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Twilight Cometh
A strange fox was running quickly towards the den. Her silhouette in the moonlight gave her the same appearance as her brethren, the specie of Umbreon. But she was different; her face was pure white, the tip of her tail pure black. Between it faded, like day fading into night. To top that off, she had no rings. But she was Umbreon, and she stayed true to her clan, as most eons did. There was one thing that pushed her in this direction: the presence of kin.
Angel was changing quickly. If this kept up, Eclipse wouldn't make it to dawn. His voice had gotten demonic as he tried to hold back the urge inside to just give in to what was coming. "Let her resurface," he commanded.
"And what if I don't?"
Angel's head lowered in anger. "Then you will pay. Eclipse has been through enough already and does not deserve this fate."
"Who are you to decide fate? The last time I checked, you were a mortal being."
Angel lunged at Shadow, who simply faded out of sight, then back in a few feet away, grinning. He was ready to change any moment now…
As the umbreon got closer to the cave, she sensed another familiar entity, along with the presence of added darkness. She only knew her brother as a newborn cub, but she had known her father. The added darkness was not good.
Angel's appearance became somewhat darkened as Shadow sat there, smirking. He does hold the dark side within him, just like his father did. She stood, ready to try and make him madder; to encourage the change.
The Umbreon skidded to a stop as she came to the rear of the cave, and looked for the small opening; the same one Angel had used to escape with that fateful day. Older than him but not much bigger than a cub herself, she squeezed through the small area and headed towards the inner caverns.
Angel began recalling all that he knew of this… this entity within Eclipse. His mother had been host to it, something she hated and tried to hide from him. But he had heard her. He had heard her cries at night as she fought to keep it down. All the pain it had caused her… he couldn't let it do the same to Eclipse.
As he began to dart at Shadow again, the Umbreon came running from the rear of the cave towards them. Sweating a bit from the length of the run, she called out, "Angel, stop!"
Angel stopped a few paces in front of the Shadow, and they both turned to look back at this newcomer. Angel, a tad confused that this Umbreon knew his name, stumbled back a few feet and fell to a sit. Shadow gaped at who was in front of them. She knew this umbreon… and was actually scared of her.
The Umbreon walked towards them both, pausing to glare at Shadow. Shadow winced as her spirit weakened. She wasn't going to win this battle tonight.
"Shadow," said the Umbreon, "you will return this body to the one you stole it from."
"And what if I don't?"
The Umbreon's colors began to change, her coat shimmering as the black from her tail moved to her face, inverting her normal colors so that her tail was white while her face was dark. "Then you will answer to me."
Shadow growled a bit. "Dmn you Twilight, if you only knew…"
Twilight took another step towards Shadow. "Now."
Shadow took a look down at her rings and sighed. They were almost gone. A few more minutes and she would have succeeded. "Fine…" There is always next time… and next time I will be stronger…
Shadow suddenly formed a ball of energy in her paw as her rings began to get brighter and more distinct, startling Angel and Twilight in the process. Twilight raised a barrier expecting a fight, but Shadow thrust it at her own chest, sending her body flying towards the rear of the cave and slamming into the rear wall.
