gym as Hamaya told them more about this girl. They arrived at the gym and Hamaya froze up. "What's wrong Hamaya?" Chiharu joked "Chicken?" "NO! There she is!" He pointed to the girl who had just taken a drink out of her water bottle. She was tall, but not too tall, had almond skin and long honey brown hair. She had cat-like, almond eyes that were kind of sad if you really looked closely. Kyo studied her for a moment and knew that she would never go for Hamaya. Yura maybe, but….Hamaya?. "So that's her?" Chiharu said. "Yeah, isn't she the best?" Hamaya said dreamily. "Yeah, right" Chiharu said sarcastically. They watched for a while. They watched her, she's nothing that special, pretty, but Hamaya exaggerated a little TOO much Kyo thought to herself. The coach set the girl up and she power spiked it, knocking another team mate (on the other side) off her feet. Anastasia covered her mouth and turned red, apologizing fast in American then in Japanese. The girl's coach told her to take a break. They watched as Anastasia grabbed her water bottle and walked towards them. Hamaya ran off quickly. Kyo sighed and Chiharu smacked his head in disbelief. The girl reached them and took the water bottle out of her mouth. "Can I help you boys?" she looked at Kyo weird and mumbled in English "Why is that girl dressed as a boy?" She shook her head and smiled. "So, what can I do for you?" She said in Japanese again. "Um," Kyo stepped forward "There is this boy, that, um" she paused. Yura stepped forward and said to the girl in English "Excuse me, I'm Kensuke Yura and these are my friends. We have a question to ask you. There is this boy," The girl cut him off "Let me guess, Shinji? Yeah, He's the one who's been stalking me all day. All the girls say he's a real perv." She laughed. Chiharu shook his head and walked off. Kyo had no idea what Yura and the girl were saying. She got a D in English. "He's asked me out and I've turned him down. I don't date guys who….um are…well…." She paused and Yura got what she was trying to say then laughed and switched back to Japanese so Kyo wouldn't feel left out. "This is Kyo Aizawa." Yura introduced her to Anastasia. "Nice to meet you Kyo, I'm Anastasia Amikolos." She said in Japanese. "She said no to Hamaya, Kyo." "I wouldn't blame her" mumbled Kyo. "Well, it was nice meeting you but I have to go see if my teammate is ok. I nailed her pretty hard. Bye!" "Bye!" Yura and Kyo said together as they watched Ana run off. "Well, how are we going to break it to Hamaya?" Kyo sighed. "I have no idea." Yura said as they walked over to Chiharu and Hamaya. "Well, what did she say!" Hamaya looked so happy. Kyo and Yura didn't know how to break it to him.
Sorry to cut you off from the suspense. I'm at a writer's block. Read and review.