WOTW- 5
Yaaaaaayyyyyy! My first review! Thankies to Pan Jaganshi. As for your ?s: I'm really sorry but I can't really say much except 'you'll see.' Don't worry. It's already written and all I have to do is type it and wait for its turn to come out. Also—about Kuronue: I knew it! I've seen him called so many ridiculous things it's not even funny anymore. No bird live or dead has wings like that. It's in the definition of bird: Any of the class Aves of warm-blooded, egg-laying, feathered vertebrates with forelimbs modified to form wings. In case anyone hasn't noticed, Kuronue does not have feathers. At some point I even saw him called a chimera. Sorry, but that's a completely different (not to mention mythical) animal. I looked it up. It's a fire-breathing, winged, she-goat with some lion and/or snake parts or something like that. It's also a dream or fathom or a kind of splice thing, but none of those apply to him.
Also Pan, I have read your story. Don't give up. It's looking really good. I'm sorry I haven't actually reviewed. Here's why: 1) I've been working on this, 2) I've been busy, 3) I've been sick, and 4) I'm fatally lazy. I'm working on it though.
Everybody: read "My Past: A Nekos' Story" by Pan Jaganshhi. I don't think its on the same lines as this story (not that I'm comparing them), but its still pretty fun.
I'm happy! Though seriously, my best friend didn't even review. I review hers. I'm not even a star wars freak! This I say to TOAFAQ: doom on you! Doom on you!
But enough of that. On with the show!
General notes:
Disclaimer: I own that review. It's mine and you can't take it away from me! You'll have to fight me for it. Yu Yu Hakusho is a different story. I don't own it… but I'll still fight you if you try to take it from me.
Rating- See first chapter. Could be considered R by some people.
The rest? Well, they're general. You can find them else where; like previous chapters.
Mønti Pythøn ik den Hølie Gräilen
Not so general:
I hated writing this. It is 7074lli 5uxx0r (suicide-inducingly terrible). Oh well. I hope the rest of the story is enough to make up for dine schrecklich zu sein Staat (the horrible suckiness).
Language: makai, not that it matters.
Røten nik Akten Di Doomschneider
"A desire to resist oppression is implanted in the nature of man."
Tacitus
sorry that quote isn't better+
5. Scratch That (no, that's really the name of the chapter)
"Lord Raizen?" a very pretty brunette Stood at the door of Yusuke's study. She held in her arms at her hip a squirming, black-haired, half-Japanese toddler. His eyes were grey, like the girl's, and his wild, sholder-length hair was tied in a bobby little ponytail at the nape of his neck in very much the same fashion of his grandfather's significantly longer hair.
"Saskia, dear, come in. Close the door please." She did as instructed and approached her father in law.
Yusuke took the boy from her arms. This was his grandson; child of his eldest son, Reisuke, and Reisuke's half human wife before him. This boy was more likely to become Yusuke's heir not only because he would be much younger, in a youkai sense, than Reisuke when the position was handed down but it was impossible to even locate Reisuke at the moment. Yusuke's son had gone with a scout party some years ago. None of the party returned. Most likely, it's members were dead, but no one would say so.
Yusuke could be considered three-fourths human in spirit only, by now (1). His youkai blood had completely taken over and his decades in the Makai forced him to begin to think like a demon most of the time. While he still had a human form, it had become much easier to maintain his energy in youkai form, so he spent most of his time as such. Being part human, however, had given him a bit of leverage when it came to human relations. He found that knowing that he was 'mostly' human made humans feel that he understood them. He knew that it wasn't his lineage and that someone like Kurama or Hiei would understand them just as well, but he let them think what they wanted.
Looking after a third of the two worlds and maintaining alliances had taken it's toll on Yusuke. Even well into his thirties, Yusuke had been nothing but an overgrown teenager; cool, laid back, and always looking for a fight. Six or seven decades of responsibility had mellowed him out significantly. The deaths of his wife, Keiko, his best friend, Kuwabara, and others (his mother, Shizuru, Kurama's mother +she's a nice lady, why not+) and distance from his remaining friends and acquaintances like Koenma, Botan, Toya and Jin weighed heavily on his heart. Despite this, the lively glint never left his eyes and a mischievous smile (though not incessantly like before) still took over his features from time to time.
In the midst of it all, he stood here in his study with his daughter-in-law. Saskia was half-toushin half-Czech and about the same age as Reisuke but didn't show it any more than other 60-year-old youkai. In the absence of her husband, the human side of Yusuke took her into his house +his kids pretty much live on their own+ and treated her as if she were his daughter. At times she acted more like Yusuke's hand-maiden than the lady of the house. Some time ago, Yusuke had insisted she give up the practice but the woman hadn't yielded yet. Yusuke finally began to allow it as he realized that there were less and less people he could trust. Thus the woman faithfully served her adopted father.
"You asked to see me m'lord?"
"Cut it out," Yusuke insisted letting the Four-year-old play with his battle seasoned fingers," the doors are closed. I'm no more your lord than your dog."
The woman snickered, "Hai, 'too-san." She'd picked up Japanese form her husband and his family.
"Have you heard? Hiei's been caught."
"Mukuro Hiei?" Saskia seemed concerned.
"Who? Oh yeah." Yusuke laughed at his absentmindedness, "I'm not used to hearing him called that."
"Do you think he did it?"
"Did what?"
"Murder Lady Mukuro."
"You know what I think. Of course not. He's too proud. Koenma doesn't think so either."
"You've spoken with him?"
"Not officially." Yusuke winked. The nostalgia of the situation was lost on his daughter in law. She was still fuzzy as to the exact relationship between the Tantei, Yusuke, and Koenma. She knew the members had known each other in their relative boyhood but beyond that, Kurama and Hiei were business partners and Koenma was simply an old contact her lord hoped would remember his name. Not that it was a secret; just no one had bothered to explain it to her. She never asked.
"My concern is this." Yusuke walked over to his desk. Prying his hand out of his grandson's grasp, he lifted a letter from his desk and handed it to Saskia.
She recognized the green seal immediately as belnging to Yomi. She read over the letter briefly a few times.
"What does it mean?" she asked.
"It means what it says." Yusuke sighed, "Hiei was arrested by Koenma himself."
"But you said Koenma doesn't think he's guilty."
"I don't know anymore; but we can no longer count on Koenma. It appears that his loyalty to them is stronger. I don't blame him. I don't think he's with them because he wants to be."
"Then why?"
The Reikai can get pretty scary. If it weren't, I don't think we'd have too big of a problem. But it's large and, unfortunately, in charge. They're pretty tough to deal with; especially if you're on the inside. They're in control of you. I don't blame Koenma for not wanting to try to leave."
"So what do we do?"
"Well… unfortunately, Koenma goes on the enemies list."
"But you said he was still OK."
"This is war. It doesn't matter why he's on their side. The fact is that he is on their side and that means that he's not on ours."
The toddler played idly with his grandfather's hand with no mind for the conversation. Silence followed as Saskia mulled over the situation.
"I suppose that isn't good, is it?"
"No. And Kurama's gone missing."
"Oh dear."
"Hm. I feel that something terrible has happened."
"Terrible things have been happening for a while. I'm afraid you'll have to be more specific."
Yusuke nodded at her attempt to lighten the mood. He knew that she wanted him to explain what he thought happened, but he also knew she wouldn't understand. At the same time, he didn't know what he would tell her any way.
"So what will you do?"
"I'm working on it. I've called on some contacts. We'll see."
Saskia took the boy from his arms. "it'll be alright." She assured him. Then she left, clicking the door shut behind her.
Wik das muses
Idee: that sucked
I know.
Idee: we should kill that girl.
No, I actually kind of like her. She's not bad, for the wimp she currently is.
Shaden: Besides, I have a better idea.
No, Schaden. I have a better idea.
Schaden: ooo, do tell.
No, people are reading this. No give-aways. I don't even know if it fits. I may not even do it.
Matik: now that's not nice. Now you have people wondering.
Bwahahahaha! I guess they'll just have to keep reading.
Alsø wik das chara
Kurama: heeeeelp meeeee! Say, doomie (remember, my name's doomschneider now?), why don't you just let me go?
B/c I'm still holding you ransom for reviews. Seriously people, I will kill him. Then I'll take forever to update b/c I'll be rewriting the story. Since practically no one reviews, I don't have any readers that I'm responsible to. I don't have to keep anyone happy. Maybe you'll be more inclined to review if you have complaints. And, in rewritng it, I'll make it angst b/c Kurama's dead; just to spite you all. How 'bout that? BWAHAHAHAHA!
Kurama: I don't want to die! Just review and tell her you read it or something. It's worth a shot right? Just 30 seconds. Pleeeeaaaaase! And Kuronue, who's the traitor now? You haven't done a damn thing to help me. You haven't even tried to keep me company!
Kuronue: Traitor? What?
Hee, hee. He doesn't know about that whole "incident" in the movie.
Kuronue: what "incident"?
Kurama: the incident where… mmmmph!
(twirls roll of duct tape around finger) God I love this stuff. Time is running short. If you love the fox or even value his exsistance, review. I will kill the little fag.
(Matik: no body here thinks that Kurama is homosexual and no offense was meant by the term used above. She's just… um… a little out of it (glares at schaden and lustig). Anyway, Gomen.
Lustig and Schaden: of coarse we think he's gay…
Idee: (hit's the two over the head) you could at last be couth about it, idiots. And no we don't)
Alsø alsø wik dine kritickers (reviewers)
I mentioned pan jaganshi earlier. I just checked my stats again and found a new reviewer. I am very grateful to Brightshadow133. I'm glad it's refreshing. I'd hoped so.
Thank you Not Doomie;). I appreciate it. Now if only TOAFAQ would review. She said she's read it. As for Kurama, if some people don't get their butts in gear, I will. Although you may have a point. Kurama is for some part dark and sinister. If I got rid of him we might have some problems. But not reviewing is a bigger problem.
And who is karakitsune? It's bothering me. I know I've seen that name but I don't recognize any of the stories. And why don't you review?
Wi nøt trei a høliday reading and reviewing this yër ?
Ahh, the shortest stories have the longest notes. I had to type these twice b/c for some reason it didn't save. There's just so much business to attend to. You know how I was going to change the name of this story. I think I found one (no thanks to you people): "when hearts echo he drums"
I know it sounds corny, but just listen. It came from a song from a show that I did last year (show as in theatre, I'm a techie and theatre geek. note how I spell theatre.) here's how it goes:
Do you hear the people sing?
Singing a song of angry men?
It is the music of a people
Who will not be slaves again!
When the beating of your heart
Echoes the beating of the drums
There is a life about to start
When tomorrow comes!
Brownie points to any one who can tell me what show that's from.
But this is about what happens when the dam bursts, which is what the song/play is about.
So, I think I'm going to change my name officially next time I update which should be next week. what do you all think?
See the løveli chapters
More brownie points to anyone who can tell me where the borders are from.
The wøndërful review system
Leba, amour, amor, ai, and kochanie from Doomschneider.
And mäni interesting furry animals and deamøns
2-25-05 the scheduling beast is almost defeated! We'll get back to that.