Okay, I was hoping for a few more reviews, but I must say, the ones I got were heartwarming. So here is the second poem, the poem that to me is even more heart-breaking. This could be Ozai or Iroh, and it's just about the way people grow apart. We all dream of keeping that childhood innocence but things change. We all have to grow up and it's sometimes the person we trusted most that hurt us the most. It just breaks my heart how two brothers could once be best friends and then be forced to fight against each other.
I originally wrote this poem with my real life brother in mind, but now that I think about it, this one is for my brother in all but flesh. A, you are the person who makes my life special. Just know that I will always be your little big sister and I hope no matter where our lives take us, we will always be best friends. Each Purim, I am doubly happy because of you. This one is also for Isia, the amazing and wonderfully kind fanartist who did a gift based on this poem. She rocks, give her lots of lovely good reviews. http/ ! Thank yous are at the bottom.
Memory
You used to be my brother
What's more you were my friend
I never had the need to fear
On you I could depend
A double act, they'd call us
And mischief was our goal
Remember all the pranks
All the sweets we stole?
We'd just laugh at punishments
Sneaking out of our rooms
Terrorize our teachers!
Fire-bend their tomes!
We had wealth and palaces
But I think our best times
Were hiding in a tree top
Planning our next crimes
Father would get so angry
But we didn't care
We could face his wrath
If the other one was there
We'd pretend to cower
But we both really knew
Nothing could break us
All we need was us two
We'd lie awake at night
Talking till the dawn
We'd wake up in the same bed
With a smile, a hug and a yawn
Arm in arm we'd face the world
And laugh away the hurt
We'd sneak out to teahouses
With peasant girls we'd flirt
We thought our life was perfect
That we'd always be as one
Life was filled with laughter
Our days were filled with fun
Father tore us apart
We were sent away to train
One to be a warrior
One would learn to reign
"We'll always be best friends,
We'll never change for him
Each day, I'll write to you
Cheer you up when things are grim"
I don't know which of us
Was the one to break the vow
Perhaps it was merely fate
To which all men need to bow
I wish I knew what happened
How you altered rapidly
Were traits now locked inside?
Or did trauma set them free?
Each day when I reminisce
It cuts me to the quick
The best friend I remember
His actions make me sick
You are now a stranger
In a place I can not go
You have lost your way
And I will not follow
Now I think I hate you
But mostly, I'm just numb
Wondering why things changed
Why you did the things you've done
We've gone our separate ways
Why, I'm still unsure
I used to love you once
But I don't know you anymore
Read and Review, tell me what you think!
Kareera-Hehe, I like that line too. I just had this vision of Zuko as being a puppet, turning on his master. Iroh is definitely angry at the Fire-Lord. I just watched the Storm and the anger in his voice when he talks about his brother is chilling. I truly believe Iroh would gladly commit fratricide for what he did. I also saw the branding of poor Zuko as a way for Ozai to hurt Iroh. "I can destroy the person you love most, and he'll still love me". Ozai just likes tormenting people, but doesn't realize that he can't count on the loyalty of everyone around him forever. You can only hurt people so much before they fight back.
Star Wars Nut-Glad you liked it, and I plan to write many many more poems. I love writing poetry and hopefully, you'll like my stories too.
Angelic-Coming from an author with much talent, that's a real compliment.
Whomever-Wow, that compliment is going straight to my head. I doubt I am the best poet on the site, but wow, thank you. Blushing like mad. Well, we never see Ozai's face so we have no idea how he looks. Being in excellent shape doesn't make someone younger or older. I can argue for both, but I like to experiment. I just like the idea of Ozai being a huge bully to poor li'l Iroh. Hehe, I hope I prove you wrong, even though that was one of my favorite poems. I hope to keep improving. With your wonderful reviews, I think I will. I hope you put in more reviews, and IM me sometime so I can thank you!
Camel-Well, hopefully I'll convert you to poetry and hoped you liked this one too.
Almostinsane-Many thanks!
Alliwantislvoe-Wow, it sounds canon? That's a compliment! Well, this might count as an Ozai one. I tried to make it ambiguous and I have very little to work with when it comes to Ozai. I have another one in mind for my theory on Ozai which I am considering doing, which is his side of the "Toys" idea. I shall definitely look into writing it and hope inspiration strikes. As always, thank you.
The Truth Rocks-Hehe, I shall start thanking people in different languages. Todah rabah! (thank you in Hebrew) and I am sure you think plenty. Hope to update as often as I can.